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Hello Everyone!
Hope you are all having a great weekend! I am in the process of working to my demo record for narration, and I have recorded my first practice clip. I would greatly appreciate any feedback that anyone has for my first attempt!Thank you
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Great job! I guess it would depend on what kind of read you were going for, but your read as-is has a more subdued energy, which I might expect out of the informational kiosks at some museums. Definitely not a bad thing, but of course just to be aware. Your voice has a very nice texture
On the tech side, there’s a few clicks but largely negligable. Overall it sounds like you’re using good mic technique. I will say I can hear a background hum or other steady sound in the background while you’re speaking (I’m assuming you used a noisegate for in-between words) . Obviously I don’t know your situation, but if you are looking to use that booth for your demo then you should ask your coach about it (the noise). It’s not distracting that much, but more keen employeers might pick-up on it.
Fantastic start for a first attempt. I wish my first attempt was as good off, haha.
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Hey everybody. Been a while. I did a cold read of this because I just moved and made a new recording space and wanted technical feedback on the room treatment (echo/reverb, warmth, etc). I’ve listened to so samples that I can’t tell what’s normal, haha. The read itself has performative failings because it’s perfunctory, so don’t worry about that. Thanks!
(For veracity, I’ve left the fan noise in the background unedited, but I’m aware its there lol)
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I’d say you’re about 99% there. There is a slight resonance, not sure why.
I don’t know if you do your own postproduction editing, but perhaps a noise reduction would eliminate it. Or maybe watch your placement to the mic. It may also be the fan, because it almost sounds like that sound you get when talking into a fan. A good mic will pick that up and it’s hard to edit. (Spit balling here) -
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Hi MCarter,
I think your voice pairs really well with the reads you picked. Your pace is good for both but I think overall they could both use a little bit more energy.
Wisteria:At the beginning just be careful of pauses as they make your read sound a little disconnected. Also, try varying your words as most of them are landing on the same note along with hitting Wisteria Bank. With diction, I hear ” we understand “the” behind every dream” and I’m thinking it should be “That” instead of “the.”
Priceline: Try varying your words with this read as well. I hear “Top the line instead of Top of the line” so just be mindful with that as well. I liked what you added to “But one of them is paying 40% less. Can you guess who?” nice job with those lines. -
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Good start. idk if you wanted technical feedback but the first thing I noticed is that your recording space doesn’t sound very treated at all. big echo/reverb, haha.
Performance wise, it sounded very back and forth if you knew who you were talking to and why (if that makes sense). For example, the ending tag line for both of yours are pretty on point, but the opening phrase for priceline sounded like it was a (internal) question, more than statement (then followed by the rhetorical question). Or at the beginning of the Bank ad, “Go for it” almost sounds like a deadpan challenge instead of an encouragement.
Overall a few things need tweaking but I think youre on the right track.
[[Disclaimer: I’m a rookie with ADHD. Sometimes I hyper-focus on something negligible and other times I make out-right ‘bad’ calls based on something I (wrongly) idealize. Also conversely, I can miss an elephant in the room. I focus on constructive criticism on the basis of improvement, so it may not be apparent how good I think a recording is; it’s not because I don’t want to gush about all the awesomeness 🙂 ]]
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Hello!
These are for my commercial homework. I would love feedback on my read. I also tried out some new techniques in my DAW so any feedback on the sound quality would be very much appreciated.Thank you!
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Hi:
These are very nice reads, very natural with lots of specifics. The only note I’d give is that sometimes the pauses between phrases throw off the natural rhythm a bit.
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*Disclaimer: I’m not a SW fan, so I’m not sure how Darth Maul is actually supposed to sound. I did two takes, which one sounds better?
Maul: *Lost*. I am lost… And yet, I-I can *feel* his presence, so close. So close! I can… *see* him… in my mind’s eye. Kenobi. KENOBIIIII!… Will it end here, like *this*? *No*. NO! I must draw Kenobi out, *tempt* his noble heart. But how, *how*?… I know… I *know*.
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Good start!
I’ll avoid hardware feedback unless you want it. The second read was definitely stronger. I can’t tell you what Darth Maul sounds like either, but that’s the beauty of voiceover – uniqueness! (unless you’re an impressionist focus). I will say pumping up your sinister energy is working for you, there’s like a bit of s****m in each beat. I’m reminded of Scar from The Lion King pacing back and forth with his evil plans (mwhaha!). I think it’s an inner monologue so balancing over-acting with tepidity is probably the greatest challange. Strictly for practice, you can try adding a thoughtful conniving “Hmmm” after each thought to help frame the spontaity of the scene.
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Great job Titus. I like the first read better, only because of the “KENOBI!!!” part. But I think the first Kenobi in that read should be more contemptuous, like it’s distasteful and he is spitting out the name.
Great energy in the read.
It may also be helpful to listen to Star Wars audiobooks (I do that a lot). This is a good one: https://starwarsaudiobook.com/star-wars-brotherhood-audiobook/
This will give you a good example of emotive reads.
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You knocked it out of the park, my man! I’m jealous of the gravitas you have, haha.
Only thing I can really notice is the ‘s’ sounds really tend to blend into the adjacent letters when you speak. Might have to do a few regimines of “She sells seashells by the sea shore” type of enunciation practice. Once you’ve nailed that down, I wouldn’t hesitate to hire you.
Definitely keep going!
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The intent and intonation when you said “alive” at the end was on point! I wanted to know what happens next! The background music was well chosen for the script and made your read even more intense and interesting. Great read!
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Really good! but slow down! haha. If nothing else, the listener has to have time to process what you say. I have the exact same problem when I’m nervous so don’t put yourself in a catch-22; kinda just remember to be proudly plodding each sentence you make with distinction.
Also there was a varying amount of mouth clicks or something, especially noticeable in the first suave ad. seemed like every other word. Once you kinda tame those things you should be good to go otherwise!
[[Disclaimer: I’m a rookie with ADHD. Sometimes I hyper-focus on something negligible and other times I make out-right ‘bad’ calls based on something I (wrongly) idealize. Also conversely, I can miss an elephant in the room. I focus on constructive criticism on the basis of improvement, so it may not be apparent how good I think a recording is; it’s not because I don’t want to gush about all the awesomeness 🙂 ]]
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Hi Grace Lee,
I really liked your read, I thought your pace and diction were good. Just be cautious of pauses they can make your read come across disconnected or choppy, I heard a few of them throughout the read. Otherwise really nice job! -
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This is a good read with good voice quality.
I think you were trying to be technically sound in your read which took away from the conversational delivery.
Keep in mind that voiceovers are intended for people listening to you. You are there to let them know what you have to let them know. So, try to speak more like you are talking to your friends. -
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Great job! I’d say, the energy is great, but slow down with that same energy. I’m not sure, but some of the peaks sounded a little too punchy; some glottals I think. Keeping that energy with an even keel volume is difficult but gets easier as you practice and be aware. Also removing some gaps between clauses might be worth looking at, if I’m being nitpicky, but I liked the performance though overall though; I’d hire you.
[[Disclaimer: I’m a rookie with ADHD. Sometimes I hyper-focus on something negligible and other times I make out-right ‘bad’ calls based on something I (wrongly) idealize. Also conversely, I can miss an elephant in the room. I focus on constructive criticism on the basis of improvement, so it may not be apparent how good I think a recording is; it’s not because I don’t want to gush about all the awesomeness 🙂 ]]
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I won’t elaborate on the technical side since you seem to be using practice equipment like a phone.
Briefly, I’d say definitely slow down and connect to the words you say. Each word needs an impact of it’s own to collective make each sentence contagiously interesting. In particular, the “AFTCA”* acronym seems to be the biggest script hurdle to sound natural. It’s not easy, haha
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