[David Goldberg]

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[Mike_Control]

Hey guys!

I’m trying to get better at commercial copy that is little more serious. Tried an automotive script. Let me know what you think!

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[waninick]

Mike, just got around to listening to this. I would say you have a lot of the ‘authoritative’ nuances in place. Namely the drop in pitch at the end of sentences. There is an awful lot of script for a 30-sec ad here, so the pace is justified. I think I would watch the exhales on certain words, especially the phrases near the end.

Not sure if you are expecting any comments on sound quality, but if so, I think you could use some processing to eliminate more noise and strengthen the voice some to match that wonderful, clean articulation. Maybe even get a bit closer to the mic to reduce some of the room that is present.

All in all, I was impressed with the read on a somewhat complicated script. A lot going on in there, and you worked it out…!

TimG

[Earthbul]

Thinking of changing the music bed. Thoughts ? Any critiques otherwise are readily welcomed and appreciated.

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[Andrew Jackson]

I really like your tone. The breathy feel at the end of phrases conveys a tone of empathy and trust. I especially like the way you handled the list at the end of the read. I think the music is okay, but it seemed a bit more upbeat than I was expecting. You conveyed a calm empathetic tone, so if you do decide to change music, perhaps something a bit more relaxed could fit better. Just my thoughts, but I really like your read!

[Earthbul]

I agree. I always struggle with music beds. It also took me forever splicing together that list. I don’t remember how many takes I did of each of those lines but L**O editing, right ? Thanks again. Btw, I commented on one of your reads. You’ve got a great sound. Love to hear more.

[Angela Doyle]

Hi. I’m looking for some feedback on all aspects please. The client is looking for a calm, peaceful sounding voice for this biblical reading. Thanks in advance!

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[Mike_Control]

You have the calm voice down! Your delivery would be even better if the flow between the commas in the verse (from ‘Let the words…’ to ‘acceptable in thy sight,’) was a little smoother. Hope it helps!

[Earthbul]

Seems ok to my ears. Delivery was spot on and sound quality is good. Nice work.

[latyesemca]

This was also tough. I didn’t want to read it too plan so I made sure to bring some highs and lows in the read.

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[Earthbul]

A little quicker and a bit more self assured. More confidence. As a potential buyer I’m unsure. Lean into it and get personal with it. You got this.

[latyesemca]

I tried to bring the energy of a girls girl to this read. I hope you are able to receive that image as well!

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[Bwatts]

You have a calming voice but to my ears the sound drops off at the end of your sentences. Try to bring energy to these end of sentence words.

[latyesemca]

My heart was really for the little kids! I hope this made you think of the little ones in your life.

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[latyesemca]

This was fun, a lot of personality was put into this I believe.

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[latyesemca]

Honestly, this was pretty tough. Nike tends to be dry, so I tried to achieve that.

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[Bwatts]

I thought this to be a smooth clip. If I can offer any advice it would be to modify the pitch a little. Hope this helps.

[latyesemca]

My thoughts were how I would want a commercial for my own coffee brand to sound like.

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[latyesemca]

By far the hardest to do. Trying to stay smiling but informative with SO MANY WORDS.

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[Terra Ashe]

Another nice tone! Definitely a mouth full of a script with fun for kids but so much sale info so a hard script. Try really just focusing on one person you are specifically talking to. Maybe a friend or family member that has a kid, whatever works for you. It may help to connect the informativeness of the script to the funness of the pop up magic castle games without getting trapped in the wordiness of it. Good job!

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