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Narration VO, feedback on delivery/technique appreciated. Recorded on a practice mic (not pro mic) so tech feedback less important. Thank you!
Jerry Seinfeld
The move to New York meant returning to his roots for Seinfeld, who was born April 29, 1954, in Brooklyn and raised in the Long Island town of Massapequa (which he has always joked was an old Indian name meaning “by the mall”). After graduating from Queens College, Seinfeld appeared at New York comedy spots while supporting himself with odd jobs, including selling lightbulbs over the phone and waiting tables at Brew and Burger. As his act grew more polished, he honed the wry observational style that was to become his trademark.-
Hi DS,
The recording quality of this take does not have that “shuuuuuu” feedback, or sound, or whatever it was of the last one. Much better.
I liked this. Sounds as if you are talking about your friend Jerry. Good pacing. Tone. Dynamics of your voice were good. The listener becomes engaged and wants to go with you on this journey through Jerry’s bio.
Nice job!
Dawn
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Hi all! Here are 3 recordings for any and all feedback. Recordings 2 and 3 are the same, but with different background music. Let me know what you think! Thank you,
Mary
Beer Story
Next time you order a pint, you’ll find you taste something that isn’t in the recipe.
It doesn’t come from the hops. Or the two-row malted barley.
We like to call it character.
It’s hard to define but easy to recognize.
You find it in great women. And great beers.Duluth – Re-Re-Re-workers (recordings 2 and 3)
It’s there in the re-working. Satisfaction in the never satisfied. They thrive in the spaces unfinished. They live in the “make it better”. These are the “re – re- re-workers”. This is how they forge their way. Duluthtrading.com. -
Finally… an ad for Excedrin. More tonal variation here. Constructive criticism appreciated. Thank you for listening. I know I posted a lot today. 🙏🏼 🙂
Excedrin
Headaches. We all get them. We all wish they would go away. There is a solution. Excedrin. I just take two and there’s no more tension, no more throbbing, no more pain. My headache is completely gone.-
Good job, my only feedback is the pacing is to slow from beginning to end. In the beginning you can start a little slow because you are in pain and nobody feels good when they are in pain. Then start slowing picking up the pace starting with “There is a solution”. You’ve taken Excedrin you should be feeling good, no more pain. Happy/Relief. Overall great work!
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Hi again! Here’s something else – an audiobook excerpt I recorded. It’s non-fiction – a memoir of the great 20th century philosopher, Ludwig Wittgenstein, by his friend and colleague, Norman Malcolm. It’s a bit long, so listen only as far as you’re interested. All feedback appreciated, as always. Thanks folks!
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Hi folks. Here’s a promo spot I’ve recorded. Feedback welcome and appreciated.
Ancient Mysteries
Be it endless fascination with the Bible, or chilling tales of Gothic horror, man has been compelled by the wonders of the unknown since the beginning of time. From the possible existence of Big Foot to the grips of a mummy’s curse. Uncover the truth behind “Ancient Mysteries” tonight on Channel 4 … NBC. -
Hey everyone, I am working on a couple of scripts I am considering for a commercial demo. The Colorado read is two takes. The second script is for Zquill. I welcome any feedback.
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Hello Ed, Great reads! Your voice has a very rich, inviting timbre and I feel your choice of scripts complement it well.
COLORADO – Like the aspirational, dreamlike approach to your reads. If I had any minor nitpicks, your “wanted” in “You didn’t know you wanted” in your first read seems to drop out to a whisper (:03). You also might snip out your breath intake at (:11) on both. The reads sound similar to me though I do feel more energy in the second take.
ZQUILL – Another great read, very well-suited to the product. Might add more of a pause between “…like a baby” and “like a bear” (right now it sounds like you’re almost saying “Like a baby bear” instead of letting both visual images you’re conjuring hang in their own space).
Well done! Keep up the great work!
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Hello, everyone! Another pair of raw, at-home reads. Trying to work on my energy and self-directing to vary my performance as I find I often fall into the groove of one approach to a script and want to be more flexible.
As always, all comments are welcomed. Thanks for taking the time to listen!
KENNEDY SPACE CENTER
Look at us, heads down, our noses pressed against tiny little screens constantly searching for the next big thing. The next big thing isn’t happening in the palm of your hand, it’s happening above you –far above you. Come to where the most amazing things on earth… soar high above it. The Kennedy Space Center. Look up!
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Hi Rogue1, Really good! I like both of these reads, but prefer the second read by just a bit due to the variation in tones and the slightly increased energy levels. Both sounded really conversational and approachable and had nice bits in them. I did not hear a pause at all for “things on earth… soar..” at the triple periods, I think you could really lean into that pause for dramatic effect and really punch up “soar high above it!!!!” Overall really nice work!
Mary
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I like your tone. It’s playful, easy-going, a bit quirky at times. Someone you could have a few good laughs with.
The two reads had some nice variations in it. “tiny little screens” made me smile. Still, they were variations of the same theme, a sort of mocking tone. I’d encourage you to play with other attitudes. For instance, this feels directed towards youth. Try an encouraging tone. I think a good avatar for your voice is Owen Wilson. How would he say this to a couple of kids starring at their phone. Jake Johnson is another good avatar.
What other variations can you come up with? Basically, come up with different answers for: Who are you talking to? How are you going to convince them to come the the KSC?
One interpretation note. I’d honor the copywriter’s ellipses in “Come to where the most amazing things on earth… soar high above it” and add a pause. It’s a play on contradictions: “on earth” and “high above it”.
Thanks for sharing your work. If you come up with more variations, I’d love to hear them.
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Hi Tom! Thank you for your thoughtful insights and input.
Owen Wilson and Jake Johnson are great suggestions for avatars (especially as I’m a fan of both performers). Very good point on honing into precisely who I’m talking to–definitely would change my approach for a younger audience verses a jaded, more adult audience (or even a jaded younger audience!)
Agree with you and Mary that I steamrolled that ellipse and will definitely pay attention to that for future takes…stay tuned!
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Hello again! Here are two different reads to be evaluated separately. I’m continuing to work on technique and sounding natural. Thanks for any and all feedback! -Mitch
One: Come away with us on a journey to more fascinating destinations than you could ever encounter any other way. Sail the legendary waterways into the heart of the world’s greatest cities with Viking River Cruises. Elegant. Stylish. Exceptionally Comfortable. Spend less time getting there and more time being there.
Two: Put this card in the hands of a child and there’ll be no room for a gun. A needle. Or a knife. It’s only a piece of paper, but that little membership card has helped keep millions of kids off drugs, out of gangs and in school. To learn how you can help the Boys & Girls Clubs, call 1-800-854-Club. Boys & Girls Clubs of America. Great Futures start here.-
Hi Mitch, good delivery! I’ve been on a Viking cruise and they really are fantastic! Both reads were good, very clear, welcoming and with good pacing.
On the second read, I liked how you emphasized “in school”. There are a lot of periods and commas in this short read, which makes it tough to not sound choppy. I think you could speed up the overall pace just a tiny bit more and still get the emphasis you want Good job!!
Mary
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Hi Mitch! Great pair of reads—-very crisp and clear and definitely sounding quite natural to my ear. I’m always a fan of making things sound as conversational as possible (and strive to do so, myself) and I feel you’re making massive strides in perfecting that. Technically, I am hearing a touch of a hollow echo to your record. Maybe a little insulation around your recording space might help alleviate that?
Well done, sir! Keep up the great work!
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Hi all! Here’s my first attempt at trying an app voice over. Any comments about technique are welcome!
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Welcome to the 2021 TLX app, designed exclusively for TLX owners. This app lets you custom build and order your own TLX, by letting you select either the 2.0-liter turbo-four or the turbocharged 3.0-liter V6, as well as wheels, colors, and options. Hit “build my TLX” when you’re ready to begin.-
Hi Kevin – very good! Very clear delivery! I also heard “either the” blur together a bit, but all else sounded nice and crisp. It’s somewhat of a tongue twister there, so I would suggest emphasizing “either” and then not emphasizing “the”, which may help some. I hear a bit of echo in the recording, but that can be fixed with more insulation as per Rougue1. Good job!
Mary
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Hi Kevin. Great work! Very clear and crisp navigation of a rather complex script! If I had any constructive nit-picks, I might revisit “either the” in the second paragraph (at :16) as the two words seem to run together. As you have the read down cold, maybe try a version where you continue to amp up your energy. Technically, there’s a hollow-sounding quality to your recording (like you’re down in a vault), might try some sort of insulation to better focus the sound.
Great job! Keep it up!
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