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[solin232]

Hi, This is some practice for an up coming coaching session, Any feedback would be appreciated. Thanks for listening!

Deck Care Script:

Deck care is easy with an all-in-one solution like the Signature Series Stain and Sealer from Thompson’s Water-Seal—the leader in waterproofing protection!
This innovative water-based formula is quick and easy to use.
Just apply one coat. It dries to the touch in two hours.
And clean-up only involves soap and water !

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[tomnunes]

Great read! I agree with Tiffany, you’d be perfect for this kind of ad. Your voice has an authoritative yet friendly sound. There’s one wrong word in the first sentence. You read “THE all-in-one solution” instead of “AN all-in-one solution”. I think correcting this will help with what sounded a bit like a loss of breath with the product name. Make “Deck care is easy with an all-in-one solution” one connected phrase and “like the Signature Series Stain and Sealer from Thompson’s Water-Seal” another. Not a pause, mind you, but it may make that long product name more manageable.

[solin232]

Thanks tomnunes I appreciate the cretic

[Tiffany Desrosiers]

Hello!

Awesome voice! Definetly could see you doing this commercial! My one suggestion is think about who you’re talking to. Picture this… It’s a beautiful Summer day, a few of your friends and/or neighbors came over to your house for a backyard bbq. Some of the guys are complaining about how the winter really messed up their decks BUT YOUR DECK… wow man, what did you do to get your deck so shiny and brand new looking?!
Now’s your chance to brag a little.. tell them ALL ABOUT the Signature Series Stain & Sealer from Thompsons Water-Seal you used on your deck! 😉

[solin232]

Thanks Tiffany, very helpful !

[Toque]

Hi all. Commercial practice script (see below). Feedback on anything and everything appreciated. Does my voice suit this kind of commercial? Any other thoughts on what it might be suited for? Thanks. Toque

Script:

Purina One Special Formula for Cats is made with real chicken. Good news for your cat. Great news for your canary. For a complete adult diet for your cat and the real chicken he wants, give him Purina One Special Formula. Your canary will thank you for it. Purina One. Second to none.

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[Tiffany Desrosiers]

Hi Toque!

Great voice & good read! I would recommend working on your tone when reading it. Like, give us a bit of a playful sarcasm when telling us “it’s great news for the canary” and “your canary will thank you for it”.

I did like how you hit “Purina One” letting us know like “haha we’re laughing… Now go buy the product!” 🙂

[Toque]

Thanks Tiffany! Much appreciated. T

[West]

Hello,

This is a bit of practice for my coaching sessions. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thank you for listening

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[Toque]

Hi West. Volume is coming through extremely low, making it hard to hear. Toque

[touzet]

Trying out some of these Americana – Southern-ish spots…

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[monibr16]

Very believable accent at a great pace. Good job

[Toque]

Sounds great Touzet. Well done! Toque

[Robert Broussard]

Good read and background music compliments as well. Voice is well suited for this as well. 👍

[Robert Broussard]

Any feedback is well appreciated. Thanks

Justin Boots (Pecos Red)
Hi, I’m Pecos Red, for Justin Boots. Ever heard the term: “All Hat and no cattle”? That’s the problem with a lot of boots – I know. Sounds weird; but the thing of it is that most boots don’t do the same things your feet do, like expand – and – contract when you take a step.
Most boots are rigid, which is why your “dawgs commence to barkin’” and get all swole up, from yer boot-heels
a wanderin’….
At Justin Boots, our technology is a simple i.d. (idea) that comes right out of the way your foot works.
It’s how we build ever’ boot we make.
So’s it expands – and flexes the way your foot does when it’s out riding the range, or just boot-scootin’ out at Billy Bob’s.
For Justin Boots, I’m Pecos Red, remindin’ ya:
Justin Boots Quality – It’s a DANG good thing.
– And, never kick a cow chip on a hot day!

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[Toque]

I thought this was a good read Robert! Pacing seemed good. Voice and style are well matched to the product. Closing my eyes and not looking at the script, I could understand everything you were saying, so good on enunciation. Toque

[monibr16]

Hello everyone! Here’s another practice read for my coaching sessions, please let me know what you think!Thank you!
-Monique

Kids Activity TV
Every day is an adventure with Activity TV. It’s the place to be for hundreds of Awesome activities in dozens of categories! Cartooning to magic to cooking and more – ready for you day or night. This month learn some gross out magic. Watch closely as Ryan teaches you to perform the severed finger trick!

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[Andrea]

Loved it! I really liked the way you changed tones to create different images. Well done!

[Tiffany Desrosiers]

Loved it!! Great read!👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾

[Toque]

I thought this was great as well. Can really hear the smile and excitement/anticipation in your voice. Great job! Toque

[Robert Broussard]

That was good. Very conversational changing tones. Good job!!

[Mcsketcher]

After falling down a tutorial fx rabbit hole… I’m back with my voice, compression and a little music… any thoughts welcome audio quality, delivery etc… esp the pause at “it is, for the moment”. Too William shatner-ish???

Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows; A world positively rippling with life. From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.

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[RYoung]

Great voice, I’m sure you’ve heard that one before! The only thing I would do is slow down and lower the music slightly, nice work on this!

[Tiffany Desrosiers]

Wow what a soothing voice! I loved it! I think the music was a bit loud kind of overpowering you… not a lot. I agree with a few other replies that a little less pausing would give your read more “smoothness”, but I disagree that it should be conversational… I like how you “presented” it!
Awesome job!

[chas82]

You have a great voice for this type of narration. Nice articulation and changes in tone and pitch throughout. I would suggest trying more of a conversational style than a “presenting” style. The length of the pauses caused a choppiness that made it difficult to appreciate the complete story by the time you were heading into the big finish. Smoothing this out will draw fuller attention from the listener. Chas

[Toque]

There do feel like quite a few micro-pauses in there. To my ear anyway, it felt like it slowed the read down a bit too much and made it feel choppy. Of course, it depends too on what the read is for – If this is a narration and you’re pausing to wait for something changing on the screen or something like that, then maybe it’s OK? I do love your voice for this…very well suited. Toque

[danielh04]

Hello everyone, just practicing once more for my coaching sessions, I’ll be greatly thankful for your feedback!

Script:
When Starbucks creamer meets your morning coffee, your favorite Starbucks flavors come to life. Smooth, bold, creamy. Inspired by the Starbucks Caramel Macchiato you love. Mornings just got better. This changes everything. New Starbucks creamer. Now at home.

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[Robert Broussard]

Daniel, Good job! Nice pace and consistent tone.

[RYoung]

Any feedback is most welcome!
Our welcome mat is this original cobblestone street. From here, together, we’ll explore the sights, sounds, and flavors only found in one place: right here in Charleston, South Carolina. And you’ll learn that the stories you’ve heard about our legendary hospitality are true.

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[danielh04]

The music caught me by surprise but I thought it was a great add-on, your enunciation on each of the words were great and it didn’t seem like you skipped on any of them, however, I do believe that you should slow down a bit, especially when you start mentioning “the sights, sounds, and flavors…” Other than that, great job, your voice truly catches attention.

[monibr16]

Hello everyone! Working on commercial work for coaching sessions. Don’t have a home studio, so mainly focusing on my delivery. Feedback is appreciated, thank you!
– Monique

American Express
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.

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[chas82]

Hi Monique
Nicely done! I thought the tone, pace and attitude you brought was perfect for this particular message. I did hear two words where I thought the pronunciation needed tweaked but I can’t tell if it is my equipment or not. They are both in the fourth sentence.

Get – sounded like G*T
Transaction – sounded like TRUNSACTION

Keep up the good work —Chas

[danielh04]

I thought it was a really good read, the lead-in was also a nice touch!

[monibr16]

Thank you Daniel!

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