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Trying a character voice
Lindsay Olives
My son, the olive, gives me such a pain! All I‘ve wanted was the best for him. To be a Lindsay olive, a perfect olive!
But would he listen to me? Noooo! He’s gotta act like a big shot all the time. Like when I told him “Hershey, stay in the sun, the sun is wonderful for you!” Would he listen? No!
Like when I caught him hangin’ around with a bad bunch of olives…I said: “Hershey, get away from them, you don’t need them, you’re a good olive!”
Do you think he listened to me? No!
So when the Lindsay pickers came, I said: “Yoo hoo, yoo hoo, Mister Lindsay picker! Pick over there my son, the big shot.”
Did they pick him? Nooo! They don’t want big shots. If he’d listened to me, by now he could have been a Lindsay olive! -
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I’m working on my natural delivery. Do these reads sound ‘fake’? Do they have a good pitch variation? Thanks!
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Balducci’s: Delivery feels a little “choppy”, which makes it sound unnatural, like it is being read (which it is, but it’s our job to convince the audience otherwise). Try not to hit words so hard and pointed (e.g., taste first). Some great advice I got from my coach, try to imagine the specific person you are talking to, where you are, and why you are saying this. e.g., perhaps you bumped into one of your neighbors, and you’re so excited about the place you work, Balducci’s, you just need to tell her about the great tasting food they make.
I felt similarly about the other reads you did, but didn’t dig as deeply.
Hope this helps.
Jeff
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Easy enough to critique, let’s try putting one out there. There is literal hammering and drilling going on just the other side of my studio wall. Recording between that made things more exciting. Better editing practice, too.
I’m hung up on “our time.” It doesn’t sound quite the way I’d say it conversationally, but “ow-er” sounds a little stilted. How would you do it?
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If you lived before our time, who would you be?
Would you fight your brother for the rights of another? Who would you be?
Would you find new dreams or create wonders?
What if you could choose from a 1,000 yesterdays; a 1,000 lives, when the past was today and the new took your breath away.
Who would you be? What would you feel? How would you live? Who would you love?-
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I agree with Slemay on varying the pitch on repeated phrases like ‘who would you be’. Also, the phrase ‘how would you live’ was spoken with an emphasis that didn’t quite have the right tone to it. Otherwise, the overall tone of the read was delivered nicely, and your voice compliments it well! Keep it up!
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My coach gave me direction to vary the way I say repeating words so on your “who would you be’ maybe try to make it a bit different each time?
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Ok, I am still a little rusty but curious to see how this sounds to anyone that wants to comment. Just a quick recording on my phone so no technical feedback necessary. THANKS!!!
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I listened to the Align and Chevy ones. I really like that raspy quality you have to your voice! I liked the Align read, but felt the Chevy read could just be a tad bit faster. Good job overall.
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Good attitude. You can feel it. If you look at it as a graph – like when something is played back – and you see jumps with heightened volume, replace volume with emphasis. Listen to it. There are early jumps, but it flattens a bit for a while.
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