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All feedback appreciated. Thanks!
Barneys Mens apparel 60s from 70s TV
In 1923 Barney Pressman opened a little store on 7th Avenue and 17th Street. He opened that store with a grand total of 40 suits. He sold the suits during the good times and he got by on the seat of his pants during the bad times. He worked long…and he worked hard. But if he did anything, he always gave the people in this town what they wanted. Their money’s worth. He named his store Barney’s. And today his store is still giving people their money’s worth. Only now, Barney’s has a lot more to give. Today that little hole in the block is not only the whole block, it’s the single largest men’s store in the world. Barney’s has changed a lot since 1923…but the idea of giving people their money’s worth hasn’t. -
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Hello there! This is my first coaching sessions homework I am to upload. Would love any feedback. I am looking forward to learning more. Thanks!
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Very nice reads. You have a nice youthful sound which I see called for in many auditions. Adding to the comments already provided, I heard a lot of plosives, especially in the first one. (If this unfamiliar to you, it is percussive base notes caused by bursts of air from consonants like p’s and b’s). Some things to help: Use a pop filter if not already. Position the mic at a slight angle from your mouth so you are not speaking directly into it. And a speaking trick is smile while speaking the p’s or b’s. This will reduce their force. Great job. Good luck with your coaching and your VO journey.
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Thanks for the feedback! Plosives were definitely something I worked to soften in the editing but still came across some that were just being troublesome. I left them in after doing what I could for the express purpose of hearing feedback on them. I only just learned about changing the angle of my mic, so that will something I use for sure going forward. Didn’t know about smiling while pronouncing those sounds though. I’ll get used to that technique and add it to my limited, but growing, toolkit. Thank you!
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Not too bad! I think the first one was a little too fast. The second was better. Good job overall, Keep working at it!!
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Reading fast will be probably the biggest thing I have to get over. I talk fast naturally and I feel so weird slowing down! But it’s fun nontheless. Thanks!
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Hi! Great job on both readings! I have a few suggestions that I’m learning myself! Okay, so on the first read I’d recommend thinking of a lead-in like your talking to an older aunt or uncle and even though it’s not the greatest conversation, you still want to try and get them kind of excited about this new option of surgery! Also, I’d recommend slowing down… Which you did do a little ways into the read!
And for the second read, you definetly sounded more comfortable doing this one! My thought is, think as if you’re talking to someone in their hmm… Early 20’s, you know make it a little more of an informal convo with a little less articulation.
Keep up the great work! 👌🏾
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Oooo thanks for these suggestions! I had taken the Medical one as an informative video if you will, kind of like something someone would find on a site they end up on researching the surgery. Didn’t think to interpret it as talking to a family member. That’s a good angle. And I definitely am a fast talker in general. Slowing down is going to be one of my biggest hurdles lol.
And I was definitely more comfortable with the second read. Me and my coach went over thinking it felt like a slideshow of sorts for kids learning about recycling. Still want to make it fun and approachable without coming off as condescending(?). Looking at it like I’m explaining it to an adult would change my tone I’m sure. Thanks!
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Hi, This is some practice for an up coming coaching session, Any feedback would be appreciated. Thanks for listening!
Deck Care Script:
Deck care is easy with an all-in-one solution like the Signature Series Stain and Sealer from Thompson’s Water-Seal—the leader in waterproofing protection!
This innovative water-based formula is quick and easy to use.
Just apply one coat. It dries to the touch in two hours.
And clean-up only involves soap and water !-
Great read! I agree with Tiffany, you’d be perfect for this kind of ad. Your voice has an authoritative yet friendly sound. There’s one wrong word in the first sentence. You read “THE all-in-one solution” instead of “AN all-in-one solution”. I think correcting this will help with what sounded a bit like a loss of breath with the product name. Make “Deck care is easy with an all-in-one solution” one connected phrase and “like the Signature Series Stain and Sealer from Thompson’s Water-Seal” another. Not a pause, mind you, but it may make that long product name more manageable.
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Hello!
Awesome voice! Definetly could see you doing this commercial! My one suggestion is think about who you’re talking to. Picture this… It’s a beautiful Summer day, a few of your friends and/or neighbors came over to your house for a backyard bbq. Some of the guys are complaining about how the winter really messed up their decks BUT YOUR DECK… wow man, what did you do to get your deck so shiny and brand new looking?!
Now’s your chance to brag a little.. tell them ALL ABOUT the Signature Series Stain & Sealer from Thompsons Water-Seal you used on your deck! 😉 -
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Hi all. Commercial practice script (see below). Feedback on anything and everything appreciated. Does my voice suit this kind of commercial? Any other thoughts on what it might be suited for? Thanks. Toque
Script:
Purina One Special Formula for Cats is made with real chicken. Good news for your cat. Great news for your canary. For a complete adult diet for your cat and the real chicken he wants, give him Purina One Special Formula. Your canary will thank you for it. Purina One. Second to none.
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Hi Toque!
Great voice & good read! I would recommend working on your tone when reading it. Like, give us a bit of a playful sarcasm when telling us “it’s great news for the canary” and “your canary will thank you for it”.
I did like how you hit “Purina One” letting us know like “haha we’re laughing… Now go buy the product!” 🙂
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Any feedback is well appreciated. Thanks
Justin Boots (Pecos Red)
Hi, I’m Pecos Red, for Justin Boots. Ever heard the term: “All Hat and no cattle”? That’s the problem with a lot of boots – I know. Sounds weird; but the thing of it is that most boots don’t do the same things your feet do, like expand – and – contract when you take a step.
Most boots are rigid, which is why your “dawgs commence to barkin’” and get all swole up, from yer boot-heels
a wanderin’….
At Justin Boots, our technology is a simple i.d. (idea) that comes right out of the way your foot works.
It’s how we build ever’ boot we make.
So’s it expands – and flexes the way your foot does when it’s out riding the range, or just boot-scootin’ out at Billy Bob’s.
For Justin Boots, I’m Pecos Red, remindin’ ya:
Justin Boots Quality – It’s a DANG good thing.
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Hello everyone! Here’s another practice read for my coaching sessions, please let me know what you think!Thank you!
-MoniqueKids Activity TV
Every day is an adventure with Activity TV. It’s the place to be for hundreds of Awesome activities in dozens of categories! Cartooning to magic to cooking and more – ready for you day or night. This month learn some gross out magic. Watch closely as Ryan teaches you to perform the severed finger trick! -
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After falling down a tutorial fx rabbit hole… I’m back with my voice, compression and a little music… any thoughts welcome audio quality, delivery etc… esp the pause at “it is, for the moment”. Too William shatner-ish???
Welcome to the planet earth. A place of blue nitrogen skies, oceans of liquid water, cool forests, soft meadows; A world positively rippling with life. From the cosmic perspective, it is, for the moment, unique. The only world on which we know with certainty that the matter of the cosmos has become alive, and aware. There must be many such worlds scattered through space, but our search for them begins here, with the accumulated wisdom of the men and women of our species, acquired at great cost, over a million years.
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Great voice, I’m sure you’ve heard that one before! The only thing I would do is slow down and lower the music slightly, nice work on this!
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Wow what a soothing voice! I loved it! I think the music was a bit loud kind of overpowering you… not a lot. I agree with a few other replies that a little less pausing would give your read more “smoothness”, but I disagree that it should be conversational… I like how you “presented” it!
Awesome job!
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You have a great voice for this type of narration. Nice articulation and changes in tone and pitch throughout. I would suggest trying more of a conversational style than a “presenting” style. The length of the pauses caused a choppiness that made it difficult to appreciate the complete story by the time you were heading into the big finish. Smoothing this out will draw fuller attention from the listener. Chas
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There do feel like quite a few micro-pauses in there. To my ear anyway, it felt like it slowed the read down a bit too much and made it feel choppy. Of course, it depends too on what the read is for – If this is a narration and you’re pausing to wait for something changing on the screen or something like that, then maybe it’s OK? I do love your voice for this…very well suited. Toque
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Hello everyone, just practicing once more for my coaching sessions, I’ll be greatly thankful for your feedback!
Script:
When Starbucks creamer meets your morning coffee, your favorite Starbucks flavors come to life. Smooth, bold, creamy. Inspired by the Starbucks Caramel Macchiato you love. Mornings just got better. This changes everything. New Starbucks creamer. Now at home. -
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