[David Goldberg]

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[ajcarste]

Hi there,
I have three new recordings. I am hoping to receive feedback to see if these are conversational.

Thank you,
Andrew

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[M]

Hello Andrew! Lovely tone in all 3. Your voice us soothing and articulate. I am hearing a similar rising intonation at the beginning (“Design,” “At the close,” “sustainable”), and a similar falling intonation at the end (“stagnant” “workshop” “food”) in all 3. Maybe fiddle with changing the inflections and even the pace within each selection to mix it up a bit and keep the listener engaged. “Authentic” although accurately articulated, loses the conversational feel, but nice job – your delivery is solid.

[Steve Z-A]

Hi folks. I am enjoying hearing all of your work and would appreciate any feedback on these few commercial reads from the library. Done on a phone so I know the recording quality is not great, but comments in any other direction would be great! Thanks!

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[Steven]

Hi, Steve.
I think a little more energy and inflection would really elevate the delivery on Honey Bunches. Try smiling through the copy, and see how that sounds.
On Spotify, the pacing of the syllables in the last bit, “…or anyone else, who tries to interrupt your music”, was more lilting than the rest of the read. The sudden shift made it sound a little out of place. Try matching the pieces of that last portion, one way or the other, with the parts proceeding.
Your performance on Guild Guitars was nice! I really liked your tone on that one.
All-in-all, great work!

[M]

So sorry for the earlier 2 replies which were attached to the wrong participant; however you did a great job, Steve with y our 3 reads. Consider using a few key words as instruction on how to deliver (e.g. “It’s AMAZING!” “FINALLY!” and “crunchy” – as if it were an onomatopoeia). I find that moving around and gesturing, if you’re not already, helps me with a more emotional delivery which I don’t normally do when stationary. just a few thoughts! great job. so much to work with there!

[M]

Also, posting the content was really helpful! thanks

[M]

Hi! What a soothing, pleasant voice; it must sound entrancing in a meditation read. My initial response is to remove the punctuation and give it a read without the pauses – maybe just see what it sounds like when you are not guided by assigned commas and stops that slow down the flow of your lovely pitch and delivery.

[ajcarste]

Hi Steve,

I liked how you said “finally” in the Honey Bunches of Oats reading.
I think the “I didn’t think so” had a good attitude to it in the Spotify reading.
“The people you shared your music with” sounded authentic in the last reading.

I hope these help,
Andrew

[Steve Z-A]

Thanks so much. Very helpful.

[Artist7]

Hello, everyone! I’d really appreciate some feedback on these two reads! As always, thanks so much!!

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[M]

Hello! You have such a unique voice with a youthful quality. Im hearing in both an unnatural emphasis on several “ands” – maybe soften that to make it less forced.great job on the reads.

[Steve Z-A]

I liked both of these reads. You have good clarity and pace and I thought you did a good job emphasizing key words throughout both.

[marySQ]

Hi, is it possible to create a new topic if you’re new?

[BJ]

Hi Mary – You’ve likely done what I just did – poked around but can’t find a way to do so. Since all the topics are tied to David’s name, it looks like reaching out to an Edge staff member may be the best way to go. BJ

[Provocaleric]

Hello Forum,
I hope everyone here is doing there best and working towards their goals of being a fabulous voice actor! I submitted this to the contest this month, any thoughts from folks in here will be very appreciated! Sketchers Fitness AppWelcome to Walk Away the Pounds. I’m <your first name> and I’ll be your audio guide.

I’m so glad you’re walking with me today. You know, this one mile walk is the perfect way to get started and be introduced to what this walking system is all about. It’s also a nice short workout for you.

Now, are you ready? Let’s walk! The warmup is very gentle and it really does prepare for the brisk walking that’s coming later on.

First of all, I’d like to review the four basic steps in our walk system.

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[M]

Great read! Only comment is that I you transposed two words “later” and “coming” – but sounds great!

[Steve Z-A]

I liked your tone and enthusiasm in this. The pace is good and excellent clarity. My only thought was that in a couple of spots I thought you inflected up with your voice, where I expected more of a downward choice. Good work.

[jmacdotorg]

Hello friends,

The time has come for my fourth and final record-two-clips-and-upload-em assignment from my Narration course. You have all been a kind and helpful audience!

This time I chose an intro from another corporate video, and an excerpt from a brief Jerry Seinfeld biography. As always, I would be thrilled to hear any critique.

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[M]

clearly you have a handle on the content and several techniques! for me, your voice is suited well for IDI-type reads. There was nothing wrong with the other, but your business-like tone, articulation and quality worked best for me in the IDI clip. nice work!

[ajcarste]

Hi Jmacdotorg,

I thought the distributors reading had a good tone to it. It was a little fast for me, but I may be wrong with that perspective. It might be good to go fast. I am not sure.
I liked how relaxed, yet emphasized the poem reading was.

I hope these help,
Andrew

[Thomas_D]

Hi Everyone,

I’m working on my Commercial reads and would love any and all feedback! Thank you!

Both scripts below are from the EDGE library

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[M]

My favorite line “Nike Dunk High Up” with your low register and falling intonation – irony and subtle humor at its best. I would slow down both reads to accentuate and give credit to your voice and also give you time to articulate beginnings and ends of words. that was a pleasure to hear.

[Steve Z-A]

Nice commercial reads. Good pace and enunciation.

[jmacdotorg]

(Oops, this wasn’t supposed to be a threaded reply. And I don’t know how to delete posts. Sorry!!)

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[ekairush04]

Hi Everyone,
My name is Elena and I’m new to this. I’ve recorded a couple of samples, so any feedback would be very much appreciated.

Thank you

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[Thomas_D]

Hi Elena! Great reads. I’m actually a bit jealous of your diction and pronunciation. You have a great voice for healthcare advertising.

I would second solin232 on the recording feedback. It just sounded a bit “airy” which is most likely do room you’re recording in. It didn’t distract too much, but I’m sure it’s making your voice sound slightly different.

[Provocaleric]

Hi Thomas,
your sound definitely sounds authentic in the nike ad and your delivery had good tempo, pretty good man. Negative thoughts had a solid authoritative sound with little affect, my only critique would be to add a little more empathy in your opening phrase, but I liked it. Good luck

[solin232]

Hi Elena, Great job! I liked both of your reads! I enjoyed your tone, the pacing, your diction! The only things I hear are issues with the recorings, like sibilance and you may need a treated space to get a better quality recording (Volume was fine) I’m far from an engineer but these things jumped right out at me! Thanks for encluding copys of the scripts! Hope to hear you again soon!
Best of luck!
Steve

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[alexcharles]

Hey everyone!

Finally getting a chance to upload a read for my Coaching Homework. I’m focusing on Narration and this is called “Cosmos” from the edge studio script library. I’ve been trying to work on pacing, conversational style and glottal stops but any feedback at all is welcome!

Let me know what you think!

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[M]

I was engaged an interested in the material. I liked the elongated connection bt “izzforthe moment;” the articulation of “cosmic perspective;” and the subtle and gentle “soft meadow.”
a few words I thought might need attention (perhaps slowed down?) – “nitrogen,” “certainty” and “accumulated”. lovely voice

[Thomas_D]

Hey Alexcharles! I thought your tone sounded very conversational and less like you’re reading from a script. I aslo appreciated the technique in which you’re approaching the read (almost like a documentary narrator)

There were two things I noticed as I was listening:
1) the word “nitrogen” seemed very rushed (or it could’ve been clipped in the recording
2) The read sounded very even keel through the entire script. Try playing with giving a few phrases different emotions or slightly changing the pace based on a certain phrase

[Michele Martin]

Hello All,
This is my first submission and I do not yet have a home studio set up, so please forgive the audio quality (or lack thereof). I appreciate any feedback on this read of the NASDAQ script. Thank you!

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[BJ]

Hi Michele – Your voice is very easy to listen to. I really like the warmth of your read. It may be just the recording quality, so I’m not sure if I’m hearing sibilant “s”s. Also, consider tightening up the read by eliminating pauses, which in some cases are being dictated by punctuation. Looking forward to hearing more from you, BJ.

[Michele Martin]

Thank you, BJ! I appreciate you taking the time to provide feedback and will practice this with fewer pauses! I wondered myself if it was a bit choppy sounding.

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