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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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well….that’s a young sound! bravo! Room needs some more treatment – a bit reflective. closer to mic, maybe? technique is key! also, try and study the TV spots with headphones on. mimic them. practice. use ispot for samples and transcribe scripts so you are using actual scripts…this young sound is in demand, but you have a ways to go…smoother delivery please…
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Hey y’all, I am a novice; this is my very first time submitting to this forum. I have future coaching classes starting next week and recently had a one-on-one with Jennifer Sims! She was wonderful and told me all about this forum. She also was influential in my microphone/hardware purchase too! I just moved and decided to use my closet in my home office for my studio since I already work from home. 🙂
Here are 2 commercial reads: I welcome any feedback, but mostly on creativity, tone, and flow. I am still learning a lot, especially on the technical side. There is a lot to digest! I have read through some of the feedback on here already, and you are all wonderful. I loved listening to some of the reads thus far, and you are all inspiring. Thank you for your time.-
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These are nice. Very clear and the tone and pace are appropriate. I liked 4 better. It was more specific and there was more variation as you described the music choices. It sounded like you were experiencing the platform and sharing your experience with someone.
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I’ma be real with you. This is so monotone I felt like falling asleep. I guess a more somber tone is kinda what you were going for? Your voice is good, but you need to emote a bit harder, even if the piece is melancholy. As an exercise, try reading it with uncomfortable excessive amounts of overacting (practically shouting), and then try to go back and read it as normal (and even your own attempt to make it extremely monotone if you want to compare and contrast). It should help you pick up on where you need to breath life in to the read. It doesn’t have to be high strung, but it does need a emotional investment; if that makes sense.
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Hello Everyone!
Hope you are all having a great weekend! I am in the process of working to my demo record for narration, and I have recorded my first practice clip. I would greatly appreciate any feedback that anyone has for my first attempt!Thank you
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Great job! I guess it would depend on what kind of read you were going for, but your read as-is has a more subdued energy, which I might expect out of the informational kiosks at some museums. Definitely not a bad thing, but of course just to be aware. Your voice has a very nice texture
On the tech side, there’s a few clicks but largely negligable. Overall it sounds like you’re using good mic technique. I will say I can hear a background hum or other steady sound in the background while you’re speaking (I’m assuming you used a noisegate for in-between words) . Obviously I don’t know your situation, but if you are looking to use that booth for your demo then you should ask your coach about it (the noise). It’s not distracting that much, but more keen employeers might pick-up on it.
Fantastic start for a first attempt. I wish my first attempt was as good off, haha.
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Hey everybody. Been a while. I did a cold read of this because I just moved and made a new recording space and wanted technical feedback on the room treatment (echo/reverb, warmth, etc). I’ve listened to so samples that I can’t tell what’s normal, haha. The read itself has performative failings because it’s perfunctory, so don’t worry about that. Thanks!
(For veracity, I’ve left the fan noise in the background unedited, but I’m aware its there lol)
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I’d say you’re about 99% there. There is a slight resonance, not sure why.
I don’t know if you do your own postproduction editing, but perhaps a noise reduction would eliminate it. Or maybe watch your placement to the mic. It may also be the fan, because it almost sounds like that sound you get when talking into a fan. A good mic will pick that up and it’s hard to edit. (Spit balling here) -
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Hi MCarter,
I think your voice pairs really well with the reads you picked. Your pace is good for both but I think overall they could both use a little bit more energy.
Wisteria:At the beginning just be careful of pauses as they make your read sound a little disconnected. Also, try varying your words as most of them are landing on the same note along with hitting Wisteria Bank. With diction, I hear ” we understand “the” behind every dream” and I’m thinking it should be “That” instead of “the.”
Priceline: Try varying your words with this read as well. I hear “Top the line instead of Top of the line” so just be mindful with that as well. I liked what you added to “But one of them is paying 40% less. Can you guess who?” nice job with those lines. -
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Good start. idk if you wanted technical feedback but the first thing I noticed is that your recording space doesn’t sound very treated at all. big echo/reverb, haha.
Performance wise, it sounded very back and forth if you knew who you were talking to and why (if that makes sense). For example, the ending tag line for both of yours are pretty on point, but the opening phrase for priceline sounded like it was a (internal) question, more than statement (then followed by the rhetorical question). Or at the beginning of the Bank ad, “Go for it” almost sounds like a deadpan challenge instead of an encouragement.
Overall a few things need tweaking but I think youre on the right track.
[[Disclaimer: I’m a rookie with ADHD. Sometimes I hyper-focus on something negligible and other times I make out-right ‘bad’ calls based on something I (wrongly) idealize. Also conversely, I can miss an elephant in the room. I focus on constructive criticism on the basis of improvement, so it may not be apparent how good I think a recording is; it’s not because I don’t want to gush about all the awesomeness 🙂 ]]
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Hello!
These are for my commercial homework. I would love feedback on my read. I also tried out some new techniques in my DAW so any feedback on the sound quality would be very much appreciated.Thank you!
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Hi:
These are very nice reads, very natural with lots of specifics. The only note I’d give is that sometimes the pauses between phrases throw off the natural rhythm a bit.
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*Disclaimer: I’m not a SW fan, so I’m not sure how Darth Maul is actually supposed to sound. I did two takes, which one sounds better?
Maul: *Lost*. I am lost… And yet, I-I can *feel* his presence, so close. So close! I can… *see* him… in my mind’s eye. Kenobi. KENOBIIIII!… Will it end here, like *this*? *No*. NO! I must draw Kenobi out, *tempt* his noble heart. But how, *how*?… I know… I *know*.
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Good start!
I’ll avoid hardware feedback unless you want it. The second read was definitely stronger. I can’t tell you what Darth Maul sounds like either, but that’s the beauty of voiceover – uniqueness! (unless you’re an impressionist focus). I will say pumping up your sinister energy is working for you, there’s like a bit of s****m in each beat. I’m reminded of Scar from The Lion King pacing back and forth with his evil plans (mwhaha!). I think it’s an inner monologue so balancing over-acting with tepidity is probably the greatest challange. Strictly for practice, you can try adding a thoughtful conniving “Hmmm” after each thought to help frame the spontaity of the scene.
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Great job Titus. I like the first read better, only because of the “KENOBI!!!” part. But I think the first Kenobi in that read should be more contemptuous, like it’s distasteful and he is spitting out the name.
Great energy in the read.
It may also be helpful to listen to Star Wars audiobooks (I do that a lot). This is a good one: https://starwarsaudiobook.com/star-wars-brotherhood-audiobook/
This will give you a good example of emotive reads.
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You knocked it out of the park, my man! I’m jealous of the gravitas you have, haha.
Only thing I can really notice is the ‘s’ sounds really tend to blend into the adjacent letters when you speak. Might have to do a few regimines of “She sells seashells by the sea shore” type of enunciation practice. Once you’ve nailed that down, I wouldn’t hesitate to hire you.
Definitely keep going!
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The intent and intonation when you said “alive” at the end was on point! I wanted to know what happens next! The background music was well chosen for the script and made your read even more intense and interesting. Great read!
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