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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi all!
I am really struggling with my tone doing commercial voice overs. I understand how tone works but I am having some issues applying the actual tone to the work i.e the tone requested is not what I am delivering. Just wondering what tone you all get from this. Thank you!
Note: I do know there is an echo in my room I just have not finished building my setup yet. And yes my editing skills are garbo right now but that is a battle for another day.-
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Hi Graceson. It’s a good read. Something I’m trying to work on for commercial scripts, is focusing on Acting vs. Reading. Obviously, it’s important that we read the words right. But once we know the script dialogue, as voice actors, I think we have to try to delve into what the script is trying to communicate, and to who? And then identify what emotions we think would/should be attached to that message. I think that’s where tone (emotion) comes in. Any script will sound much different if read with the emotions of “horror” or “contempt” than it would if read with “Joy” or “Ambition”. The script for the read you posted is a tough one, because the product and the message itself is a bit “clinical”, so kinda tough to attach emotion to it. But for promoting a product that’s about helping you attain better cleanliness and hygiene, you could perhaps try incorporating a tone that says “Hey, i’ve got a secret to tell you.” It’s not easy, but it can make a difference. Acting vs. Reading is an ongoing struggle for me, but I think does make it more fun. Keep it up!
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Hello Everyone,
Here are three more takes of my recordings. I am hoping these are cleaner or more polished. I am still working on my recording space so there might be background noise.
Thank you for your feedback,
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I’m just starting this so bit of an amateur giving feedback but would say your 2nd part of the Travel ad seemed more polished or smooth than the beginning. Still, nice tone throughout, but perhaps the latter part was a bit more smooth than the beginning. Not that the beginning was bad, just more smooth in latter part of ad.
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Hi Forum Folks,
I am dipping my toe into commercials. Does this make you hungry? Comments welcome.
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OK, Bruce, I am pretty anti-sugar these days, but you did make me think about cinnamon squares! The playfulness of this read is very fun – nice range. A couple of small suggestions: I would recommend spacing out the nacht, nuit, noche – ever so slightly, just to give the listener a bit more time to absorb them. And, very minor, but I think you rushed “the night” at the end of “it is the night.” Since “night” is a major theme here, I think it could use a little extra emphasis.
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Hello everyone! This is a script I’m using for my demo. Feed back on style and story, maybe flow, is what im needing to focus on. Not so much the mic and such. Help is so welcome.
Olay Ultra moisture Body Wash
Having dry skin is a struggle. Turns out my body wash was the problem. Until I tried Olay body which improves skin three times better than the leading body wash. Better skin from a body wash? You better believe it. With Olay Body.-
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Very natural pace and tone. Can’t find much to nit pick. I might put a bit more emphasis on “body” at the close.
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Hello monibr16,
I think the reading is very familiar. I’m curious to learn more about the solution when you say “problem” … When you say the Olay body for the first time I think it could be a little bit more sure about the fact you found the solution, but the looseness doesn’t need to go.I hope this helps,
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Hello, previous feedback noted some mouth clicks in my readings. Curious if that is something you hear. And feedback on the pace would be appreciated. Acutally, any feedback is appreciated. Thanks!
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Very clear delivery and upbeat. I agree with the other reviewer that you might improve it with a little faster pace, perhaps connecting your sentences like in conversational speech.
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Hi T. Ohhh to wake up tomorrow to tacos for breakfast…! I lived in Austin and still visit several times a year so this read hit home! I have a hard time identifying the “clicks” I hear so much about, so I will pass on that critique, but the rest of the piece was articulated well and gave the listener an array of the city’s offerings via a colorful delivery. Consider picking up the pace and/or fluctuating the pace so that it too reflects the amazing diversity and flavor of that special town. If you can imagine you telling this “story” to someone who has never been there before who you think would really LOVE it if you could just convince them to visit! That exercise might draw out some of the passion that could really take this great read to the next level. Just some thoughts from a cowgirl!
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M- thank you for the feedback. Very helpful! I know I need to work on making up a story in my head prior to my reading- work on that ole imagination! I may try this one again with your suggestions in mind. I have never visited Austin, but this makes me want to. 🙂 Thanks again!
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Newbie here. Moving into coaching – first session with my coach is next week. Here are 2 of the 3 scripts I have prepared. Any feedback is appreciated:)
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Brandy, these were great! Your tone and delivery were very solid for both of these. Your voice is very unique and interesting to listen to. I am struggling with a point to work on. 🙂 Great job! I am very new to voiceover also. Good luck to you as you start this voice-over journey!!
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Hi Brandy. Really great job with both the scripts. There was a wide variety of tone and pace which kept it interesting and engaging. Not much to suggest for improvement except perhaps articulating the end of one word into the the start of the next (e.g., “dogs would walk themselvesaaand algebra…” ; “there’sgottabeone…”). Great story telling and solid delivery.
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Hi all!. I’m a newbie. I have attached three different reads of the same piece. I am fiddling around with different audience/delivery and not sure how each lands. Any preference? Is one more appealing than the others? Honest,frank feedback appreciated. Thank you!
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M – I thought all three sounded great. Your voice has a clear, easy to listen-to tone. I think they could each be used for a different audience. I am curious if when you recorded you were thinking of a different audience as you read. Great work!
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Hi T. Thank you for listening and for the comments. Yes, I did try and conjure up a different audience – e.g., in #2, I was thinking of a child down on him or herself who needed an encouraging, yet gently stern, pep talk to get back in the “game” with some confidence. I am learning that I need to change my perspective/POV to get myself out of a redundant rut and try on a new sound.
Thanks for the input.
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Hi M! I thought all 3 reads sounded great, but my favorite was the last one. I think the slightly quicker pace and less drawn out words sounded like the best fit for the script, but am not sure if this might just be a subjective preference and not a correct or incorrect kind of thing. You have a nice sound 🙂
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Hi all. I went through the demo program a couple of years ago. Started actively auditioning on Voices.com in May 2021, and was lucky enough to get a bunch of auditions short-listed, and actually booked a (very small) character job for an online ad in June 2021. Shortly after I finished that job, we experienced a few life changes that took me away from voiceover. But now we’re relocated and ettled, and I just finished putting together my new booth and am starting to tweak it and audition again. I would really appreciate any feedback you can provide (full spectrum: booth sound; performance; diction, etc.) Looking forward to getting back at it, including participating on here again! Thanks for your feedback! T
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I auditioned for the same job on Voices. I listened to your rendition about 5 times now. Your audio quality is very good, all I hear is you. And you sound great. Articulation is top notch and the pacing sounds good as well.
I can only imagine that out of the current 229 auditions for this piece that there are a few that stand out in other ways that I would love to know about. The voice they thought of when they posted this has to have made itself available at this point.
I don’t really have any critique of you other than it maybe doesn’t sound very conversational. But then again the audition calls for genuine and articulate which is what you’ve presented.
Long story short, you’re back in the game and your recording space sounds great! Keep it up! -
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Was this done in one take? It certainly sounds like it 😄. I honestly wish I could do a one take read but it usually takes me several.
There was a point where I heard mouth clicks. It was at the 6 second mark. These are hard to get rid of and I struggle with them myself.
Your articulation is great, every word is a it should be. Especially for an English learning piece. -
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Hi T. I think both your reads are very good. Nice clear voice and diction, and good pace, especially for these kinds of educational reads. The only one small thing I thought I may have noticed was a tiny bit of mouth noise in a few spots (little “clicks” or “smacks” that our mouths can make). I think it happens to all of us. I try to stay hydrated, and also often eat green apple prior to a recording, as it can reduce those sounds. I understand there’s even a green apple spray you can buy, though I’ve never tried it. I still spend a fair bit of time trying to edit the clicks/smacks out. In my DAW, I identify them, clip them out and replace them with a bit of background booth sound that I’ve recorded. Overall though, excellent work! Hope this is of some help. T
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