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I’ve offered some feedback on this forum before, but this is my first time posting a VO sample. Hope I’m doing it right. This narration script for the Martin Guitar Factory Tour may be a script for my demo; we’ll see. I’m posting two slightly-different versions. I’m not sure, on the phrase “visual appointments,” whether I want to stress”visual” or “appointments.” See what you think. (I know the acoustics are less than ideal; when the time comes for the “real deal,” I’ll record in a less live space.)
MARTIN GUITAR FACTORY TOUR
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Hey John, I listened to both of them and I have to say they are both very good. I think the second read was best. My experience tells me you should generally avoid emphasizing the last word in a sentence unless it’s a question or an exclaimation. If I were you, I’d emphasis visual and the first half of “appointments.” They’re both important words for the script. Your tempo and tone worked well, but I think the way you read: “using” was a little forced or too quick.
(On a side note, don’t make your sound file any longer than it has to be. I found it confusing and even with the script written out, feedback people may take a pass on your upload, because they don’t want to critique such a long read.) -
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Well, I think both sound as animated as they should be for the types of reads they are. You hit good words and were mostly succinct in your pronunciation. Your tempo on the other hand needs work. I haven’t done promos, but I’m sure you need to consider the attention span of the viewers. Be quick but clear, as if they’re only stopping to catch their breath.
As for the tone, I think you need to be more interested in what your talking about. In promos and commercials, your trying to sell something to the listener, convince them to come by and sample your product. They won’t trust someone who doesn’t seem all that sure of herslef…
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APPLE COMPUTER 60 SEC TV VOICE SPOT
HERE’S TO THE CRAZY ONES. THE MISFITS. THE REBELS. THE TROUBLEMAKERS.
THE ROUND PEGS IN THE SQUARE HOLES. THE ONES WHO SEE THINGS
DIFFERENTLY. THEY’RE NOT FOND OF RULES. AND THEY HAVE NO RESPECT FOR
THE STATUS QUO. YOU CAN QUOTE THEM, DISAGREE WITH THEM, GLORIFY OR
VILIFY THEM. ABOUT THE ONLY THING YOU CAN’T DO IS IGNORE THEM.
BECAUSE THEY CHANGE THINGS. THEY PUSH THE HUMAN RACE FORWARD. AND
WHILE SOME MAY SEE THEM AS THE CRAZY ONES, WE SEE GENIUS. BECAUSE
THE PEOPLE WHO ARE CRAZY ENOUGH TO THINK THEY CAN CHANGE THE
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Good read, audio great, music a bit distracting, you’ve got a great down-home voice, but you know that.
I’ve heard your other work, and although this is good, you can do much better. Yes, I’m being demanding, because you are uber talented, and can do it. You are the Sandy Koufax of VO.
Add some acting to this. That is, some contrast when you say ” … the only thing you can’t do is ignore them”. And then respond to the listener saying to himself “why can’t I ignore them?” Well, I’ll tell you why: “because they change things” ….. and then at the end they are the ones who change the world. -
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Sounds very, very good. Your voice is perfectly suited for voice over. I might personally make a couple different choices (e.g., in “status quo,” I would emphasize the word “quo” rather than “status”), but that’s not to say that I find anything wrong with your choices. I do wonder if you might read just slightly faster, particularly in the last sentence. But honestly, it’s really good as-is.
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Greetings!
Posting two: A redo of The Wall Street Journal and a script for a Mercy Health spot.
Tempo, Tone, Pitch, Volume; Sound quality?-
Hi Don,
Great voice, sounds reliable.
Sound good on the WSJ, but the Mercy Health sounds echo-y. Something happened there.
On both readings, I’m missing some acting. They both sounded like you are just reading the words with a little bit of inflection here or there.
The WSJ is kind of a tongue in cheek thing. That is, you get all your “daily requirements”, which is a quote from every breakfast cereal box, but it’s put also on the WSJ. Ooooooo, it’s healthy !! Say that you *need* your copy of the WSJ. You need the WSJ to stay healthy, it’s like a good breakfast. It’s like taking vitamins. It’s just common sense to stay healthy. Well, shucks, you do that by reading the WSJ.
Mercy Health needs some empathy. You got injured, and we feel for you. This feeling needs to stay up to “…. back to the life you enjoy”. THEN, the superhero comes in to save the day. MercyHealth Man !!!! Finally you need to love in the “…. we’ll get you back to the active life you love ” .
Good luck, and I wish you success.
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Good voice, need to remove background noise from the audio. Maybe too much background noise or echo in the room. Are you using a professional mic?
When you say ” what could have turn out disastrous” with a slight trepidation in your voice. Ohmygawd, a disaster, and then contrast it with “delicious” at this point forward, I need to hear that it is indeed delicious. The whole combination. Make our mouth water just listening to it. Daaang, I want to order one of those !!!!
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Nice read! I could picture what would be happening in accompanying video. My advice would be to slow the pace down a bit during the story of the collision – the Big Mouth Burger part seems a little fast. Maybe add a smile during “delicious” and the end tag line to give the product a little extra excitement.
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