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[Barb]

Thank you Katelyn, great points!

[John Cromshow]

Solin- Money Worries – sounds just like an infomercial

[John Cromshow]

Dena – FFA – just the right pace and direct presentation needed for this educational spot; adjust for age group

[DenaDahilig]

Helloooooooo! This is a small portion of a 15-minute narration piece I’m recording for a client. The age of the audience is 10-18 (and their parents)… clarity is super important to the client.

In order to qualify, a student must be in seventh through eleventh grade, be a current FFA member, and demonstrate financial need. Grants are awarded primarily on financial need. The advisor’s statement is crucially important in establishing the financial need and eligibility of the applicant.

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[D M Ulmer]

Hi Dena,
You are quite clear. You accomplish what they require. It is straightforward. The message is delivered. Good audio.

Keep it up through the whole piece!

[Robert Broussard]

That was good. Nice pace, clear and concise.

[mkell755]

Hi Dena! Good read! The pacing and clarity were both good, but if the audience is primarily 10-18, it might be good to throw in a micro-pause at the end of the 2 sentences and let the listener catch up to what you are saying, possibly with a little more emphasis on “financial need”, both times it is mentioned. This seems to be a good genre for you!

Mary

[katelyndawnvo]

Hey there! Nothing technical stood out to me that you could improve. You could try sounding a little more enthusiastic or have more energy if this is for students as young as 10, but totally depends on what the client is asking for – as you stated. Really nice work!

[John Cromshow]

Barb – Mercy Home – nice, confidence-building, warm; slower, pauses

[John Cromshow]

L. Houle
(1) Baby Formula – smooth, confidence-building; pronunciation of “nourish”
(2) Chateau – hospitality exemplified, can hear the smile
(3) RFP – warm, educational attitude; slower, pause to help listeners process the information

[L Houle]

Wow… Thanks a bunch for details!

[John Cromshow]

Jay – Fishing – great for this type of public service announcement; just a tad slower might be good

[John Cromshow]

Katelyn – Gordon College – nice tone, friendly, helps build confidence; slower, pause, as people are listening for the first time

[John Cromshow]

Here we go again! One, two, three. HOMEWORK – Week 1
Self-Directing and Cold Reads Feb. 16, 2021

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[touzet]

There’s some phasing / flanging kind of thing happening. This is often a result of using (over using) noise reduction. Are you employing noise reduction?…If so, you may be better off just going with the noise. Also, If you are using NR, you need to make sure you’re are giving it a legit room sample (room tone) to work with.

[DenaDahilig]

Hey there! OK! First of all, have you set up a home studio yet? You sound kinda boom-y/echo-y which will right away take your audition out of consideration. If you’re just recording these for class and are not submitting auditions from home then let’s just dive into your reads. As always, you could read me the Wall Street Journal and make it sound like cookies and a warm fire… so there’s that.

I can only hit a couple of points for each of these…

I’d love for you to give the first word in the first two spots the same importance that you give the first word of the last one.

First spot. What is important about having two boys and being close to a grocery store and hospital? Know the answer before you say that line. Find the humor and irony in that.

Second spot. I completely lose “When the…” at the top. Overall the second read is nice and I think if you take your time a bit more with it you can lock it in.

Third spot. I didn’t understand the words “dark spot” and “targeted”. The whole read was a bit rushed and mushy. And I say that with love.

I think you should REALLY work on giving yourself a lead in for each these. It’ll help you sound more connected and conversational.

GREAT to hear you again!

Dena

[cynthia-hamilton@outlook.com]

Hi Barb,

I was engaged through your entire read. Your voice was clear and I could hear your smile. The only suggestion is that you slow your pace down a bit.

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