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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
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Hey all! Any feedback on general audio quality on this one? I’ll take read feedback too, if I may be greedy 🙂
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I have tried to post this twice, and both times after editing, they disappeared.
I wrote a narration script for a documentary on L.L. Bean. (If the script doesn’t appear right, it’s the forum.)
I have been having trouble connecting to scripts. I try to bring enthusiasm to my reads, and it sounds campy, or a little too over the top. I try to sound natural, and more conversational, and it sounds like I am reading the script. I know smiling, as well as visualizing your audience, are often mentioned. I’m trying. As someone who is a bit of an introvert, and doesn’t socialize too much, I am also here to get out of my shell, too.
Any feedback is appreciated.
Kathy
L.L. Bean
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Hi Kathy! I like this read for you! I also like the over the top cheerleader tip first read, I’m going to use that too Burdahgirl! I agree too with the gestures as you are reading with your hands – I have to now take off my watch, which makes noise on the recording because it is a little loose and rattles. It somehow signals to your brain that what you are saying is more exciting, or somehow more real to you, hard to explain but it helps me. I think it did sound natural and conversational, so I would not worry about being an introvert.
The only critique I would say for this piece is that I did not hear any pause after “But, the outdoors…” I think the emphasis makes more sense if on the word “outdoors” vs. “always” because it goes on to say that LL Bean got his great idea while outside in the following sentence. Great job!
Mary
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Hey Kathy! I think it’s a great read – you are very clear and read at a nice pace which is a continuing struggle for me! I feel that way too about feeling like I’m reading a script. I have found that going way over the top once (where nobody can hear me) can help break me out of my shell. Like reading it in full cheerleader mode. And then backing off from there to find a normal sound. Also, using gestures has been a game changer for me. It helps the smile actually reach my voice. I hope that’s helpful!! <3
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Hi everyone! I am uploading this recording (done on my phone) for any and all feedback. Thank you!
Mary
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good evening. I have just started my narration training so I’m thinking about doing a read for Banff National Park. I’m trying to visualize what I see while I’m seeing it and I’m also tackling a MAJOR challenge with this crazy CRAZY long longgggg list haha! come at me with any feedback.
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Katelyn
Very nice read. Good tempo and variation in pitch. And you’re right – the list of park features was crazy long and you did a good job with your tone and inflections making each one different. I was seeing each different feature in my mind’s eye.I suggest for future posts you add the script so we can follow along.
Good luck with the training.
Chas
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Hi Katelyn! This sounds good. It felt like the size of the park could have been read a little faster (6,641 square kilometers). I know it is a number, but it gets stretched out a little longer than needed to me. The park is big but you also would want to emphasize not only the size of the park but moreso the list of qualities about the park. The list of items sounded fine to me. It’s hard to vary the tone for each one when you have so many items (7?), but I think you did a good job with that. Good work!
Mary
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I just started training for my Commercial demo and my homework is to post 1-2 reads daily in addition to what I do offline on my own. Here’s the first. I’m also beginning to create my recording environment and I know the quality of this take can be much better.
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Lovely beautiful voice! I am excited to see what you will do. Congrats on starting your commercial demo!! Here is what stood out to me besides the beautiful timbre of your voice and how charming of a vibe you have – I think you hit the word “this” in “put THIS card” but I think you might want to emphasize the word “hands” and “child”. And I think you could create a bit more gravity in your tone for the first half. It feels very upbeat but the subject matter could do well to have more of an emotional gravity to it. I think from “to learn how…” I think you really handle it well! nice work.
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Continued practice! Working with different copy and honing my performance skills, so any performance related comments would be great- although any comments are appreciated! I’m also working on decreasing the time needed to get a recording I am happy with, so part of this was an experiment to give myself fewer takes to get it right to hone my auditioning skills.
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Hi CYeschenko! I too have to practice many times to get a recording that feels good enough to post, glad to hear I’m not the only one!
I liked the read – good pace, clarity and flow of the script, and I think your voice is well-suited for this commercial. I noticed that “…holiday treats” sounded like it ended with an question mark instead of a period, as well as the last word “happy”, but those are very minor points. Overall very well done!
Mary
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I concur on multiple takes, sometimes I do 4 or 5, probably better to just read over the script multiple time to become familiar. That said I’ve enjoyed your reads for a while and think you have improved tremendously! Only two minor things inflection wise are Holiday treats ended with a question instead of statement and Hershey Park the last word happy fell off a bit, good work, enjoyed the descriptive tone on the holiday rides!
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Hi all! Here is a recording (recorded on my phone) that I’m posting here for any and all feedback. I was having trouble uploading files all week and now I miss it! 🙂 So here it is. Thanks!
Mary
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Hi everyone! Here is my daily recording (recorded on my phone) for any and all feedback. Thank you!
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Hi Mary, Your voice seems pleasant, however too many upward inflections for this script, now if it was a children’s commercial or story it fits with your tone. This script seems to want more passion and inspiration, hope that helps!
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Welcome back, Mary!
Your pace was good here. I can hear you relaxing more.
The opening line needs a little more of an enthusiastic tone, and in the lists (pursue passions, overcome limitations and realize potential … space, expertise and inspiration), if you varied your inflections with them more, it would improve the read.
I hope this helps. Keep it up! Good read!
Kathy
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Hey ya’ll! I’d love feedback on my latest practice script: both the read and the sound quality. I’m working on my home studio setup and would love to hear what your ears think about the current setup and what else it might need. THANKS!
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Hi Burdahgirl!
Great job! Pace, tone, pitch were spot on!
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Your last line was louder, however, I think that may have been your intention to billboard and create a tag line? It works, but just a little too loud compared to the rest of the copy.
Kathy
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Helllllooooo from Los Angeles (korea town), I just had my 1st VO coaching session with the infamous Kara Edwards and am just a beginner, so please go easy on me! (recorded from my lav mic attached to my iphone ..(for now until I upgrade))
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Great job on the read! Nice pacing and a wonderful, clear voice. I would say you could try experimenting with a little more emotion or expressive tone for the very beginning of the read so we know right off the bat how you feel about this amazing woman. I got it later when you said “her strength, respected”, so great work on that! You definitely don’t sound like a beginner – way to go!
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