Great job overall!! You have a really nice energy about your voice. At the start of the Glade though I didn’t hear that until the end. It went from one mood to another. The ending was fantastic. The second read was wonderful!
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I really love your voice, but I get lost in the read. It all seems to run together with nothing to keep me interested in the product. And each line seems to be something you could say as a line by itself. If it is supposed to be connected then should hear a flow into each new sentence verse a sound of ending. I hope that makes sense.
Homework Week 3- Still working to slow down, show some change in tone, answer the when, what, and where’s. Getting close to preparing the demo. I’ve redone the Disney ad and have two more solid ones to work with I feel like. Need to know if I feel connected, that it feels conversational and not a read.
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Howdy! I’m currently developing my commercial chops with the aim of recording my demo in June. Feel free to have a listen to these samples and let me know what you think. Thanks!
Commercial 1: Ziploc
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other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve
got a lock on freshness.
Commercial 2: Fidelity
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Ziploc and Fidelity are both great reads. I hear some hesitancy that smooths out in Ziploc read. It could be a bit more up beat as well. Very nicely done overall.
M-me? steal the gem M’lord? laughable, really! I’ll admit, I’ve done some petty burglary in the past… But! but, I served my time for that! These preposterous accusations… do you really think I’d be capable of such a heist? P-please M’lord you must reconsider, please? You can’t be serious M’lord you must understand! No! Please, have mercy!
Hi! I’m trying my voice out on a script that is outside of my normal delivery. Please let me know what you think.
Hey there, sounds like a fun read! I’m assuming it’s for some animation work, or possibly a children’s audiobook? Defining the intended use will help in directing your delivery to make sure it’s format-appropriate. You definitely sound like you have the ability to voice work aimed at a younger audience, so kudos there!
Nice natural read! Maybe consider emphasizing the benefits, like “just $51 dollars/waive…/free…” to highlight why the listener should take action now with this offer rather than wait for another time to consider it.
This is a testimonial about an investment company called IINToo, which offers people with the funds to invest, alternative methods of investing. The point with a testimonial is to sound very natural, like yourself just talking to the person recording. If it sounds acted, the listener will tune out and think it’s a fake. You folks, of course are privy to the knowledge that it’s a fake, but don’t tell anyone else – it’s our secret. Feedback is welcome.
Shmuel, Great job on this, sounds like you have acting experience! Most reads on this sound fake but what yours stands out with is simply your honesty in talking about yourself!
Hi Friends, Uploading some more homework. Working on clarity, pace, natural speech, connection, you know… all the things
Happy to get feedback!
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Great voice in general, sound perfect. All the tech stuff you nailed.
Bayer: like it. Good acting. Very slight hard T’s, but it’s minor.
Missouri: I don’t know how, but I heard the smile. Good. I would up the pacing a bit more, and vary the pitch a bit.
Tractor: Missing the feeling of “out here”. That’s the theme of this “out here”. It starts and ends with it. You need to really feel that this is seriously cool stuff. I’m not quite getting that. Wow, 42,0000 of us, that’s a lot. And in 1200 stores that a lot of stores, too. Wow, need to feel that. And when you say easier, you need to make it a bit upbeat. The final Tractor Supply should sound like this is the best thing since sliced bread. ‘Cause it supplies the wheat that makes that bread.
Bayer: Was very pleasant
Missouri: I thought it ran smoothly just needed to maybe hear more than one tone. It doesn’t feel adventurous. Hope that helps.
Tractor Supply: I really like this one. I do agree with Shmuel. It could stand to be a little more upbeat.
Your tone overall is great! And so is the pace.