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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
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Good evening folks. Well here is my first “narration” read. I start my training this week for narration. I am just flying by the seat of my pants on this one haha! Any feedback is appreciated.
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Hi Katelyn – nice read! Very clear and with good flow, and appropriate emphasized words. Good job!
Mary
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I am using new equipment, finally got away from my USB mic. Tring out this Scarlett Solo Studio package 3rd generation, any comments are welcome!
The Power of True
What do we mean when we say “the power of true”?
The core of it starts with curiosity. Because everything starts with curiosity. It’s the rocket fuel of creative ideas and bold thinking.
What does curiosity look like in action? It looks like what we do at Fleishman Hillard, every day.
When clients come to us, we embrace their challenges. We listen, we explore, we empathize, we learn. Insights and solutions bubble up from there…grounded in who we are as an agency and who we are as human beings: confident, honest, diverse, real . . . true.
This is our purpose – – to be bold . . . and to stay true. Our clients can do amazing things with that in this complex world. With our help, they can take risks, inspire, grow, break through, disrupt industries, and make a transformative impact on the world.
Pretty powerful, right?
Be Bold. Stay True.
This is what we mean by the Power of True.-
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Hi RYoung!
You have an easy listening style of voice — it was a nice read!
I, too, would echo some other comments here, and be mindful of tone, and upward pitch where not needed.
Kathy
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This is a well-written script…and I thought you sounded clear & professional and have a nice rich vocal tone. I thought the read was a bit fast and heard upward inflections on the word “curiosity” both times in line three and the word “true” at the end of line six, as well as elongations of other words that made it seem a bit choppy and not super-confident sounding. Looking forward to hearing your final version of this!
~colleen
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OK ! I thought I should give this a shot , This is CNN! James Earl Jones!
please take it easy on me if I ruined it..lol-
I totally got the James Earl Jones vibe from this! Your pitch matches him quite well. I think your accent could be a great asset as well, it’s very unique (I have so much family in England but I’ve never heard anything quite like yours – such a cool sound). I agree that maybe working a bit more on getting the vowel sounds a little more distinct in the word “world” would strengthen this a lot. Other than that I thought it was great and you definitely didn’t ruin it!
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Hi mrtripo9!
You didn’t ruin it! You have that deep tone like James Earl Jones — just with a British accent! I think with a little practice with the enunciation, you have a great voice for promo work!
Good job! I look forward to listening to more of your reads!
Kathy
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Wow this is so fancy! Great bass tone in your voice. For a few plays I couldn’t understand “world’s” but I also don’t know how Mr. Earl Jones speaks. I’d love to hear more from you 🙂
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Is that your native British accent? If it is you should flout it, I would die for an English accent, maybe try some narration-story telling. Good luck and thanks for sharing that.
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Hi everyone! Upload of homework practice from the narration script library.
I noticed “aboard” did not come out very clearly in my read. What other feedback and critiques you got for me?
Thanks again!
Kathy
eLearning/Education
American Airlines
Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers. We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.
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Hi Kathy! Good read. I too am hearing some nasalness, but it may just be your accent / normal speaking voice that is unique to you. Good pacing and enunciation on the script throughout. I realize this is in the elearning category, but you might try it with a little more smile and energy in your voice to lift up the passengers. I haven’t flown in awhile (crazy year!) but I always like hearing funny upbeat airline stewards/stewardesses – helps get the passenger’s attention to actually listen to the announcement vs. just tune them out.
Mary
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I edited my entry, and then it didn’t submit the edit!
Anyway, about the nasal sound. I, too, noticed I sounded more nasally than normal yesterday. I do get congested in the colder months/spring time here in northern New England. I have a humidifier in the house downstairs (I do my recording in a bedroom upstairs), and use saline nasal mist sprays, but I may need to add another humidifier somewhere upstairs now that I am doing voiceover!
Kathy
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Thank you, Mary! Noted!
I struggled with this one yesterday. I’d work on it for an hour, walk away for 10-15 minutes, and repeat. Must of been a few hours. I finally said, I have to stop for now, and uploaded the end result.
I agree, I like funny stewards/stewardesses. I went back and forth as to how to deliver this. To me this script falls under the announcer category (maybe it’s in there), so definitely, upbeat would of been best. Then the other side of me thought, “Is this for a trainer video?”. It still should sound more upbeat, though, so thanks again for the feedback!
Kathy
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I had this issue previously, sounds like your speaking with too much nasal sounding, instead try to speak from your diaphragm maybe. Otherwise your pacing and enunciation are very good!
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Hey everyone! Hope everyone had a nice Thanksgiving. Posting another quick practice read. Let me know what you think!
McCholesterol
Come to McCholesterol’s and try our Triple Bacon and cheese Heart Attack Burger and triple fat fries! This Friday, for only fifty cents, at McCholesterol’s.
Eat for today, eat for the moment…
May as well, we’re all going to die soon anyways. Death by fast food, why not? … -
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Hi peeps! Here is a commercial read. Put together this script, any feedback is appreciated!
Sun B*m Hair Lightener is formulated to brighten your hair by amplifying the natural highlighting effects of the sun.
It’s infused with pineapples and lemons and has a hydrogen peroxide boost for faster results.
It smells like sunkissed summer, and does all the good things with none of the bad things.-
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Hi Katelyn – good read! I really like the tone and texture of your voice – good variation throughout. Your voice sounds well-suited for this type of commercial. Good job!
Mary
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Hi there! Here’s the first of my narration scripts for session #1 homework. Absolutely brand new to voiceover, recorded on Mac computer in my freezing-cold basement(no husband, dog or extraneous noise there…) & looking forward to any tips, feedback, suggestions, etc. Big thanks! ~colleen
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Hi Colleen!
A nice first read! I know sometimes pace can be hard in the beginning, but you did a really good job with that here.
As for voice memo download — I don’t have experience with a MacBook, but on my iPhone, I recorded on the Voice Record Pro app, not the voice memos on the phone, when starting out, and then emailed it to myself as a MP3 file. I am not sure if this helps at all, but I thought I would mention it.
Overall, good job! Keep it up!
Kathy
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Sounds like you found a good spot to record if you can keep warm. I like the pace and tone of your voice. I think you may have your voice slightly louder. Over all a good effort!!
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Hi Colleen! First off, welcome! I’m pretty new as well and always learning.
The recording sounded great, but was very quiet on my end. Your voice sounds really nice and smooth for this sort of read. I liked the pace and tone, but there seemed to be a few micro pauses throughout that might not be needed, like they did not seem to be at periods or at the end of a thought. Overall really good!
Mary
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Thanks so much for your feedback! This is definitely a big learning curve…especially when you also need pretty savvy computer skills (which I definitely do NOT have!!) Looking forward to more listening & learning. -
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IF anyone has suggestions on how to download voice memos from a MacBook so that it shows up as an “attachment”, please let me know! 🙂
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It’s going to need to be an mp3 instead of an m4a. Google something like “m4a to mp3 on mac” and some converters will popup. You just need to make sure there’s no malware in the one you choose.
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Hello everybody! First time posting on here for my homework for my commercial demo recording coaching sessions! I have currently two commercials worked on – American Express and Rivers Stadium in Pittsburgh. The scripts themselves are below and I appreciate any and all feedback (on the reads themselves or the way I should set up these posts as I never had to do it for my animation voice over work.
Commercial 1 – American Express
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.
Commercial 2 – Pittsburgh
In this city… There’s an expectation in the air. We all pay it forward. We all earn it. There’s a currency that connects us. The karma we share. The way we celebrate. If you’re not from here, that’s okay. All comers are welcome. Here’s one more tip. There’s only one place in Pittsburgh we all come together. Whatever your game… Rivers is where Pittsburgh comes to play.
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Howdy! On the first commercial in the middle, specifically the “I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make” section, it sounds more like you’re reading off the script instead of having a conversation compared to the rest of the reading. Don’t be afraid to vary your speed a little. Other than that, good job!
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Hi Jack!
Nice reads!
In Script 1, I liked your low tone. I believe I heard “a” pronounced like “ah”. I have been struggling with this, as well.
In Script 2, I liked the natural, casual delivery approach, but I agree with a previous comment to try to vary your pitch and tone.
In Script 3, just … awesome. I can’t find anything to critique here. This sounds commercial ready!Good job!
Kathy
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I completely agree with the comment before me – I loved your allstate reading! It sounded casual, charming, and you lifted important words without making it sound unnatural. I really liked the Nike copy too, and thought it served as a great contrast to the Allstate one. However it sort of sounded like the final line “it’s nike” was thrown away a bit, and the word Nike felt a bit like an afterthought. Make sure to lift up the product name! great work, though!
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Nice work! I especially liked the All State script: you sounded confident, natural, personable, trustworthy & had a nice flow…I wanted to buy insurance from you 🙂 I thought the Wrangler script sounded a bit flat & slow…but a good start. I really like your voice & think you have amazing potential!
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