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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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hi — first post since the site upgrade so we’ll see how this goes ….
three practice scripts for coaching session:- Whether you’re young or old, male or female, single or with a family — this video is for and about you. That’s because Social Security has programs that affect everybody. This presentation was prepared by the Social Security Administration and tells you what you need to know about Social Security while you’re still working and what you need to know when it’s your turn to collect benefits. It also provides an overview of Medicare and Supplemental Security income benefits.
- Here we have a very simple example of a database which has users, phone numbers and bank
accounts as entity types. In addition we have two types of relationships: phone calls from
one phone to another, and money transfers from one bank account to another. On the left is
a relational database schema for our simple dataset. We don’t show a separate user table
because we don’t have any facts about users other than their phone numbers and bank account
numbers. On the right is the graph database schema for the same use case. There are three
vertex types (the circles) and the four edge types (the lines). We omit the details about
what properties each vertex type or edge type has. - In the sixth century B.C. Pythagoras, a Greek mathematician, is thought to have made
accoustic experiments with a vibrating string called a monochord. Using two monochords,
Pythagoras performed an experiment in which the string of one monochord was successively
shortened by half (raising the pitch an octave) while the other was shortened by two thirds
(raising the pitch a fifth). After seven octaves and twelve fifths, Pythagoras discovered
that the B# from the second monochord was not exactly the same as the C produced by the first
monochord, but was slightly higher in pitch. This discrepancy is called the Pythagorean
comma.
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Hi, Listened to most of your 3 scripts and they sound very clinical if that’s what your looking to accomplish? Good clear enunciation, pacing and clarity, however that doesn’t necessarily mean they’re believable though. I would suggest a little more excitement about the subject matter, good work and thanks for sharing that.
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Hi,
Well, looks like the post came out just fine, and I really enjoyed listening to your reads. The second one especially seemed really natural and conversational, like you were just talking to me instead of reading. The first sounded very professional, which I would expect for something from the SSA, but your tone was also varied and interesting to listen to. I confess I had a bit of a hard time distinguishing the word “successively” in the third script; I almost thought I heard “accessibly,” so I think a little more clarity there would be good, and some more pitch variation in that third script could increase interest. Great work! Thanks for sharing.
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Just trying a promo type of read. Would welcome feedback regarding delivery as well as audio quality.
Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while…right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.
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Hi Irvj! I really like your voice! Very warm and smooth and mellow. Good variation in tone and pitch. Great job!
Mary
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Hi there,
Yes, very nice delivery, and the audio quality sounded great! I might suggest emphasizing that first “free” a bit more. Volume was a little low in comparison to what followed. Also, maybe experiment with more emphasis on “not” in “not afford.” These are just little things of course. Really fantastic job! -
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Wow I love this!! Your voice is delicious. I don’t really have much to say that is constructive, I thought it was great. Perhaps you could try a delivery with a bit of a quicker pace to up the energy a little bit. Nice work! – Katelyn
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Hello everyone!
I struggled with this copy all evening and night. You name it, and I just couldn’t get it right — from my enunciation, which is frustrating me (“corset” to mention one), to pops and clicks; even my recording quality. However, I am uploading this practice read for your critique.
Thanks again!
Mae West
Mae West was the daughter of a boxer and a corset model, who became a vaudevillian at the age of fourteen. At thirty three, in 1926, she wrote, produced and directed a Broadway show called ‘S*x’, and landed in jail on obscenity charges. After wowing Broadway in ‘Diamond Lil’, she signed with Paramount in 1932 and moved to Hollywood. Her risqué 1930s comedies were ground-breaking, in terms of both s****l content and roles for women. Her films included ‘Night After Night’ and ‘She Done Him Wrong’, which was the film version of ‘Diamond Lil’, and broke all existing box-office records, credited with saving Paramount from having to sell out to its rival, MGM.-
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OK, so I struggle with clicks as well, and most of the time, it’s due to a lack of hydration. Munching on some green apple slices can help, too, the acid will help break up the stuff in your mouth that can cause some of the noise.
With pronunciation, the letter “a” should be short, as in “ah”, not “eh” like Canadians say. By doing that, it may help with the pronunciations of the following words (like corset). Same thing with “obscenity”, it should be a short “e”, like “ob-sen-ity”, rather than “ob-seen-ity”.
Something that helped me, as a suggestion from one of my coaches, James Andrews, was to cross out the words “to” and “for” and write in the numbers “2” and “4”. It helped me slow down a bit and give the words some more enunciation.
The sound quality itself sounded fine to me…just a touch of room noise, like a fan from a computer or something, but nothing a little light noise reduction in post couldn’t cure.
Just know: we all struggle. Knowing that you’re struggling, and knowing that you aren’t getting it right, is a sign that you have the skills and knowledge to do it. This is a good thing. Keep at it!
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Thanks Brian for the encouragement and tips!
Not that I don’t want to pronounce words correctly, but, I’m wondering if my close proximity to Quebec has anything to do with certain pronunciations and dialect. Hmm.
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Howdy! I’m posting another quick practice recording before my next coaching session. Any performance feedback is greatly appreciated.
Qtie
Dating and making new friends can be difficult and daunting. But thanks to Qutie it’s now easier for you to meet fellow LGBT individuals. Follow your heart to find your true colors with Qutie.
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Hi Svenbot! I liked your voice a lot for this read, very warm, friendly and approachable. I agree with some of the other comments in that it could have been just a very little bit slower, but it sounded really good overall. You might want to emphasize “Qutie” a bit more for the 2 times the word is said; it’s an unusual word and you want to make sure the listener knows the product being sold.
Mary
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Hi, new to commercial VO training and wanted to attach my VO samples here for feedback as I’m learning. Would appreciate feedback from others. Thanks! 🙂
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Hi Noreen! I like these reads for your voice. My favorite was the third for Hershey’s, it just seemed the most believable for you. The Second script for Elf was a little hard to hear clearly on my end, I little slower might help the many “s’s” in the script be fully enunciated, they tended to run together. Good job!
Mary
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so the first thing I noticed was that all of the reads were essentially exactly the same in terms of the pacing, tone, and emotion. That’s something that should be varied, as each read would be attempting to reach a different audience, and achieve a different goal, right?
Also, in each there were some cases of slurred words, so make sure to slow down.
Finally, was this recorded on your phone just for the sake of practice? If yes, then no worries…if not, you’ll definitely need to work on your setup.
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Two very contrasting scripts here. Had fun testing different genres. Feedback appreciated. Peace and thanks!
Kids Activity TV
Every day is an adventure with Activity TV. It’s the place to be for
hundreds of Awesome activities in dozens of categories! Cartooning to
magic to cooking and more – ready for you day or night. This month
learn some gross out magic. Watch closely as Ryan teaches you to
perform the severed finger trick!
Meditation
Make yourself comfortable, sitting upright, with a straight spine.
With your eyes closed, look at the point midway between the eyebrows
on your forehead. Inhale slowly, counting to eight. Hold the breath
for the same eight counts while concentrating your attention at the
point between the eyebrows. Now exhale slowly to the same count of
eight. Repeat three to six times.-
Hi Swy619! I really liked both of these reads for you. They were very different from each other and both very believable. Good pace and excitement for the first read and lots of variation in tone. For the second script it was great – it contained more pauses and breathiness which was very appropriate for that read. Great job!
Mary
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Wow! The meditation recording was great, relaxed, really worked, convincing and more. The other performance with the kids show was nice too.
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Hi! I have some feedback for your kids tv read. Your higher pitch definitely helps sell the enthusiasm! I would try changing up the pacing of the read next time. An enhanced pace would help hook any kids listening to this want to tune in. Your tone kind of lowers when you say “Dozens” as well, I would raise it instead to emphasize the amount of categories. Keep up the good work!
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This was so fun!! Ladies this ones for you 😉 Any feedback is appreciated, thank you. I put this script together based on a recent ad with Amy Schumer
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Audition Feedback
Hoping to submit this ASAP, so any feedback regarding delivery will be very helpful. Three scripts all with the same direction: “In a tone that’s intellectual and energetic”.
Script 1:
Doctors specialize in treating patients, not negotiating drug contracts and rates.
That’s where GPOs come in – to serve physicians.
Smart GPOs rely on data to ensure providers have access to the right therapeutic choices at the best value.Script 2:
Distribution is the critical link between pharmaceutical manufacturers and healthcare providers
Because AmerisourceBergen offers specialty distribution to its partners,
we understand that a specialty distributor has knowledge of their patient base and specific needs of specialty physician practices.Script 3:
At a time when health systems are challenged to maximize revenue capture, Drug reimbursement requirements are changing and complex.
Even with an increased focus on this area, it can be difficult for a health system to have a holistic view of the revenue cycle and its complexities, spanning everything from drug procurement to reimbursement.-
Brian, great work on these, good inflections although some seem a bit contrived or maybe too upward in inflection on sentence ending? Only other thought on improvement would be like so many of us have, is glottal stops or I call squeezing of words which come out distorted ie; manufacturers in script 2 and complex in first sentence of script 3, hope that helps and good luck.
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Hey another ad practice script for me. Thanks so much! I would love performance and space notes for this one.
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Love the tone and your delivery on this…there was a real earnestness to it. Maybe slow down like 3.6% (but that’s just one opinion, take it for what it’s worth), and the only real note I have is that the end tag is really rushed, especially to your nearly dead-on pacing with the rest of it. But other than that, great!
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