[David Goldberg]

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[M]

Hello. Considering options for a narration reel (down the road a piece) and this one is a possibility. Any feedback/fresh ideas are welcome! no need to sugar coat! thanks people!

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[T Hayes]

I thought this sounded very good! I liked your tone and the pace was appropriate. My one suggestion for improvement is the introduction sounded a little choppy and a tad bit too slow.

[M]

I completely agree! Thanks so much!

[M]

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[Provocaleric]

Mary, thank you I appreciate your comments

[Provocaleric]

Hello forum of truth!
Please take a listen and offer a little of your insight and I will be happy to read yours and give feedback plus on 6 other people thank you. signed keeping it moving. The read is a well known one from the Edge script library. Cosmos

Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows; A world positively rippling with life. From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.

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[BJ]

Hi Provocaleric,

I realize you posted several weeks ago, but since you took the time to offer me feedback, I thought the least I could do would be to return the favor.

You really bring this copy to life with your warm voice, pitch variety and delivery. If this is to be a video documentary narration, you’d likely want to slow down a bit for the visuals. Doing so will also allow you to further “play up” your open and close.

Looking forward to your next post,

BJ

[M]

Also, posting the content was really helpful! thanks

[M]

Hi! What a soothing, pleasant voice; it must sound entrancing in a meditation read. My initial response is to remove the punctuation and give it a read without the pauses – maybe just see what it sounds like when you are not guided by assigned commas and stops that slow down the flow of your lovely pitch and delivery.

[ajcarste]

Hi there,
I have three new recordings. I am hoping to receive feedback to see if these are conversational.

Thank you,
Andrew

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[M]

Hello Andrew! Lovely tone in all 3. Your voice us soothing and articulate. I am hearing a similar rising intonation at the beginning (“Design,” “At the close,” “sustainable”), and a similar falling intonation at the end (“stagnant” “workshop” “food”) in all 3. Maybe fiddle with changing the inflections and even the pace within each selection to mix it up a bit and keep the listener engaged. “Authentic” although accurately articulated, loses the conversational feel, but nice job – your delivery is solid.

[Steve Z-A]

Hi folks. I am enjoying hearing all of your work and would appreciate any feedback on these few commercial reads from the library. Done on a phone so I know the recording quality is not great, but comments in any other direction would be great! Thanks!

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[Steven]

Hi, Steve.
I think a little more energy and inflection would really elevate the delivery on Honey Bunches. Try smiling through the copy, and see how that sounds.
On Spotify, the pacing of the syllables in the last bit, “…or anyone else, who tries to interrupt your music”, was more lilting than the rest of the read. The sudden shift made it sound a little out of place. Try matching the pieces of that last portion, one way or the other, with the parts proceeding.
Your performance on Guild Guitars was nice! I really liked your tone on that one.
All-in-all, great work!

[M]

So sorry for the earlier 2 replies which were attached to the wrong participant; however you did a great job, Steve with y our 3 reads. Consider using a few key words as instruction on how to deliver (e.g. “It’s AMAZING!” “FINALLY!” and “crunchy” – as if it were an onomatopoeia). I find that moving around and gesturing, if you’re not already, helps me with a more emotional delivery which I don’t normally do when stationary. just a few thoughts! great job. so much to work with there!

[M]

Also, posting the content was really helpful! thanks

[M]

Hi! What a soothing, pleasant voice; it must sound entrancing in a meditation read. My initial response is to remove the punctuation and give it a read without the pauses – maybe just see what it sounds like when you are not guided by assigned commas and stops that slow down the flow of your lovely pitch and delivery.

[ajcarste]

Hi Steve,

I liked how you said “finally” in the Honey Bunches of Oats reading.
I think the “I didn’t think so” had a good attitude to it in the Spotify reading.
“The people you shared your music with” sounded authentic in the last reading.

I hope these help,
Andrew

[Steve Z-A]

Thanks so much. Very helpful.

[Artist7]

Hello, everyone! I’d really appreciate some feedback on these two reads! As always, thanks so much!!

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[M]

Hello! You have such a unique voice with a youthful quality. Im hearing in both an unnatural emphasis on several “ands” – maybe soften that to make it less forced.great job on the reads.

[Steve Z-A]

I liked both of these reads. You have good clarity and pace and I thought you did a good job emphasizing key words throughout both.

[marySQ]

Hi, is it possible to create a new topic if you’re new?

[BJ]

Hi Mary – You’ve likely done what I just did – poked around but can’t find a way to do so. Since all the topics are tied to David’s name, it looks like reaching out to an Edge staff member may be the best way to go. BJ

[Provocaleric]

Hello Forum,
I hope everyone here is doing there best and working towards their goals of being a fabulous voice actor! I submitted this to the contest this month, any thoughts from folks in here will be very appreciated! Sketchers Fitness AppWelcome to Walk Away the Pounds. I’m <your first name> and I’ll be your audio guide.

I’m so glad you’re walking with me today. You know, this one mile walk is the perfect way to get started and be introduced to what this walking system is all about. It’s also a nice short workout for you.

Now, are you ready? Let’s walk! The warmup is very gentle and it really does prepare for the brisk walking that’s coming later on.

First of all, I’d like to review the four basic steps in our walk system.

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[M]

Great read! Only comment is that I you transposed two words “later” and “coming” – but sounds great!

[Steve Z-A]

I liked your tone and enthusiasm in this. The pace is good and excellent clarity. My only thought was that in a couple of spots I thought you inflected up with your voice, where I expected more of a downward choice. Good work.

[jmacdotorg]

Hello friends,

The time has come for my fourth and final record-two-clips-and-upload-em assignment from my Narration course. You have all been a kind and helpful audience!

This time I chose an intro from another corporate video, and an excerpt from a brief Jerry Seinfeld biography. As always, I would be thrilled to hear any critique.

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[M]

clearly you have a handle on the content and several techniques! for me, your voice is suited well for IDI-type reads. There was nothing wrong with the other, but your business-like tone, articulation and quality worked best for me in the IDI clip. nice work!

[ajcarste]

Hi Jmacdotorg,

I thought the distributors reading had a good tone to it. It was a little fast for me, but I may be wrong with that perspective. It might be good to go fast. I am not sure.
I liked how relaxed, yet emphasized the poem reading was.

I hope these help,
Andrew

[Thomas_D]

Hi Everyone,

I’m working on my Commercial reads and would love any and all feedback! Thank you!

Both scripts below are from the EDGE library

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[M]

My favorite line “Nike Dunk High Up” with your low register and falling intonation – irony and subtle humor at its best. I would slow down both reads to accentuate and give credit to your voice and also give you time to articulate beginnings and ends of words. that was a pleasure to hear.

[Steve Z-A]

Nice commercial reads. Good pace and enunciation.

[jmacdotorg]

(Oops, this wasn’t supposed to be a threaded reply. And I don’t know how to delete posts. Sorry!!)

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