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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
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Starting work on my narration demo. Here’s 3 spots I did for homework with my coach. I’d appreciate any feedback!
APOLLO 16:
The year was 1967, and the astronauts of Apollo 16 were going to the moon. This is Charlie Duke, Lunar Module Pilot on Apollo 16. This amazing little capsule went by the call-sign CASPER, and it was the heart of an immense system of rocket engineering that got the astronauts safely to the moon and back.CONGAREE NATIONAL PARK:
IT IS A PLACE OF CONSTANT CHANGE. OF WOOD AND WATER, SUNLIGHT AND SHADE. THIS IS CONGAREE NATIONAL PARK.NOT FAR FROM SOUTH CAROLINA’S STATE CAPITOL, THIS MAJESTIC WILDERNESS OF TOWERING TREES IS A SANCTUARY. FOR WILDLIFE… FOR CHAMPION TREES… FOR VISITORS FROM AROUND THE WORLD.
DAY BY DAY, SEASON BY SEASON, THIS FLOODPLAIN FOREST CHANGES–SHAPED AND RESHAPED BY WATER. A NEW PLACE TO EXPLORE…EACH TIME YOU RETURN..
YELLOWSTONE:
In the northern part of the park, large stretches of grass and sagebrush spread across the mountains and valleys. Similar to the prairies, this habitat provides an excellent home to the badger and her new family. They see light, for perhaps the first time. A strange new world for them. And they stay close to their mother at first. But growing bolder, they begin to explore on their own.-
Hello, Jay. Wow. Beautiful voice, amazing range, and very accomplished reads. (You’re hired! 🙂) My only suggestion is to perhaps soften the emotional tone on your read for Congaree National Park–infuse a bit more of a “sense of wonder” about the majestic beauty and ever-changing topography you’re describing. Seems a more natural fit (no pun intended).
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Hi,
I love your voice and how different you can make it sound. I only have two things that stuck out to me that you might want to check out: the first is the Apollo one sounded really loud I am talking my headphones even were pulsating. Maybe check your DAW and other systems and also see where you were in regards to the mic. The other one was a general one and that is to watch your vocal fry. While it worked for the last two, it still sometimes sounded like you were possibly losing your voice at times or running out of air.
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You’ve got an awesome voice and the quality of the recording sounds great. The execution is also captivating.
My main critique would be that, especially in the first two (Apollo/Congaree), there are parts that sound overdone. I’d tone down the performative aspect of it because the pieces start to sound like a commercial. So if this is for a trailer, then great, if it’s more of a documentary-type of thing, I’d make it a bit more neutral without all the (very impressive) fluctuations in tone, pitch, etc.
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Happy Monday! Continuing my series of “then and now” with an early record paired with a current one. All comments are welcome—-including performance and technical. Many thanks for taking the time to listen!
FRONTLINE PLUS:
Today is gonna be the best day ever. Since my human got me Frontline Plus, we’re running more trails, sniffing more tails, and finding all new places to splash in the mud. Just a little Frontline Plus on my back kills ticks and fleas for a whole 30 days. Because there’s nothing better than getting out and feeling the wind in your fur. Vet-recommended Frontline Plus. Live Off The Leash!
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I like the first take in track one the most. It’s got the best balance of sounding natural with well timed pauses, changes in tone, pitch, and tempo, the words properly hit. The other two takes have great moments, but they also have some out-of-place pauses or abrupt shifts in tone or pitch. The take on the second track sounds like it might be more professional, but maybe after hearing it after the first track, I’m inclined to think that it sounds more controlled and carefully practiced, yet less natural. the way you acted out the “getting out there and…wind in your fur” is lots of fun, though, works because you’re portraying a dog haha
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Thank you for your insightful feedback, Isaac! I find this script a bit challenging on where to land on the performance (not unlike a dog unsure of where to dart next in an open yard—-maybe I’m “method acting” 🙂). Perhaps finding a happy balance between the reads is just what the veterinarian ordered. Appreciate your taking the time to weigh in!
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Hello! I think I like the “now” version more than the “then” version, mainly because you gave yourself freedom to play with tempo and emphasizing different things in the second read. I can tell you were trying to capture the essence of being a dog or pet talking, so continue playing with it to see if you can bring out the excited emotion with different deliveries and pacing. I did notice that you emphasized “best day ever” and “a whole 30 days” the same in both, so try to be mindful of any patterns and break out of them by doing something different. Overall I did notice a difference between the two reads, so kudos on that!
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Appreciate your insightful feedback, nettipo1! I have to admit that “spastic dog” is not an easy characterization to capture! 🙂 Thank you for recognizing my attempts to modulate my delivery and play with the tempo and pacing of the script. I’m notorious for repeating the same patterns in my reads and will strive to bust out of that bad habit. Thanks again for taking the time to listen!
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Hello VO friends I hope all of our father’s enjoyed their day yesterday! Please let me know how my audio sounds and the voice work as well. I added music but really want to know how I did. This was my homework assignment.
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Hello, Official81! You have such a warm, inviting quality to your voice! I agree with nettipo1 in that you might want to dial down the music levels as it competes with your read (great choice of track, BTW). I would also hit your ending statement: ”…or as your representative” a bit more decisively rather than gently trailing off as you do now. Keep up the great work!
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Hi Official 81! I liked it. Maybe lower the music level a little bit more so that we can hear and enjoy your nice voice more. I think the only word I would change the delivery on would be “representative,” because it maybe sounded a bit more alluring than the other parts of the read before it. But all in all, it was very pleasant to listen to!
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Let’s try this again. I hope the files upload properly this time. Please disregard my previous post.
Hey, everyone! Here are three recordings for my narration homework. I recorded these on my iPad so I just need feedback on my reading since the audio isn’t as flawless as studio quality. I’m a bit nervous about submitting my first homework recordings. As a side note, my southern accent shows through some, but I’m working on making it sound more neutral as part of my coaching sessions. Thank you for any feedback!
Documentary on Jazz
It is America’s music. It is an improvised Art, making itself up as it goes along. It rewards individual expression. But demands selfless collaboration. It is forever changing. But nearly always rooted in the blues. It has a rich tradition and its own rules. But it is brand new every night.About Horror
Take a trip back to a time when late night creature features were all the rage and the personalities that presented them were just as popular as the movies. Beginning in the 1950s, the horror fest was a staple of regional television. From ghouls to vampires – to werewolves and crypt keepers – every host had a persona to suit their unique personalities.A Haunting Tale
In this world, there is real evil.
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the world we see and the things we fear.
There are doors.-
I think your voice is fantastic for a narration demo and I am pleased with the words you hit. Each recording however sounds almost exactly the same and I think your tone could use a little more variety in each recording. Finally I think the tempo you’re using is too fast for narration. Remember it’s about explaining to the listener and you need to ensure they can hear and understand your instructions.
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Welcome to the Edge Studio Forum, CatgirlMUS! As a Virginia boy, I delight in your hint of southern lilt and find it adds a nice warmth to your read (though I understand also wanting to add a more neutral sound in your repertoire). As your delivery is already wonderfully crisp and clear, I would recommend relaxing a bit and considering a more conversational approach–like you’re discussing Jazz or horror one-on-one with a friend and not reading from a script. This is something I work on all the time, and it really helps to picture who you are addressing so the read is more natural and emotional. Keep up the great work!
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Thanks! I’m still working on neutralizing my accent a little more, but it helps that my coach says southern accents are good in voice over. I mentioned in my reply to nettipo1 that my degree is in broadcast communication with some career experience behind scenes in tv news and radio. I’m working on unlearning some of that broadcaster voice to sound more conversational. Your suggestions are a big help!
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Hi CatGirlMSU – Congrats on your first posting! I agree with Official81 on the pauses (I still do this) and making it sound more conversational (I’m still practicing this as well). One way that might help make it less like reading is to think of what images might be shown on a television screen, and remember your narration should support those images. For the Horror and the Haunting Tale, perhaps think of yourself telling a scary story around a campfire. The Southern accent was slightly there, but I can’t imagine that being a deterrent for listeners.
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Thanks! I’m still working on a more neutral accent, but my coach says southern accents are also good in voiceovers. I like your suggestions about thinking of certain imagery. My degree is in broadcast communication with some career experience behind scenes in tv news and radio, so I’ve been used to broadcaster voice. Now I’m unlearning a little bit of that to sound more conversational in VO. Everyone’s suggestions here on the forum are a big help!
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Hello CatGirl! Love the name… I love your voice its very crisp and clear. You may want to apply some sound deafening to your space so that your room doesn’t sound open. And I also hear lots of pauses in your reads typically at punctuation. Try sounding more conversational. Read the script and try reading it like you are talking to a really good friend. That helped me out tremendously when I first started. Great Luck you sound great otherwise.
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Thanks! I’m a cat person and graduated from Mississippi State University. I’m still getting my recording equipment set up, so these were recorded on my iPad just for homework purposes. My microphone was on back order and finally got here last week, so now I can work on putting all that together. Thanks for the advice on pauses. Some times I overthink pauses a bit so they end up a little short. Thanks for the advice on sounding more conversational. My background is a broadcast communication degree and some career experience behind scenes in tv news and radio, so I’m working on making my broadcasting training sound more conversational in my VO reads.
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Edited to add that it said the files were empty on upload. I’m working to fix that now.
Hey, everyone! Here are three recordings for my narration homework. I recorded these on my iPad so I just need feedback on my reading since the audio isn’t as flawless as studio quality. I’m a bit nervous about submitting my first homework recordings. As a side note, my southern accent shows through some, but I’m working on making it sound more neutral as part of my coaching sessions. Thank you for any feedback!
Documentary on Jazz
It is America’s music. It is an improvised Art, making itself up as it goes along. It rewards individual expression. But demands selfless collaboration. It is forever changing. But nearly always rooted in the blues. It has a rich tradition and its own rules. But it is brand new every night.About Horror
Take a trip back to a time when late night creature features were all the rage and the personalities that presented them were just as popular as the movies. Beginning in the 1950s, the horror fest was a staple of regional television. From ghouls to vampires – to werewolves and crypt keepers – every host had a persona to suit their unique personalities.A Haunting Tale
In this world, there is real evil.
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the world we see and the things we fear.
There are doors. -
Hey, Looking for some feedback on this commercial read. I know the last half second got cut off. I’m still working on those editing skills.
Burt’s Bee’s
You ask me to define myself? What should I say? I’m complicated. I am complex. I’m a boss. And beautiful. I’m all these things and a million things more. But one thing I am not? I am not synthetic. So why would I use beauty products that are? Introducing new Burt’s Bees Beauty. A full line of natural cosmetics that make you feel your beautiful best because of how they’re made, not in spite of it. Burt’s Bees.-
Great work, d_tonguet! You have really lovely quality to your voice and your read is very inviting and genuine (with just a necessary dollop of sass). Feel I might be hearing a bit of a sibilant s on “Bert’s Bees” (something I have to work on myself), but otherwise an accomplished read. Keep up the amazing work!
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Hi VO Community, I am working on different emotions with these two reads. Thank you for any feedback you can provide!
Pampers Swaddlers
From the moment you met, you wanted to surround them in comfort and protection.
That’s why Pampers Swaddlers is the number one choice of hospitals,
to wrap your baby in blanket-like softness so all they feel is love.
Pampers Swaddlers.Cadillac SRX V8
As a little girl you wanted a pony.
How about 320 horses?
Your ride begins with a sunroof so generous, even second-row passengers can bask in the sun.
And with a commanding V8, you and six friends are in for one feisty gallop.
Cadillac SRX V8.-
Hi,
If I were a parent I would’ve bought Pampers based off your voice-very soothing and great read. The Cadillac one could be a hair quicker and have a bit more energy-this is a car and I felt like I wanted the pony instead. However I did like the choices you made on the line “How about 320 horses?”.
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Happy Sunday, everyone! Another “then and now” exercise where I’m posting a read I did some time back as well as a read of the same script I recorded today. All comments are encouraged, appreciate your taking the time to listen.
JIMMY JOHN’S
At Jimmy John’s, we know how much you care about freshness, quality and value. We want your sandwiches to arrive freaky fast so they’re freaky fresh. That’s why we only deliver within five minutes of our stores–and no further. If you’re in the zone or in the store, you can get a freaky fresh sandwich. Jimmy John’s, because sandwich.
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Hi Rogue1 your voice is awesome! I really love how in your second read you fixed the pronunciation of “further” great job. I hear a few glottal stops and pauses that could be edited out and corrected. Other than that you give a nice performance.
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I agree with suecat. Both reads sounded good and conversational, but the first read had a more fun quality to it. Great work!
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Hey Rogue, I thought both reads were conversational, but the first read was a little sassy, and fun to hear. Both flowed nicely. Great work – keep ’em coming!
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