[David Goldberg]

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[JLoz19]

Hey All!

I’m new to this forum and to voice over, so I thought I’d stop by to say “hi” and also drop a few real estate commercial scripts I’ve tried out in my garage studio. I appreciate your feedback, and it’s so cool to hear others’ voice overs here – you all are doing so well!

Thanks a bunch!
Jen

[d_tonguet]

I would love some feedback on this one. I’m working on sounding conversational rather than presentational, so let me know what you think!

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[mkell755]

Hi D_tonguet, good job! I too like your conversational style on this one, it had a nice energy to it and felt very approachable and natural for this script. Good variation in tone as well. Keep it up!

Mary

[JLoz19]

Hello there!

I really enjoyed your conversational style in this voice over. It sounded natural and held my attention. The only things I noticed were a few things that could be edited out easily, such as when taking breaths and any mouth noises that may happen in between the lines you speak. Otherwise, it was an awesome job doing conversational rather than presentational! I especially liked the part, “there’s more time for the good stuff.”

[Official81]

Hello again all. I am back and this time I thought it would be a great idea to let you all listen to the unedited version and the edited version for feedback on sound quality and how I did on editing the vocals.

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[mkell755]

Hi Official81, good job! I liked the edited version better, good job on the editing! It just sounded clearer and easier to understand. The pacing and enunciation was good and you had a nice natural delivery. Very good!

Mary

[Official81]

Thank you so much for your feedback!

[mkell755]

You are welcome! 🙂

Mary

[Official81]

Hello everyone I am looking for some feedback on my editing in this recording. Please let me know how I did.

Welcome to advance technology incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training and education opportunities.

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[mkell755]

Hi Official81, good job! I like your voice for an on-boarding script such as this one. I liked the variation in the lists of items, it kept my attention. I think the enthusiasm was good for the script, good job!

Mary

[mike_levelton]

Hey everyone,

I have some more scripts I’d love for you to review.

Any advice is always greatly appreciated.

Thanks!

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[Official81]

Hi Mike!

Your voice is nice and clear and crisp. You may want to try using more fluctuations and intonations in the Lender’s Bagel read. ANd in the Asthma read you sound great there are a few glottals and pauses that can easily be edited out. And correcting those glottals will help you sound more conversational.

[ElcysVoice]

You have some great energy “you can trust a New Yorker” that comes through I’d love to hear it come through throughout the entire recording.

[John Trape]

Hi everyone,

I have three commercial scripts and would very much welcome any and all feedback.

Regards,

John

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[Official81]

Your accent and voice are on point I love it! It just seems like your recordings have low volume, so you may want to focus on getting your recording settings tweaked. Otherwise great reads.

[John Trape]

Thank you very much for your comments. My coach made the same point about volume and I will adjust the settings.

Thank you again!

Regards,

John

[BONKmk]

Hey all, just dropping off a few narration recordings for homework. Appreciate any and all critiques 😀

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[Official81]

Hi Bonk! I love your voice it is perfect for voice over. The only advice I have is to try to make each read authentic they all seemed to sound like you were reading from the same script. I heard a few pauses that could be edited out. Otherwise keep up the great work.

[Lilbelle1487]

Hello Again! Homework assignment before the demo is prepared. I used two scripts from the Library.

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[fleishman619]

Hi Everyone,

Please disregard the mic – I used my iphone for this. But I have a narration demo coming up and wanted to upload a few options:

Tito’s Tacos Script: “In this episode, we’ll visit Tito’s Tacos. Whether you’re rubbing shoulders with the mechanic or the mayor, everyone can agree that while they may not be the most authentic Mexican street food, the hard shell tacos and bean burritos are the most authentic So-Cal interpretation of a taco. Taste on and you’ll see why…”

Meditation Script: “Let’s use these next few minutes to come back to center and set an intention for the rest of your day. Move into a comfortable position and gently close your eyes.”

Corporate Script: “Welcome to Amkor Technology Incorporated. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies, benefit packages, and education opportunities.”

E-Learning Script: “This is Module 8 — Productivity, Time & Money. Have you ever wondered how some people just get it all done? In this module, we’ll be laying the foundations for optimal productivity so you can save time and increase revenue. When you’re ready to begin, click “next” on your screen.”

Looking forward to hearing notes on performance.

Thank you!

Michelle

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[Lilbelle1487]

Other than the first one, Titos sounding rushed, these all sound fantastic to me. The Meditation one could be even a bit softer, but really well done!

[suecat]

Hey Everybody,
Today I’m trying out my new mic and new studio – closet. Please take a listen and please know that all comments and suggestions are a real help!
Thank you

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[Lilbelle1487]

I heard a little bit of feedback, but it wasn’t much. Especially at the ending of a statement or word. Nice read though.

[suecat]

Lilbelle, Thank you so much! I will continue to work on that feedback issue. I really appreciate you taking the time to listen and comment!

[nettipo1]

Hi suecat! Since I’ve heard you on previous postings, I can say that this mic definitely sounds better, and I agree with touzet that there seems to be some effects from processing. The delivery sounds conversational to me; I felt like you were talking with another mom. Be sure to enunciate the “t” in “Breakfast” and reduce the pause after “today.” I would experiment with different pitch levels on the last word or maybe the last sentence to give it a more solid feeling. Nice job!

[suecat]

Thank you Nettipo1. This new skill has a variety of hats, but I’ll try my best to wear them all effectively! I will pay close attention to my enunciation, it’s that natural lazy communications for me – I’ve got to work h*****n that! Thank you for listening and taking time to comment. They really do help!

[touzet]

I’m hearing the frequency response drift around a bit…like there’s some sort of noise reduction processing going on… Try the mic with no added effects…

[suecat]

Hey Touzet, I know that what you’re saying is all true, but I haven’t gotten there yet! I’m just learning to navigate this mic! But I’ll look it up on google, google knows everything, and try and get a handle on that part too! Thank you for for listening and getting me geared up to learn another aspect of this profession!

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