[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[DillonP]

It has been quite sometime I had done anything with the feedback form. So I just did two commercial recordings and hope for some feedback. I need to get more focus on my goals more often and get out there more. I would really appreciate the feedback, it will be very helpful to me in the future and will make more of an effort to do so more often.

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[Terra Ashe]

Pizza Hut: I would combine the energy of the first take with the pace of the second take.

4kidsTV: Slow down on the first couple words I had a hard time catching what was said, you could also give some more emphasis to the adjective “more”
Maybe give yourself a lead in to this, remember you are talking to kids so really bring it to life, you are still giving info so it doesn’t need to be crazy but you can bring some more energy to it.
Nice read though, I definitely think you have a good voice for stuff marketed to kids!

[Tom_S]

The first few times I recorded this, I went way too fast. This seems to be a tendency. I would appreciate any feedback on pacing, tone, or anything else. Thank you!

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[Terra Ashe]

Your tone and pace is lovely I think you can have some more variation from the first half problem being stated part to the second half of we have a solution. A lot of mouth noise and I would give yourself a lead in to help get into it. But nice read!

[Tom_S]

Thank you for the feedback. This is helpful!

[Tom_S]

This is my first submission to the feedback forum. Any feedback is appreciated. I am most interested in my pacing, diction, and if my delivery is choppy. I have a decent recording setup. I am using Studio One with a Shure MV7X mic. I’ve uploaded a wave file but you can also listen on SoundCloud (private link) if you’d rather not have a file download. Thank you!

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[hsturgis]

Hi everyone! I don’t have an at home studio but would love any and all constructive feedback on these two spots I’ve been practicing– mainly about my tone, diction and pacing! They are fairly contrasting. Thanks!

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[detoomey]

Sturgis – very nice work, zero pretense to your voice. Super natural. Feels like I’m listening to you. Only note, is you tend to lose a little air and voicing at ends of sentences and the line gets swallowed a tad. Very strong. Appreciated your feedback as well

[detoomey]

Here’s another to pick apart. Any thoughts out there? Thanks!

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[hsturgis]

I really like this one too, your tone is much deeper and the general mood is much more serious. Your pitch is good and I think matches what this sort of spot would call for. Only thing is that towards the end with the call to action it feels a little rushed and like we’re missing a word there. But great job!

[Earthbul]

I agree with hsturgis. Your tone and pitch are spot on. I really think this type of read is in your wheelhouse. Would love to hear it with the audio cleaned up a bit. I’d really love to your interpretatiin of my Olympia motors piece. It’d be a perfect fit.

[detoomey]

Thanks for the feedback. And the Olympia spot idea, that sounds fun, I’ll give it a shot (mind you home studio isn’t ready, but I’m game)

[detoomey]

Here is a run of the Olympian spot – did my best to try to forget your read after I transcribed it but here’s what I got, lol

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[detoomey]

Howdy folks – no home studio yet, but hoping to get some general thoughts/feedback on this read. Thanks very much.

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[Tom_S]

Very nice voice and it sounded well-recorded. I like how you told a story and maintained my attention.

[detoomey]

Appreciate the note Tom

[hsturgis]

This feels really conversational, in the best way! I feel like you are really painting the picture of what the commercial would look like. And I think pacing and tone were appropriate as well.

[gwenthevoice]

Hello All! Here is a practice script for the awesome Nordic Track! Any comments are welcome but I especially would like feedback on the following:
•Does my read sound conversational?
•How is my diction?
•Working on my pace – how is it?
Am I reading my copy with a good flow or do I sound choppy?
How is my audio?
Thanks in advance!

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[detoomey]

Gwen. you have a very smooth tone and quite soothing to listen to. Lovely. It’s a bit controlled, and could be messier and a pacing could have more variety. Overall, you have a strong vocal presence that draws you in.

[gwenthevoice]

Detoomey, thank you very much for that insightful feedback! I will keep this in mind and try to vary my pace a bit. 🙂

[Earthbul]

Any and all feedback is welcome and appreciated. Script written by Chat GPT for an existing company.

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[detoomey]

Earthbull, very strong right out the gate and very consistent. Voice is buttery and inviting and it worked well with the mood of the piece.

[MattSchonberg]

Hi all, working on a Commercial demo and posting here for feedback on my practice. Thanks! Script is The REI Difference in the library.

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[Terra Ashe]

I think you have a nice pace! Sometimes you’re emphasizing certain words a bit hard, maybe try a “shrug it off” take to bring in a little more converstaional-ness to it, but good job!

[gwenthevoice]

Hi everyone! I am practicing for a commercial demo. Looking for feedback to this Nutro dog food ad. For starters, here are some questions I have:
Does my read sound conversational?
How is my diction?
Working on my pace – how is it?
Am I reading my copy with a good flow or do I sound choppy?
How is my audio?
Thank you in advance!

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[Brian Lakes]

Hi Gwen!
Your voice is very calming. I like it! Your pace and diction are good, you had a pause in there between full and active lives. A tad more inflection to sound even more believable. Audio sounds good!
Overall good job. Keep it up!

[gwenthevoice]

Brian, thank you for that feedback! I will keep this in mind and add more inflection and be sure to watch out for pauses! 🙂

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