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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #68788
    CatgirlMSU
    Participant

    Edited to add that it said the files were empty on upload. I’m working to fix that now.

    Hey, everyone! Here are three recordings for my narration homework. I recorded these on my iPad so I just need feedback on my reading since the audio isn’t as flawless as studio quality. I’m a bit nervous about submitting my first homework recordings. As a side note, my southern accent shows through some, but I’m working on making it sound more neutral as part of my coaching sessions. Thank you for any feedback!

    Documentary on Jazz
    It is America’s music. It is an improvised Art, making itself up as it goes along. It rewards individual expression. But demands selfless collaboration. It is forever changing. But nearly always rooted in the blues. It has a rich tradition and its own rules. But it is brand new every night.

    About Horror
    Take a trip back to a time when late night creature features were all the rage and the personalities that presented them were just as popular as the movies. Beginning in the 1950s, the horror fest was a staple of regional television. From ghouls to vampires – to werewolves and crypt keepers – every host had a persona to suit their unique personalities.

    A Haunting Tale
    In this world, there is real evil.
    In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
    These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
    Between the world we see and the things we fear.
    There are doors.

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  • #68786
    d_tonguet
    Participant

    Hey, Looking for some feedback on this commercial read. I know the last half second got cut off. I’m still working on those editing skills.

    Burt’s Bee’s
    You ask me to define myself? What should I say? I’m complicated. I am complex. I’m a boss. And beautiful. I’m all these things and a million things more. But one thing I am not? I am not synthetic. So why would I use beauty products that are? Introducing new Burt’s Bees Beauty. A full line of natural cosmetics that make you feel your beautiful best because of how they’re made, not in spite of it. Burt’s Bees.

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    • #68836
      rogue1
      Participant

      Great work, d_tonguet! You have really lovely quality to your voice and your read is very inviting and genuine (with just a necessary dollop of sass). Feel I might be hearing a bit of a sibilant s on “Bert’s Bees” (something I have to work on myself), but otherwise an accomplished read. Keep up the amazing work!

    • #68811
      Official81
      Participant

      Hey d_tonguet! You sound awesome girl the only thing I would do is go in and take out the pauses so that it sounds really conversational and maybe do the read just a tad bit faster. Your on fire girl!

  • #68783
    nettipo1
    Participant

    Hi VO Community, I am working on different emotions with these two reads. Thank you for any feedback you can provide!

    Pampers Swaddlers
    From the moment you met, you wanted to surround them in comfort and protection.
    That’s why Pampers Swaddlers is the number one choice of hospitals,
    to wrap your baby in blanket-like softness so all they feel is love.
    Pampers Swaddlers.

    Cadillac SRX V8
    As a little girl you wanted a pony.
    How about 320 horses?
    Your ride begins with a sunroof so generous, even second-row passengers can bask in the sun.
    And with a commanding V8, you and six friends are in for one feisty gallop.
    Cadillac SRX V8.

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    • #68877
      taylorn.quinn
      Participant

      Hi,

      If I were a parent I would’ve bought Pampers based off your voice-very soothing and great read. The Cadillac one could be a hair quicker and have a bit more energy-this is a car and I felt like I wanted the pony instead. However I did like the choices you made on the line “How about 320 horses?”.
      Keep up the great work!

    • #68837
      rogue1
      Participant

      Wow, I was totally envisioning an infant lovingly cradled in its mother’s arms while listening to your pitch-perfect Pampers read. Great way to change it up on your Cadillac performance. You have a wonderful instrument and an equally wonderful range! Keep up the great work!

    • #68812
      Official81
      Participant

      I want to get some swaddlers and a that Cadillac SRX V8! Wow I really loved the Pampers read its untouchable great sound quality as well. And the Cadillac read was just as wonderful but you may want to take out a few of those pauses for a smoother read. Excellent Job!

    • #68800
      CatgirlMSU
      Participant

      The Pampers Swaddlers VO sounded good with your softer voice, and your more energetic voice sounded good on the Cadillac VO. Great reads!

  • #68773
    rogue1
    Participant

    Happy Sunday, everyone! Another “then and now” exercise where I’m posting a read I did some time back as well as a read of the same script I recorded today. All comments are encouraged, appreciate your taking the time to listen.

    JIMMY JOHN’S

    At Jimmy John’s, we know how much you care about freshness, quality and value. We want your sandwiches to arrive freaky fast so they’re freaky fresh. That’s why we only deliver within five minutes of our stores–and no further. If you’re in the zone or in the store, you can get a freaky fresh sandwich. Jimmy John’s, because sandwich.

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    • #68813
      Official81
      Participant

      Hi Rogue1 your voice is awesome! I really love how in your second read you fixed the pronunciation of “further” great job. I hear a few glottal stops and pauses that could be edited out and corrected. Other than that you give a nice performance.

      • #68838
        rogue1
        Participant

        Aw shucks, thank you, Official81! Appreciate your taking the time to listen and will be sure to take a look at those dreaded glottal stops and pauses!

    • #68799
      CatgirlMSU
      Participant

      I agree with suecat. Both reads sounded good and conversational, but the first read had a more fun quality to it. Great work!

      • #68839
        rogue1
        Participant

        Thank you, CatgirlMSU! Glad you felt both reads sounded conversational (something I’m always working on) and glad you liked the version with an extra side of sass as well. 🙂

    • #68781
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey Rogue, I thought both reads were conversational, but the first read was a little sassy, and fun to hear. Both flowed nicely. Great work – keep ’em coming!

      • #68840
        rogue1
        Participant

        Thank you so much, suecat! Glad you found both reads flow easily. I’m always one for the more fun performances–especially when the script seems to demand it. Appreciate the encouragement!

  • #68769
    Bil-Bo
    Participant

    Hey Y’all
    Thanks for listening and commenting.
    BillH

  • #68767
    Bil-Bo
    Participant

    Hey Y’all
    Thanks for listening and commenting.
    BillH

  • #68761
    Alaya_R
    Participant

    Hello everyone! I am posting some more practice reads for my upcoming narration demo. All constructive feedback would be appreciated. Thank you!

    American Airlines
    Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers. We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.

    Young Living Essential Oils
    Thank you for calling Young Living Essential Oils
    If you know your party’s extension, please dial it now.
    To repeat this menu at any time, press 9.
    For Order tracking, press 1.
    For Sales, press 2

    UnStuck Audition
    Life is good. You’re sailing along. And then it happens.
    You hit a glitch.
    Maybe it’s a critical life moment—
    like deciding to change your job,
    or rekindling a relationship.
    Or maybe you’re stalled about something you want:
    trying to eat healthier,
    kickstarting a project,
    balancing home and work,
    finally dealing with that room in your home
    (you know the one).
    And there you are. Stuck.
    When you’re in the middle of being stuck it can feel alienating, confusing, and even a little scary.
    It’s okay. Really. (We find that people who want to live full lives are the ones who get stuck the most often.)

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    • #68782
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey Alaya, You have a nice smooth voice. One thing I noticed were your pauses, that can make your performance sound choppy. On the first read I thought your ending was kinda abrupt – I don’t know if that’s a good thing or not, but it left me waiting for more. Your tone, pace and volume were spot-on! Keep it up!

    • #68776
      rogue1
      Participant

      Hello, Alaya! Really crisp, clear delivery on your reads! A nice performance range as well as your “Unstuck” read is very real and appealing, whereas your “Essential Oils” read is appropriately buttoned-up and concise (without sounding mechanical). If I were to add any constructive suggestions, it would be to perhaps infuse a touch more conversational warmth into your “American Airlines” read. Perhaps envision the passengers you’re speaking to as they excitedly board the plane and get ready for their next adventure to give your read a little more of a welcoming tone. Really well done! Keep up the great work!

  • #68749
    rogue1
    Participant

    Greetings, everyone! Resuming my practice posts–this time with a little “then and now” exercise where I’m posting a read I did some time back as well as a read of the same script I recorded today. (Full disclosure: that first read is really painful to listen to! Hopefully I’ve improved somewhat in my delivery). All comments are encouraged, appreciate your taking the time to listen.

    UNISOM:
    “Did you wake up in a funk this morning? A salt in your coffee, sugar on your eggs kind of morning? A “why don’t those d**n birds go chirp somewhere else” kind of morning? Unisom knows that when you don’t get enough sleep at night, it’s hard to avoid the funk. Unisom is specially formulated to give you a good night’s sleep, so you’re ready to take on your day–funk-free. Unisom, the sleep experts.”

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    • #68759
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey Rogue, The first read sounded like you tired, like you weren’t “funk-free.” But that second one, was bright, and stimulating. The pace was good, and it felt like you were talking to me. I believed you were “funk-free.” Keep it up!

      • #68772
        rogue1
        Participant

        Thank you for the great feedback, suecat! Guess I was actually in need of some Unisom for that first record. 🙂 So pleased you felt like I was talking to you–such a daunting skill to perfect!

  • #68736
    suecat
    Participant

    Hey There!
    More practice! Thanks for your feedback, it truly helps!

    So this guy I was dating seemed to have it all. Good looks, a great job, a nice smile, and oh…his laugh-so funny! But the truth of the matter is…that smile that started the laugh…ended with bad breath! It seemed the one thing he didn’t have was a Tic-Tac. And I was so close to happiness!

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    • #68756
      hharris
      Participant

      Hi SueCat – Nice, fun read. Your voice sounds very warm! The start got me interested and drew me in.  The pacing/rhythm of the final two lines feels different from the first half.  Perhaps try the second from the last sentence with the emphasis on “didn’t” as well as Tic Tac – the one that writes the check as you mentioned :). Nice read – thanks for sharing!

      • #68757
        suecat
        Participant

        Thank you so much!

    • #68752
      rogue1
      Participant

      Hi suecat! LOVE the personality you infuse in your reading–you give what might be a pedestrian script a life and humor all its own (and my heart breaks with you over your suitor’s halitosis!) On a purely technical note, it seems the volume of your record dips in places (:11 for example). Perhaps you’re moving away from the mic a bit during your record? Keep up the lovely work!

      • #68758
        suecat
        Participant

        Thank you so much! I’m still a novice, I’ll keep adjusting.

  • #68715
    greta_j
    Participant

    Hello hard working VO-ers! Looking for brief feedback on these commercial reads. I’m really aiming for that light, trendy, conversational tone. Simply recorded on my phone, so no sound quality advice needed 😉 THANKS AS ALWAYS FOR YOUR TIME!
    /GRETA

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    • #68739
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey GretaJ,
      I love your strong confident voice! Both reads conversational–keep it up!

    • #68723
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hi! I think both reads are conversational, but they have a bit of gusto that may be too strong for these reads. Maybe it’s the volume–I think there are ways to have a sassy/sarcastic quality to your voice without increasing the volume. The “no sweat” in the first read kind of sounded kind of awkward to me, and I wasn’t sure who you were in the read (a fellow passenger? a flight attendant? neither?)

      • #68724
        nettipo1
        Participant

        Hi again – just wanted to add to my note that the sassy almost sarcastic quality to your voice–never lose it! It’s a unique quality that you have, and works well in lots of commercials.

        • #68725
          greta_j
          Participant

          Thanks! Great feedback nettipo1! I do tend to have an issue with volume – 😆 – theatre background for sure! Thanks again!

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