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Hi guys. So i’m working really hard practicing different types of narration to find out where I fit naturally with my voice. This is an explainer piece (took me a while to figure out what an “Explainer” even is…) Anyways. I loved this copy and really connected with it – being a songwriter, arts and craft person and what not. I hope this works with my voice. Thanks in advance! (I’m leaving my breaths in on purpose)
“Creativity is not the same as hard work or effort, it requires genuine inspiration. It’s the product of a mind thoroughly intrigued by a question, a situation or a possibility, therefore creativity does not come in exchange for money or rewards, but when we focus our attention on something because we want to.”
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Hello Edge Forum!
This is my first submission…I’m quite new to Voice Over, very new to editing with Audacity, and have not yet recorded my Demo. Just looking to get some feedback on this file from the Edge Script library, whether about interpretation, sound quality, etc. I have a lot to learn 😉
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Welcome Beckolin!
You have a warm and welcoming voice for voiceover! Your pacing, pitch, clarity, and tone were all very good for this read.
I did not have an issue listening to your file, and I did not notice anything distracting in regards to your audio quality.
I am still learning Audacity myself, and use it mainly for minor edits, but you will gradually get the hang of it.
Very nice first entry!
Kathy
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Another script for performance feedback, let me have it!
By mid-1940, the German Army had conquered all of western Europe. H****r was tightening the noose around Britain. In the Atlantic, German U-boats were decimating Allied convoys, threatening to cut off Britain’s only lifeline. But Churchill had a secret weapon, the strangest military establishment in the world. Crossword fanatics, chess champions, mathematicians, students and professors, Americans and British, all came here with one common aim: to unlock the secrets of the Enigma, a machine that concealed Germany’s war plans in seemingly unbreakable code. If Enigma could be penetrated, everything H****r plotted would be known in advance. At Bletchley Park, there unfolded one of the most astonishing exploits of the Second World War.-
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Hi Damian! Really good read, and your voice seems very good for this genre. Good energy and pacing throughout and your voice is very clear.
I heard a few added and deleted words and phrases here and there – you said “and H****r began to tighten the noose…” instead of the way it was written “H****r was tightening the noose…” “unusual” added before secret weapon, etc. I realize this is practice, but I’ve been told to practice the scripts exactly as written, complete with commas, periods, exclamation points and so on. It’s good practice to be as exact as possible. That being said, it was really well read, I enjoyed it!
Mary
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Hi Damien, nice work with this piece. I thoroughly enjoy learning about WW2 so this read is a treat. I could imagine a little animation going on with this so great job connecting to the copy! I think the list ” Crossword fanatics, chess champions, mathematicians, students and professors, Americans and British” is challenging. Long lists like this are SO HARD, but I think taking it a tad bit slower and using tone, inflection and pitch to vary it a little more so people can comprehend what you are saying would be helpful. I think I mentioned I could hear your noise gate from a previous comment, and I think it is still at a setting that is too intense and obvious – specifically at “If Enigma could be penetrated, (breath fluttering) everything H****r” I could hear it cut in and out. You will need to work on sound treating your space more instead of relying on the noise gate. Try uploading a few reads without the noise gate at all I would be curious to hear it. Just my 2 cents. Nice work though I really enjoyed this read and I think your voice fits very well with this genre.
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Hi, friends! See attached for a couple of auditions I recently submitted for commercial reads. Please let me know what you think! All constructive feedback is welcome and encouraged!
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I agree that the second was more effective because of the emotion you brought to it via the persona you assumed and by effectively varying pitch and tempo. This also made the tag line stand out strongly throughout the entire script.
I’ll be a little picky about the first. It seemed a little flat to me, starting with the tone of your initial “Hello”. I can envision a read of this copy being a little more energetic overall and especially when you get to the part that delivers the solution and its benefits after defining the problem. I also heard uptalk twice to (maybe) emphasize words that in context, didn’t need the uptalk – one was “disengaged” (@9 secs) and the other was “ease” (@19 secs).
Your voice was clear in both and the copy was nicely articulated.Chas
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Good reads overall, with clarity and pacing, and varying your tone in each read.
I felt you connected to the second script the best.
The first script, I agree with others, that there needed to be more enthusiasm. The plosives were a bit distracting in this read, too. Are you using a pop filter? Too close to the mic?
Keep at it!
Kathy
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Hi there! Really nice work on these. I think the cancer one fit best, the first one I think could have used more of a friendly/happy/upbeat tone and agree with the previous comment that a smile can help. I think you sound very genuine, caring and warm for the cancer read. Maybe with posting auditions though it would be great to know what the audition directions were to better help us with discerning how your delivery fulfills the direction. Just an idea 🙂 really nice work!
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OK, more commercial demo feedback requested!
Worked with Jen this week on two more potentials for my commercial demo: a board game, and a restaurant. Here are the scripts, looking for feedback on pacing, delivery, and if I sound like I’m connecting with the material and speaking with intention. Thanks in advance!
Script 1: Thornwatch
Deep in the Eyrewood, dark creatures would spread their corruption to the people of the forest. Thankfully, the citizens are protected by the Thornwatch. The Thornwatch: Eyrewood Adventures Board Game is available at Lone Shark Games.Script 2: Sweet Lucy’s Smokehouse:
Why do we sometimes run out of food? It’s the result of cooking with wood in a closed pit Smoking is a low-and-slow process—that means sometimes our meats take all-night to cook until they’re perfect! It’s just how we do it at Sweet Lucy’s Smokehouse.-
Hi Brian! These are good reads. You have a really nice warm voice and are emphasizing the appropriate words.
For script 1: I realize this is a practice read but the read was not per the script in the last sentence – instead of ” … Board Game is available at Lone Shark Games.” I heard ” … visit LoneSharkgames.com”
For script 2: You have a nice friendly tone here, good energy. Being picky, but I heard “That’s” vs. “It’s” as typed.Really good reads overall! Keep it up!
Mary
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Hey, Brian! Great reads! You have a GREAT voice over voice! My suggestion for both reads would be to pick up the pace, especially in the board game read, specifically the first two sentences. I get the drama you’re trying to portray in those two sentences, but keep the drama while picking up the tempo. It sounds like there’s a little pause between each word which chops up the read. Other than that — keep up the good work!
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Hi everyone, wanted to share this read on a controversial script..will love your feedback. 🙂 thanks.
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mrtripo9 — Great tone throughout the read! Your voice fits this kind of script very well. I ditto what Mary said about the pen tip — it helps!
Keep it up!
Kathy
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Hi Mrtripo9! Wow, interesting topic to hear. I really like your deep warm voice and the flow of the script – very nice! “According to them” sounded like “According to dem” to me. I tend to squish words too like “n” instead of “and”, so for me it’s keeping my mouth slightly more open during those words. My coach told me too that if you put a pen in your mouth as practice before the read, it helps open your mouth more so the words don’t get squished, not sure if that makes sense or helps. Great tone here!
Mary
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Hello all! Here is my daily recording (done on my phone) for any and all feedback. The script cracked me up. Thank you!
Mary
Dultuth Trading: Free-Swingin’-Flannel
What in the world has happened to flannel shirts? They feel boardy, shrink like crazy and fall apart after a couple of days on the job. Our Free Swingin’ Flannel is a heartier 5.6-oz. 100% cotton for larger-than-life comfort, durability and warmth. We brush it twice for extra loft and softness. Maybe best of all, it has our easy-moving Armpit Gussets. A button-down collar means you can wear it under a sport jacket, which guys in Duluth actually do – some of them even get married in flannel!-
Hi Mary!
“Free Swingin’ Flannel” could be a tongue twister! Say that 10 times fast! lol
Caught a few minor micro-pauses, but overall a good job!
Kathy
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Hi, Mary! Good job. Can I ask what room you are recording this in? It doesn’t sound soundproof, and it sounds like you’re surrounded by a lot of hard surfaces. I actually record in my tiny closet and all of the clothes help absorb the sound! I suggest sound-proofing some sort of space in your home for recordings.
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Hi Sabpierotti! Thanks! I’m not set up in my home studio yet, will be working on that soon. It is definitely not soundproof, and there are lots of hard surfaces. I’ve only done one recording in my closet so far but it was sooo flat. Hopefully you and others will be able to tell once I get a mic and some sound-proofing. For now, this is just to get consistent in my delivery. Thanks again!
Mary
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Hello everyone!
I was instructed by the talented Art Bruder to share my takes on three example scripts I found in the edge library. The first one is a nutritious breakfast cereal ad, the second one is a history channel documentary, and the third one is an educational explainer video. Hit me hard with the feedback!
I had a particularly hard time with the second script, I can’t quite pinpoint why. I’m sure you all can give me feedback on it though!
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Hi Dante! Love your voice! So nice, deep and rich. Great clarity, pacing and emphasis on the appropriate words in all of them
Script 1: This sounded really good for you, good energy and decisive-sounding. Good smile in your voice.
Script 2: This sounded like you were trying to be more serious than your natural tone (not sure if that’s true, just what I’m hearing), and because of that did not seem as authentic to me. It had some variation in tone, but could use maybe a little more?
Script 3: This was good! It sounded believable and helpful. Also good smile and decisive tone. Good work!Mary
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Helllooo! Here is a little in-store announcement script I put together for Costco Wholesale, specifically for Costco Grocery. It took me a little while to get what I was going for. Apologies if I sound nasally; nothing I can do at the moment. Let me know what you think. All feedback is welcome and appreciated! Thanks!
Kathy
Costco Grocery
Hey, Costco customers, are you looking for something incredible to serve at your holiday dinner party? Head over to Costco Grocery for beautifully prepared steaks, imported cheeses, fresh lobster, and buttery caviar!
And, don’t forget dessert! Costco bakers can help you pair the perfect sweet with a lovely bottle of wine!
(P.S. Make sure you pick up cookies for Santa. You don’t want to get on his naughty list…)
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Kathy,
You definitely have the voice for in-store announcements! Great job. My only suggestion would be to not pause too long between sentences, keep the same tempo throughout. Also, for the last sentence (ex: Ps…) I suggest keeping this sentence at the same volume level as the rest of the announcement. I understand why you read it the way you did, but for an in-store announcement I don’t know if the “whisper/secret” strategy works. I hope this makes sense! Keep up the good work.
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Hi Kathy! This was good. It may be a regional pronunciation difference, but I noticed that you said “caviar” with an accented last syllable, but I have only ever heard it accented on the first syllable, not a big deal but I had not heard it that way before (nor do I eat a lot of caviar :))
On the “And, don’t forget dessert!” it sounded a little monotone, and not like an exclamation point, but more like a period. I did not hear a pause after “and,” this might help punch up that line. That sentence feels like it should be emphasized like you did with “…bottle of wine!”. On the last line, the “…cookies for Santa” seemed a little monotone as well; I think you could try more emphasis on “naughty”. just my opinion so it does not just fade off in thought and pitch. Good job!!!
Mary
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Hi Mary! Hmmm. Maybe caviar is different regionally? https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/caviar
I actually intended to deliver those sentences you mentioned with a more monotone sound, especially the “P.S.” line. I pretty much ignored my own punctuation, lol. I read the copy two ways, and this version sounded better. Maybe it was me.
Thanks again for the feedback. I always appreciate it!
Kathy
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Hi Kathy! You are right, I think there are words that are pronounced differently depending on where you live, caviar is probably one of those words! lol. I think I’m over-sensitive to reading any lines monotone so when I hear it my ears perk up as something to never do, but that may only apply to how I’m reading things. So much to learn! 🙂
Mary
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Good job! The only comment I have is I heard a lot of echo and background noise in your read. Not sure if this was music you were adding to the read or not? Also, it doesn’t sound like your recording space is sound proof. I suggest finding a small space in your home that has a lot of soft materials to absorb your sound. I literally record in my tiny closet haha! Keep up the good work.
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Hi Juliees! Good energy throughout the read! I can tell you have a smile in your delivery, sounds nice for this genre. Good job!
Mary
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