[David Goldberg]

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[RonBroach]

Hi everyone! This is my first post here, so I’m hoping y’all can help me polish what I’ve started. I just had my first lesson with a vocal coach and he suggested I post here for feedback. I look forward to hearing from you.

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[ShellyMadison]

You’ve chosen quite the challenging read vocabulary wise! Your pace is great for this and your tone gives it the gravitas of a professor. Your enunciation, although important, especially for a sample with so much crucial vernacular, is making you sound stilted and robot like. Words like “summarize” and “development”, you’re hitting each of the syllables very hard and often with the same weight, so the word is very clear but unnatural. Seems like a great place to start to familiarize yourself with it, then slowly work in a more conversational and natural affect as you get more comfortable with the material.

[LindsayCampbell]

Hello friends!
Been a while since I’ve posted. Just beginning Commercial coaching.
Open to any feedback- thanks in advance!

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[RBenesVO]

Welcome back. I can hear the training in your read and editing. I listened to the Arby’s and I liked it a lot. I’ll nitpick that Arby’s at the end felt like an afterthought as it was quick and soft. Maybe that’s because I’m envisioning the whole “ARBY’s, WE HAVE THE MEATS!” in my head lol

[Silver Wit]

I enjoyed your Tilex read, but I feel like you could’ve added a bit more annoyance or disgust in the beginning. The mildew is GROSS and I think a little emphasis on that would help.

[ShellyMadison]

I listened to the first two. I love how bright your tone is. For the Arby’s read, only thing that stood out was “high”. Sounded like a southern lilt crept into it that wouldn’t necessarily be inappropriate for the ad, but contrasted with the rest of your read.

For the Beringer ad, your pace and lower affect are lovely. I can picture the overlay of red wine being poured into a glass. I’d suggest giving more attention to the first time you say “beringer”. It gets lost in the rest of the sentence and being the brand name, and especially being the first time it’s mentioned, it should stand out more

[twstark]

Hi gang – couple new reads from me in the commercial genre. Thanks!

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[Silver Wit]

No notes I can think of. Voice very warm with a dash of wisdom. I could feel the emotion from you in both of your reads.

[RBenesVO]

Great and unique voice. You can find plenty of need for that gift I’m sure. I listened to Listerine and liked that read especially where you say “See!, you can handle it”. That was where the emotion came out in the read for me.

[RCampos]

Hi Everyone,
Would love your feedback on my pace and tone in this first VO, recorded on my cell phone.

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[raven808]

Nice touch adding music and your voice is very well suited for this genre! I felt like you could put a little more emotion or change your intonation for some of the words to keep the engagement (i.e.”he wasn’t fond of rules or having respect for the status quo”).

[RCampos]

Thanks so much for the helpful notes! I’ll work on the emotion / engagement. Appreciate your feedback.

[Kamasch]

Beginner here – after one coaching session, I’ve been focusing on sounding conversational and connected; will accept any sort of feedback. I’m aware there’s some background noise/subpar audio, but this is just practice for now! Thanks!

[Kamasch]

replying on my own thread since it wouldn’t let me edit – had some upload issues

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[Silver Wit]

I could really feel the emotion for your Betterhelp read. though I think you should speak a little louder on your Pillsbury read or get a little closer to your mic.

[RCampos]

I think you are spot on in the delivery for Betterhelp. You capture the tone and the seriousness of the issue. You sound very conversational in all the above. I do think Pillsbury could be a touch more upbeat.

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hi everyone! I’m looking for feedback on this reading please. It’s a spot about a Bob Ross documentary. How can you say two words like “Bob Ross” together without sounding choppy? How does the rest sound? Do you think I hit the right words? Thank you for any feedback you all can provide. Also, home studio not set up yet please don’t comment on production quality

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[RonBroach]

I didn’t notice “Bob Ross” sounding choppy. I think you did great with the pronunciation. There were a couple of places where I felt like I was hanging – waiting for the next word – perhaps the script had a comma, but the actual conversation wouldn’t have had that much of a pause. However, this is subjective to my preference and someone else may like the time spacing. The only other thing that caught my attention is some harsh high frequencies, especially on s consonants.

[RCampos]

I enjoy this read and you grabbed my interest in someone I knew nothing about!

[TimberTykes]

Good Evening, everyone!

Working on a good night’s practice, per my instructor. My main focus lies on diction and glottal stops, with words ending in ‘-st,’ ‘-ts,’ ‘xt,’ etc., like ‘rest.’

Other than that, I’m also looking to make sure I’ve given the brand in question enough emphasis, and that I keep an overall constant energy, with a beginning/middle/end.

Any feedback and criticisms of any kind is much appreciated. Thank you for your time.

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[madtrammell]

Great job! My only advice would be to slow your pace just a tad bit, even though its a shorter read try to take your time with it

[Donnamichelle444]

that sounds like some good advice – thanks for sharing

[Donnamichelle444]

I’m Trying to get my diction together – I would also appreciate some thoughts on my timing. if I focus on either too much the other gets lost in the thoughts.

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[latyesemca]

I definitely got a vacation vibe from this take! I will say, the pacing could be bumped up maybe a half speed but that feel is VERY MUCH THERE. Like Artist7 said, the ending of some words did drop off so just a little practice on that would help make this read. Overall, great job!

[Artist7]

Donnamichelle444 Overall, your read sounded good. Two items to note: In a couple of places (specifically the words “need” and “included”), the “d” sound is dropped from the word endings. You might also want to pick up the pace slightly.

[Donnamichelle444]

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Artist7 I assure you I could not detect a diction problem at all. That’s my issue – sounds to me that your hard work is paying off!

[Artist7]

Thanks for the positive feedback Donnamichelle444-I really appreciate it!

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