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Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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November 19, 2020 at 12:41 pm #58040
irvj
ParticipantJust trying a promo type of read. Would welcome feedback regarding delivery as well as audio quality.
Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while…right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.
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November 20, 2020 at 10:02 am #58081
AndreaC
ParticipantI think that the audio sounds great! You have a very comforting, calm tone, and clear annunciation.
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November 20, 2020 at 12:30 am #58073
mkell755
ParticipantHi Irvj! I really like your voice! Very warm and smooth and mellow. Good variation in tone and pitch. Great job!
Mary
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November 19, 2020 at 4:54 pm #58057
swy619
ParticipantHi there,
Yes, very nice delivery, and the audio quality sounded great! I might suggest emphasizing that first “free” a bit more. Volume was a little low in comparison to what followed. Also, maybe experiment with more emphasis on “not” in “not afford.” These are just little things of course. Really fantastic job! -
November 19, 2020 at 3:37 pm #58052
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantWow I love this!! Your voice is delicious. I don’t really have much to say that is constructive, I thought it was great. Perhaps you could try a delivery with a bit of a quicker pace to up the energy a little bit. Nice work! – Katelyn
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November 19, 2020 at 12:20 am #58023
kfvoice
ParticipantHello everyone!
I struggled with this copy all evening and night. You name it, and I just couldn’t get it right — from my enunciation, which is frustrating me (“corset” to mention one), to pops and clicks; even my recording quality. However, I am uploading this practice read for your critique.
Thanks again!
Mae West
Mae West was the daughter of a boxer and a corset model, who became a vaudevillian at the age of fourteen. At thirty three, in 1926, she wrote, produced and directed a Broadway show called ‘S*x’, and landed in jail on obscenity charges. After wowing Broadway in ‘Diamond Lil’, she signed with Paramount in 1932 and moved to Hollywood. Her risqué 1930s comedies were ground-breaking, in terms of both s****l content and roles for women. Her films included ‘Night After Night’ and ‘She Done Him Wrong’, which was the film version of ‘Diamond Lil’, and broke all existing box-office records, credited with saving Paramount from having to sell out to its rival, MGM.Attachments:
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November 20, 2020 at 10:14 pm #58111
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy! I think this was a good read. The word “corset” is not a deal-breaker if mispronounced in my opinion; not often used enough for that and can be easily fixed. Some of the script seemed a little monotone in spots but was interesting to hear nonetheless. Good job on this one!
Mary
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November 19, 2020 at 10:08 am #58032
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantOK, so I struggle with clicks as well, and most of the time, it’s due to a lack of hydration. Munching on some green apple slices can help, too, the acid will help break up the stuff in your mouth that can cause some of the noise.
With pronunciation, the letter “a” should be short, as in “ah”, not “eh” like Canadians say. By doing that, it may help with the pronunciations of the following words (like corset). Same thing with “obscenity”, it should be a short “e”, like “ob-sen-ity”, rather than “ob-seen-ity”.
Something that helped me, as a suggestion from one of my coaches, James Andrews, was to cross out the words “to” and “for” and write in the numbers “2” and “4”. It helped me slow down a bit and give the words some more enunciation.
The sound quality itself sounded fine to me…just a touch of room noise, like a fan from a computer or something, but nothing a little light noise reduction in post couldn’t cure.
Just know: we all struggle. Knowing that you’re struggling, and knowing that you aren’t getting it right, is a sign that you have the skills and knowledge to do it. This is a good thing. Keep at it!
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November 19, 2020 at 3:26 pm #58050
kfvoice
ParticipantThanks Brian for the encouragement and tips!
Not that I don’t want to pronounce words correctly, but, I’m wondering if my close proximity to Quebec has anything to do with certain pronunciations and dialect. Hmm.
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November 23, 2020 at 9:56 am #58190
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantIt could. I have to be careful about certain words because of my Delaware Valley accent…we tend to slur words, leave them off, or sometimes have some odd inflections.
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November 18, 2020 at 7:34 pm #58014
svenbot5000
ParticipantHowdy! I’m posting another quick practice recording before my next coaching session. Any performance feedback is greatly appreciated.
Qtie
Dating and making new friends can be difficult and daunting. But thanks to Qutie it’s now easier for you to meet fellow LGBT individuals. Follow your heart to find your true colors with Qutie.
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November 20, 2020 at 10:20 pm #58112
mkell755
ParticipantHi Svenbot! I liked your voice a lot for this read, very warm, friendly and approachable. I agree with some of the other comments in that it could have been just a very little bit slower, but it sounded really good overall. You might want to emphasize “Qutie” a bit more for the 2 times the word is said; it’s an unusual word and you want to make sure the listener knows the product being sold.
Mary
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November 20, 2020 at 8:47 am #58077
irvj
ParticipantHi, i thought the slightly slower pace on your 2nd recording was a great improvement. The first recording was just a tad rushed. Love your tone and the accessibility of your voice.
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November 19, 2020 at 1:37 pm #58042
mbarillier
ParticipantHi — Good tone for the spot: you keep the sound upbeat and positive. agreed that a slower speed will let the listener absorb the words a bit more, but overall sounds good.
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November 18, 2020 at 11:27 pm #58020
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantGood evening!
Okay, so you have a great tone, first of all. The read was a little rushed, though, and it resulted in some words being smushed together. Slow it down and let it breathe a little.
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November 18, 2020 at 4:23 pm #58006
NoreenQuadir
ParticipantHi, new to commercial VO training and wanted to attach my VO samples here for feedback as I’m learning. Would appreciate feedback from others. Thanks! 🙂
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November 20, 2020 at 10:30 pm #58113
mkell755
ParticipantHi Noreen! I like these reads for your voice. My favorite was the third for Hershey’s, it just seemed the most believable for you. The Second script for Elf was a little hard to hear clearly on my end, I little slower might help the many “s’s” in the script be fully enunciated, they tended to run together. Good job!
Mary
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November 18, 2020 at 11:31 pm #58021
BrianWigginsVO
Participantso the first thing I noticed was that all of the reads were essentially exactly the same in terms of the pacing, tone, and emotion. That’s something that should be varied, as each read would be attempting to reach a different audience, and achieve a different goal, right?
Also, in each there were some cases of slurred words, so make sure to slow down.
Finally, was this recorded on your phone just for the sake of practice? If yes, then no worries…if not, you’ll definitely need to work on your setup.
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November 19, 2020 at 12:50 am #58027
NoreenQuadir
ParticipantThank you for the feedback! Yes, this was recorded on my phone and just for practice.
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November 18, 2020 at 3:01 pm #58001
swy619
ParticipantTwo very contrasting scripts here. Had fun testing different genres. Feedback appreciated. Peace and thanks!
Kids Activity TV
Every day is an adventure with Activity TV. It’s the place to be for
hundreds of Awesome activities in dozens of categories! Cartooning to
magic to cooking and more – ready for you day or night. This month
learn some gross out magic. Watch closely as Ryan teaches you to
perform the severed finger trick!
Meditation
Make yourself comfortable, sitting upright, with a straight spine.
With your eyes closed, look at the point midway between the eyebrows
on your forehead. Inhale slowly, counting to eight. Hold the breath
for the same eight counts while concentrating your attention at the
point between the eyebrows. Now exhale slowly to the same count of
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November 20, 2020 at 10:35 pm #58114
mkell755
ParticipantHi Swy619! I really liked both of these reads for you. They were very different from each other and both very believable. Good pace and excitement for the first read and lots of variation in tone. For the second script it was great – it contained more pauses and breathiness which was very appropriate for that read. Great job!
Mary
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November 20, 2020 at 12:19 pm #58087
SuperLuke
ParticipantWow! The meditation recording was great, relaxed, really worked, convincing and more. The other performance with the kids show was nice too.
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November 18, 2020 at 7:19 pm #58013
svenbot5000
ParticipantHi! I have some feedback for your kids tv read. Your higher pitch definitely helps sell the enthusiasm! I would try changing up the pacing of the read next time. An enhanced pace would help hook any kids listening to this want to tune in. Your tone kind of lowers when you say “Dozens” as well, I would raise it instead to emphasize the amount of categories. Keep up the good work!
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November 18, 2020 at 2:55 pm #57999
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantThis was so fun!! Ladies this ones for you 😉 Any feedback is appreciated, thank you. I put this script together based on a recent ad with Amy Schumer
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November 23, 2020 at 7:36 am #58188
docr15
Participantkatelyndawnvo, excellent read! I can’t really find any negative to say. This was smooth, natural and easy to listen to. Recording quality was great. This is a TV/Radio quality read in my humble opinion.
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November 20, 2020 at 9:58 am #58079
AndreaC
ParticipantVery clear and friendly!
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November 19, 2020 at 5:49 pm #58062
irvj
ParticipantTotally agree with BrianWigginsVO. I hear this, I see this ad on the tube. I liked the way you changed pitch, it gave a more conspiratorial feel, like, “just between us”…Great job!
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November 19, 2020 at 3:40 pm #58055
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantAw shucks, thanks you guys! <3
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November 19, 2020 at 10:09 am #58033
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantGreat job! I could definitely hear that as an actual campaign.
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November 18, 2020 at 8:26 pm #58018
mkell755
ParticipantLove this Katelyn! Agree with the comment before, sounds very relatable and authentic – I believe you!! Your voice sounds really good for this commercial – very well done!
Mary
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November 18, 2020 at 4:24 pm #58011
NoreenQuadir
ParticipantI love it! It sounds very relatable as if a friend is talking to me.
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November 18, 2020 at 10:43 am #57983
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantAudition Feedback
Hoping to submit this ASAP, so any feedback regarding delivery will be very helpful. Three scripts all with the same direction: “In a tone that’s intellectual and energetic”.
Script 1:
Doctors specialize in treating patients, not negotiating drug contracts and rates.
That’s where GPOs come in – to serve physicians.
Smart GPOs rely on data to ensure providers have access to the right therapeutic choices at the best value.Script 2:
Distribution is the critical link between pharmaceutical manufacturers and healthcare providers
Because AmerisourceBergen offers specialty distribution to its partners,
we understand that a specialty distributor has knowledge of their patient base and specific needs of specialty physician practices.Script 3:
At a time when health systems are challenged to maximize revenue capture, Drug reimbursement requirements are changing and complex.
Even with an increased focus on this area, it can be difficult for a health system to have a holistic view of the revenue cycle and its complexities, spanning everything from drug procurement to reimbursement.Attachments:
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November 18, 2020 at 3:05 pm #58004
RYoung
ParticipantBrian, great work on these, good inflections although some seem a bit contrived or maybe too upward in inflection on sentence ending? Only other thought on improvement would be like so many of us have, is glottal stops or I call squeezing of words which come out distorted ie; manufacturers in script 2 and complex in first sentence of script 3, hope that helps and good luck.
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November 18, 2020 at 11:32 pm #58022
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantThat’s helpful, thanks…I’ll have to give it another listen to see where I was doing that.
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November 18, 2020 at 3:45 am #57975
mrchaseatherton@gmail.com
ParticipantHey another ad practice script for me. Thanks so much! I would love performance and space notes for this one.
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November 20, 2020 at 10:19 am #58084
RYoung
ParticipantI like your natural and informative delivery style. I think it would work well in PSAs. Although this is a retail clothing commercial you may want to perk up the ending somewhat with a smile if you know what I mean, good work on this and thanks for sharing!
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November 18, 2020 at 10:45 am #57987
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantLove the tone and your delivery on this…there was a real earnestness to it. Maybe slow down like 3.6% (but that’s just one opinion, take it for what it’s worth), and the only real note I have is that the end tag is really rushed, especially to your nearly dead-on pacing with the rest of it. But other than that, great!
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November 18, 2020 at 3:42 am #57973
mrchaseatherton@gmail.com
ParticipantThis is a practice script for my coaching sessions. Voice and recording setup notes are both great!
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November 18, 2020 at 10:46 am #57988
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantSame notes as above…great tone, maybe a tad slower, especially at the end when you’re giving the website address. Who are you working with, if you don’t mind me asking?
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November 18, 2020 at 2:17 am #57964
mrchaseatherton@gmail.com
ParticipantHey y’all! Been working on this commercial a bit. Let me know notes on performance!
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November 19, 2020 at 10:13 am #58034
BrianWigginsVO
ParticipantThe last line, the call to action, is super rushed. Slow that down so that we can hear it. But your tone is great, and for the rest, I loved the pacing and your inflections.
Just to offer a contrast point to Kathy above, as she’s not wrong about “to” versus “ta”, my coach told me that sometimes, “ta” is OK, depending on the tone of the script, and as long as it isn’t being completely lost. In this case, it didn’t bother me, so here you would have a case of two different “casting directors” looking for different things.
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November 19, 2020 at 12:33 am #58025
kfvoice
ParticipantI like your tone in all your reads. In this particular one, I will give feedback — slow it down slightly (I have struggled with this in my narration reads), and enunciate clearer on “to”. It sounded like “ta” — I have to catch myself with this also. I hope this helps.
Kathy
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