[David Goldberg]

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[cbadloc]

Did this recording on my desktop so no home studio going on just yet. So, creative feedback only. Thank you!

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[Toque]

Good afternoon folks! Just posting another on, seeking feedback on all aspects. This one was kind of a docu-promo for a sport called “Skijor” – basically skiing behind a horse, with a twist to promote Magnum truck racks. The only direction was “real person, believable, conversational”. As always, I appreciate your thoughts and feedback on any and aspects of the read. T

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[cbadloc]

Voice and tone sound really good though not sure if it would be considered “conversational”, but I’m not an expert. I would say “Meet Owen Larue” could be used with a different inflection perhaps? Again, I’m not an expert so it could be perfect for all I know.

[T Hayes]

I thought this was a fun read. Would love feedback on tone and pace. Thanks!

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[Graceson]

Tone was good! It was an engaging read honestly. As for pace I would slow it down just a tad overall but still a good read.

[Toque]

Great pace and tone T. Good job!

[T Hayes]

Graceson- First of all, I would say the sound of your voice is very nice and easy to listen to. Your pace is very consistent throughout. To make this sound more conversational and natural you might try varying your pace, possibly talking more quickly in some spots. I totally understand what you are saying about understanding what the read is asking for. I feel like I know this too, but then when I listen sometimes I have missed the mark. I know with more listening and practicing we will both get better at this. 🙂

[Graceson]

Thank you first of all! I will try varying my pace that seems like a good idea. Hitting the mark must be a learned art itself.

[melodyz]

Would love hearing your thoughts on my first try at a read. My coach says I’m a glottal stop queen. Haha. Let me know. Thanks in advance for your feedback!

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[Michele Martin]

P.S. That didn’t sound to me like a first read! Nice job. Wow 🙂

[Michele Martin]

Hi Melody! Love your voice- it strikes me as having a clear and professional sound. I’m sneaking a quick listen from work, so I didn’t notice glottal stops 😉 but I really found you super easy and pleasant to listen to with nothing annoying that jumped out at me :). Ha ha- I have a feeling you are going to be demoted from your queen status soon.

[Toque]

Well done melody! Good pitch, tone, tempo and volume. Sounds like your recording space will need a bit of attention, but your voice and read are great!

[Graceson]

Hi all!
I am really struggling with my tone doing commercial voice overs. I understand how tone works but I am having some issues applying the actual tone to the work i.e the tone requested is not what I am delivering. Just wondering what tone you all get from this. Thank you!
Note: I do know there is an echo in my room I just have not finished building my setup yet. And yes my editing skills are garbo right now but that is a battle for another day.

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[Graceson]

Thank you guys so much! Toque I have taken some notes from that and I will give it a try!

[Toque]

Hi Graceson. It’s a good read. Something I’m trying to work on for commercial scripts, is focusing on Acting vs. Reading. Obviously, it’s important that we read the words right. But once we know the script dialogue, as voice actors, I think we have to try to delve into what the script is trying to communicate, and to who? And then identify what emotions we think would/should be attached to that message. I think that’s where tone (emotion) comes in. Any script will sound much different if read with the emotions of “horror” or “contempt” than it would if read with “Joy” or “Ambition”. The script for the read you posted is a tough one, because the product and the message itself is a bit “clinical”, so kinda tough to attach emotion to it. But for promoting a product that’s about helping you attain better cleanliness and hygiene, you could perhaps try incorporating a tone that says “Hey, i’ve got a secret to tell you.” It’s not easy, but it can make a difference. Acting vs. Reading is an ongoing struggle for me, but I think does make it more fun. Keep it up!

[T Hayes]

My feedback reply did not directly attach to your post. Sorry about that!

[mlewis327]

I think your tone and pacing are good. I don’t focus on editing or audio effects so much as listening to delivery. You sound very close to natural.

[ajcarste]

Hello Everyone,

Here are three more takes of my recordings. I am hoping these are cleaner or more polished. I am still working on my recording space so there might be background noise.

Thank you for your feedback,
Andrew

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[cbadloc]

I’m just starting this so bit of an amateur giving feedback but would say your 2nd part of the Travel ad seemed more polished or smooth than the beginning. Still, nice tone throughout, but perhaps the latter part was a bit more smooth than the beginning. Not that the beginning was bad, just more smooth in latter part of ad.

[mlewis327]

While I don’t like to focus too much on audio quality in listening to others (that can be worked out later), I find the echo/reflections in your audio a bit distracting from your read. Delivery is good.

[Bruce Kramer]

Hi Forum Folks,
I am dipping my toe into commercials. Does this make you hungry? Comments welcome.
Thanks

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[RCampos]

OK, Bruce, I am pretty anti-sugar these days, but you did make me think about cinnamon squares! The playfulness of this read is very fun – nice range. A couple of small suggestions: I would recommend spacing out the nacht, nuit, noche – ever so slightly, just to give the listener a bit more time to absorb them. And, very minor, but I think you rushed “the night” at the end of “it is the night.” Since “night” is a major theme here, I think it could use a little extra emphasis.

[ajcarste]

Hello Bruce,
The reading has a nice tone. I hear it going in and out though. I think it might be stronger if the volume was constant.
I hope this helps,
Andrew

[monibr16]

Hello everyone! This is a script I’m using for my demo. Feed back on style and story, maybe flow, is what im needing to focus on. Not so much the mic and such. Help is so welcome.

Olay Ultra moisture Body Wash 
Having dry skin is a struggle. Turns out my body wash was the problem. Until I tried Olay body which improves skin three times  better than the leading body wash. Better skin from a body wash? You better believe it. With Olay Body.

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[Toque]

Love it Monika! Good read all-around. T

[monibr16]

Thank you Toque, and thank you for listening!

[mlewis327]

Very natural pace and tone. Can’t find much to nit pick. I might put a bit more emphasis on “body” at the close.

[monibr16]

Nice catch, thank you Mlewis327

[ajcarste]

Hello monibr16,
I think the reading is very familiar. I’m curious to learn more about the solution when you say “problem” … When you say the Olay body for the first time I think it could be a little bit more sure about the fact you found the solution, but the looseness doesn’t need to go.

I hope this helps,
Andrew

[monibr16]

Thank you Andrew that actually helps a lot!

[T Hayes]

Hello, previous feedback noted some mouth clicks in my readings. Curious if that is something you hear. And feedback on the pace would be appreciated. Acutally, any feedback is appreciated. Thanks!

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[mlewis327]

Very clear delivery and upbeat. I agree with the other reviewer that you might improve it with a little faster pace, perhaps connecting your sentences like in conversational speech.

[T Hayes]

Thank you for the honest feedback. I appreciate it!

[M]

Hi T. Ohhh to wake up tomorrow to tacos for breakfast…! I lived in Austin and still visit several times a year so this read hit home! I have a hard time identifying the “clicks” I hear so much about, so I will pass on that critique, but the rest of the piece was articulated well and gave the listener an array of the city’s offerings via a colorful delivery. Consider picking up the pace and/or fluctuating the pace so that it too reflects the amazing diversity and flavor of that special town. If you can imagine you telling this “story” to someone who has never been there before who you think would really LOVE it if you could just convince them to visit! That exercise might draw out some of the passion that could really take this great read to the next level. Just some thoughts from a cowgirl!

[T Hayes]

M- thank you for the feedback. Very helpful! I know I need to work on making up a story in my head prior to my reading- work on that ole imagination! I may try this one again with your suggestions in mind. I have never visited Austin, but this makes me want to. 🙂 Thanks again!

[Brandyhart610]

Hi! I think you could speed up a bit to make it more conversational, but I know why you didn’t (you were working on the mouth clicks). Otherwise it was super clear and easy to understand.

[T Hayes]

Thanks Brandy!

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