[David Goldberg]

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[leanaguzman]

Hey everybody! I’m working on some narration scripts/explainer videos (three attached) and would love some general feedback. Thank you!

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[Provocaleric]

Hello Leana,
I’m pretty new to this but I like the sound of your voice! you have a very clear and soothing sound the only negative I would have might be I hear to many mouth noises, I’m sure its just a de click kind of thing, Otherwise I would hire you, good luck!

[Earthbul]

Primary Freight practice read
Any and all comments welcomed and appreciated

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[Provocaleric]

Hello Earthbul,
nice work. I think your voice has real authenticity and I imagined you being apart of the railway industry! The only criticism would be to maybe hydrate a little more, your mouth sounds a little cottony, other than that I’m sure I’ll be hearing you about, good luck!

[Earthbul]

I agree 110% with the “cottony” sound. I’ll hydrate more while recording.
Btw I listened to your read and really enjoyed it.

[Talia Hankin]

Hello! Attached below are two narration reads (both corp. explainer). I would appreciate any and all feedback you may have. Thank you!

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[Erik B]

Hi everybody, here is a commercial practice read. I would appreciate any feedback in regards to technique and sound quality. Thank you.

Waterpik

If you floss you know what a two-handed tug of war feels like. Which is why we at Waterpik are introducing the Flosser. At a speed of 10,000 gentle strokes per minute, its nylon tip effectively removes plaque above and below the gumline. Making it a fast, easy and more convenient way to keep gums their healthiest, and teeth their cleanest. With no strings attached.

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[Earthbul]

I like your take on this although I feel your delivery is a tad too harsh.
I also hear a bit of mouth noise. All that being said I really like the sound of your voice.
Look forward to hearing a bit more from you.

[odellodim]

Hi All. Here are reads from 3 different scripts. I welcome and appreciate any feedback you are able to offer. Thank you.

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[e4gaa]

Hi, very first foray into the VO world. Any feedback on this bank internet audio piece would be appreciated
Thanks

Do you use your debit or credit card to pay for things online?
We’re making some changes to protect you from fraud.
In line with Payment Services regulations, in the next few weeks, you may be asked to confirm your online card payments more often.
(Just so we know it’s you…)

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[Erik B]

Hi e4gaa, the authoritative tone in your voice is solid, but perhaps add a smile in the last line. Just because the tone for a read is authoritative, it doesn’t mean it cannot be friendly at certain sections. Also the pacing of your read was very good. Good job.

[Logan DFD]

I need some feedback before another coaching session, specifically about Micropauses and Glottal Stops, as well as not reading too fast. Just need to work that stuff out. Thanks!

Atlanta Bread Company

When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think ‘bread’.
Think of an entire breakfast menu – fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees.
Think of our Cafe with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads.
And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting!
Atlanta Bread Company – more than just bread.

A1 Steak Sauce

With steak, you want to make every bite count.
That’s why we use A-1 Steak Sauce.
A-1 brings out every single bite of steak, or even hamburger.
Mmmmm, delicious.
For me, there’s only one steak sauce, A-1.
Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.

Special K Red Berries

Putting strawberries in cereal wasn’t our idea.
Putting them in the box was.
With slices of real strawberries and crunchy sweet flakes, looking good never tasted so good.
Special K Red Berries.

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[Tim Kraft]

He there. I definitely don’t think these are too fast. If that’s been a problem in the past, you’ve improved! Micropauses help bring you to more conversational speed, and I think that’s best shown in the A1 read. Also think A1 is the best read overall: most conversational and natural, and you keep up the energy through the last line. On special K and Atlanta Bread, the last line sorta trails off.

Not hearing any glottal stops, but I never really developed an ear for them in US English :-/ I hear them in British English all the time (they’re very obvious), but if you’ve had issues in the past I’d never know it.

Nice reads all around!

[Jhaman]

Got two reads of the same script. Wondering about general thoughts and which you like more. Trying to be conversational and clear.

Beavers Voice Over Script: “The beavers build their lodge out of intertangled twigs and sticks; as freezing weather nears, they plaster their lodge with mud, making a concrete layer that no predator can break through. During the early nineteenth century, the beavers pelt was the single most valuable commodity; the pelt was used for robes, coats, clothing trims, and top hats.”

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[Earthbul]

I enjoyed the 2nd read. Flowed much more smoothly. Maybe a little over enunciated in some spots but definitely conversational.

[SuperLuke]

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Working on Commercials at the moment. Please feel free to listen and give me your feedback

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[billmull]

Hello Folks!

I welcome any feedback.

Note that one line of the “partnership” script reads “Accessory Dwelling Units (ADUs)”. So ADUs is not a separate item in the list but is simply the acronym for “Accessory Dwelling Units” so I tried to read it with same style and pitch.

Thanks

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