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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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A THIEF ACCUSED
M-me? steal the gem M’lord? laughable, really! I’ll admit, I’ve done some petty burglary in the past… But! but, I served my time for that! These preposterous accusations… do you really think I’d be capable of such a heist? P-please M’lord you must reconsider, please? You can’t be serious M’lord you must understand! No! Please, have mercy!
Hi! I’m trying my voice out on a script that is outside of my normal delivery. Please let me know what you think.
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Hey there, sounds like a fun read! I’m assuming it’s for some animation work, or possibly a children’s audiobook? Defining the intended use will help in directing your delivery to make sure it’s format-appropriate. You definitely sound like you have the ability to voice work aimed at a younger audience, so kudos there!
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This is a testimonial about an investment company called IINToo, which offers people with the funds to invest, alternative methods of investing. The point with a testimonial is to sound very natural, like yourself just talking to the person recording. If it sounds acted, the listener will tune out and think it’s a fake. You folks, of course are privy to the knowledge that it’s a fake, but don’t tell anyone else – it’s our secret. Feedback is welcome.
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I saw this and kind of fell in love with it. It’s half way between commercial and narration. Feedback is welcome.
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Hi Friends, Uploading some more homework. Working on clarity, pace, natural speech, connection, you know… all the things
Happy to get feedback!Bayer Aspirin
Your heart isn’t just yours. Protect it, with Bayer aspirin. Be sure to talk to your doctor before you begin an aspirin regimen.Missouri Tourism
Take a one tank trip to Missouri. If outdoor fun is your M O, the St. Charles area is for you. Grab a bike and pedal through the heart of Missouri’s wine country. You’ll find charming towns and BnB’s along the way. Plan your one tank trip, at visit MO dot comTractor Supply Stores
Out here, we know you’re ready for a fresh start in a new season. When gardeners dig into fresh ground. When land owners need a little horse power to get property looking its best and when taking care of pets and animals gives us new purpose. Out here, 42,000 of us in over 1,900 Tractor Supply stores are here to help with home grown know how and everything you need for spring and with the services that make shopping easier than ever. Tractor Supply. Everything for your life, out here.-
Great voice in general, sound perfect. All the tech stuff you nailed.
Bayer: like it. Good acting. Very slight hard T’s, but it’s minor.
Missouri: I don’t know how, but I heard the smile. Good. I would up the pacing a bit more, and vary the pitch a bit.
Tractor: Missing the feeling of “out here”. That’s the theme of this “out here”. It starts and ends with it. You need to really feel that this is seriously cool stuff. I’m not quite getting that. Wow, 42,0000 of us, that’s a lot. And in 1200 stores that a lot of stores, too. Wow, need to feel that. And when you say easier, you need to make it a bit upbeat. The final Tractor Supply should sound like this is the best thing since sliced bread. ‘Cause it supplies the wheat that makes that bread.-
Bayer: Was very pleasant
Missouri: I thought it ran smoothly just needed to maybe hear more than one tone. It doesn’t feel adventurous. Hope that helps.
Tractor Supply: I really like this one. I do agree with Shmuel. It could stand to be a little more upbeat.
Your tone overall is great! And so is the pace.
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Sound check. I did homework a couple weeks ago that was difficult to hear. It had some other vocal flaws, but I got technical help. Here is the same clip but improved sound hopefully. All feedback is welcomed.
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Great work Lilbelle, I remember your previous read. Definite improvement!
I might add thinking about being excited as you read this… not more volume but excitement in your voice. Imagine telling about a cool thing you just did. We tell friends fun things with a different kind of animation. Just as a suggestion.
Also it seems you may have run out of breath at the end. ‘at staying here’ sort of dropped off. Perhaps try to find other places to get your catch breath to be able to complete the line.
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It’s been a while since I uploaded any scripts. I have begun prepping for my next demo in Narration. Any feedback is appreciated. My main goal was to speak at a suitable tempo and perform lists in a way that’s varied and interesting. Also, I tried something new with my recording setup, whatcha think?
4H (Corporate)
It began with the seed of an idea. In 1902, the heartland needed folks to embrace new advances in agriculture. But leaders with open minds, strong hearts and willing hands weren’t in abundance. Luckily, kids were. By empowering the next generation to lead, 4H took root. And grew. Grew kids who are confident and strong. Who are curious enough to question and capable enough to find the answer. Who stick to a job until the job gets done. Who know how to work with others. And how to lead. 4H has kept right on growing. Out of the farms and into the towns. From the suburbs to the cities. Anywhere curiosity roams. And confidence thrives. Anywhere technology can be advanced. And achievement is valued. Anywhere positive change is possible. And giving back moves entire communities forward. When you think about it, it makes sense that we began with farming. After all, True leaders aren’t born. They’re grown. 4H GROWS HEREChildren’s Educational Space Game (e-learning)
Today we’re going to explore all of the planets in our solar system, and some other places as well. We’ll travel into the future when astronauts live throughout the solar system. On each world we’ll see what the weather is like, what we would wear, and what we would do to have fun! Grab your oxygen, put on your seatbelt, and let’s blast off!California (Travel Narration)
It’s easy to understand why the United States went to war to get California. A land full of wonders, where one man’s chance discovery triggered a mad rush for gold. And where a new generation of marijuana growers is testing the limits of the law. Full of ancient forests and volcanic forms and a valley that’s also the hottest place on earth.
Enjoy spectacular views along the Pacific Coast Highway or soar over beaches and wine country. Explore Big Sur redwoods and cross the Golden Gate Bridge into the heart and soul of this magnificent state. It’s a region full of character, from movie stars to silicon valley giants to amazing natural wonders. Join us as we visit the Golden State of California.-
Hi Tim! Good stuff here!
Solid clear reads, and I think your set up sounds good, and your lists are varied I can hear the choice making (not in a bad way)
I’m a little new to narration so please take my feedback with a grain of salt.
for 4H you appear to have a sort of either natural or added (i’m not sure) sort of up and down flow to your speech. I might try to limit the operative words picked in a sentence to help limit the up and down flow. Example ‘It BEGAN with the SEED of an IDEA’ Try just just one or two as operative. example “It BEGAN with the seed of an idea” This may help to make your flow a little smoother and allow a quicker tempo if that is what you were after
I would track this same idea for the other two, looking at where you can tone down some operatives with flow. Again just ideas. I think you obviously know your voice and copy best.
Again great work!
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Hello Everyone!
I have uploaded a couple of reads (it’s my first time), I’d love to get some feedback! Thanks!!
1. INVISALIGN:
Your smile says a lot about you. If you let it. When you’re uncomfortable about your teeth, it’s easy to hold back your smile. Invisalign’s advanced technology now lets you straighten your teeth invisibly – so you can express yourself fully. And because they’re invisible, no one has to know about it. Hundreds of thousands of people already have discovered Invisalign. Maybe it’s time you were one of them.2. American Express:
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.-
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Solid work fellow newbie 🙂
I can totally hear the command and knowledge of what you are saying and why.Invisalign – Keep trying to connect to another person, perhaps you are speaking to a co-worker who said hey I see you did invisalign, why did you do that. Well, your smile says alot about you…and try to think about adding variety into your conversation (which is the ad copy) to make is seem more natural rather than ‘read’
AMEX – When given question marks… ask the question, don’t make them rhetorical, or periods. (I struggle with this all the time) Also with this copy try making the person you’re talking to perhaps a person who just had identity theft occur and you are trying to console them, or you are convincing a friend why protecting privacy is important rather than just ‘read’
Again just ideas.
Congratulations on jumping in with solid work!
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Hi Everyone,
I’m working on scripts for my narration demo and would love some feedback.
Script 1: Music is a language just like you would read aloud from a book. The symbols you will see on pages of sheet music have been used for hundreds of years. They represent the pitch, speed, and rhythm of the song they convey, as well as expression and techniques used by a musician to play the piece. Think of the notes as the letters, the measures as the words, the phrases as the sentences and so forth. In the following video, we will explore the basics of learning to read music, first by going through the staff and the two clefs, and then the notes on the staff.
Script 2: The Battle of Gettysburg was a significant Union victory considered by many to be the turning point of the Civil War. In the summer of 1863, Confederate General Robert E. Lee launched his second invasion of the Northern states, hoping to capitalize on recent Confederate victories and defeat the Union army on Northern soil. Union Major Generals Joseph H****r and George Meade pursued Lee, colliding at the crossroads town of Gettysburg, Pennsylvania, on the morning of July 1. The battle lasted 3 days, ending with the failure of Lee’s second invasion of the North. Said to be the bloodiest single battle of the entire Civil War, there were an estimated 51,000 casualties on both sides.
Thanks!
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