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Hey, Looking for some feedback on this commercial read. I know the last half second got cut off. I’m still working on those editing skills.
Burt’s Bee’s
You ask me to define myself? What should I say? I’m complicated. I am complex. I’m a boss. And beautiful. I’m all these things and a million things more. But one thing I am not? I am not synthetic. So why would I use beauty products that are? Introducing new Burt’s Bees Beauty. A full line of natural cosmetics that make you feel your beautiful best because of how they’re made, not in spite of it. Burt’s Bees.-
Great work, d_tonguet! You have really lovely quality to your voice and your read is very inviting and genuine (with just a necessary dollop of sass). Feel I might be hearing a bit of a sibilant s on “Bert’s Bees” (something I have to work on myself), but otherwise an accomplished read. Keep up the amazing work!
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Hi VO Community, I am working on different emotions with these two reads. Thank you for any feedback you can provide!
Pampers Swaddlers
From the moment you met, you wanted to surround them in comfort and protection.
That’s why Pampers Swaddlers is the number one choice of hospitals,
to wrap your baby in blanket-like softness so all they feel is love.
Pampers Swaddlers.Cadillac SRX V8
As a little girl you wanted a pony.
How about 320 horses?
Your ride begins with a sunroof so generous, even second-row passengers can bask in the sun.
And with a commanding V8, you and six friends are in for one feisty gallop.
Cadillac SRX V8.-
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If I were a parent I would’ve bought Pampers based off your voice-very soothing and great read. The Cadillac one could be a hair quicker and have a bit more energy-this is a car and I felt like I wanted the pony instead. However I did like the choices you made on the line “How about 320 horses?”.
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Happy Sunday, everyone! Another “then and now” exercise where I’m posting a read I did some time back as well as a read of the same script I recorded today. All comments are encouraged, appreciate your taking the time to listen.
JIMMY JOHN’S
At Jimmy John’s, we know how much you care about freshness, quality and value. We want your sandwiches to arrive freaky fast so they’re freaky fresh. That’s why we only deliver within five minutes of our stores–and no further. If you’re in the zone or in the store, you can get a freaky fresh sandwich. Jimmy John’s, because sandwich.
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Hi Rogue1 your voice is awesome! I really love how in your second read you fixed the pronunciation of “further” great job. I hear a few glottal stops and pauses that could be edited out and corrected. Other than that you give a nice performance.
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I agree with suecat. Both reads sounded good and conversational, but the first read had a more fun quality to it. Great work!
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Hey Rogue, I thought both reads were conversational, but the first read was a little sassy, and fun to hear. Both flowed nicely. Great work – keep ’em coming!
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Hello everyone! I am posting some more practice reads for my upcoming narration demo. All constructive feedback would be appreciated. Thank you!
American Airlines
Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers. We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.Young Living Essential Oils
Thank you for calling Young Living Essential Oils
If you know your party’s extension, please dial it now.
To repeat this menu at any time, press 9.
For Order tracking, press 1.
For Sales, press 2UnStuck Audition
Life is good. You’re sailing along. And then it happens.
You hit a glitch.
Maybe it’s a critical life moment—
like deciding to change your job,
or rekindling a relationship.
Or maybe you’re stalled about something you want:
trying to eat healthier,
kickstarting a project,
balancing home and work,
finally dealing with that room in your home
(you know the one).
And there you are. Stuck.
When you’re in the middle of being stuck it can feel alienating, confusing, and even a little scary.
It’s okay. Really. (We find that people who want to live full lives are the ones who get stuck the most often.)-
Hey Alaya, You have a nice smooth voice. One thing I noticed were your pauses, that can make your performance sound choppy. On the first read I thought your ending was kinda abrupt – I don’t know if that’s a good thing or not, but it left me waiting for more. Your tone, pace and volume were spot-on! Keep it up!
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Hello, Alaya! Really crisp, clear delivery on your reads! A nice performance range as well as your “Unstuck” read is very real and appealing, whereas your “Essential Oils” read is appropriately buttoned-up and concise (without sounding mechanical). If I were to add any constructive suggestions, it would be to perhaps infuse a touch more conversational warmth into your “American Airlines” read. Perhaps envision the passengers you’re speaking to as they excitedly board the plane and get ready for their next adventure to give your read a little more of a welcoming tone. Really well done! Keep up the great work!
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Greetings, everyone! Resuming my practice posts–this time with a little “then and now” exercise where I’m posting a read I did some time back as well as a read of the same script I recorded today. (Full disclosure: that first read is really painful to listen to! Hopefully I’ve improved somewhat in my delivery). All comments are encouraged, appreciate your taking the time to listen.
UNISOM:
“Did you wake up in a funk this morning? A salt in your coffee, sugar on your eggs kind of morning? A “why don’t those d**n birds go chirp somewhere else” kind of morning? Unisom knows that when you don’t get enough sleep at night, it’s hard to avoid the funk. Unisom is specially formulated to give you a good night’s sleep, so you’re ready to take on your day–funk-free. Unisom, the sleep experts.”-
Hey Rogue, The first read sounded like you tired, like you weren’t “funk-free.” But that second one, was bright, and stimulating. The pace was good, and it felt like you were talking to me. I believed you were “funk-free.” Keep it up!
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Hey There!
More practice! Thanks for your feedback, it truly helps!So this guy I was dating seemed to have it all. Good looks, a great job, a nice smile, and oh…his laugh-so funny! But the truth of the matter is…that smile that started the laugh…ended with bad breath! It seemed the one thing he didn’t have was a Tic-Tac. And I was so close to happiness!
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Hi SueCat – Nice, fun read. Your voice sounds very warm! The start got me interested and drew me in. The pacing/rhythm of the final two lines feels different from the first half. Perhaps try the second from the last sentence with the emphasis on “didn’t” as well as Tic Tac – the one that writes the check as you mentioned :). Nice read – thanks for sharing!
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Hi suecat! LOVE the personality you infuse in your reading–you give what might be a pedestrian script a life and humor all its own (and my heart breaks with you over your suitor’s halitosis!) On a purely technical note, it seems the volume of your record dips in places (:11 for example). Perhaps you’re moving away from the mic a bit during your record? Keep up the lovely work!
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Hello hard working VO-ers! Looking for brief feedback on these commercial reads. I’m really aiming for that light, trendy, conversational tone. Simply recorded on my phone, so no sound quality advice needed 😉 THANKS AS ALWAYS FOR YOUR TIME!
/GRETA-
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Hi! I think both reads are conversational, but they have a bit of gusto that may be too strong for these reads. Maybe it’s the volume–I think there are ways to have a sassy/sarcastic quality to your voice without increasing the volume. The “no sweat” in the first read kind of sounded kind of awkward to me, and I wasn’t sure who you were in the read (a fellow passenger? a flight attendant? neither?)
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Hi again – just wanted to add to my note that the sassy almost sarcastic quality to your voice–never lose it! It’s a unique quality that you have, and works well in lots of commercials.
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The time has come. I have completed three more recordings for my narration homework. As usual, I am aiming to make the reads sound conversational and give some variation throughout, especially when I get to lists. Also, I wanted to make each performance sound unique to the others. Do you think I pulled it off? Any feedback is appreciated.
Apollo 16
The year was 1967, and the astronauts of Apollo 16 were going to the moon. This is Charlie Duke, Lunar Module Pilot on Apollo 16. This amazing little capsule went by the call-sign CASPER, and it was the heart of an immense system of rocket engineering that got the astronauts safely to the moon and back.Black Diamond Equipment
Here at Black Diamond it’s all about climbing and skiing. We share the same experiences that you do on rock, ice and snow and these experiences push us to make the best gear possible for our worldwide family of climbers and skiers.
What began with a backyard anvil and a hammer has now grown into a global company with offices on three continents. Black Diamond is a company that’s not just for rock climbers and skiers, but one that stands for the spirit of the sports we live, their values and goals, past, present and future. Since 1957, our innovative gear designs have set the standard in numerous areas. This is partly the result of dedication, desire and diligence on the part of an incredible team of people. It’s also a product of the fact that each of us are climbers and skiers ourselves.Light Chain Deposition Disease
Light-chain deposition disease (LCDD) is the deposition of monoclonal light chains in multiple organs. It is a rare disease characterized by deposition of NONAmyloid immunoglobulin light chains, and they do not stain with Congo red and do not exhibit a fibrillar structure when examined ultrastructurally. It is categorized as a “monoclonal deposition disease” in the World Health Organization classification of tumors of hematopoietic and lymphoid tissues. LCDD was first described in 1976 in two patients with end-stage renal disease as granular deposits of free light chains in multiple organs, including the kidneys, that did not stain with Congo red.-
Hello, Tim! Wow, masterful job in breaking up very long scripts (practically run-on sentences in some instances) into an inviting and digestible conveyance of information. Your choice of pauses and emphases show a lot of care in your craft and yet the reads don’t feel overworked. A special salute for your LCDD read—my tongue would never be able to mange such technical lingo!
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Hello! I could pick up slight differences among the three reads, but there’s still room to make them even more distinct. The Black Diamond Equipment read has a conversational quality to it, but I think this could be brought out more. I almost think you might want to try to make the Black Diamond read more plain, in a way, and be more selective with the words you emphasize. For instance, “Since 1957” doesn’t need to have any emphasis at all, but once it is emphasized, it competes with the other words being emphasized. I’m impressed with how you can read the technical terms in the third read!
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