[David Goldberg]

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[Andrew Jackson]

Hey everyone! My biggest challenge has been moving from a more “announcer” read to a more conversational tone. It is still definitely a work in progress, but let me know your thoughts. The first is an in-show narration read and the second is a more self-help style read.

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[Earthbul]

I liked the Iberian read. I enjoy your sound and alot of your pauses but I just feel if you slowed it down a tad it’d be that much better. Just feels a little rushed. Put a lil more emphasis on certain words and this will be a killer.

[MARCUS BOOTH]

Hello and good morning fellow VO peers. I would like feedback and critique on a recording I did based of a Telephony script, called Franklin Investments, from Edge Studio’s Free Script Library. I need to know some specific things such as:

If my pacing is too slow, fast, or just right?
Does it sound conversational and convincing?
Are you able to understand each word I say while reading the script?

Thank you in advance.

-Marcus

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[Andrew Jackson]

You have a very pleasing voice to listen to! One thought I had during your read, was that the pace could be quickened a bit. You are clear and understandable, but I bet if you can speed up the read a bit you can still keep those points. Toward the end when reading the number prompts, it seemed a bit choppy. You may want to try and adjust the pauses in each phrase so that there is no breath break. For example, something like “if you would like to leave a message (no pause) please press two now”. Great job!

[Earthbul]

I agree with Andrew. Plus, I feel it sounds a bit too jovial considering it’s an investment firm.

[TeatroMan]

Hi, I’m looking to improve my narration takes, so I recorded a few, hoping people like it and supply some feedback

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[Bwatts]

Hi. I’d love some creative only feedback. I’m working on pacing, pitch and a conversational delivery. I appreciate your time.

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[Lorraine Kish]

Hi there! firstly, I just want to say that I’m a newbie and I’m not used to giving constructive feedback, but I guess one has to start somewhere! I don’t have all the lingo down perfectly either. I did enjoy your reads, but I wanted to confirm these are narration focused? I found the Reach for the top read was more upbeat than the Toddler Art one. It seemed like you were more confident in this one. Your voice reminds me of an actress and it’s very pleasant to listen to. Noticed some stops in a couple areas that didn’t seem to belong there. I think the more you practice it the more natural it will become – especially if you try to imagine you are talking to your best friend about these topics!

[waninick]

Hi all. Just wondered what this esteemed group thinks of the attached recording. Looking forward to any and all feedback…!

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[Mike_Control]

Hey guys!

I’m trying to get better at commercial copy that is little more serious. Tried an automotive script. Let me know what you think!

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[waninick]

Mike, just got around to listening to this. I would say you have a lot of the ‘authoritative’ nuances in place. Namely the drop in pitch at the end of sentences. There is an awful lot of script for a 30-sec ad here, so the pace is justified. I think I would watch the exhales on certain words, especially the phrases near the end.

Not sure if you are expecting any comments on sound quality, but if so, I think you could use some processing to eliminate more noise and strengthen the voice some to match that wonderful, clean articulation. Maybe even get a bit closer to the mic to reduce some of the room that is present.

All in all, I was impressed with the read on a somewhat complicated script. A lot going on in there, and you worked it out…!

TimG

[Earthbul]

Thinking of changing the music bed. Thoughts ? Any critiques otherwise are readily welcomed and appreciated.

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[Andrew Jackson]

I really like your tone. The breathy feel at the end of phrases conveys a tone of empathy and trust. I especially like the way you handled the list at the end of the read. I think the music is okay, but it seemed a bit more upbeat than I was expecting. You conveyed a calm empathetic tone, so if you do decide to change music, perhaps something a bit more relaxed could fit better. Just my thoughts, but I really like your read!

[Earthbul]

I agree. I always struggle with music beds. It also took me forever splicing together that list. I don’t remember how many takes I did of each of those lines but L**O editing, right ? Thanks again. Btw, I commented on one of your reads. You’ve got a great sound. Love to hear more.

[Angela Doyle]

Hi. I’m looking for some feedback on all aspects please. The client is looking for a calm, peaceful sounding voice for this biblical reading. Thanks in advance!

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[Mike_Control]

You have the calm voice down! Your delivery would be even better if the flow between the commas in the verse (from ‘Let the words…’ to ‘acceptable in thy sight,’) was a little smoother. Hope it helps!

[Earthbul]

Seems ok to my ears. Delivery was spot on and sound quality is good. Nice work.

[latyesemca]

This was also tough. I didn’t want to read it too plan so I made sure to bring some highs and lows in the read.

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[Earthbul]

A little quicker and a bit more self assured. More confidence. As a potential buyer I’m unsure. Lean into it and get personal with it. You got this.

[latyesemca]

I tried to bring the energy of a girls girl to this read. I hope you are able to receive that image as well!

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[Bwatts]

You have a calming voice but to my ears the sound drops off at the end of your sentences. Try to bring energy to these end of sentence words.

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