[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[BB123]

Hello Everyone,
First time posting here. I am uploading these for my “homework” and would appreciate some feedback. Looking for two things: 1) How does the audio sound, recording from my home studio? and 2) How is my overall performance?
Thank you.

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[BB123]

Wow, thank you everyone for all the responses and for your feedback. I do appreciate it

[88KeysDC]

I’ll echo some of the other comments – the beer ad was perhaps a little overly serious. It would be great to hear it delivered a little more conversationally. There were some mouth noises here and there, but the overall quality was very pleasing to the ears – you have a wonderful voice!

[samsheeks]

You have a great voice for cars and beer! Great work. I wanted a little more dynamics in the Sam Adams one. I love the “manly” feel but it felt a little all one note.

[nicolance]

Hey BB123 – as for technical – I can hear the force of your p and t . . .are you using a Pop filter? and you may wish to turn down your gain – you may be peaking (I find it a little loud). and a couple of mouth clicks – remember to hydrate a lot (I have this issue all the time). Your voice and tone are cool and deep and warm, and you sound natural- not forced or announcery. I don’t know what direction the Sam Adams ad might have had, but you sound so very serious – maybe too serious for a beer ad? Did you have someone in mind that you were talking to? Slow the pace on the car spot – and again think about who you are telling this info to. Good job! Lance

[MayeWest]

I like how your pace is different in each. These sound great, keep up the good work!!

[Cheechman]

Here is another one for comments.

ON all I like the ones with a 2 after …lol

This is it for today. Time for yardwork…YUK!!!

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[samsheeks]

Great tone and pacing, and great casting for your voice. I wanted the tagline to feel a little more personal and less “sales-y”.

[nicolance]

Hello Cheechman – your tone and deep richness bring an authority to you read in all cases. Whenever you have a list of things, vary the tone of each part of the list so they sound different – otherwise they all sound the same and the list gets lost. You had lists in several of your reads below and all cases, you should vary the tone. I hear you reading the scripts – but I want to hear you having a conversation and talking to someone . . .try picturing someone you are telling this to – I think this will help to reduce your announcer sound. Good jobs – Lance (and a note to you – a pop filter does not affect the s sounds – only has affect on sounds that push a lot of air out in front of your face – like P or T)

[Cheechman]

I was informedd the pop filters do lessen the S and P sounds

[Cheechman]

Here is another one for comments.

ON all I like the ones with a 2 after …lol

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[Cheechman]

Thanks, alot!
I have a hard time picturing someone to read to.

[nicolance]

try using a real photograph to look at during the read?

[Cheechman]

Here are the other 2 from the previous post.
Don’t know why they didn’t attach.

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[samsheeks]

You have a perfect voice for these types of projects. But I think you can work on making your sentences flow a little more. It sounded a bit too rehearsed at points. And on the Trump ones, I think you could have gone further with the assertiveness.

[Cheechman]

I’m uploading 3 sets of 2 each for my second coaching session.
All comments will be taken seriously and are completely appreciated.

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[MayeWest]

The first one sounds cleaner than the 2nd. Good job!!!

[ladyburdkm]

Hi all, I welcome feedback on these commercial reads; creativity, pace, clarity, and conversational delivery.

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[Rachel MSP]

Hi,
I thought this sounded like a great radio ad. I prefer the crayola-2 rather than 4 because it didn’t sound as confident and the inflections/cadences on certain words/phrases didn’t sound like they were placed where you might have wanted them.
I might suggest sounding slightly more enthused, only to keep the listener’s attention.

[ladyburdkm]

Thank you kindly Rachel! Going to keep on practicing! 🙂

[samsheeks]

The sound quality is really great! And totally believable “mom” voice. The thoughts felt a little choppy at points and that was distracting, especially in the first line. Maybe work on connecting thoughts and driving the through-line.

[ladyburdkm]

Excellent, I felt the choppiness as well. I really appreciate this. Thank you

[TeatroMan]

Looking for feedback on my narration spots. Any micro pauses, am I pronouncing words correctly? Engaging? That sort of stuff

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[Gill]

Hi TeatroMan,
Nice work on your reads you showed a wide variation of your pitch. I really liked cosmos because I felt that had a more conversational connection and your pace was good for the read. I’m not sure what you were aiming for with one piece. If you’re considering a gaming read for it then I would say your projection would be on track but if you weren’t then its a little over projected. I did like your characterization of it. For Chaplin, I did hear some slurring of your words so just be mindful of that. Overall nice job!

[samsheeks]

Great work! I can hear you trying to pronounce things clearly – keep it up! I think it will keep getting easier!

[Amy Connerley]

Preparing for my commercial demo! I would love feedback on if these sound conversational and my pacing! *Traveling at the moment so recording on my phone, so no notes on recording quality please!

Thank you! 🙂

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[elizbrooksbell]

Really good work! The only thing I would mention would be the pacing, sometimes you seem to be going a bit fast, and other times too slow. I would just say to be more consistent!

[samsheeks]

great enthusiasm and connection to the script! I can hear that your room needs some treatment. It was a bit echo-y and I can hear some static or so from your equiptment.

[nicolance]

Hello Amy – great energy. Slow down on Barbie a little – this will help with enunciation – lost the t on adult both times, and the d in assembled. And who are you talking when you say “you can be anything”? It will sound more conversational if you have someone you are telling this to . . .as for Discovery – that is more of a promo than a commercial . . .promos tend to be big – and so if you add more energy and again think about who you are telling this to, you will have more of a conversational tone. Great job on both – Lance

[Cheechman]

Are you using a “pop” filter?

The letter s is very noticeable.

Otherwise, they sound good.

[BB123]

Test. Plz ignore

[nicolance]

Hi Forum folks – sample of a commercial for radio – did the audio sound clear? Any technical issues? Thanks Lance

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[ladyburdkm]

Great voice and I love your texture! Great pace and very clear.

[Amy Connerley]

Love your read and your pacing! I would like a little more conversational feel to the “in fact” and the “why” direction changes, but I really love your tone!

[88KeysDC]

The audio was nice and clear and your voice was a pleasure to listen to – I can almost imagine the background music that could be paired with this when it hits the radio. Good stuff!

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