[David Goldberg]

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[Talia Hankin]

Hello! Attached below are two narration reads (both corp. explainer). I would appreciate any and all feedback you may have. Thank you!

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[Erik B]

Hi everybody, here is a commercial practice read. I would appreciate any feedback in regards to technique and sound quality. Thank you.

Waterpik

If you floss you know what a two-handed tug of war feels like. Which is why we at Waterpik are introducing the Flosser. At a speed of 10,000 gentle strokes per minute, its nylon tip effectively removes plaque above and below the gumline. Making it a fast, easy and more convenient way to keep gums their healthiest, and teeth their cleanest. With no strings attached.

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[Earthbul]

I like your take on this although I feel your delivery is a tad too harsh.
I also hear a bit of mouth noise. All that being said I really like the sound of your voice.
Look forward to hearing a bit more from you.

[odellodim]

Hi All. Here are reads from 3 different scripts. I welcome and appreciate any feedback you are able to offer. Thank you.

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[e4gaa]

Hi, very first foray into the VO world. Any feedback on this bank internet audio piece would be appreciated
Thanks

Do you use your debit or credit card to pay for things online?
We’re making some changes to protect you from fraud.
In line with Payment Services regulations, in the next few weeks, you may be asked to confirm your online card payments more often.
(Just so we know it’s you…)

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[Erik B]

Hi e4gaa, the authoritative tone in your voice is solid, but perhaps add a smile in the last line. Just because the tone for a read is authoritative, it doesn’t mean it cannot be friendly at certain sections. Also the pacing of your read was very good. Good job.

[Logan DFD]

I need some feedback before another coaching session, specifically about Micropauses and Glottal Stops, as well as not reading too fast. Just need to work that stuff out. Thanks!

Atlanta Bread Company

When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think ‘bread’.
Think of an entire breakfast menu – fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees.
Think of our Cafe with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads.
And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting!
Atlanta Bread Company – more than just bread.

A1 Steak Sauce

With steak, you want to make every bite count.
That’s why we use A-1 Steak Sauce.
A-1 brings out every single bite of steak, or even hamburger.
Mmmmm, delicious.
For me, there’s only one steak sauce, A-1.
Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.

Special K Red Berries

Putting strawberries in cereal wasn’t our idea.
Putting them in the box was.
With slices of real strawberries and crunchy sweet flakes, looking good never tasted so good.
Special K Red Berries.

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[Tim Kraft]

He there. I definitely don’t think these are too fast. If that’s been a problem in the past, you’ve improved! Micropauses help bring you to more conversational speed, and I think that’s best shown in the A1 read. Also think A1 is the best read overall: most conversational and natural, and you keep up the energy through the last line. On special K and Atlanta Bread, the last line sorta trails off.

Not hearing any glottal stops, but I never really developed an ear for them in US English :-/ I hear them in British English all the time (they’re very obvious), but if you’ve had issues in the past I’d never know it.

Nice reads all around!

[Jhaman]

Got two reads of the same script. Wondering about general thoughts and which you like more. Trying to be conversational and clear.

Beavers Voice Over Script: “The beavers build their lodge out of intertangled twigs and sticks; as freezing weather nears, they plaster their lodge with mud, making a concrete layer that no predator can break through. During the early nineteenth century, the beavers pelt was the single most valuable commodity; the pelt was used for robes, coats, clothing trims, and top hats.”

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[Earthbul]

I enjoyed the 2nd read. Flowed much more smoothly. Maybe a little over enunciated in some spots but definitely conversational.

[SuperLuke]

Toyota Corolla Hatchback
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With sporty styling, intuitive tech and responsive handling, the 2023 Corolla Hatchback is ready to hit the road running.
The 2023 Corolla Hatchback. From Toyota. Starting at $23,005.

Working on Commercials at the moment. Please feel free to listen and give me your feedback

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[billmull]

Hello Folks!

I welcome any feedback.

Note that one line of the “partnership” script reads “Accessory Dwelling Units (ADUs)”. So ADUs is not a separate item in the list but is simply the acronym for “Accessory Dwelling Units” so I tried to read it with same style and pitch.

Thanks

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[darleneharris]

Hi! I’d like to get feedback on these commercial voice over reads. Is it conversational and engaging? How is the pace and tone? Thanks in advance!

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[SuperLuke]

The Spotify commercial feels like you are being too informal/ giving information. As a listener, I didn’t feel engaged. Maybe practice the copy by pretending to talk with your best friend and see how it sounds.

[Cecilia Monaghan]

I am new to this Forum and VO. So this is a nice read to me.

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[darleneharris]

Hi Cecelia,

I agree with Jade that silencing the background noise would be helpful and will help not take away from your read. Outside of that, who is your audience/who are you talking to? I’ve found that having a person/people in mind helps make the read more conversational and less like reading a script. Hope that’s helpful!

[jadethevo]

Hi Cecelia,

You may not be looking for technical feedback, but it would be beneficial to silence the background noise (maybe it’s a fan or heater?), so we can all hear your lovely voice a bit more clearly.
Other things I noticed, be sure to enunciate the sounds at the end of words, like the “d” on “send,” even if gently. Your “p” words seemed a bit overenunciated at the top, with lots of hard popping on the P’s. A pop filter may help, but I think it could be improved with small adjustments to your lips when mouthing them.

Hope this is helpful!

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