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    Edge Studio
    Edge Studio Staff

    The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

    Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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  • #65876
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    As I prepare for my demo, I was told in an earlier comment that they couldn’t hear a few of my demo character samples. Turns out that after an accident, that my microphone was moved the wrong way.
    So, I fixed and reset my home studio.
    Please feel free to leave feedback on the performance. Also, let me know if I’m more audible than before, and if you can hear and understand what my character is saying.
    Thanks
    Script:
    Congratulations on winning the election, Mr. President. You know, I got you elected so I could get those weapons contracts. I don’t know if it’s slipped your mind, but I’m through being patient with you. I will expose you as the fraud you’ve always been.

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  • #65874
    IMs
    Participant

    Many thanks for your feedback!
    +++++++

    Carnation Breakfast Essentials

    Kids can change minds.

    They can even change the world around us.

    Packed with protein plus 21 vitamins and minerals, we nourish them with Carnation Breakfast Essentials.

    Because today could change everything.

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  • #65870
    IMs
    Participant

    Thanks in advance for your feedback…

    Cosmos

    Welcome to the planet earth.

    A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows;

    A world positively rippling with life.

    From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique.

    The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware.

    There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.

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  • #65863
    mara_sherman
    Participant

    Hi everyone! This is my first time posting to the feedback forum. Here are some narration scripts from the library I’ve recorded. I’m still getting familiar with Audacity, so if you have any pointers/tips on how I could’ve edited better, I’m all ears! Thanks!

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    • #65918
      Oktober10
      Participant

      You’ve got great tone. I liked your expressive first read and could hear the smile in your voice. Nice job.

    • #65868
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      In the first recording it sounded like you were too far away from the microphone, with a minor hum. The 2nd recording was louder. The good news is that I was able to hear you better. The bad news was that I heard a louder hum in the background. I would speak with an engineer about Audacity recordings and work on building your home studio,
      -hope this was helpful

  • #65858
    Oktober10
    Participant

    Hi everyone, this is my first go at the Feedback Forum! Thanks for your, um, feedback. 😀

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  • #65855
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    Here’s another script. This is probably the longest script I’ve done so I had to record paragraph by paragraph. Is my tone consistent throughout? Does my editing still allow the script to flow from beginning to end? How about the recording setup, is it still working well? Any help is appreciated.

    Weelearn
    Most of us know there are ways we can improve… to be healthier… happier… more effective… but knowing how to improve is a different matter. Without guidance, we often simply stay the same.
    Welcome to Weelearn – a platform where well-known experts and authors can help you get stronger in all areas of your life. Using the Weelearn video library, you can protect your body, strengthen your mind and spirit, become a more positive influence in your relationships, pursue success more confidently at work, and so much more.
    Our experts are taken from fields of hard science, like psychology, but also areas of broader wisdom, like spirituality. And with videos broken up into digestible parts, and supplemented by exercises and games, the next step to your best self is truly only a few clicks away.
    Don’t be stuck in life, love, work – or anything! Try Weelearn for yourself today.
    Weelearn – learning through watching.

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    • #65869
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      :Your tone was constant and the same throughout. As for your setup, there’s a humming sound that I’m hearing when you aren’t speaking. Good job, overall. Since this sounds more like a commercial advertisement, you may want to try performing it again with more enthusiasm in your voice: i.e. when you say “Don’t be stuck in life, love, work – or anything! Try Weelearn for yourself today.
      Weelearn – learning through watching”, it sounds like whoever wrote the script is happy about what they are advertising.
      hope this was helpful

  • #65851
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    I did this script some months ago and I wanted to try it again. How was my tone, pitch, tempo and recording setup? Also There are two recordings and I’d appreciate feedback on which sounded better. #1 was constructed of the script’s multiple phrases that I did different takes of, while #2 was one careful take of the whole script in one go. Thanks for the feedback.

    JC Penney 6
    Your brain has 2 sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more. Save more. Only at JC Penney.

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  • #65832
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Good read, your matches material quite well, diction and clearness is good too. I like the pacing as well. It is somewhat conversational, but stills sounds like your are reading more than just speaking. Overall good work, keep it up! Hope this helps.

    • #65872
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      I agree with Robert, you sound like you are reading it, as opposed to performing. Also, great job with the tone and pacing etc. The second performance was the better of the two that you submitted; clearer, more concise, and not as much background noise.

  • #65818
    JohnFinn
    Participant

    Hey peeps, a few more Edge practice scripts for feedback. Looking for feedback on tone- did it match the genre and what about pace? Thanks!

    1. A Brief History of Time- Expanded
    2. Anne E Casey Foundation
    3. Podium 60

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    • #65857
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      My comments on each performance are numbered accordingly:
      1. You’re on the right track. You’ve got a great voice and your read had fitting pitch and tempo for the script. The serious tone you adopted was good too although it sounds more like you’re reading than speaking. Next time, try to imagine you’re speaking to someone in front of you or maybe beside.
      2. You’re pitch and tempo are still good, though I think the pauses were too long. The tone needs work, you don’t sound particularly interested in or even concerned with the Anne E Casey foundation.
      3. You still don’t sound too interested, but halfway you seem to pick up the tone well. Your tempo and pitch are still really good, but the list components wound up rather bland. You should work on making each part of the list uniqe in some way so the listeners won’t get bored.

      I think your tone is spot on for narration, but could suit plenty of commercials too. Just remember to make your reads sound conversational.

      • #65887
        JohnFinn
        Participant

        Tim- thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it!

  • #65806
    carynbell
    Participant

    Hey all!

    Just an amateur trying to get in some practice and figure out my niches! Feedback is always appreciated! (The file got posted twice by accident).

    WORDS. THEY CAN DO ANYTHING.
    THEY CAN CALL IN A DOG AT NIGHT.
    THEY CAN BRING COMFORT TO AN OLD FRIEND.
    THEY CAN SAY HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO A GIRL WHOSE BALLOONS ARE SLOWLY SINKING.

    BUT SOMETIMES, WORDS CAN GET YOU INTO TROUBLE.

    LIKE THE HUMAN RIGHTS ACTIVIST WHO WAS KIDNAPPED FOR STANDING UP TO GOVERNMENT CORRUPTION.
    OR THE JOURNALIST SENTENCED TO 10 YEARS IN PRISON FOR SENDING AN EMAIL.
    OR THE 1000S OF MEN AND WOMEN WHO ARE ARRESTED AND TORTURED, JUST FOR DEMANDING A FAIR ELECTION.

    NOW, WE NEED YOUR WORDS,
    TO DEMAND JUSTICE, TO TAKE A STAND, AND TO OFFER HOPE TO PEOPLE AROUND THE WORLD, WHO ARE SILENCED FOR SIMPLY SPEAKING THEIR MINDS.

    WRITE A LETTER OR SPEAK OUT TODAY.
    YOUR WORDS CAN LEAD TO THEIR FREEDOM.

    WORDS. THEY CAN DO ANYTHING.

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    • #65827
      Shmuel
      Participant

      Pleasant voice, important subject matter (just my opinion, though). I would put a bit more emotion in the end. There is quite a bit of an echo in the recording. Sounds like the space does not have enough sound abatement, not sure.

    • #65816
      adriannagregory11
      Participant

      WOW this is incredible. I love love love your tone, and can hear in your voice the emotion and passion building with each example. Only suggestion, for the final phrase of “Words, they can do anything”–maybe draw this out, and stress/elongate certain parts to get the final point across. Your voice is awesome! Also an amateur, so I feel ya 🙂

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