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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi all! Its been a minute since I’ve posted anything in the forum. Here is a cold read. I realize there are some plosives and I mispronounced “East Campus”. I’m working on something I’ve been learning at Larry Hudson’s vocal workout group. He says “There are Phrases, and inside phrases are Ideas, and within ideas are beats” I’ve been blasting through my sentences for fear of the dreaded micropause where there shouldn’t be pauses, but in studying how to sound conversational, I realize that we do pause when we talk at certain times, often at the points mentioned above. Anyways, any feedback is appreciated thank you!
Welcome to Gordon College!
This tour begins just outside the tunnel that goes under College Drive near the flagpole.
We will tour East campus first, followed by West Campus, and end the tour back here at the tunnel.
Periodically, I will ask you to pause the recording so that you can walk to the next point or take a few minutes to independently tour the area.
I will always use the word “pause” when you need to pause the recording.
And I will always use the word “stop” when you need to stop walking while I continue speaking.-
Hey Katelyn,
I am a big fan — you always post amazing stuff!
This post seemed a little lacking in energy, particularly at the end of sentences: “Gordon College”, “at the tunnel.” The ending of the later sentences seemed rushed.
Just my thoughts.
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Hello again Forums! Hope you all are well. Today I have a script im testing and looking for any feedback you may have. Thanks in advance!
Fishing etiquette is all about being respectful of other anglers. Try not to overcrowd a spot where others are already fishing, and never keep more fish than you can eat. Most importantly make sure to check your state’s forestry department’s website for local laws as well as updates on regulations.
-Jay
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Hi there Jay! Nice read! I liked your tone of voice. One thing that popped out to me was your pause between “overcrowd a spot” There was a glottal stop here where you completely closed the back of your mouth between “overcrowd (close) a” this results in a harsh onset or “glottal stop” of the word “a”. Its common with vowels. To smooth this out you can imagine the word is spelled like this “overcrowdah”
Hope that helps! Once you recognize glottal stops you will never unsee them again (or should I say unhear) and we all do it!
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Very nice work! I’ll back up the other comments that the e-learning copy in particular worked perfectly with your voice, pacing, and natural smile. The one that I think could use a quicker pacing is the Enfamil copy; each individual line was spot on but in some areas there was almost a 1.5 second gap in between lines, and in a quick 15 second spot those would need to be shortened a bit.
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Really nice work!
The elearning was a particularly nice fit for you, and your pace was just perfect.
I got manifesto from the Enfamil piece, which I always struggle with.
The second one, the only thing I’d say is, was it supposed to be a :30? It seemed like making the list flow more in the middle could have brought it in on time, but perhaps that could also be accomplished in editing.Love it!
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Hi all, I’m working on a new Narration demo. I’ve identified the areas that are a more natural fit for me (Children, Grocery, Retail, Senior Care, Insurance). I was looking for your feedback on this piece that may be included in the demo (pace, tone, stylistic elements). Thanks!
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Hey Barb, first of all you are great! Awesome audio quality as well. Way to go! I would say that the list and the beginning all blended into one idea from what I could hear. It took me a few listens to understand that there were 3 things being pointed out for a care plan. I would say you could pace it a little more carefully/slowly as it would be accompanying a video. Maybe you could pause a little longer at “care plan (pause) that includes” Just to let us catch up with you. I think once you got into the list you offered some great variety in the list. Maybe my brain is just slow because it is the end of my day lol! But great job, the copy is a perfect fit for your voice.
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CLASS: Self Direction and Cold Read class with David Goldberg on Tuesday February 9, 16, 23, 2021)
HOMEWORK: Submit three audio files before tonight’s class (Feb. 16, 5:00-6:30 p.m. Pacific Time.
I welcome feedback. Thank you!
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Hi all, I feel I’ve been sounding a little monotone lately so I’ve been working on some sales pitches, trying to sound excited and believable. Any comments on performance and /or recording would be appreciated !
Thanks, SteveScript:
You don’t realize it yet, but in the next 8 minutes you’ll be getting the secret of how to stop money-worries for the rest of your life.
If you would like to know how someone can start with a simple idea & a tiny, tiny trading account… and then… explode it MULTIPLE times over… this is going to be the most interesting video you will ever see.-
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Hey! I really like the way you put emphasis on multiple, it totally sounds like an outrageously good offer while still being completely believable. The only potential critique I have is that I think it could use a bit more of a pause after “and then.”
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Hello, for the ones who understand Spanish, here is a take….I look forward for your feedback. Thanks.
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Hey Mauricio! I LOVE the second half of that read! The closing is awesome, especially with tone and tempo, and it reminds me of when I listened to radio in the Dominican Republic way back when. My Spanish vocab is super weak now, 30+ years later, but the latter part was super clear and fun to listen to. I recognize your reading would be heard by the Spanish-speaking listeners, but the company info at the beginning ran together too much for my slow americano ears. The first sentence… “en todo la republica” perhaps needs more of a punch? If the company is the best in the entire republic, perhaps a pause after that for it to sink in? Again, I may be way off, and you def need input from a native Spanish speaker, but I thought I’d chime in because I love listening to the language, y tu voz es SUPERbueno!
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Hello! This is my first time posting to this forum (voice over is brand new to me), so I am open to any feedback. Thank you!
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Hi cbehrens, welcome! Your voice has a nice, soft, breathy quality to it. I like it better in the second spot. My critique would be that you almost sound too timid/quiet, like there’s somebody in the next room you don’t want to disturb. I love the first line of the second spot, like we’re at a conference sitting next to each other and you have your hand up blocking your mouth and talking to me only–“what exactly IS creaTIVITY?!” I would love to hear the answer to the question be more assertive and with a bit more volume. You have a great voice–open up that throat chakra and let us all hear! Looking forward to hearing more from you! 🙂
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Hi Dawn loved your read and pace. I feel like I can hear you pushing emphasis with certain words that may not need to be but that also could just be what i’m hearing. I feel I catch myself doing that too at times. Great Job.
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Hi D M Ulmer, your voice and style, plus audio quality are very good. You close the spot it very well to my ears. I think you can also clean the audio so your breathing pauses are not there. Good job!.
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Hi all, here are my two takes of a 30-sec radio spot. I was a little over 30 secs on the first take, so I did a second take at a quicker tempo. Thanks for listening!
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