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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Commercial feels like such a struggle for me! Thank you for all of your advice and feedback <3
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Sorry folks but Collen reminded me I had another take of this one I forgot about, had to put my music in, thanks for listening!
The Power of True
What do we mean when we say “the power of true”?
The core of it starts with curiosity. Because everything starts with curiosity. It’s the rocket fuel of creative ideas and bold thinking.
What does curiosity look like in action? It looks like what we do at Fleishman Hillard, every day.
When clients come to us, we embrace their challenges. We listen, we explore, we empathize, we learn. Insights and solutions bubble up from there…grounded in who we are as an agency and who we are as human beings: confident, honest, diverse, real . . . true.
This is our purpose – – to be bold . . . and to stay true. Our clients can do amazing things with that in this complex world. With our help, they can take risks, inspire, grow, break through, disrupt industries, and make a transformative impact on the world.
Pretty powerful, right?
Be Bold. Stay True.
This is what we mean by the Power of True.-
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I like this version of the The Power of True script, RYoung! With the music, it sounds great!
I have a couple of minor suggestions for feedback.
When you say, “Pretty powerful, right?”, trying changing your pitch up with the word “right?”
The last two lines:
Be Bold. Stay True.
This is what we mean by the Power of True.These sound like tags lines, and perhaps insert a longer pause between these lines, and “Pretty powerful, right?”
Just a couple of thoughts. Overall, a nice read!
Kathy
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Hey everyone! Here’s another practice read!
Freshii
At Freshii you can customize your entree and be your own culinary master. So what’s in your custom bowl? Tex Mex with black beans and a little salsa fresca? Teriyaki twist with a pop of pineapple? Whatever your fresh idea, get any 2 bowls for just $12.99! Freshii – Eat. Energize!
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I also love how clearly your enthusiasm for the material comes through! Awesome job! I would definitely recommend slowing down a bit, especially when you are listing the different bowl options. I also think a little more of a pause before the last sentence would be helpful to distinguish from the “pitch” part of the script to the tagline – giving the summation a bit more finality.
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Good evening folks. Well here is my first “narration” read. I start my training this week for narration. I am just flying by the seat of my pants on this one haha! Any feedback is appreciated.
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Hi Katelyn – nice read! Very clear and with good flow, and appropriate emphasized words. Good job!
Mary
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I am using new equipment, finally got away from my USB mic. Tring out this Scarlett Solo Studio package 3rd generation, any comments are welcome!
The Power of True
What do we mean when we say “the power of true”?
The core of it starts with curiosity. Because everything starts with curiosity. It’s the rocket fuel of creative ideas and bold thinking.
What does curiosity look like in action? It looks like what we do at Fleishman Hillard, every day.
When clients come to us, we embrace their challenges. We listen, we explore, we empathize, we learn. Insights and solutions bubble up from there…grounded in who we are as an agency and who we are as human beings: confident, honest, diverse, real . . . true.
This is our purpose – – to be bold . . . and to stay true. Our clients can do amazing things with that in this complex world. With our help, they can take risks, inspire, grow, break through, disrupt industries, and make a transformative impact on the world.
Pretty powerful, right?
Be Bold. Stay True.
This is what we mean by the Power of True.-
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Hi RYoung!
You have an easy listening style of voice — it was a nice read!
I, too, would echo some other comments here, and be mindful of tone, and upward pitch where not needed.
Kathy
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This is a well-written script…and I thought you sounded clear & professional and have a nice rich vocal tone. I thought the read was a bit fast and heard upward inflections on the word “curiosity” both times in line three and the word “true” at the end of line six, as well as elongations of other words that made it seem a bit choppy and not super-confident sounding. Looking forward to hearing your final version of this!
~colleen
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OK ! I thought I should give this a shot , This is CNN! James Earl Jones!
please take it easy on me if I ruined it..lol-
I totally got the James Earl Jones vibe from this! Your pitch matches him quite well. I think your accent could be a great asset as well, it’s very unique (I have so much family in England but I’ve never heard anything quite like yours – such a cool sound). I agree that maybe working a bit more on getting the vowel sounds a little more distinct in the word “world” would strengthen this a lot. Other than that I thought it was great and you definitely didn’t ruin it!
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Hi mrtripo9!
You didn’t ruin it! You have that deep tone like James Earl Jones — just with a British accent! I think with a little practice with the enunciation, you have a great voice for promo work!
Good job! I look forward to listening to more of your reads!
Kathy
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Wow this is so fancy! Great bass tone in your voice. For a few plays I couldn’t understand “world’s” but I also don’t know how Mr. Earl Jones speaks. I’d love to hear more from you 🙂
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Is that your native British accent? If it is you should flout it, I would die for an English accent, maybe try some narration-story telling. Good luck and thanks for sharing that.
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Hi everyone! Upload of homework practice from the narration script library.
I noticed “aboard” did not come out very clearly in my read. What other feedback and critiques you got for me?
Thanks again!
Kathy
eLearning/Education
American Airlines
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Hi Kathy! Good read. I too am hearing some nasalness, but it may just be your accent / normal speaking voice that is unique to you. Good pacing and enunciation on the script throughout. I realize this is in the elearning category, but you might try it with a little more smile and energy in your voice to lift up the passengers. I haven’t flown in awhile (crazy year!) but I always like hearing funny upbeat airline stewards/stewardesses – helps get the passenger’s attention to actually listen to the announcement vs. just tune them out.
Mary
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I edited my entry, and then it didn’t submit the edit!
Anyway, about the nasal sound. I, too, noticed I sounded more nasally than normal yesterday. I do get congested in the colder months/spring time here in northern New England. I have a humidifier in the house downstairs (I do my recording in a bedroom upstairs), and use saline nasal mist sprays, but I may need to add another humidifier somewhere upstairs now that I am doing voiceover!
Kathy
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Thank you, Mary! Noted!
I struggled with this one yesterday. I’d work on it for an hour, walk away for 10-15 minutes, and repeat. Must of been a few hours. I finally said, I have to stop for now, and uploaded the end result.
I agree, I like funny stewards/stewardesses. I went back and forth as to how to deliver this. To me this script falls under the announcer category (maybe it’s in there), so definitely, upbeat would of been best. Then the other side of me thought, “Is this for a trainer video?”. It still should sound more upbeat, though, so thanks again for the feedback!
Kathy
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I had this issue previously, sounds like your speaking with too much nasal sounding, instead try to speak from your diaphragm maybe. Otherwise your pacing and enunciation are very good!
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Hey everyone! Hope everyone had a nice Thanksgiving. Posting another quick practice read. Let me know what you think!
McCholesterol
Come to McCholesterol’s and try our Triple Bacon and cheese Heart Attack Burger and triple fat fries! This Friday, for only fifty cents, at McCholesterol’s.
Eat for today, eat for the moment…
May as well, we’re all going to die soon anyways. Death by fast food, why not? … -
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Hi peeps! Here is a commercial read. Put together this script, any feedback is appreciated!
Sun B*m Hair Lightener is formulated to brighten your hair by amplifying the natural highlighting effects of the sun.
It’s infused with pineapples and lemons and has a hydrogen peroxide boost for faster results.
It smells like sunkissed summer, and does all the good things with none of the bad things.-
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Hi Katelyn – good read! I really like the tone and texture of your voice – good variation throughout. Your voice sounds well-suited for this type of commercial. Good job!
Mary
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