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    Edge Studio
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    The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

    Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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  • #66238
    TimDKietzman
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    Hey everyone, I’ve done some more recording. This was the first script I ever uploaded and I wanted to do it again with my new setup. I appreciate any feedback on my performance, but in particular do you think it sounds consistent from beginning to end? How about my recording setup? Thanks.

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  • #66224
    ryanp.bogie
    Participant

    Hey everyone. Here are some recordings for my homework. Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

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    • #66237
      Christy Spadafore
      Participant

      Hi Ryan! I really like the tone and texture of your voice. Of these three readings, Wendy’s was my favorite. I felt like there was more variety, and I could really hear the excitement! I think in the Gameboy script there’s a nice opportunity for some contrast between the first two lines, which could grab the listener’s interest. Nice work!

      • #66242
        TimDKietzman
        Participant

        Well, I have to say Ryan you have a special voice that I’m sure many would love to hear in commercials. You have a clear strike zone with sarcasm, humor, and excitement. The way you enunciated the words in all three scripts was good, however I think your tempo sounded very forced and choppy. This in turn makes the “tone” sound inconsistent throughout. A good read has to sound as if your speaking to someone and trying to woo them. Listeners of this I feel would more likely be eyeing the exit sign… My advice, listen to actual commercials and when reading, pretend your saying the words to someone in person. Hope this helps.

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  • #66216
    danvasq4030
    Participant

    Hey Everyone! Seems like a lot of people are also putting up their VO HW too and Im no exception! Any and all feed back is appreciated!

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    • #66245
      TimDKietzman
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      Hey man, I love your voice and I’m do like the tempo and pitch of your performance. The tone you adopted though sounds the same in each script. I think only the first script sounds good with that. Consider your audience and let that determine what type of performance you should adopt. Also, I distinctly heard you pausing midsentence and it sounded like you were struggling to pronounce certain words like “ancient” and “their.” You must leave pausing for periods, commas, question marks etc. I hope this helps.

  • #66212
    aylinsings
    Participant

    Hello-

    My commercial homework for the week. I am working on authenticity and also not going into my vocal fry too much. I look forward to any feedback!
    Thanks!

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    • #66246
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      Your performance is magnificent! You adopted a great tone and it was consistent throughout the entirety of each script. The words you hit were spot on and I love the pace of your tempo. Only things I noticed were your pausing in the middle of a sentence. Every coach will tell you to leave pauses for full stops and commas. Also, your recording sounds a little echoey so I would work on modifying your setup. Keep up the good work!

  • #66208
    JasonCawley
    Participant

    Hey, any feedback is appreciated. Thank you

    “We go about our daily lives understanding almost nothing of the world. We give little thought to the machinery that generates the sunlight that makes life possible, to the gravity that glues us to an Earth that would otherwise send us spinning off into space, or to the atoms of which we are made and on whose stability we fundamentally depend. Except for children (who don’t know enough not to ask the important questions), few of us spend much time wondering why nature is the way it is; where the cosmos came from, or whether it is always here; if time will one day flow backward and effects precede causes; or whether there are ultimate limits to what humans can know.”

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    • #66250
      TimDKietzman
      Participant

      You did great Jason! You had a consistent tone, you hit all the right words, and the tempo was fitting. Only thing I would suggest is you sounded like you were trying to finish the script too quickly and it made you say the words wrong. Other than that, well done.

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  • #66189
    mara_sherman
    Participant

    Hello everyone! Here are some Narration recordings I did for homework. Thank you in advance for your feedback!

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    • #66266

      Hi Mara, I really liked the Delta/Tesla recordings as well, both natural and professional! Perhaps the diabetes one could have more inflection to make it more conversational?

    • #66257
      Tommy Fahrner
      Participant

      You have a natural, pleasant and welcoming tone to your voice that cuts through. You are definitely in control of your instrument and “in the pocket” for all 3 clips.

    • #66203
      ritadebur
      Participant

      Hi Mara – Your voice is absolutely suited to the Delta and Tesla recordings – they sounded completely professional – loved them!
      I think the diabetes one was also good but I think it could be more conversational?

  • #66167
    edixon310
    Participant

    Getting back to recording. I would appreciate some feedback.

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    • #66215
      aylinsings
      Participant

      Hello!

      Great job on these!

      With the first one, I enjoyed the pacing. I do think you can go even deeper into the emotion. For example the words “please, please!” I didn’t necessarily believe you were actually begging. But the read is totally in the right direction.

      For the second, I think you can speed up the pacing just slightly. Watch the micro pauses between “dogs” and “would walk themselves” and “algebra” and “would really come in handy.” Aside from that, I think it is a solid read!

      Cheers

      • #66228
        edixon310
        Participant

        That’s very helpful, thank you. I really appreciate it.

  • #66164
    Don Sack
    Participant

    Yet one more for “home work”!

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    • #66207
      JasonCawley
      Participant

      Hey Don,

      The pacing is great on this one, your voice is very suited for this type of read. A good resonance to set the tone as warm and welcoming.

      • #66264
        Don Sack
        Participant

        Thanks Jason, so appreciate the feedback. This was my pick of three I did (I title and save everything).
        Don

    • #66181
      John Trape
      Participant

      Hi Don,

      I think all three of your scripts sound so professional. I was concentrating on pitch, pace, and tone and simply have nothing to offer other than praise.

      Regards,

      John

      • #66263
        Don Sack
        Participant

        Thanks so much John! We shall see what Art has to say. LOL, it took a a bunch of takes until I realized I was my own worst critic and to heck with it, just submit the d**n things!
        Don

  • #66161
    Don Sack
    Participant

    Bil-Bo!
    Ha! You’ve got to be a “ringer”! Those two productions were great!!

  • #66159
    nettipo1
    Participant

    Thank you for any feedback you can provide!

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    • #66187
      alyssamb
      Participant

      Hello, I really love your voice. I felt captivated by the tone of your voice and the pitch. I have nothing but positive things to say about your VO!

      • #66220
        nettipo1
        Participant

        Thank you so much for your feedback, I appreciate it!

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