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Hello kind folks! Uploading a few takes of commercial reads I’m working on. I really appreciate the time and any feedback you have.
All the best,
John
PSA ON ENVIRONMENT
A key to reducing waste is to shop wisely and purchase only what you need
You can also buy household products with less packaging
And when it comes to food opt for loose produce
So reduce, then recycle the rest
The more you know
Aspen
At the gate the everyday vanishes
Here your thoughts are a little clearer
Your appetite for life a little sharper
This mountain, as captivating under summer flowers as it is under snow
Aspen is a one-of-a-kind resort
Unhurried Carefree And cozy like an Alpine Village under a starry night
Ambien
There is a rhythm to life
We sleep at night and wake in the morning
It’s the sleep cycle that helps keep us in a healthy balance
But for millions of Americans sleep doesn’t always come easily
For them there’s AMBIEN
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Hi, John. Some nice reads here. Words are clear. For the most part, you avoided unnecessary pauses. The energy in your read is great for the PSA. You had a similar energy or tone for Aspen and Ambient, which, in my opinion, calls for a calmer energy. Aspen feels like it calls for an easy, relaxed, dreamy, leave your troubles at the door and relax tone. If you haven’t, find a person you’re talking to. What do you want them to feel? Where are you while saying this. Paint the picture for them. The line “This mountain, as captivating…” has unique punctuation. It’s kind of like “This mountain (man-oh-man) as captivating…
For Ambien, this may be just my interpretation, but an ad that promotes sleep should sound calming and relaxing. There’s an interesting arc to the city you can play with more. 1) this is nice. 2) this is nice. 3) and this is nice. 4) this is bad, 5) but this will make it good.
If you are also looking for feedback on sound quality, the audio has a lot of echo. You’ll have to treat your recording space. Are you working with anyone to help with that?
Thanks for sharing, John.
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This was taken from the script of a movie about Columbus. Trying or practicing narration to go along with a storyboard! Any thoughts are welcome. Oh and this is the first part thats why it ends so abruptly, Thanks.
All sit beside her. TREASURER SANCHEZ takes a document
and starts to read aloud.On screen the words: GRANADA – SPAIN – 1500
SANCHEZ
Your Majesty would wish to know the true facts concerning the island of
Hispanola, our first settlement in the New World, and the activities
there of your servant, Christopher Columbus, Admiral of the Ocean Sea,
Governor of that Island. You will remember with what hopes and promises
he beguiled us — the truth is that he now presides over a state
of chaos, degradation and madness beyond imagining.SANCHEZ punctuates each word carefully.
SANCHEZ
From the beginning, Columbus proved himself incapable of managing the
affairs of the island. He appointed his brothers to important positions,
at once injuring the pride and dignity of the nobles who had gone
with him. He promised to build a city, the City of Isabel, named
after Your Majesty. What he actually built was nothing but a
collection of huts, and that in the wrong place, for all of it was
easily swept away by rain and mud. Is that not so, Brother Buyl?The PRIEST nods.
BROTHER BUYL
Yes, Your Honor.SANCHEZ
He promised gold. Not finding the
easy quantities he promised,
Columbus commanded each Indian to
pay an annual tribute. Most being
unable to, they were barbarously
punished, against the express wish
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Hello, My name is Jeff, I attached a couple of scrips I recorded for homework. Look forward to your feedback.
Thanks.
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Hey looking for some feedback. Thank you guys.
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I liked the pace and clarity of the words. Very natural- the only thing I thought was the word ‘however’ was a little rushed without enough of a pause.
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Good Evening everyone, I wanted to get some feedback on a recording I did this week for Narration. Thanks in advance.
Cheers!
As the tide covers the dock with just an inch or two of water these Tiger Sharks are making their move. Nurse sharks can sometimes propel themselves onto docks when going after scraps of fish. It’s a learned behavior, and evidence that sharks may come on land to feed. Is that also what these sharks are attempting to do?
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That was great! Good job for your first time. You definitely got the relaxing vibe down and your natural delivery has nice pacing to it. The only thing I noticed was the words “you will” in the sentence “during this breathing medication, you will focus on your breath” sound rushed together so I’d just enunciate that clearer.
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Hey Guys!
Here are the 3 scripts i recorded for homework for my coach. im working on my glottals and trying to use more range in my voice. Feedback is welcomed.
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Hello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback here – same script read 2 slightly different ways. Which do you like better and why? Thanks!
Mary
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Hi Mary,
I thoroughly enjoyed listening to both readings, but I felt that the second reading was the one that seemed the more natural, the more convincing. It was almost as if you were addressing an audience that you could actually see. Sounds a little bizarre, I am sure, but it seemed that there was more of a connection between you and an audience in your second reading and that that translated into a more natural flow, with emphasis falling where your instincts told you, and suggestion of a script in your hands pushed to one side.
Thank you for sharing.
John
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Good evening everyone, I have three more scripts that I’m interested in sharing! As always, I appreciate extreme criticism!
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Hi Dante, very nice! I really like your nice deep voice and warm delivery – great clarity and pacing. I like scripts 1 and 3 best for you. The second script felt more like you were reading to me, not sure why that was exactly, maybe just more emphasized enunciation than the other two? The other two sounded more natural and with good inflection levels. Keep up the good work!
Mary
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I believe the volume was loud on my end in listening to your recording. You can always normalize down to correct that unless you were redlining when recording. Otherwise your delivery is great, I would just back off on the mic slightly to avoid too many mouth noises, unless that was the volume issue? Ancient mysteries was a little too stiff, so relax maybe and try a more conversational delivery? Hope that helps and good luck!
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All comments most welcome!
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