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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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I need some feedback before another coaching session, specifically about Micropauses and Glottal Stops, as well as not reading too fast. Just need to work that stuff out. Thanks!
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He there. I definitely don’t think these are too fast. If that’s been a problem in the past, you’ve improved! Micropauses help bring you to more conversational speed, and I think that’s best shown in the A1 read. Also think A1 is the best read overall: most conversational and natural, and you keep up the energy through the last line. On special K and Atlanta Bread, the last line sorta trails off.
Not hearing any glottal stops, but I never really developed an ear for them in US English :-/ I hear them in British English all the time (they’re very obvious), but if you’ve had issues in the past I’d never know it.
Nice reads all around!
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Got two reads of the same script. Wondering about general thoughts and which you like more. Trying to be conversational and clear.
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Hi! I’d like to get feedback on these commercial voice over reads. Is it conversational and engaging? How is the pace and tone? Thanks in advance!
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Hi Cecelia,
I agree with Jade that silencing the background noise would be helpful and will help not take away from your read. Outside of that, who is your audience/who are you talking to? I’ve found that having a person/people in mind helps make the read more conversational and less like reading a script. Hope that’s helpful!
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Hi Cecelia,
You may not be looking for technical feedback, but it would be beneficial to silence the background noise (maybe it’s a fan or heater?), so we can all hear your lovely voice a bit more clearly.
Other things I noticed, be sure to enunciate the sounds at the end of words, like the “d” on “send,” even if gently. Your “p” words seemed a bit overenunciated at the top, with lots of hard popping on the P’s. A pop filter may help, but I think it could be improved with small adjustments to your lips when mouthing them.Hope this is helpful!
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I’d appreciate any feedback.
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I appreciate any feedback.
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Liked it. Thought it was a nice slow, fairly even, sincere and natural read. There was one little segment where you said “If you can’t” which got a bit jammed together losing some intelligibility. At some point, you’ll likely need to upgrade your recording gear but the read is more important for me. Nice vocal tone as well.
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There is a lot to like about this audio. You can do some amazing things with your voice, and I think this could make for a fabulous commercial demo!
I think there is room for improvement on the second script of your diction of the client name, i.e. Amstel Light. It doesn’t come through as entirely clear.
Also, my understanding of commercial demos is that they tend to be short, usually about a minute long. So this audio in its entirety would be considered long for such a demo. You might consider pairing it down a bit.
Otherwise, awesome!
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