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Hello! The pacing of this read needs to be a bit more balanced. There’s quite a dramatic difference between the beginning (extremely fast) to the very slow “gravel pounding ambition of youth” that might throw off the listener. Instead of pacing, consider other ways of showing the contrast between the two concepts you are talking about. For instance, you could try different emotions with lead-ins like: 1st emotion: clever-“bet you didn’t know this about us, but…” to 2nd emotion: enthusiastic “you’re going to enjoy how cool this car is…” or something like that. Your voice has a nice base tone to it, so take advantage of that and make the last sentence smooth and assured, rather than rushed. Keep on posting!
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Hi m822! It sounded like the recording got cut off at the end, I think it was missing a few words. I typically leave a second or two of silence at the beginning and the end just to make sure the entire thing is recorded before exporting as an mp3 file.
Your voice is very deep and it is interesting! “Age” sounded stretched out like it was 2 syllables which made it a little hard to understand the word. You might try “Kia” accented in a positive way as the tagline / focus of the script. Keep it up!
Mary
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Just a quickie: Quality Inn
Quality Inn
When he checked in, he was Mr. Simmons. When he checked out, he was just plain Bob. Quality Inn. We’ll see you there.-
Hello! I think your voice is well suited for this type of script! I could also hear the humor within it, but I think the emotions could be brought out even more to show the transformation of the character checking in (formal, maybe uptight) to checking out (relaxed, refreshed, just a normal person again). I’d also try different versions of the last sentence to see if it can capture a bit of a “wink and a smile” feeling. Nice job!
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Hi GJS! Very nice! I like the tone in your voice and the pace of the script that you delivered. It was very appropriate for the script, and I could hear the humor behind it. The last word “there” got cut off. I usually leave a second or two of silence at the beginning and the end – always easier to chop off excess than to add back words later and have it sound natural (without having to do a retake, at least for me). Good job!
Mary
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Hi Joseph – You have a pleasant tone of voice. My main suggestion would be for you to be mindful of any overall patterns in your speaking, which, if it is evident enough to the listener, it might distract them from listening to what you are saying. For instance, there is kind of a up/down or rising/falling pattern that’s noticeable (to me) in the Nine Planets read. I think as you become more selective of which words to emphasize and find ways to emphasize them differently, then you will be less likely to fall into any pattern. Keep up the good work!
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Hello all! I’m back after a short break! Please let me know what you think – I’m working on recording my narration demo soon. Any and all feedback is welcome. Thanks! Mary
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Looking for feedback. I didn’t provide the scripts for the last two.
A Haunting Title
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In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the things we see and the things we fear, there are doors.
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Hi Official81,
I am no editor but I did listen to both your edited and unedited versions, I actually liked the unedited, again it’s just me, but I found the edited version sharp sounding. -
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Hey everyone, I had an idea regarding my recording setup and put it to the test. What do you think of these two samples? The first one features my usual recording setup with the detachable roof, while the second one features me recording with the roof more elevated. Which do you think sounds better? Any advice on my performance is appreciated too. Thanks.
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Hi Ed, good job! Very clear and well-paced throughout. I liked all 3 of these for you with USPS bring my favorite. I think you could slow down Jack Daniels a little and really lean into what is being said. It sounded like the words were a little smushed together in “We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion…” I’d like to hear this one again, and I give you permission to act it out this time, like you are actually chatting with a neighbor in the middle of the road, like you have all day to talk about the weather! Good work!
Mary
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Thank you for the feedback! Speed is something that I’m struggling with a little as I have a tendency to talk and read fast. This is going to sound odd, but I worry so much about going too fast that it feels like I’m losing something in the read, though that is likely a case of overthinking things. In any event here’s a second take where I’m trying to go a little slower than the first one. Thanks again!
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Hi Ed, you are welcome for the feedback. Good job on the second take! I could tell you slowed it down some in the first half, but then it sped up again a little on the last sentence. The pauses were good, it makes it interesting to listen to, like what’s coming next? Give the listener a little time to hang on your last words. “slow, deliberate fashion” could be even further stretched out and emphasized. Unlike the US Postal Service script (people want their mail delivered really fast!) you are describing a process by which whiskey is made, and so people will assume that taking a long time to cure the whiskey is a good thing, like it indicates quality. I noticed that both of your recordings were 26 seconds long, you might even try it with the goal of having the recording last 30 seconds, which is a typical commercial script length. I too speak too fast sometimes, like I need to deliver the message and be efficient, so this is not uncommon to have to work on the speed of a particular script. Thanks for trying again! Mary
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Hey All!
I’m new to this forum and to voice over, so I thought I’d stop by to say “hi” and also drop a few real estate commercial scripts I’ve tried out in my garage studio. I appreciate your feedback, and it’s so cool to hear others’ voice overs here – you all are doing so well!
Thanks a bunch!
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Hi Jen, really nice! You are a natural and your voice is well-suited for these genres. I like the recording production too. You have a very clear and confident sound which is great for real estate. I likes your delivery of the last sentence in the first recording “How’s this weekend for you?”, really kept my attention throughout. Great job!
Mary
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