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Hello everyone, just practicing once more for my coaching sessions, I’ll be greatly thankful for your feedback!
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When Starbucks creamer meets your morning coffee, your favorite Starbucks flavors come to life. Smooth, bold, creamy. Inspired by the Starbucks Caramel Macchiato you love. Mornings just got better. This changes everything. New Starbucks creamer. Now at home. -
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Our welcome mat is this original cobblestone street. From here, together, we’ll explore the sights, sounds, and flavors only found in one place: right here in Charleston, South Carolina. And you’ll learn that the stories you’ve heard about our legendary hospitality are true.-
The music caught me by surprise but I thought it was a great add-on, your enunciation on each of the words were great and it didn’t seem like you skipped on any of them, however, I do believe that you should slow down a bit, especially when you start mentioning “the sights, sounds, and flavors…” Other than that, great job, your voice truly catches attention.
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Hello everyone! Working on commercial work for coaching sessions. Don’t have a home studio, so mainly focusing on my delivery. Feedback is appreciated, thank you!
– MoniqueAmerican Express
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.-
Hi Monique
Nicely done! I thought the tone, pace and attitude you brought was perfect for this particular message. I did hear two words where I thought the pronunciation needed tweaked but I can’t tell if it is my equipment or not. They are both in the fourth sentence.Get – sounded like G*T
Transaction – sounded like TRUNSACTIONKeep up the good work —Chas
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Continued practice! Trying out some more narration, all comments are appreciated- especially those focused on performance! The author’s name is pronounced a little strangely so I looked it up before making my recording to make sure it is correct.
What Makes You Happy?
What makes you happier? A pay rise? Your dream house? According to happiness experts, we now know more than ever about what can make us happier and what can’t. “Most of us think that having millions or a sports car would make us happy,” says Dr. Nick Powdthavee, author of The Happiness Equation, “but we’ve found the things that brought people the most happiness were those they had already, such as friends and family.”
Some of us are born with personality traits that keep us on a natural high. Psychologists have now identified over 130 traits that corelate to being naturally happy or glum. Not naturally joyful? Try and work on these: You’re naturally happy if you are: Extroverted, understanding, self-confident, creative, assertive and practical. You’re naturally unhappy, if you anger easily, are self-conscious, anxious and almost always feel stressed. So, what is it, that makes you happy or glum?
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Hi everyone! Just doing some practice on commercial work. Any feedback is appreciate – thanks!
My child has quite an imagination. His teachers say that some day he’ll be doing great things. Right now, he’s already an architect, a designer, an engineer … I think he’s a creative genius … and thanks to Legos, the creative building toy, there’s just no limit to what he can do. LEGOS … the creative diversion that helps develop a child’s potential.
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Very nice work! I’ll echo the other comment that you could lean more into the build up to “I think he’s a creative genius” before flipping and revealing the humor written into the script that it’s really Legos that are being referenced. A slightly more clear distinction between the parts would help the humor shine and give your already great read the extra bump to broadcast ready in my eyes!
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Christy. Really nice read. A conversational sound with nice moments. I could hear the proud mother coming through. What’s a bit lost, as I hear it, is the twist in the copy: going from “an architect, a designer, an engineer” seeming literal (albeit incredulous) to, “Ah, I get it! Legos!” I’m can’t pinpoint what’s off, though. It may be that the ellipses are treated more like periods. As a suggestion, don’t complete the thought at “an engineer”, rather make the list sound as if it could go on and on but you stop yourself. On a technical note, at the end of “great things” much of the ‘s’ was lost. It sounded more like an editing issue than technique. But, overall, well done!
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I redid this taking some advice from peers. Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks
Life insurance.
Life Insurance: It isn’t for the people who die, it’s for the people who live.
Are you prepared?
Without insurance, your financial plan may be just a savings and investment program that dies when you do.
What will your family do then?
An insurance agent or other financial professional can help you create a plan that will provide for the people you love after you’re gone.
To learn more, call 1-800-LIFE-777 or visit our website at http://www.LifeLine.org-
Hey Robert,
I like your voice tone ..I think a little rushed as well..
Noticed your volume changed in the last quarter of read. May want to watch your meter for consistency.
Just trying to be helpful here..
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Hi Robert, I really enjoy listening to your voice. It has a very nice quality to it! The read feels a little rushed to me. What would you think about the briefest of pauses after the questions? Or maybe it’s just a change in tone from the question to the sentence that follows it. I think I would feel as if you were really asking me the question. Nice work overall!
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Charleston, SC
Discover the Charleston area- America’s most beautifully preserved historic and resort destination. Stately plantations, sun-drenched beaches, nationally acclaimed restaurants, and world-class golf offer something for everyone.
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Hi Wes – You have a great voice! I did feel like the beginning of the read sounded a big robotic and that you could lift up the energy a bit. Maybe even try doing it with a bit more of a smile on your face. The transitions between the sentences were a bit choppy as well, but I am thinking that may just be editing. The words are so beautiful so imagine you are really describing those to someone – like the way you said “sun-drenched beaches”. I think this is a really great script for you!
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Hi, Wes. Great voice with a deep and warm resonance. The words were crisp and clear. Nice read. Some things to pay attention to. As this is about Charleston, emphasize the name. You chose to emphasize “area” instead. Watch unneeded pauses: “preserved historic (pause) and resort destination”; “world-class golf (pause) offer something (pause) for everyone.” Try it without the pauses and see how it feels. Let the list in the last line drive to the key point: something for everyone.
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Hello, I recorded twice in a little different tone. I appreciate all feedback. Thanks!
Life Insurance.
Life insurance. It isn’t for the people who die, it’s for the people who live. Are you prepared? Without insurance, your financial plan may be just a savings and investment program that dies when you do. What will your family do then? An insurance agent or other financial professional can help you create a plan that will provide for the people you love after you’re gone. To learn more, call 1-800-LIFE-777 or visit our website at http://www.LifeLine.org-
Hi Roert –
You have a great reassuring tone to your voice. I’m not sure I heard a great deal of difference between each of the reads (I’ve received the same feedback here) so can’t say I have a preference of one over the other. I really like the pace of this so I don’t know how you get it in at 26 seconds!? One element to think about is that when you are talking about death you are really taking your pitch up and it feels more positive than I think the script is trying for. I would recommend taking an approach that you are talking to your best friend and maybe not lecturing him but giving him a stern warning that he may not be setting up his family in the best way. This may give you another variety to compare the reads. Articulation and clarity were great!
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I think the first take was better, though I do think you may be rushing throught the script a little. Also you sound like your pausing in the middle of a sentence and you must never do that. Remember to behave as if you’re talking to someone. Also, when reading the Phone number, you sounded as if you had concluded it after saying LIFE and 777 was more of a postscript. I hope this helps.
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Thanks Tim for the feeback. Using the rate calculator that should have been on average 26 seconds. I was squeezing it in trying to get under 30 secs and failed. 32 seconds was my best time. If I would have read it properly for me it would have been more like 40s. I try to speed things up to work on talking faster. I am generally a slow talker. I appreciate your feedback.
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Jay – I could see the intro “flyover the ocean… birds flapping…approaching a desolate island”. Your voice really set me up for that visual. This is a great one for you. I felt as if you were running out of breath on “…wilderness” so just something to keep an ear out for. I would also recommend connecting “6 billion” more and distressing the “6”. It sounds a little harsh. I enjoy how it sounds like you are whispering in the mic! If you are looking for another way to read – pretend like you are speaking to a children’s classroom. I often find if I read in 2 completely different ways I can find a good balance between the 2. Have fun!
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