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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi! I’m working on scripts to add a PSA spot to my demo. I will only end up choosing one, and all are just drafts below, so plenty of room to change things. Would love any feedback. Thanks!
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Hi everyone. Doing the demo practices and coaching sessions. Please give a listen and some constructive feedback if you have the time. I look forward to the feedback. Also, the audio seems much more quiet in MP3 format than the initial recording. If you find the recording to be too quiet too, let me know and if you have any useful tips I’m all ears. Using audacity with a Scarlett Solo 4-gen and a Rode NT-1 mic. Thank you all for your time.
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Hi, JamesB! Your voice is nice and works well for both scripts. However, it does sound as if you’re reading the scripts in some places-particularly in the first half of the Principal script and in the Quicken one, too. I agree with Terra Ashe that more energy in your tone/delivery would probably help. Keep up the good work!
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Principal- You have a lovely voice! I think this script needs a more excited tone in the beginning. Your tone now tells me this Ron is sad and we are doing him a favor. but the words tell a different story, “Ron has been looking forward to March since last march” and now its March so it’s time for him to solve your problem!
Quiken- Loved your “How easy is that” button!, Small thing but I’d try recording a take without the pause between some people-Like. Also your energy is pretty similar through the entire thing, try having a bigger tonal/energy shift from “some people are crazy and do it themselves” to the “but you aren’t that person you want an easy to use solution like quicken”
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Hi, everyone! I’d really love some feedback on whether these two reads sound conversational. Thanks so much!
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Hello Artist7! Of the two, I think Discover Publishers was perfect. It had the right mix of conversational sound and high energy to catch my attention for such a short spot.
The Handcrafted Coffee sounded like a smooth read, the right sound that would catch my ear for coffee. To me, the lack of pauses keeps it from being conversational. I think it’s a 30-second spot and you managed it in 22 seconds, which is impressive. I think you could afford to add a few pauses and stretch it out to 30-seconds and that would make this one sound conversational.
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Hi everyone…just practicing!
Creative feedback only please! No technical feedback please!
How is my diction? How is my pace? Do my reads sound conversational?
Please let me know…thank you!
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The Apple commercial sounds conversational to me. The diction is very good aside from a missed the splosive “p” on “specifically” but that is the only minor diction thing that caught my ear. Good job.
The Bed Bath and Beyond commercial sounds conversational except the pacing is a little fast. Diction sounded good to me. Again, good job.
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It has been quite sometime I had done anything with the feedback form. So I just did two commercial recordings and hope for some feedback. I need to get more focus on my goals more often and get out there more. I would really appreciate the feedback, it will be very helpful to me in the future and will make more of an effort to do so more often.
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Pizza Hut: I would combine the energy of the first take with the pace of the second take.
4kidsTV: Slow down on the first couple words I had a hard time catching what was said, you could also give some more emphasis to the adjective “more”
Maybe give yourself a lead in to this, remember you are talking to kids so really bring it to life, you are still giving info so it doesn’t need to be crazy but you can bring some more energy to it.
Nice read though, I definitely think you have a good voice for stuff marketed to kids!
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The first few times I recorded this, I went way too fast. This seems to be a tendency. I would appreciate any feedback on pacing, tone, or anything else. Thank you!
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Your tone and pace is lovely I think you can have some more variation from the first half problem being stated part to the second half of we have a solution. A lot of mouth noise and I would give yourself a lead in to help get into it. But nice read!
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