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  • #80616
    Cheechman
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    Another batch for comments.

    Maybe I’m trying too hard, but i like to submit more than one.

    Trying to vary the reads.

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    • #80627
      Thomas_D
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      Hey Cheechman, 2-2 sounds the best to me of the three. Sounds like you gave it more energy while still retaining your natural voice. Take #3 sounds like you want to give more energy but at the cost of maybe losing your natural voice. However, I do like the attention of detail you give to each word, in all 3 takes. That’s something that I struggle with for sure.

      • #80698
        Cheechman
        Participant

        Thanks for the comments

  • #80613
    Cheechman
    Participant

    Here is my latest from coaching.

    I tried to sound 2 different ways in my reads.

    What do you think?

    Comments are more than welcome

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    • #80692
      becksflatt
      Participant

      Wow, what a great voice! The first read has a seriously great vibe but I think I prefer the second read. It has a more varied pitch range which gave it some extra intrigue.

      • #81123
        Cheechman
        Participant

        Thank you very much!

        It’s hard for me to vary, i get into a mode and every read sounds somewhat the same.

  • #80605
    marioh5
    Participant

    Greetings, I have 2 recordings that I would love some feedback on as I continue my journey to my demo. Thanks for the help!

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    • #80628
      Thomas_D
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      Hey Marioh5,both were interesting reads, and I like how clear your diction is in each. For “Motivation-meditation”, the biggest take away for me is sounding like you sympathize, with the scared listener. So maybe using a bit more emotion to convey the feeling of sympathizing with being scared

      • #80633
        marioh5
        Participant

        Hey Thomas, thanks for the feedback, super helpful!

  • #80600
    lmayo13
    Participant

    Hi. I’ve been asked to submit voice samples from my home studio with no music production for a possible vo job. They asked for a relaxed, sincere tone. Thanks for input.

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  • #80591
    FinleyVigliotti
    Participant

    Hi Everyone! This is my first time using the forum. I’m working on recording my commercial demo reel. I’m open to any comments on my delivery, tone, pacing, or any general voice notes! No need to comment on the sound quality though, these were very much recorded on an iPhone and I’m aware a professional setup would be different haha. Thanks!

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  • #80581
    Kent
    Participant

    Hoping to do my narration demo very soon. Just started in on commercial, so I’m trying to bring a little of the oomph from that area into narration. Hoping I’m not losing any of the basics whilst focusing on that part. How’s it sound? Thanks for the input. I do read it and take it to heart.

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    • #80583
      RBenesVO
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      Great read! Audio sounds good, real nice inflections and above all it was engaging. Only piece was the last two seconds at :38 came a little garbled and unsure if you said “killing”. Overall the whole read was easy to understand and flowed well.

  • #80569
    bnielsen15
    Participant

    Hi everyone! Got some more Narration homework for you. As always, any feedback is welcome and appreciated.

    Thank you!

    Apollo 16: The year was 1967, and the astronauts of Apollo 16 were going to the moon. This is Charlie Duke, Lunar Module Pilot on Apollo 16. This amazing little capsule went by the call-sign CASPER, and it was the heart of an immense system of rocket engineering that got the astronauts safely to the moon and back.

    Recycling: I don’t know about you, but I like our planet a lot! And one of the easiest ways we can help protect the Earth is by recycling. That’s where instead of throwing things like plastic in the trash, you put them in a special bin so they go to a kind of factory to be reused. You’ve probably recycled things like plastic bottles before. There might even be a recycling bin in the room you’re in right now!

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  • #80550
    Jaljr
    Participant

    Mornin friends –

    Here are three reads for an upcoming narration coaching session
    Brevard College Admission video
    JFK and Vanderbilt are tours

    All lightly edited. Thanks for your comments

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    • #80564
      Teacher2
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      Hello All! This is my 1st time posting here!
      This is 2 reads about cereal! One is Happy/Energetic and the other is Angry (lol!

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      • #80567
        Teacher2
        Participant

        Great Voice!! I like your sound and your tone!

  • #80541
    Grace17
    Participant

    Hello everyone,

    Here are 3 narration audios. I would love feedback on any of them. Blue Angels and Covideo are sales videos, and Space Camp is a children’s museum exhibit. Thank you!

    • #80543
      Grace17
      Participant

      Hello everyone,

      Here are my 3 narration audios in mp3 this time. I would love feedback on any of them. Blue Angels and Covideo are sales videos, and Space Camp is a children’s museum exhibit. Thank you!

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      • #80549
        Jaljr
        Participant

        Hi, Grace

        All great reads
        Blue Angels could use more excitement and drive
        Covideo is good as a conversational instruction piece. Very relatable
        Space Camp is the best of the three for me. Grabs the listener and pulls them in.
        Good work

        • #80580
          Grace17
          Participant

          Thank you for the feedback Jaljr!

  • #80528
    Cheechman
    Participant

    Practice read,, lease comment

    I liked #2

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    • #80573
      RBenesVO
      Participant

      Concur with Grace17. You have a nice conversational tone which is hard to find naturally. It doesn’t sound forced. I also agree with Grace on not upticking so much on the syllables but changing the pitch for each item listed instead. If you can be believable you’re ahead of the vast majority of people out there!

      • #80603
        Cheechman
        Participant

        Thank to both of you.
        You are absolutely spot on, i know to change the pitch, apparently i wasn’t thinking!

    • #80547
      Grace17
      Participant

      #1 sounds very conversational but I think up-ticking the last syllables of each phrase in the list(ex: expertise, technology, counseling, nutrition) removes from the confidence of the read and makes it sound too casual in my opinion.

      In #2 you sound more confident in your list of items, but I would advise you to explore listing them without elevating the last syllables, as i mentioned above. I also advise exploring varying the pitch on each item, just to explore other ways of listing the items.

      I really liked how down-to-earth and conversational this read was. Your read is believable and you don’t try too hard.

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