[David Goldberg]

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[monibr16]

Wow this was all around great!

[tomnunes]

Thank you so much for these kind and encouraging words! I’ll definitely post some commercials in the future. Take care!

[tomnunes]

Thanks, Mitch. Yeah, lists are tricky. I imagined the video might be showing the item one at a time, so the pauses made sense. Other lists are hard not to sound like a Powerpoint slide. :). And good catch on the 5/8’s as well. Thanks, again.

[tomnunes]

Thank you, Elvie!

[tomnunes]

Great catch on the 5/8’s, Steve. Thank you!

[tomnunes]

Thank you, Mary

[Barb]

Thank you Katelyn, great points!

[John Cromshow]

Solin- Money Worries – sounds just like an infomercial

[John Cromshow]

Dena – FFA – just the right pace and direct presentation needed for this educational spot; adjust for age group

[DenaDahilig]

Helloooooooo! This is a small portion of a 15-minute narration piece I’m recording for a client. The age of the audience is 10-18 (and their parents)… clarity is super important to the client.

In order to qualify, a student must be in seventh through eleventh grade, be a current FFA member, and demonstrate financial need. Grants are awarded primarily on financial need. The advisor’s statement is crucially important in establishing the financial need and eligibility of the applicant.

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[D M Ulmer]

Hi Dena,
You are quite clear. You accomplish what they require. It is straightforward. The message is delivered. Good audio.

Keep it up through the whole piece!

[Robert Broussard]

That was good. Nice pace, clear and concise.

[mkell755]

Hi Dena! Good read! The pacing and clarity were both good, but if the audience is primarily 10-18, it might be good to throw in a micro-pause at the end of the 2 sentences and let the listener catch up to what you are saying, possibly with a little more emphasis on “financial need”, both times it is mentioned. This seems to be a good genre for you!

Mary

[katelyndawnvo]

Hey there! Nothing technical stood out to me that you could improve. You could try sounding a little more enthusiastic or have more energy if this is for students as young as 10, but totally depends on what the client is asking for – as you stated. Really nice work!

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