[David Goldberg]

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[AllAirlinesOffice]

Southwest Airlines Jamaica Office

[Jacqueline Figueiredo]

Hi everyone…just practicing!

Creative feedback only please! No technical feedback please!

How is my diction? How is my pace? Do my reads sound conversational?

Please let me know…thank you!

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[JamesB]

The Apple commercial sounds conversational to me. The diction is very good aside from a missed the splosive “p” on “specifically” but that is the only minor diction thing that caught my ear. Good job.

The Bed Bath and Beyond commercial sounds conversational except the pacing is a little fast. Diction sounded good to me. Again, good job.

[Brian Lakes]

Hello everyone!! I am looking for an accountability group. Are any of you in one? Is it beneficial? I live in Colorado and would love to be part of one or start one with someone. I look forward to hearing from you all! You can email me at Brian@brianlakes.com if interested.

[Honeyvoice]

This is my Homework for vo narration coaching.

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[JamesB]

I didn’t see a response on here, and due to the date this is probably a little late but here it is anyways. I think you nailed it. That sounded perfect for a Corporate Training Video. I liked the pacing and your delivery was clear. Good Job.

[DillonP]

It has been quite sometime I had done anything with the feedback form. So I just did two commercial recordings and hope for some feedback. I need to get more focus on my goals more often and get out there more. I would really appreciate the feedback, it will be very helpful to me in the future and will make more of an effort to do so more often.

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[Terra Ashe]

Pizza Hut: I would combine the energy of the first take with the pace of the second take.

4kidsTV: Slow down on the first couple words I had a hard time catching what was said, you could also give some more emphasis to the adjective “more”
Maybe give yourself a lead in to this, remember you are talking to kids so really bring it to life, you are still giving info so it doesn’t need to be crazy but you can bring some more energy to it.
Nice read though, I definitely think you have a good voice for stuff marketed to kids!

[Tom_S]

The first few times I recorded this, I went way too fast. This seems to be a tendency. I would appreciate any feedback on pacing, tone, or anything else. Thank you!

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[Terra Ashe]

Your tone and pace is lovely I think you can have some more variation from the first half problem being stated part to the second half of we have a solution. A lot of mouth noise and I would give yourself a lead in to help get into it. But nice read!

[Tom_S]

Thank you for the feedback. This is helpful!

[Tom_S]

This is my first submission to the feedback forum. Any feedback is appreciated. I am most interested in my pacing, diction, and if my delivery is choppy. I have a decent recording setup. I am using Studio One with a Shure MV7X mic. I’ve uploaded a wave file but you can also listen on SoundCloud (private link) if you’d rather not have a file download. Thank you!

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[hsturgis]

Hi everyone! I don’t have an at home studio but would love any and all constructive feedback on these two spots I’ve been practicing– mainly about my tone, diction and pacing! They are fairly contrasting. Thanks!

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[detoomey]

Sturgis – very nice work, zero pretense to your voice. Super natural. Feels like I’m listening to you. Only note, is you tend to lose a little air and voicing at ends of sentences and the line gets swallowed a tad. Very strong. Appreciated your feedback as well

[detoomey]

Here’s another to pick apart. Any thoughts out there? Thanks!

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[hsturgis]

I really like this one too, your tone is much deeper and the general mood is much more serious. Your pitch is good and I think matches what this sort of spot would call for. Only thing is that towards the end with the call to action it feels a little rushed and like we’re missing a word there. But great job!

[Earthbul]

I agree with hsturgis. Your tone and pitch are spot on. I really think this type of read is in your wheelhouse. Would love to hear it with the audio cleaned up a bit. I’d really love to your interpretatiin of my Olympia motors piece. It’d be a perfect fit.

[detoomey]

Thanks for the feedback. And the Olympia spot idea, that sounds fun, I’ll give it a shot (mind you home studio isn’t ready, but I’m game)

[detoomey]

Here is a run of the Olympian spot – did my best to try to forget your read after I transcribed it but here’s what I got, lol

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[detoomey]

Howdy folks – no home studio yet, but hoping to get some general thoughts/feedback on this read. Thanks very much.

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[Tom_S]

Very nice voice and it sounded well-recorded. I like how you told a story and maintained my attention.

[detoomey]

Appreciate the note Tom

[hsturgis]

This feels really conversational, in the best way! I feel like you are really painting the picture of what the commercial would look like. And I think pacing and tone were appropriate as well.

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