[David Goldberg]

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[RCampos]

Hi Everybody!
I would really appreciate your feedback on this read. I’m working on a conversational read while still honoring the “smooth coolness” of a jazz radio station.

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[cbehrens]

I think your overall read aligns with a conversational feeling; I appreciate your inflection on the word “grooviest”! One thing just to keep in mind may be to play with saying repetitive words like “cool” in different ways, offering more variation. Great job!

[Silver Wit]

You’ve certainly got the voice for “cool jazz.” Reminds me of the hosts of some jazz stations in New York.

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for the feedback!
All the best,
R

[Tates-VO]

It sounds very cool nice tone in the voice.

[Declan Waters]

I think your voice and the tone you chose matches the script very well. One critique – It sounds to me as if you end most sentences the same way. Shooting for differentiation particularly at the end of your sentences would help to pace the read and keep listeners engaged. I hope you find this helpful

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for your note about how I end sentences. I’ll pay more attention to that. All the best!

[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 4)

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[Declan Waters]

I really like how well you differentiate between the two attitudes that you’re going for. I think blending the two moods to some extent would make for a very convincing read. At first defeated by the pain, but then convicted and confident about the solution that Excedrin provides. Well done

[RCampos]

Hi Silver Wit,
I like what you’re doing in version 2, but overall, I prefer version 1 because it’s cleaner and clearer. Version 2 gives me a sense that you’re acting out the headache, and this thought distracts me a bit from your words. I like how you vary the intonation on: throbbing, tension and pain – but I think a more upbeat ending might help. I would appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!

[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 3)

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[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound. (part 2)

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[Silver Wit]

Some audio for my homework. experimenting with different attitudes. Let me know how they sound.

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[Ymin33]

Hi everyone it’s nice to meet you! I’d appreciate some feedback regarding pacing and whether these commercial samples are engaging. Don’t have a home recording studio yet, working on the technical aspects. Thank you

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[Ymin33]

Going to try attaching the other one again

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[RCampos]

Very nice read of peas and carrots. It sounds like you felt it and I especially like the bit of magic you create at the end with “let your adventure begin.” Just a few minor critiques. You fade a bit at the end and I think instead you should emphasize the last words. The words “games” and “activities” run together for me. I think you could make a tiny pause in between them and also differentiate how they sound. Finally – you emphasize “your” and I don’t think you need to. I think that rhythmically it would sound better to put the emphasis on “account.” I would much appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thanks!

[Silver Wit]

I like your peas and carrots read. Had a very nurturing quality that really came across

[cbehrens]

Hello! I’m working on a more conversational read, so any feedback is welcome. Thanks! Courtney

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[Hazaro]

I loved this read Courtney. It was clear, sweet, engaging and playful.

[RCampos]

I like the attitude in this read a lot – it gets my attention. Your clarity and diction is great, but there are a few little spots I’d like to point out. The “x” in complex and the “ss” in boss get a little lost. Maybe your tone is dropping here at the end of the phrase? The only other note I have is that Burts Bees should probably get a bit more oomph, since they’re paying for the spot. I would much appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!

[Silver Wit]

You’re clearly having fun with the material. great pacing too

[LindsayLaVelle]

Hey community! I’m trying to narrow down some texts for my demo. Any feedback is appreciated. These were not recorded with professional equipment, so I realize the quality isn’t up to standard.

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[Hazaro]

My apologies as I couldn’t decipher if Toddle 1 and 2 was the same text or not but all of these sounded good to me and very appropriate for your voice. i think you posted them before and could hear the improvement. Great job!

[joekett]

Hello – I’d appreciate reviews and comments on these items and how the home studio comes across. No need to be gentle. One is a Narration and two are commercials. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank You.

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[RCampos]

Hey Joekett,
Just listened to Merceded-C class. I really like your full voice for this ad. It matches the subject very nicely. Here are just a few minor notes:
1. I hear you differentiating these features: “blue tooth,” “sirius satellite radio” and “surround sound system”. But – I think you could embellish even more. It’s like this car is designed to go to the moon.
2. I think when you finish saying “surround sound system,” you should still have a question mark in your tone (you go down in tone on “system”, so it sounds more declarative than inquisitive).
3. You do a similar thing on “speeds” – you abandon the questioning tone, which is part of what is driving this VO
I really like your ending line. You deliver that so nicely, with just a hint of humor. Makes me want a Benz.
I would very much appreciate your comments on my Costa Rica VO, posted 10-27 at 7:57, or my Cool Jazz VO, posted on 10-25.
Thanks very much and all the best,
R

[LindsayLaVelle]

I’d love some feedback on this travelogue copy for my narration demo. Thanks!

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[Hazaro]

Lovely read Lindsay. And well suited for you!

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