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Hello VO Community,
Here is one commercial and one narration piece. Thank you for any comments and/or suggestions!
Freshii
At Freshii you can customize your entree and be your own culinary master. So what’s in your custom bowl? Tex Mex with black beans and a little salsa fresca? Teriyaki twist with a pop of pineapple? Whatever your fresh idea, get any 2 bowls for just $12.99! Freshii – Eat. Energize!Betty Crocker
Betty Crocker is an imaginary person. Nonetheless, in a 1945 survey she was named the second-best-known woman in America, after Eleanor Roosevelt. She was “born” in 1921 during a Gold Medal flour promotion in which users completed a puzzle to win a pin cushion. Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters–Betty because the name had a warm approachable feel, and Crocker after an early company director, William G, Crocker. The fictional Ms. Crocker became so popular that she soon had her own products and recipe books, many of which still exist today.-
For Freshii, I really love the way you made the “..and a little salsa fresca?” have this sorta not intimate, but nice “whisper” that I totally could see triggering someone’s craving. I think that whole reading was pretty much perfect.
As for the Betty Crocker reading, I think it would help to maybe emphasize the quotes around “she was ‘born'” a little more since she wasn’t literally born. There’s also a long pause between “to win” and “a pin cushion.” I assume you were just taking a breath there and I’m sure that could easily be edited since you maintain a consistent delivery between them anyway.
There’s also a problem with both files where they cut off before you get to the last words so I can’t hear how you wrap it up loool, but overall, nice work on both of these 🙂
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These were both fantastic! Your voice sounds so natural and energetic, it really felt like you were talking to somebody. For the commercial read my only feedback would be to really ask that question – whats in your bowl? Right now it feels like that thought is a little glossed over. Also, on the final word, energize, your inflection drops, so perhaps put a tiny bit more energy into energize?
For the betty crocker read, i felt like there were a few unnatural pauses, the big one for me being between “best known woman in america” and “after eleanor roosevelt.”
Great work!
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Hello!
Reposting my commercial homework assignment. The first time my volume was too low – hopefully, this is better audio wise. Any feedback is appreciated. Thanks!
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New York LifePeace of mind is waiting to meet you all across the country. In towns big and small, there’s a New York Life agent who can help you to secure your future and protect your family. New York Life–The Company You Keep.
Atlanta Bread Company
When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think ‘bread’. Think of an entire breakfast menu – fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees. Think of our Cafe with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads. And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting! Atlanta Bread Company – more than just bread.
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Your voice has such a warm and inviting tone, it’s wonderful to listen to!
On the new york life copy it almost sounded as though you were rushing a bit through the words but then taking pauses between sentences, and the mix of rushing and pausing sort of broke up the flow of the read. I think the pauses would sound more natural if you slowed down your read just a tiny bit.
I loved your read of the bread ad! The one piece of feedback i’d have is maybe try to bring just a little more specificity and distinction to the lists in there. -
Hello! The audio level and quality is definitely right on this time around! I liked both recordings; they have a young, positive vibe to them. You might want to consider evening out how you say certain phrases, such as “who can help” and “secure your future” and in the Atlanta bread recording the phrase “think of an”, so that it will be clearer for the listener. I think you’re choosing the right emotions, but I would love to hear more of those emotions come through, especially on those descriptive menu items. Keep doing great work!
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Hey everyone, first time posting here! I’m fairly new to VO. I have been practicing recording demo scripts for about a year now and just started working with a coach. I have attached 2 Commercial VO’s that I recently recorded and I’d love some feedback if possible.
I record in my home studio / walk-in closet that is acoustically treated with foam covering all of the walls and I’m recording on an MXL 990 Large Diaphragm Condenser Microphone with Metal Pop Filter, Focusrite Scarlett Solo, and Audacity.
This is such a great forum and I can’t thank you all enough in advance!
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Hi Gary,
Great sounding recordings and good choices for your voice. Your tone comes off as very sincere in the A1 commercial. The A1 ending didn’t feel like an end statement to me – felt like it could be more to that commercial. Maybe try the last phrase in different rhythms?
The Pepsi production and read were great. I think you can bring even more energy to the Pepsi spot without it being over the top – your voice is well suited for this spot. Thanks for sharing!
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Hi Gary – I listened to your Pepsi recording. It was really great audio quality and I liked the music choice and the energy of the recording. You might want to consider saying “O” or “Oh,” which happens about eight times in this script, differently from each other, as they all seemed to have the same type of inflection and emphasis on them. This is definitely a fun script and I think your voice is well suited for it. Good job!
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Hey everyone. As usual, following my coaching session I am uploading three narration scripts for homework. Any feedback is appreciated, but my main goal for the past few uploads has been to avoid having each performance sound the same and to perform each script with enough variety. Any feedback on my general performance is also appreciated.
Coca-Cola
Coca-Cola. There may be no other product that reaches more of mankind. It all starts with a secret formula, Coke sends that formula to hundreds of bottling factories around the world. Factories need containers by the millions. The volume is staggering. The speeds are blinding. To put Coca-Cola in easy reach of nearly every human being on Earth, you need ultimate factories.Nero – Intro
He was a perverse, cross-dressing exhibitionist who had an incestuous relationship with his mother and married his step sister. He murdered members of his own family in fits of jealous rage. His cruelty, violence, and grotesque appetite for self-indulgence brought the Roman empire to the brink of financial and political ruin. And he viscously persecuted the Christians. They would remember him as the ultimate embodiment of evil … the anti-christ.How to Read Music
Reading music is often seen as a mysterious and arcane art – but it doesn’t have to be that way! The easy-to-follow lessons and innovative accompanying CD in How to Read Music will show you how to decode those little black dots and, in a short time, you’ll be surprised how fluent you’ve become!-
Hello! I do hear subtle differences between the three reads, but I think the emotion you’ve chosen for each read really needs to be brought out more. What might be getting in the way of my hearing the individual character of each read is that I’m picking up on a pattern where several words are being emphasized within the same phrase, and maybe not all of them need to be emphasized. I would suggest choosing only the most important words to emphasize, which is usually not so much the nouns and pronouns. You’ve selected a good assortment of scripts, and I think your vocal tone in general is great for a wide variety of narrations! Good job, and keep on posting!
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Your deep and authoratative voice is just right for these types of scripts. You really sound like you know what your talking about and anyone who hears you is sure to stop what they’re doing and pay attention. I think the tone you’re using is perfect for explaining the documentary’s subject and the tempo is just right for explaining the subject. However, I think your performance did wind up being monotone with little variety. I would suggest you try hitting various words in a few ways and ensure there’s enough variety. Also, try a different tone for certain sections, that would seriously benefit the listener in knowing that you’re an authority on the subject. Other than that, you’re doing great.
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Hi Mark, you have an amazing voice—-its deep resonance blew me out of my chair and is a pleasure to listen to! Both reads are excellent, all that I feel is missing is perhaps a bit more natural emotion and inflection to your performance. Perhaps visualize who you’re speaking to so that your read sounds a bit more conversational and less like you’re reading a script. For example, your call to action at the close of the Ali read (:53) could be a little more impassioned. You’ve painted a heroic picture of this great man for the first :50 seconds, now you’re inviting the listener to be a part of that great history and that appeal would benefit from being a bit more personal. Well done! Keep up the great work!
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Hi Erica! Wonderful reads! Lots of great energy and inflection–very appealing performance for both scripts. If I were to suggest anything, perhaps look at smoothing out your Cherrios read just a bit. The middle is smooth as silk but, to my ears, the beginning and endings sound like comma pauses are becoming period hard stops. “Whole grain oats. Cinnamon. and Cheerios. All rolled into one.” sounds a touch halting to me, whereas “Start your day with the deliciously satisfying crunch…” is natural and smooth. Keep up the amazing work!
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Hey Everybody,
Looking for your suggestions, critiques, and any tips you’d like to share — ThanksArthritis Foundation
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I think you read at a great tempo and it sounded quite conversational. The words you hit were also very fitting and I don’t think you overemphasized any of them. Although, I think your pauses were a little too long and I was real distracted by how you were pronouncing the “s” sounds. Every one of them sounded as if you were whistling which no voice director enjoy. Finally, you need to work on your recording setup, it sounds echoey, as if you’re in a bowl. Hope this helps.
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Hi suecat! Another solid read. Warm and approachable, yet appropriately serious given the subject matter. You might slow your tempo just a bit to increase the gravitas (you seem to speed up on the second half of your opening sentence, after “There’s something you can do—right now”). You also might take a look at your pronunciation of “arthritis”. A few times it sounds as if you’re adding an extra syllable and saying “artheritis” (though I don’t hear it in the final mention). Minor quibbles. Keep up the great work!
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Hey Rogue, Thank you for your feedback and you’re probably right about the ‘artheritis’ as I am a country girl. I’ll be mindful of that slip, in addition to paying closer attention to my speed. And those are not minor – as I just lost that job! Thanks!
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Nothing wrong with being a country girl–that beautiful accent is a gift! 😊 I’ve got a bit of a Virginia lilt myself, just feel there are times when a client would embrace it and other times they might prefer a more “accent neutral” read. Sorry that particular job didn’t come through, but there are many, many more where that came from!
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Hi everyone, uploading some files trying out my mic. I’m not as concerned with the audio quality as I am the performance at this point. I appreciate the feedback!
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You have a great voice and the way you brought these to life was well applied. In each script you sound natural and the tempo remains smooth with no pauses midsentence. I did occasionally hear a mouth noise though and there were some small problems in each recording.
Always: I don’t you emphasized “Always” very well. I barely caught that that was the client you were promoting.
Ambien: Very smooth, but not much variety between the phrases. Try emphasizing different ways or incorporating another tone at some point.
Burts-Bees: Same as before. The list items sound exactly the same and it’s especially important to make variety in those. Also, you didn’t sound very interested in the product when it came time to promote it.
Mr. Coffee: Fantastic performance, though I would suggest considering the “spirit” of the script. I don’t think your tone quite matches. -
Hi Oktober10. Beautiful reads, your voice is warm and approachable, yet trustworthy and authoritative. The one thing that struck me is that I occasionally hear a bit of splash on some of your “s” sounds–for example, the 2nd track at the :09 mark “balance”, and the 3rd track at the :08 mark “boss” (This is something I have to work on myself). While all the performances are great, I think the 4th read for Mister Coffee is my favorite–very conversational with a dash of playfulness. Keep up the great work!
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First track: good stuff. I’d play around a little more with the pitch/inflection/tone of some of the words, but not much more, just to enhance some of the variety that’s already there. but that’s nitpicking, overall it sounds good.
Second track: well done. nothing to say here.
Third track: also great. I’d change up the tone a bit at “Introducing”, just to add bit more of a musical quality to it all, and I’m talking a tiny bit, simply because while the fluctuations are great, it can start to feel a bit monotone, especially towards the end. So if there’s a way to make it a little, and I mean a little less monotone without sacrificing the natural quality of the delivery, awesome.
Fourth track: Here the delivery, at times sounds over-affected, so I’d try to make it sound more natural, less forced.
So, the performance/technique was great.
Watch out for some of the unwanted noises made between words, like especially after “I’m a boss” on the third track, but you can hear what sounds like a clicking noise from the inside of your mouth as you formulate your words at other intervals in that track. Regardless of the audio quality that will come up in a recording.
Excellent work it was a pleasure listening to you.
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Two tracks here, for two different scripts. The first track has two different takes for a “Home Tour.” Which one do you think works better? What are the pros and cons of each one?
The second track has just one take for a script on Italy. How would you describe the tone? Do you think I’m hitting the right words or should the emphasis be changed?
Thanks again for all your help!
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Hi, Isaac. Very crisp and clear reads as always. Your Home Tour performance feels a touch rushed to me. As you are describing such an elegant manor, perhaps your read might breathe a bit (like a fine wine). Try romancing the words a bit more as you linger on the home’s finer features. You also might experiment with what words you emphasize. For example, “Nestled in the rolling hills of the river VALLEY” doesn’t feel as natural as perhaps emphasizing “rolling hills” instead. Enjoyed your Italy read very much. Good pacing and solid choices on where to place emphases. Keep up the great work!
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Hi Isaac, the second take of the Home Tour reads sounded a little smoother than the first for me…in the first take, the first sentence emphasized words that may not need it. If the important part of the sentence is the “gracious home is a rare find,” then I feel like the phrase leading up to it is not as important (but plays a supportive role) and maybe shouldn’t be enhanced as much. When reading lists, you might want to make sure your inflection on each item has a slightly different feeling, and give each item some space, because the lists in the Italy read went quite fast. It sounds like you are hitting the right words, but I think some of the emphasis could be changed in the sense that rather than emphasize the word, change something else about it – say it slower, say it with an up inflection, or say it with a certain emotion.
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This is for an “educational explainer video for real estate”. I’d love to get some feedback on it. Thanks a lot!
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