[David Goldberg]

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[Bwatts]

Hi. I’d appreciate any creative feedback re pace, diction, flow, etc. Thanks.

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[Terra Ashe]

Coconut oil.
– Lovely voice! Feels rushed, but instead of just thinking of slowing down I would just try to focus on who you are talking to specifically. Really tell them about how amazing you’ve realized coconut oil is.
Writers voice
– I think you have a lovely pace and flow with this one. I would maybe try being a little brighter at the top(nothing over the top just a little more friendly) and see what that does to the rest of it.

[Bwatts]

Hi. I would appreciate any creative feedback re pace, diction, flow, etc. Thanks

[Donnamichelle444]

Nice!!!

[Donnamichelle444]

great voice – be mind of the pausing – I am working on that now

[Donnamichelle444]

Love your choice of Script – try acting it out a bit more – draw by your acting

[vlwalinski]

Hi Everyone,

I’m working on prep for a commercial demo and attached is my homework assignment. Any feedback you could give would be great! Thank you for your help!

Best,
Veronica

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[Artist7]

Hello, everyone! I’d appreciate some feedback on these two reads. Do they sound conversational, and how is the sound quality? Thanks so much!

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[Tibrious]

*THIRD UPLOAD* Any and all constructive feedback on the scripts that I have created and used for my commercial voiceovers would be greatly appreciated. I am also looking forward to hearing any feedback regarding the sound quality. This is my third and last upload at this time:

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[Tibrious]

*SECOND UPLOAD* Any and all constructive feedback on the scripts that I have created and used for my commercial voiceovers would be greatly appreciated. I am also looking forward to hearing any feedback regarding the sound quality. This is my second upload:

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[Tibrious]

Any and all constructive feedback on the scripts that I have created and used for my commercial voiceovers would be greatly appreciated. I am also looking forward to hearing any feedback regarding the sound quality. This is my first upload, more to follow:

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[JamesB]

Just on the scripts, right? As far as quality, it sounds a little quiet to me BUT please get multiple opinions on that before making adjustments to your recording levels because it might be my rig and your volume is fine.

Black Decker One Touch Coffee Maker: I liked this script. Can fit into a 15-second spot, nails selling points, and has a fun pitch.

Erie Insurance: A lot of repetitive word usage. Then again, it is what is being ‘sold’. I think the second half is verbal gold.

Nicholas Coffee: This is a solid script. A good 15-second spot selling a brand of coffee that has something for every coffee drinker.

For your reads. I liked them all. One Touch Coffee could have been slowed down a little,it sounded rushed to me. Erie Insurance delivery was flat to my ear, I think you’re going for serious/professional. The Nicholas Coffee recordings were both good, the “Nicholas-Coffee-2” was money though. The first word sounds clipped, missing the “kah” on crafted.

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