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Still practicing clear and alternate attitude choices in my commercial reads. Did 3 for this first one as the copy was short enough to push myself. Feedback appreciated.
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In Nike 1 you’re evidently “pushing” for a certain performance. Think of a situation that gives you the attitude you want(think of the face of the person you’re speaking to in that situation). Then, just let it go, be in the moment with the person you’re talking to. It helps me to imagine their reactions to what i’m saying, it’s like multitasking to imagine a person and read the script so it takes practice to do it.
You were pushing less in Nike 2. You uptick the phrases “keep your feet planted firmly on the ground.” and “presses against you” as if you’re asking a question and that hinders the confident and assuring tone of the message in the copy.
Nike 3 was the best of all three with the least pushing and uptick that weakens the confident sound. “It’s Nike” could be said with more confidence. It sounded to me like you were pleading to the audience to buy Nike in the phrase “It’s Nike.” So relax and be confident in what you’re saying.
Nike 1 attitude seems to be on a mission and has a passion about the topic. Nike 2 is more caring in tone. Nike 3 is most confident in what is being said. Though Nike 1 and 3 seem more different in the beginning of their audios but don’t seem that different in tone when you listen to both of them in full. Nike 2 stands out as most different in tone from the other two.
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Hi everyone!
I’m practicing colouring my reads with various believable attitudes. I would love feedback on the believability of my attitude. Let me know if you sense a different attitude than what I intended. I would also appreciate any technique advice, like on the flow of the read, glottal stops, and pauses. Thanks in advance!
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I like this one – I read it a while back. Good work, no matter the inflection, getting your mouth around all of it.
Definite differences in what’s coming across. I would say you could feel the enthusiasm in #3, but you could probably crank it up a bit more – might be easier with a different subject, but, y’know. As to detached, I would call it more “sleepy.” It sounds as though you’re reading it as though bored, not as though you’re narrating something that just happens to be dry.
Your voice is very approachable. I bet, with a different script – one with acting and required emotion – you’d REALLY shine. As for taking this one on as a control – great idea.
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Hello,
I’ve attached two reads in advance of my next session. I’d appreciate any feedback on the reads themselves. Many thanks in advance!
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The Beringer read is believable(doesn’t sound like you’re reading) and confident. It’s great that your attitude shifts to be more warm when mentioning that “everything we’ve learned is yours to enjoy, every time you pour a glass of our wine.” because more warmth fits what’s being said there. I advice practicing the script with other attitudes as this one was very serious. Try more warm attitudes for example, like thankful, Playful, reminiscent.
The serious attitude of the Wachovia read fits, though it’s always helpful to practice with other attitudes than the obvious. Try to incorporate more flow from word-to-word, in Wachovia the words are very blocked off from each other so that it sounds a little choppy.
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Happy November to all! Please feel free to review and critique these two recordings. All feedback is very much appreciated by this novice 🙂
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Nice read on Jack the Ripper, very engaging and kept my attention also your flow is good
Be careful with over exaggerating your words.Financial Advise-The pace is slow and should be a little faster, your pausing frequently causes the read to be choppy try reading this script the way you did at the beginning of Jack the Ripper. Also, be aware of glottal stops as you had quite a few in this read, be mindful also of Ta which should be Too.
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Nice read on Jack the Ripper, very engaging and kept my attention also your flow is good
Be careful with over exaggerating your words.Financial Advise-The pace is slow and should be a little faster, your pausing frequently causes the read to be choppy try reading this script the way you did at the beginning of Jack the Ripper. Also, be aware of glottal stops as you had quite a few in this read, be mindful also of Ta which should be Too.
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Hi Tates. I like how you chose a tone with each one and the first 2 were relatively easy to follow but be mindful of keeping the pace and not speeding up too much.
The meditation was clearer throughout – rushing just a bit at the end. Felt you could have been more relaxed with it if the listener is to do the same. Really liked your energy in the Doc on Jazz but the pacing got too fast as you rushed words in the beginning and towards the end of sentences that got lost.
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Hello everyone, hope you are having a great start to the week! I have another narration practice read that I would very much appreciate any feedback on. Thank you in advance and Happy Halloween!
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