[David Goldberg]

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[jmacdotorg]

Howdy folks,

Find attached my own very first homework-read, assigned by my coach, and based on the script at https://edgestudio.com/script/amica-life-insurance-4/.

Thanks for your time, attention, and feedback!

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[forceonature]

Hi!!!

I love your voice and tone for this read! I would be careful with your diction on some words (Subsidiary kind of sounded like “subsidary” (@ 5 seconds) and policy holders kind of sounded like “Paulsy holders” (@ 20 seconds)).

One thing my coach always tells me is to think about my audience. I love when you emphasize “never” when saying “NEVER invested in real estate….” it really felt like you were trying to convince the listener to trust Amica. I think leaning more into that and really thinking about trying to convince someone to trust Amica while you read would take this already great read to the next level. Keep up the great work!!!!! Hope this made sense!

[Gill]

Hi Jmacdotorg,
I like your pace for this read, you have a good narrative voice. Something I noticed with your read is the way you pronounced AMICA. I believe its pronounced “Ameeka”not “ah mic a” so I would be careful with pronouncing the client’s name. There are some others words to be mindful of with your diction. Otherwise keep it up!

[DillonP]

Two new takes of both Narration and Commercial. Please leave feedback to see how well I did.

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[RGK3]

Hi Dillon:

These are nice. I would consider more of a transition during the pizza hut one for the different types of thoughts: when you switch to “see kids” and then the tag at the end. Same sort of feedback on the Youth Mentoring one. There’s probably an opportunity to change the tone as you start specifically talking about the mentees. Maybe really imagine them and the relationship you have with them and it will come out in the read.

[Bil-Bo]

It’s Chevy Truck Month and time to add the perfect accessories to your new Chevy. Make it bolder and work harder. Make it your own. Find new possibilities….and new roads. Very qualified buyers can get 0 percent financin’ on most Chevy pickup trucks….plus now during Chevy Truck Month get a thousand dollar accessory allowance toward the eligible purchase of a new Chevy truck with accessories. Find new roads at your Chevy dealer.

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[Titus Nichols]

The background music was a nice touch. I liked that you added the personal touch of “financin'” instead of “financing” to really create the “down home country” appeal for the voice.

[Thomas_D]

Love the addition of the music in this Bil-Bo! The only feedback I had was maybe adding a little more excitment and energy during ” Make it bolder and work harder. Make it your own. Find new possibilities”. Other than that, this sounded great

[VoicesByJeff]

Hey guys! A few more practice reads. Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated!

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[edixon310]

I agree with all the feedback already given by ThomasD, and the Barack Obama vibe on the Popeye’s read. The only thing I would add is that you may consider adding some more acoustical treatments to your studio to cut down on that slight echo.

[Thomas_D]

Hey VoicesByJeff! What I like about all 4 recordings is your voice sounds consistent in each read (like none of them feel affected at all). Popeyes and Ziploc were my top 2 (I got a weird Barack Obama feel from the Popeyes read).

The only feedback I have is during the beginning of the Allstate read “Go Ahead…Make a Wish…”. I wonder how that would sound if the tone were switched up from each phrase, to make it sound like you’re really looking for that person to “make a wish…now speak to an All state agent”.

[VoicesByJeff]

I really appreciate this feedback. And the advice on the Allstate read is great. Thanks!

[jackjacknovak]

Here are a couple homework reads! Appreciate any feedback you can offer.

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[VoicesByJeff]

Good reads. I thought the Austism speaks was the stronger of the two. I would just try to put a little more emphasis on “Autism Speaks” when reading. Overall nice job!

[mcarter]

Hi All! Newbie posting for the first time for my homework assignment. Any and all feedback is appreciated at the moment (though I’m sure I’ll have more specific questions down the line!).

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[Thomas_D]

Hey mcarter! You nailed the tone here. Your voice sounds really casual as if you’re talking directly to the audience.

The section with “You can seek top experts…” I thought was a hair too fast, though I liked the change-up of pace that made it sound more natural

[slemay]

Being a newbie too I thought it sounded really natural and believable. I would make the last two sentences more like the beginning of your read. Sounds great!

[mcarter]

Thank you both! Really appreciate the feedback

[Heidi]

Hi! I recently went through the rigmarole of eliminating a strange staticky almost white noise in the background of my recordings by fiddling with my Blue Yeti settings. Only now, I’m afraid the noise reduction has sacrificed a percentage of “warmth” in the vocals. My ears are tired and wouldn’t be able to tell the difference between a cow mooing and a plane crash at the moment. Can anybody lend their wisdom to what my sound setup currently needs? Thank you!
(This is just a quick line to test the sound setup. Please try to ignore any mouth clicks, etc.)

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[Benn Pharr IV]

G’morning all. I have a couple uploads for my first homework assignment. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance!

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[Thomas_D]

Hey Ben! Great first reads!

Skullcandy: I thought your diction was great and clear here. I wonder how it would sound if you either changed the inflection during some of “meaty” parts in the middle, OR gave them even more room to breathe, to really sell the product.

Vitamix: This was awesome. Felt like you were more warmed up and natural here. The very first sentence is such a long question. I wonder if there’s any way to break that up a little more through pace or dynamics to make it stand out and grab the attention more.

Nice stuff!

[Benn Pharr IV]

Thanks so much Thomas! I appreciate the feedback. As I’m practicing, I’ll give your suggestions a try and compare them to the originals.

[Sarania]

Hello All,
I did 3 commercials for homework and would love any feedback you can give me.
Thank you so much! I really appreciate it!

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[elizbrooksbell]

You hit the key words really well! Great work!

[Cheechman]

I thought Betty Crocker lacked sincere emotion, something I have a big problem with, by the way…lol
The best one for me was the movie read.
Very natural and hit the key words great.

[JoyceVOA]

Betty Crocker – great read! I thought you sounded warm and inviting. I wanted to hear more about Betty. Some words you over pronounced and woman needed a little more emphasis.

[brendiginette]

Hello everybody! I’m a newbie looking for some feedback on these scripts. My main focuses are: keeping good pace, avoiding micro pauses, and to not pitch down at the end of every sentence.

Any and all feedback will be greatly appreciated! Thank you community!

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[elizbrooksbell]

The pacing was really good, however I would recommend a lead-In so it doesn’t sound like you’re just reading it of the page. Great job!

[JoyceVOA]

Great diction and pace.However they both sounded like reads and not conversational.

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