Feedback Forum
- This topic has 10,048 replies, 725 voices, and was last updated 2 weeks, 5 days ago by
.
-
Topic
-
Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
-
This topic was modified 4 years, 8 months ago by .
-
This topic was modified 4 years, 5 months ago by .
-
This topic was modified 5 months, 1 week ago by .
-
This topic was modified 5 months, 1 week ago by .
-
This topic was modified 5 months, 1 week ago by .
-
This topic was modified 5 months, 1 week ago by .
-
This topic was modified 4 years, 8 months ago by
-
Replies
-
Hi Everyone! This is my first time using the forum. I’m working on recording my commercial demo reel. I’m open to any comments on my delivery, tone, pacing, or any general voice notes! No need to comment on the sound quality though, these were very much recorded on an iPhone and I’m aware a professional setup would be different haha. Thanks!
-
Hoping to do my narration demo very soon. Just started in on commercial, so I’m trying to bring a little of the oomph from that area into narration. Hoping I’m not losing any of the basics whilst focusing on that part. How’s it sound? Thanks for the input. I do read it and take it to heart.
-
-
Hi everyone! Got some more Narration homework for you. As always, any feedback is welcome and appreciated.
Thank you!
Apollo 16: The year was 1967, and the astronauts of Apollo 16 were going to the moon. This is Charlie Duke, Lunar Module Pilot on Apollo 16. This amazing little capsule went by the call-sign CASPER, and it was the heart of an immense system of rocket engineering that got the astronauts safely to the moon and back.
Recycling: I don’t know about you, but I like our planet a lot! And one of the easiest ways we can help protect the Earth is by recycling. That’s where instead of throwing things like plastic in the trash, you put them in a special bin so they go to a kind of factory to be reused. You’ve probably recycled things like plastic bottles before. There might even be a recycling bin in the room you’re in right now!
-
Mornin friends –
Here are three reads for an upcoming narration coaching session
Brevard College Admission video
JFK and Vanderbilt are toursAll lightly edited. Thanks for your comments
-
Hello All! This is my 1st time posting here!
This is 2 reads about cereal! One is Happy/Energetic and the other is Angry (lol! -
-
-
Hello everyone,
Here are 3 narration audios. I would love feedback on any of them. Blue Angels and Covideo are sales videos, and Space Camp is a children’s museum exhibit. Thank you!
-
Hello everyone,
Here are my 3 narration audios in mp3 this time. I would love feedback on any of them. Blue Angels and Covideo are sales videos, and Space Camp is a children’s museum exhibit. Thank you!
-
Hi, Grace
All great reads
Blue Angels could use more excitement and drive
Covideo is good as a conversational instruction piece. Very relatable
Space Camp is the best of the three for me. Grabs the listener and pulls them in.
Good work -
-
-
-
-
Concur with Grace17. You have a nice conversational tone which is hard to find naturally. It doesn’t sound forced. I also agree with Grace on not upticking so much on the syllables but changing the pitch for each item listed instead. If you can be believable you’re ahead of the vast majority of people out there!
-
-
#1 sounds very conversational but I think up-ticking the last syllables of each phrase in the list(ex: expertise, technology, counseling, nutrition) removes from the confidence of the read and makes it sound too casual in my opinion.
In #2 you sound more confident in your list of items, but I would advise you to explore listing them without elevating the last syllables, as i mentioned above. I also advise exploring varying the pitch on each item, just to explore other ways of listing the items.
I really liked how down-to-earth and conversational this read was. Your read is believable and you don’t try too hard.
-
-
Hi everyone, I’m looking to get feedback on a narration read. All feedback is welcome. Thanks in advance
-
Great voice and I like the tone overall. I would slow down the pace a bit, as it is a little hard to follow and sounds rushed. Also, echoing feedback I just got from my coach, it sounds a little choppy. Be mindful of longer-than-needed pauses in the middle of a phrase (for example after “too much time…”).
In the sentence “Due to the nature…”, I would hit more words to emphasize meaning and clarity.
I would hit: “nature”, “frequently”, “split up”, “scattering”, and “legwork”.I liked the following part, albeit a little slower, and slightly less pause after “moving”: “Pacing is critical for keeping your players interested. Keep the game’s pace moving smoothly using these tips”
Just my 2 cents. Best of luck!
Jeff
-
-
-
First of all, I want to start out by saying that I thought that both of your readings were very good. Now I’m going to knitpick just a little bit. The first reading that are a couple of places where, at the end of your phrase, you went up instead of down. I have been told that, unless there’s a specific reason for going up at the end of a phrase, the natural tendency is to go down. The word ‘mind’ in the phrase keep this in mind and the word ‘you’ in the phrase keep this card with you. In the second reading I would put a little more emphasis on the word ‘and” just before the phrase about marijuana growers. Also, in my opinion, the phrase ‘heart and soul’ show be read together (the word heart has a bit of a space between it and the rest of the phrase). Otherwise, you did a good job! I could just hear some kind of nature background music playing when I listened to the second one. Hope this helps!
-
-
-
Good Afternoon,
I’ve got one session left before I record my commercial demo and looking for final feedbacks please. Inflections, pitch, pacing. Thanks as always! Ryan
-
Just a quick note about the middle two demos. My wife and I both agree that there are two things about these: 1) You tend to be ‘singsongy’ and 2) You need to flow a little better. some spacing is fine, but it seemed to us kind of choppy. The first one was okay (a little singsongy, but I think it works with the demo). But the last one was beautiful! Hope this helps!!
-
-
-
-
Hey Folks. Here is some homework for my next coaching session. Any feedback is greatly appreciated. Thank You! I went easy on the Irish accent on the second one. I did a recording with my normal voice, but my wife liked this one better.
-
Dexterius, I listened to both and you got a smile out of me with the fairies one! Accent came across well and I liked the delivery. The Jack Daniels had correct inflections are the right points. I think your audio may need a little work but that comes with time, equipment, and sound treatments, and you pry aren’t as worried about it on the forum as you would be with auditioning. Nice work.
-
- You must be logged in to reply to this topic.
