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  • #69151
    Bev
    Participant

    Hi Official81,
    I am no editor but I did listen to both your edited and unedited versions, I actually liked the unedited, again it’s just me, but I found the edited version sharp sounding.

    • #69153
      Official81
      Participant

      Thank you Bev I will take that into account.

  • #69148
    TimDKietzman
    Participant

    Hey everyone, I had an idea regarding my recording setup and put it to the test. What do you think of these two samples? The first one features my usual recording setup with the detachable roof, while the second one features me recording with the roof more elevated. Which do you think sounds better? Any advice on my performance is appreciated too. Thanks.

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    • #69163
      mkell755
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      Hi Tim, good job! I liked the first recording slightly better, although I did not hear a big difference between the two. I think the first one performance-wise sounded clearer to me as well. Thanks!

      Mary

  • #69144
    EdSoliz
    Participant

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    • #69164
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Ed, good job! Very clear and well-paced throughout. I liked all 3 of these for you with USPS bring my favorite. I think you could slow down Jack Daniels a little and really lean into what is being said. It sounded like the words were a little smushed together in “We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion…” I’d like to hear this one again, and I give you permission to act it out this time, like you are actually chatting with a neighbor in the middle of the road, like you have all day to talk about the weather! Good work!

      Mary

      • #69192
        EdSoliz
        Participant

        Thank you for the feedback! Speed is something that I’m struggling with a little as I have a tendency to talk and read fast. This is going to sound odd, but I worry so much about going too fast that it feels like I’m losing something in the read, though that is likely a case of overthinking things. In any event here’s a second take where I’m trying to go a little slower than the first one. Thanks again!

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        • #69200
          mkell755
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          Hi Ed, you are welcome for the feedback. Good job on the second take! I could tell you slowed it down some in the first half, but then it sped up again a little on the last sentence. The pauses were good, it makes it interesting to listen to, like what’s coming next? Give the listener a little time to hang on your last words. “slow, deliberate fashion” could be even further stretched out and emphasized. Unlike the US Postal Service script (people want their mail delivered really fast!) you are describing a process by which whiskey is made, and so people will assume that taking a long time to cure the whiskey is a good thing, like it indicates quality. I noticed that both of your recordings were 26 seconds long, you might even try it with the goal of having the recording last 30 seconds, which is a typical commercial script length. I too speak too fast sometimes, like I need to deliver the message and be efficient, so this is not uncommon to have to work on the speed of a particular script. Thanks for trying again! Mary

  • #69136
    JLoz19
    Participant

    Hey All!

    I’m new to this forum and to voice over, so I thought I’d stop by to say “hi” and also drop a few real estate commercial scripts I’ve tried out in my garage studio. I appreciate your feedback, and it’s so cool to hear others’ voice overs here – you all are doing so well!

    Thanks a bunch!
    Jen

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    • #69165
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Jen, really nice! You are a natural and your voice is well-suited for these genres. I like the recording production too. You have a very clear and confident sound which is great for real estate. I likes your delivery of the last sentence in the first recording “How’s this weekend for you?”, really kept my attention throughout. Great job!

      Mary

      • #69234
        JLoz19
        Participant

        Thanks so much, Mary! I appreciate the feedback and always looking to improve on style or anything really. 😉

  • #69134
    JLoz19
    Participant

    Hey All!

    I’m new to this forum and to voice over, so I thought I’d stop by to say “hi” and also drop a few real estate commercial scripts I’ve tried out in my garage studio. I appreciate your feedback, and it’s so cool to hear others’ voice overs here – you all are doing so well!

    Thanks a bunch!
    Jen

  • #69122
    d_tonguet
    Participant

    I would love some feedback on this one. I’m working on sounding conversational rather than presentational, so let me know what you think!

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    • #69166
      mkell755
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      Hi D_tonguet, good job! I too like your conversational style on this one, it had a nice energy to it and felt very approachable and natural for this script. Good variation in tone as well. Keep it up!

      Mary

    • #69135
      JLoz19
      Participant

      Hello there!

      I really enjoyed your conversational style in this voice over. It sounded natural and held my attention. The only things I noticed were a few things that could be edited out easily, such as when taking breaths and any mouth noises that may happen in between the lines you speak. Otherwise, it was an awesome job doing conversational rather than presentational! I especially liked the part, “there’s more time for the good stuff.”

  • #69113
    Official81
    Participant

    Hello again all. I am back and this time I thought it would be a great idea to let you all listen to the unedited version and the edited version for feedback on sound quality and how I did on editing the vocals.

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    • #69168
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Official81, good job! I liked the edited version better, good job on the editing! It just sounded clearer and easier to understand. The pacing and enunciation was good and you had a nice natural delivery. Very good!

      Mary

      • #69178
        Official81
        Participant

        Thank you so much for your feedback!

        • #69187
          mkell755
          Participant

          You are welcome! 🙂

          Mary

  • #69098
    Official81
    Participant

    Hello everyone I am looking for some feedback on my editing in this recording. Please let me know how I did.

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    • #69169
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Official81, good job! I like your voice for an on-boarding script such as this one. I liked the variation in the lists of items, it kept my attention. I think the enthusiasm was good for the script, good job!

      Mary

  • #69095
    mike_levelton
    Participant

    Hey everyone,

    I have some more scripts I’d love for you to review.

    Any advice is always greatly appreciated.

    Thanks!

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    • #69116
      Official81
      Participant

      Hi Mike!

      Your voice is nice and clear and crisp. You may want to try using more fluctuations and intonations in the Lender’s Bagel read. ANd in the Asthma read you sound great there are a few glottals and pauses that can easily be edited out. And correcting those glottals will help you sound more conversational.

    • #69101
      ElcysVoice
      Participant

      You have some great energy “you can trust a New Yorker” that comes through I’d love to hear it come through throughout the entire recording.

  • #69082
    John Trape
    Participant

    Hi everyone,

    I have three commercial scripts and would very much welcome any and all feedback.

    Regards,

    John

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    • #69117
      Official81
      Participant

      Your accent and voice are on point I love it! It just seems like your recordings have low volume, so you may want to focus on getting your recording settings tweaked. Otherwise great reads.

      • #69143
        John Trape
        Participant

        Thank you very much for your comments. My coach made the same point about volume and I will adjust the settings.

        Thank you again!

        Regards,

        John

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