[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[slemay]

Ok, I am still a little rusty but curious to see how this sounds to anyone that wants to comment. Just a quick recording on my phone so no technical feedback necessary. THANKS!!!

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[smarlowe]

I listened to the Align and Chevy ones. I really like that raspy quality you have to your voice! I liked the Align read, but felt the Chevy read could just be a tad bit faster. Good job overall.

[slemay]

Thanks so much I slowed it down and like it better! 🙂

[Kent]

Good attitude. You can feel it. If you look at it as a graph – like when something is played back – and you see jumps with heightened volume, replace volume with emphasis. Listen to it. There are early jumps, but it flattens a bit for a while.

[slemay]

Great thanks so much and I will listen back!

[samsheeks]

And the last few. Working with a new interface so trying to get the levels dialed in!

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[raven808]

Great pacing and enunciation ! You were very good at keeping your energy up the whole way through! I especially liked the car one!

[slemay]

I think these all sounded great but for some reason Suave was my favorite. Great job!

[samsheeks]

A few more for feedback!

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[atperry]

LOved the read , voice. Expressive in the right places. Maybe a little more, different energy at the end .Director”s choice. Put a smile on my face. Studio sounds great . Keep keepin on

[slemay]

I loved the Connecticut lottery read especially in the beginning because I really believed you won with the fun I heard in your voice if that makes sense. 🙂

[samsheeks]

Any feedback on my “natural” delivery would be great 🙂

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[Logan DFD]

I’d appreciate some feedback on my natural delivery. Which read sounds more natural? Which one fits best?

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[raven808]

I liked the third one as far as it sounding natural! Great job making 3 different takes!

[slemay]

Hi Logan I liked the first one best. I am not an expert but thought that sounded more natural. Only feedback is maybe less pronunciation on the word taste. Nice job!

[annellakaine]

Hi there! Working on my second homework assignment for Narration with a focus on toning down my natural tendency to theatricalize and instead deliver conversational reads. Any feedback greatly appreciated. Thank you!

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[slemay]

Maybe try to go a bit slower and or softer to give your audience the feeling you really care. But your voice sounds nice!

[H]

Hi Everyone,

Attached are two homework script reads I’m working on to improve my technique. Feedback is greatly appreciated. Areas I’m trying to improve is tone, pitch, and energy from the reading. Thanks in advance to all!

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[slemay]

I liked the Bowflex and thought your energy was good. I liked the variation you used in the last half of the read when you were explaining instructions. You mixed it up a bit and that felt more natural. Nice job!

[Cheechman]

Sounds very echoic, like you’re in a can
Sounds like it’s kind of fake.

[jmacdotorg]

Hello, friends. Time for me to post my second Edge homework assignment. In this dive into the narration script library, I appear to have found a push-back recording from an American Airlines flight circa 1998, and then something from the Neil deGrasse Tyson version of “Cosmos”, if I’m not mistaken. Thank you very much for listening, and for any honest critique offered in reply!

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[raven808]

The airlines one is great! Your voice is great for announcements… I think you would be great for the voice over the speakers in theater performances.. the intermission/cell phone/take your seat etc announcements.. or the ones between the Grammys/academy awards. The pause between”directly in front of you” and “in your seat back pocket” could be shortened slightly but otherwise, it’s very clear and well paced!

[H]

Really nice reads on both. I liked that your words were clear in both. I would suggest trying a different tone for the American Airlines read from the Cosmos-1 one. The tone you used for the Cosmos-1 sounded really good and I think the American Airlines read gives you more room to raise the energy and change the tone a bit. You can certainly have more fun with the tone/pitch in the American Airlines one. Lastly for both, I think you could pick up the speed of the read a little. Otherwise, very nice!

[madtrammell]

Hello everyone, I have another attempt at narration practice for my upcoming demo record. Any feedback is greatly appreciated, have a great weekend!

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[Cheechman]

To many ups and downs. There are many different ways to bring attention to a customer.

Needs to be more conversational

[ikrani]

My latest and possibly last round of coach homework. It was only now that I realized I’d spent the last 3 months recording next to a ticking clock. I just didn’t notice until I moved my microphone back about 5 inches and caught some of the ticking in my reads. By then, it was too late: I had everything recorded and the levels all adjusted.

So, if I missed any rogue ticking noises, my apologies.

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