[David Goldberg]

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[Hazaro]

Still working on focusing on my attitude in my reads. Hope they’re coming through clearly.

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[Silver Wit]

Very nice difference between both reads. Subtle, but I could hear the difference.

[phillipjlee]

Hello everyone,

I am practicing on my narration voiceover for homework. I would greatly like feedback. Recorded on phone, please excuse the low quality.

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[Tates-VO]

Very nice vocals and the pace is nice and slow good job

[ShellyMadison]

Great pace and you have a lovely, full tone to your voice. I recommend marking up a script to give emphasis to important phrases and really honing in on an audience in your mind. You vary your pitch, but otherwise each word seems to have the same weight so it is sounding a bit robotic.

[Unity]

Hi. The attached file was downloaded as a homework assignment. Feedback would be most appreciated. Thanks so much for your time.

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[RCampos]

Hi Unity,
I think your voice and delivery bring a gravitas and seriousness – which are both essential to this issue. I just have a couple of small notes:
1. At the very beginning, I don’t hear the “s” in “As a parent…”
2. I think you could give more emphasis to “Autism Speaks” and the “Ad Council” at the end, since presumably they’re paying for this ad and want to be clearly identified.
But other than that, nice conversational tone and effective delivery.
If you have a moment, I would greatly appreciate a comment on my Costa Rica VO, posted 10-27 at 7:57pm. I also have a Cool Jazz VO – posted on 10-25. Thank you!

[RCampos]

Hi Everybody!
I would really appreciate your feedback on this read. I’m working on a conversational read while still honoring the “smooth coolness” of a jazz radio station.

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[cbehrens]

I think your overall read aligns with a conversational feeling; I appreciate your inflection on the word “grooviest”! One thing just to keep in mind may be to play with saying repetitive words like “cool” in different ways, offering more variation. Great job!

[Silver Wit]

You’ve certainly got the voice for “cool jazz.” Reminds me of the hosts of some jazz stations in New York.

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for the feedback!
All the best,
R

[Tates-VO]

It sounds very cool nice tone in the voice.

[Declan Waters]

I think your voice and the tone you chose matches the script very well. One critique – It sounds to me as if you end most sentences the same way. Shooting for differentiation particularly at the end of your sentences would help to pace the read and keep listeners engaged. I hope you find this helpful

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for your note about how I end sentences. I’ll pay more attention to that. All the best!

[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 4)

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[Declan Waters]

I really like how well you differentiate between the two attitudes that you’re going for. I think blending the two moods to some extent would make for a very convincing read. At first defeated by the pain, but then convicted and confident about the solution that Excedrin provides. Well done

[RCampos]

Hi Silver Wit,
I like what you’re doing in version 2, but overall, I prefer version 1 because it’s cleaner and clearer. Version 2 gives me a sense that you’re acting out the headache, and this thought distracts me a bit from your words. I like how you vary the intonation on: throbbing, tension and pain – but I think a more upbeat ending might help. I would appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!

[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 3)

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[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 2)

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[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound.

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[Ymin33]

Hi everyone it’s nice to meet you! I’d appreciate some feedback regarding pacing and whether these commercial samples are engaging. Don’t have a home recording studio yet, working on the technical aspects. Thank you

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[Ymin33]

Going to try attaching the other one again

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[RCampos]

Very nice read of peas and carrots. It sounds like you felt it and I especially like the bit of magic you create at the end with “let your adventure begin.” Just a few minor critiques. You fade a bit at the end and I think instead you should emphasize the last words. The words “games” and “activities” run together for me. I think you could make a tiny pause in between them and also differentiate how they sound. Finally – you emphasize “your” and I don’t think you need to. I think that rhythmically it would sound better to put the emphasis on “account.” I would much appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thanks!

[Silver Wit]

I like your peas and carrots read. Had a very nurturing quality that really came across

[cbehrens]

Hello! I’m working on a more conversational read, so any feedback is welcome. Thanks! Courtney

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[Hazaro]

I loved this read Courtney. It was clear, sweet, engaging and playful.

[RCampos]

I like the attitude in this read a lot – it gets my attention. Your clarity and diction is great, but there are a few little spots I’d like to point out. The “x” in complex and the “ss” in boss get a little lost. Maybe your tone is dropping here at the end of the phrase? The only other note I have is that Burts Bees should probably get a bit more oomph, since they’re paying for the spot. I would much appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!

[Silver Wit]

You’re clearly having fun with the material. great pacing too

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