[David Goldberg]

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[latyesemca]

This was fun, a lot of personality was put into this I believe.

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[latyesemca]

Honestly, this was pretty tough. Nike tends to be dry, so I tried to achieve that.

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[Bwatts]

I thought this to be a smooth clip. If I can offer any advice it would be to modify the pitch a little. Hope this helps.

[latyesemca]

My thoughts were how I would want a commercial for my own coffee brand to sound like.

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[latyesemca]

By far the hardest to do. Trying to stay smiling but informative with SO MANY WORDS.

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[Terra Ashe]

Another nice tone! Definitely a mouth full of a script with fun for kids but so much sale info so a hard script. Try really just focusing on one person you are specifically talking to. Maybe a friend or family member that has a kid, whatever works for you. It may help to connect the informativeness of the script to the funness of the pop up magic castle games without getting trapped in the wordiness of it. Good job!

[latyesemca]

This was by far my favorite read. It made me think of my nephews!

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[Terra Ashe]

Lovely tone! It’s just a bit choppy so try smoothing it out a little, so there aren’t so many long pauses, but good job!

[latyesemca]

I had fun with this one! Had a bit of a fun personality come through.

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[Terra Ashe]

Nice read fun for sure, one thing you could play around going further with the tone switch of the “This is john now yikes” in the first half to the “but we have a solution that can solve his problem” in the second.

[latyesemca]

I would love some feedback on this take! I wanted to read it as a whisper but not too much of such.

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[Terra Ashe]

I think your tone is right on, not really a whisper but more of lets talk quietly c*s it’s 2am and someone is sleeping next to you so nailed that.
– Trying slowing down/extending the first word, it’s getting a little lost and slowing it down would help establish the low and slow late night tone.
-I’m losing the word “bright light”

[Bwatts]

Hi. I’d appreciate any creative feedback re pace, diction, flow, etc. Thanks.

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[Terra Ashe]

Coconut oil.
– Lovely voice! Feels rushed, but instead of just thinking of slowing down I would just try to focus on who you are talking to specifically. Really tell them about how amazing you’ve realized coconut oil is.
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– I think you have a lovely pace and flow with this one. I would maybe try being a little brighter at the top(nothing over the top just a little more friendly) and see what that does to the rest of it.

[Bwatts]

Hi. I would appreciate any creative feedback re pace, diction, flow, etc. Thanks

[Donnamichelle444]

Nice!!!

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