[David Goldberg]

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[bnielsen15]

Hi again everyone! Some more narration homework here. As always, any feedback is greatly appreciated.
Thanks!

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One Vanderbuilt Observation Deck: Hello, and welcome to the audio simulation of the One Vanderbilt Observation Deck. Please adjust your audio volume to a level that best represents my voice at a normal speaking volume to a person standing next to you. This will calibrate your headphone level. Please do not adjust your audio volume again over the course of the simulation. Thank you.

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[Logan DFD]

Good Work! The Vanderbilt read had the right tone for what was intended. It sounded like you read the Save Them All read with the same tone, which didn’t quite fit as well. Parts of it were a little monotone, and other pieces that had pitch variety (the opposite of monotone) had similar rhythms. It can be hard to have good pitch variety, but try to read the script as if you were speaking it to someone in your everyday life.

Keep it up!

[Curtis R]

Hello, Im Curtis B. Rembert, and im looking for some feed back on practice reads. thanks for your time.

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[madtrammell]

Good work! My only comment would be on your second read to slow down your pacing just a tad to avoid sounding rushed

[Jaljr]

Hello all –

Here are some reads for my narration coaching sessions today. If you have time take a listen. All feedback appreciated. They are VERY lightly edited. Mainly focused on the read and not the finished product. Thanks

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[Cheechman]

I would say they sound really good, just more highlighting of the customer.

[Cheechman]

A different read from a different McDonalds post.

All comments are welcome

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[Cheechman]

Some reads from McDonalds posts online.

I liked 3 the best.

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[Logan DFD]

Hi everyone! I’m looking for some feedback on natural delivery and whether I have enough variety in pitch. Thanks for listening!

A1 Steak Sauce

With steak, you want to make every bite count.
That’s why we use A-1 Steak Sauce.
A-1 brings out every single bite of steak, or even hamburger.
Mmmmm, delicious.
For me, there’s only one steak sauce, A-1.
Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.

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[Tates-VO]

Hi Logan I felt like take 2 had a little bit more excitement

[Hazaro]

Hi Logan, I felt like the 2nd take had the most variety in pitch.

[Cheechman]

This an actual audition script read.

I’m torn between the 2nd and 3rd read.

What do you think?

This is the description:
This client helps the NHS, education and so on. It requires a confident, caring and mature voiceover. 60-second voiceover, 140 words. Guide track and film will be made available to shortlisted candidates.

Script to read: Notes: confident, calm, clear and proud.
We’re the goodies!
“We believe that good public services are the key to a stronger society.
We are The PSC, and we exist to make public services brilliant.”

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[madtrammell]

I think the third take is great!

[Hazaro]

I liked the 3rd take best but think you could slow it down a hair and give the words a bit more weight. 😉

[darleneharris]

Hi Everyone! Would love some feedback on the attached narration practice scripts in preparation for my next coaching session! Thank you!

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[Hazaro]

Great job on these! One tiny thing I would say (something I’ve done myself) is not to break up a word into syllables for the sake of clarity. It was only once in the first Brit-tain. Your clarity is already there and these both sounded great IMO!

[Thomas_D]

Here’s a few more reads from my narration session. Any and all feedback is welcomed (thanks in advance)

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[Tates-VO]

Hi Thomas the telsa was take was good,I think it should slowed down just a little bit but other wise it’s good

[LindsayLaVelle]

Hey Thomas, I liked your Telsa read. I think you could take your time a bit more because, as someone unfamiliar with the script, I wanted to really hear all the details. Well done!

[djmetzner]

Posting my first practice read! This is a documentary narration. Open to any reactions or suggestions. Thanks!

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[Tates-VO]

Hi djmetzner I liked how your voice was very consistent and how mysterious it was when reading the script it sounds good.

[Thomas_D]

Hi djmetzner! Liked how even you kept the pitch and tone throughout the recording. I feel like it’s hard not to change pitch/tone when doing a documentary read, but thought you did a great job here.

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