[David Goldberg]

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[Gracie Parker]

Hello everybody! I am looking for feedback on rhythm, pacing, and intonation. I have received feedback that my sentences fall off basically to vocal fry at the endings. (It is true and I’ve been struggling to fix it.) Does my intonation sound better here? Thanks everybody! <3

[johntells114]

Hello guys. I would appreciate anyone who gave feedback on my acting/performance. This is a part of horror narration I did.

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[Cheechman]

Need to smooth it out. Kinda trails off at the ends of thoughts too.

Way more emotion on the key words

[Gill]

Back with a few scripts would appreciate any feedback!

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[Grace Lee]

Your approaches to the Zoloft and Children’s Advil scripts were very appropriate for the content making them relatable to the listener who would be a potential consumer. If anything, maybe say “fast” faster in the Advil one. lol. For the Autozone one, I could feel you smiling in your voice which was nice and engaging. Really great work!

[Gill]

Grace lee, Thanks so much for your feedback I’m glad I made that connection and will work on my call to actions.

[edixon310]

These are all very nice reads. The quality of your voice lends itself very well to the Zoloft and Advil reads.
My only caution would be to try and vary your reads ( the pitch pace and tenor). All three sound very similar.
And put emphasis behind the “call to action.”
i.e. “It’s time to talk to your doctor”, or “better than Tylenol.”
But great job!

[Gill]

Thanks Edixon310 very helpful will work on that!

[gikegami]

Here are two commercials. Any feedback on aspects such as pacing or pronunciation would be very much appreciated.
Thank you.

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[RGK3]

Hi,

The overall pace on the Purina one is good, but it feels a little measured in a way that prevents the read from sounding conversational. Pronunciation sounds good to me.

For Pizza Hut, the pronunciation of mozzarella doesn’t sound entirely natural to my ear. Most people don’t emphasize the “z” and start it out like “mot.” The pacing starts off strong, but I think it slows down and your pauses get a bit long toward the end.

Nice job overall.

[Wes@1972]

Hey guys! I have a couple of reads for my homework assignment. Been out of the loop for a bit.
My very first attempt at a movie trailer read! Thanks in advance for any constructive feedback.

Wes

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[gikegami]

I like your tone of voice and your pronunciation. I can understand each word that you were saying. However, the pacing in the Alexander the Great trailer felt kind of choppy or a bit shaky.
As for the Hudson-Yard trailer, it had a better flow in comparison to the alexander trailer.

[twstark]

Hey everyone,

A couple new reads. The first is an introduction to a tech product called Apache Spark. It felt like a bit of a tongue twister just based on how it’s written, so good practice. The second read is an introduction to the philanthropic foundation. It’s a bit of a long read that posed challenges all it’s own. I look forward to any and all feedback – thanks!

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[Gill]

Hi Twstark,
Nice job on these reads and all the tongue twisters! I agree with edixon310 I could hear your reads on somewhere like the discovery channel. When you slow down I really hear where you’re hitting those key words. When its alittle fast they sound a little more clustered and its a little harder to differentiate I hear this at the beginning of Apache-spark. Your pacing for the hewlett foundation was good, I can hear all of your variations nicely with this read and you executed it really well.

[twstark]

Thanks for this great feedback. I will work to keep my pacing even during reads!

[edixon310]

These are both great, technical reads. It sounds like what you’d hear on PBS at the end of one of their shows. Not sure if you’re aware, they both cut off right at the end.
The pitch and pacing were good. There is a little bit of static during the read, barely noticeable.
Great job!

[twstark]

Thanks a lot for the feedback. My natural tone definitely fits into the realm of the PBS/Discovery Channel type of read. No kids cartoons for me! Also, thanks for letting me know about the static. I’ve discovered that sometimes my Mac seems to struggle a little with a clean bounce and can add a little static if I rush it or have other programs operating in the background simultaneously. I’ll watch out for that.

[edixon310]

Hi guys. I am looking for feedback on a skit I wrote for my bio. Let me know what you think.

[edixon310]

Let me try this again.
Hi guys. I am looking for feedback on a skit I wrote for my bio. Let me know what you think.

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[Gill]

edixon310,
You have such a creative mind set. This is great, you kept my attention the entire time and I really like how you mixed it all together to showcase your different characters voices. Really nice bio!

[Thomas_D]

Ha! I love this. This is a very creative approach and one that I haven’t heard before. Would you classify your voice as a “jazzy” voice?

I’m also curious if bios are typically this long in length as well.

Overall, great read!

[edixon310]

Appreciate it.
I suppose you could say my voice is a bit ‘jazzy.’ At least in this skit. Honestly, I was making it up as I went along and that just popped into my head.
Demos aren’t typically this long, but a lot of reads are. I use this when I am asked to showcase what I can do. It also serves as a plug of sorts.

[Titus Nichols]

Any and all feedback is welcomed!

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I’ve been expecting you. Why? Don’t tell me you don’t recognize me?
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My friend, I am the obsessive and the compulsive. I’m the voice. You know the one. Always questioning, questioning, questioning, everything you do, everything you think. And I am every, single staring eye that watches you. So, now that we have become acquainted, what are you going to do about it?
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[edixon310]

I must admit that this read threw me a bit. I only read the first couple of lines, and I was expecting caricature when you started off, but when you got to the tag, I realized why you were reading it the way you were.
This needed to be more poetic than character, and that’s what you did, because this was a more serious read.
The only thing I would add is to be a bit more conversational in your delivery.

[Titus Nichols]

Thank you!

When you say “conversational” what do you mean? Should I talk faster and with a bit higher tone so it doesn’t sound so “doom & gloom”?

[edixon310]

Picture yourself talking to a friend about a controversial call in the game last night. How would your delivery change?
I suppose that would make the pace a bit faster, but not necessarily. But you want to give the impression that you are speaking extemporaneously.

[Thomas_D]

Playstation 5 Practice Read.

Hey everyone, here’s my practice read for Playstation 5. Any and all feedback is welcomed! Thanks in advance

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[mcarter]

Hi Thomas! Love how resonant your voice is in this! I would be curious to hear it a bit more emotive at the top, but thought that really came through in the ending. The final call to action felt so specific.

[edixon310]

Nice Job! You’ve got a voice that would be great for narration. I would add a little more feeling behind the words. This read reminded me of the Star Trek open. Of course, William Shatner is always over the top, but I would try to emulate his emotive read. You’ll find your grove in there somewhere.

[Thomas_D]

Great feedback edixon310! I’ll look into some of Shatners voice overs

[ESALGUERA]

Hi all, this is my first homework assignment. Two commercial reads. I’d love any feedback, thank you.

-E.

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[elizbrooksbell]

You sound super good! My only note is that there is some background noise, but that can be easily fixed. Great job!

[Titus Nichols]

You have a very conversational tone. It was very open, friendly, and youthful.

[ESALGUERA]

Thank you!

[Gill]

Hi Esalguera,
You have a nice vocal approach that highlights what you say. I thought your pace and diction were good and they were both conversational. I liked that you hit Blue but wanted to hear that hit with 0%. You did great hitting everything for Trendi really making it stand out. Nice job!

[ESALGUERA]

I agree, the Blue was a bit intense. Thank you!

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