[David Goldberg]

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[Jaljr]

Hello all –

Here are some reads for my narration coaching sessions today. If you have time take a listen. All feedback appreciated. They are VERY lightly edited. Mainly focused on the read and not the finished product. Thanks

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[Cheechman]

I would say they sound really good, just more highlighting of the customer.

[Cheechman]

A different read from a different McDonalds post.

All comments are welcome

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[Cheechman]

Some reads from McDonalds posts online.

I liked 3 the best.

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[Logan DFD]

Hi everyone! I’m looking for some feedback on natural delivery and whether I have enough variety in pitch. Thanks for listening!

A1 Steak Sauce

With steak, you want to make every bite count.
That’s why we use A-1 Steak Sauce.
A-1 brings out every single bite of steak, or even hamburger.
Mmmmm, delicious.
For me, there’s only one steak sauce, A-1.
Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.

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[Tates-VO]

Hi Logan I felt like take 2 had a little bit more excitement

[Hazaro]

Hi Logan, I felt like the 2nd take had the most variety in pitch.

[Cheechman]

This an actual audition script read.

I’m torn between the 2nd and 3rd read.

What do you think?

This is the description:
This client helps the NHS, education and so on. It requires a confident, caring and mature voiceover. 60-second voiceover, 140 words. Guide track and film will be made available to shortlisted candidates.

Script to read: Notes: confident, calm, clear and proud.
We’re the goodies!
“We believe that good public services are the key to a stronger society.
We are The PSC, and we exist to make public services brilliant.”

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[madtrammell]

I think the third take is great!

[Hazaro]

I liked the 3rd take best but think you could slow it down a hair and give the words a bit more weight. 😉

[darleneharris]

Hi Everyone! Would love some feedback on the attached narration practice scripts in preparation for my next coaching session! Thank you!

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[Hazaro]

Great job on these! One tiny thing I would say (something I’ve done myself) is not to break up a word into syllables for the sake of clarity. It was only once in the first Brit-tain. Your clarity is already there and these both sounded great IMO!

[Thomas_D]

Here’s a few more reads from my narration session. Any and all feedback is welcomed (thanks in advance)

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[Tates-VO]

Hi Thomas the telsa was take was good,I think it should slowed down just a little bit but other wise it’s good

[LindsayLaVelle]

Hey Thomas, I liked your Telsa read. I think you could take your time a bit more because, as someone unfamiliar with the script, I wanted to really hear all the details. Well done!

[djmetzner]

Posting my first practice read! This is a documentary narration. Open to any reactions or suggestions. Thanks!

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[Tates-VO]

Hi djmetzner I liked how your voice was very consistent and how mysterious it was when reading the script it sounds good.

[Thomas_D]

Hi djmetzner! Liked how even you kept the pitch and tone throughout the recording. I feel like it’s hard not to change pitch/tone when doing a documentary read, but thought you did a great job here.

[verderbert90]

Hey all, would appreciate some feedback on the attached. These are from the studio library – I’ve been trying to focus in on narration.

Thank you!

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[Thomas_D]

Hey verderbert90! Off the bat, the “advanced technologies” read sounded very natural, and your tone was great as well. I see where you were going for the wiseman narrations. For those, I’m wondering if you can even play more with pitch/tone.

[G Cobb]

hello everyone,looking for feedback.

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[madtrammell]

Great diction and pacing on both reads!

[Silver Wit]

Great voice, and great Nike read. I feel that you could pick up the pace a little in the first half of your newmans read, because the second half of that is spot on.

[G Cobb]

Thank you very much, I actually wrote the Newman add and at first my pace was much quicker, I cut 8 seconds from the original so I need to find my happy pace,I have had just 2 lessons and I am learning my recording equipment.🙂

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