I’m trying to vary my pitch to get a more natural read. Does this sound like it could be in a commercial? I’d appreciate some good feedback!
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Recording quality is pretty good, my only suggestion is that the read seemed just a little intense for the subject matter. Maybe try a slightly more conversational tone and see how it feels.
I now want to try a fish boil lol. My only suggestion would to be to maybe bring a little more energy to the fish boil read (without going over the top). But for your first attempt, pretty good stuff!
Good reads! They’re nice and clear. As for the breathy-ness of your recordings, you could do what I suggested to JNMullett, where you make space around each breath for easy cutting (if you have an editing software, that is). If you can’t edit your recordings, something you could do is to experiment with training your body to take quiet breaths (maybe raising the soft palette in the back of your mouth when you breathe?). Or you could turn your head away when you breathe to keep the microphone from picking it up as much.
In the second read, you had a few mouth sounds. To treat that, I’d say drink a LOT of water. Hydration is really important for Voice Over work.
Thank you for your feedback! Raising my soft pallet is definitely doable. I’ll record my next script using my shift pallet as well as the turning of the head. This has been helpful. Oh yes….. and lots of water!!!!
The recording sounds like a commercial! The only problem is that there are a lot of strange, choppy pauses, like the kind after editing the audio. I’m assuming it’s to get rid of the breaths? If you want to do that, I suggest that after saying your line you pause, breathe, pause again, and read the next line. That way, the breaths will be easier to remove. Still, great work!
well….that’s a young sound! bravo! Room needs some more treatment – a bit reflective. closer to mic, maybe? technique is key! also, try and study the TV spots with headphones on. mimic them. practice. use ispot for samples and transcribe scripts so you are using actual scripts…this young sound is in demand, but you have a ways to go…smoother delivery please…
Sounds pretty good! You’re reading it nice and clearly. Something you might want to consider is ending your sentences with an upward swoop, maybe? That way your sentences don’t always end the same way.
Hey y’all, I am a novice; this is my very first time submitting to this forum. I have future coaching classes starting next week and recently had a one-on-one with Jennifer Sims! She was wonderful and told me all about this forum. She also was influential in my microphone/hardware purchase too! I just moved and decided to use my closet in my home office for my studio since I already work from home. 🙂
Here are 2 commercial reads: I welcome any feedback, but mostly on creativity, tone, and flow. I am still learning a lot, especially on the technical side. There is a lot to digest! I have read through some of the feedback on here already, and you are all wonderful. I loved listening to some of the reads thus far, and you are all inspiring. Thank you for your time.
These are nice. Very clear and the tone and pace are appropriate. I liked 4 better. It was more specific and there was more variation as you described the music choices. It sounded like you were experiencing the platform and sharing your experience with someone.
I’ma be real with you. This is so monotone I felt like falling asleep. I guess a more somber tone is kinda what you were going for? Your voice is good, but you need to emote a bit harder, even if the piece is melancholy. As an exercise, try reading it with uncomfortable excessive amounts of overacting (practically shouting), and then try to go back and read it as normal (and even your own attempt to make it extremely monotone if you want to compare and contrast). It should help you pick up on where you need to breath life in to the read. It doesn’t have to be high strung, but it does need a emotional investment; if that makes sense.
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Hope you are all having a great weekend! I am in the process of working to my demo record for narration, and I have recorded my first practice clip. I would greatly appreciate any feedback that anyone has for my first attempt!
Great job! I guess it would depend on what kind of read you were going for, but your read as-is has a more subdued energy, which I might expect out of the informational kiosks at some museums. Definitely not a bad thing, but of course just to be aware. Your voice has a very nice texture
On the tech side, there’s a few clicks but largely negligable. Overall it sounds like you’re using good mic technique. I will say I can hear a background hum or other steady sound in the background while you’re speaking (I’m assuming you used a noisegate for in-between words) . Obviously I don’t know your situation, but if you are looking to use that booth for your demo then you should ask your coach about it (the noise). It’s not distracting that much, but more keen employeers might pick-up on it.
Fantastic start for a first attempt. I wish my first attempt was as good off, haha.
Hey everybody. Been a while. I did a cold read of this because I just moved and made a new recording space and wanted technical feedback on the room treatment (echo/reverb, warmth, etc). I’ve listened to so samples that I can’t tell what’s normal, haha. The read itself has performative failings because it’s perfunctory, so don’t worry about that. Thanks!
(For veracity, I’ve left the fan noise in the background unedited, but I’m aware its there lol)
I’d say you’re about 99% there. There is a slight resonance, not sure why.
I don’t know if you do your own postproduction editing, but perhaps a noise reduction would eliminate it. Or maybe watch your placement to the mic. It may also be the fan, because it almost sounds like that sound you get when talking into a fan. A good mic will pick that up and it’s hard to edit. (Spit balling here)
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