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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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August 16, 2021 at 7:59 pm #70110
SteveVO
ParticipantWould welcome your thoughts on this biographical read:
Charlie Chaplin is the comic artist of our time. He pioneered the development of film comedy from anarchy to art in just a few short years, and created a screen character whose worldwide impact has never been equaled. Unlike most of his colleagues in the film world, he knew he special. He received international acclaim within months of his film debut, and after just one year, won not only an enormous salary, but complete control of his work. He was an artist who worked at his own pace and in his own style at at time when few other filmmakers enjoyed those luxuries. What set Charlie Chaplin apart from the rest?
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August 17, 2021 at 3:27 pm #70120
Erik B
ParticipantHi Steve,
I really like the tone and pacing of your read. Also the recording quality sounds very good. I’m still a novice, but one thing I was taught to look out for is unnecessary pauses in a read. One I spoted was in the second to last sentence between “pace and”. But overall good read.
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August 17, 2021 at 1:53 pm #70119
DLeeVO
ParticipantHi Steve. Nice work! I really like the pace and emotion you gave this read. Maybe a little more emotion in the last sentence? Just a side note, I noticed there is no “was” in “knew he special”. I add words in too, is why i notice. 🙂
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August 16, 2021 at 5:19 pm #70106
JAE Factor
ParticipantHello all, please let me know your thoughts on these. Thank you!
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August 18, 2021 at 11:16 am #70167
nettipo1
ParticipantHi Joseph – Good job with these… The main thing I noticed is a pattern of inflection that was used in all three reads. Not sure how to describe it, but you seem to start high at the start of the sentence and then land the sentence at a lower pitch. I would recommend that you start experimenting with varying your pitch levels–not randomly, but to match the emotion and the thought that you are conveying with each phrase. You do have a clear voice and you enunciate words well and have good pacing. I look forward to listening to more from you!
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August 16, 2021 at 11:35 am #70099
gathonigachie
ParticipantGreetings to All!
I appreciate your feedback and time on these three recordings.
24. THE LAND OF EGYPT (travelogue)
Egypt has always been a land of mystery and magic. A land different from all others, difficult to understand, apart and alien, yet strangely fascinating. It was the most self-contained of all the countries of the ancient world; it lived its own life, practiced its own religion, and made up its own government with hardly any outside interference either from or upon other civilizations. The Egyptians were …
37. SPACE CAMP MISSION (museum exhibit)
Welcome to Space Camp! Join us on the “Blast off to Camp Sweepstakes,” where we join the US Space and Rocket Center in Huntsville, Alabama. We’ll train like real astronauts do, perform scientific experiments, and participate in a simulated space mission!
27. DELTA AIRLINES INTERACTIVE (interactive website)
It’s always the right time to fly Delta. And to assure a perfect trip, Delta has prepared this program to offer you important facts and helpful information, along with tips for travelers. Just click ―start for practical information. 50 years have passed since Delta established itself as a national carrier, and Delta has come a long way since then. It has matured into an international airline, serving thousands of destinations. Since its inception, Delta has served as a steadfast air bridge between Africa and the world.
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August 16, 2021 at 10:55 am #70093
Sherry Newell
ParticipantWorking on some commercial homework, all feedback welcome 🙂
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August 15, 2021 at 11:53 pm #70085
Alaya_R
ParticipantHello everyone! This may be my last upload before my narrative demo prep starts. Any and all feedback welcomed.
Kids Activity TV
Every day is an adventure with Activity TV. It’s the place to be for hundreds of Awesome activities in dozens of categories! Cartooning to magic to cooking and more – ready for you day or night. This month learn some gross out magic. Watch closely as Ryan teaches you to perform the severed finger trick!
Partial Knee Replacement
A partial knee replacement is an alternative to total knee replacement for some patients with osteoarthritis of the knee.
This surgery can be done when the damage is confined to a particular compartment of the knee.
In the past, partial knee replacement was reserved for older patients who were involved in few activities. Now, partial knee replacement is often preferred in the younger population as their recovery is quicker.Marvelous Mitochondrion
Hi, I’m a Mitochondrion. But you can call me “Mito.” I’m called an “organelle” because I’m so tiny, but I’m really important. I’ve been called the powerhouse of a cell, because I’m how cells get their chemical energy. I generate most of a cell’s adenosine triphosphate, or ATP, from which your body in turn makes DNA, and other important molecules.Attachments:
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August 16, 2021 at 10:53 am #70092
Sherry Newell
ParticipantHey 🙂 Great job for getting those recorded and posted!
So, I’ve actually worked on the kids activity TV script for practice in the past. Something that we worked on, that will help you as well, is adding some differentiation into the list part: from cartooning to magic… that sentence. And then, listen to the end of it; you mispronounced severed and it sounded like servered.
I loved the voice you used in mitochondrion! 🙂
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August 15, 2021 at 1:36 pm #70073
Evette75
ParticipantHello, its been a while since I’ve posted. I would love constructive, honest feedback on reads.
Dove Moisturizing Hand Sanitizer
Want to keep your hands hydrated and healthy. Try new Dove nourishing hand sanitizer. With a blend of oils and a silky feel its 99.99% effective against germs and hydrates hands for hours. The 2oz size is perfect for your purse. Dove Nourishing Hand Sanitizer in Lavender and Chamomile.My Life
Your days may be up and down. Turn to MyLife for the right mindfulness boost, any time of day.
It all starts with how you’re feeling, right now. You’ll enjoy a customized experience from over 400 relaxation activities, each one about 10 minutes or less. MyLife delivers exactly what you need – because it always starts with you.Keratin Smoothing Oil Shampoo
5 Benefits. 1 Bottle. Behold, the ultimate multi-tasker-5 benefits in 1 bottle. Indulge in this keratin-infused shampoo for shiny, frizz-free hair that’s never felt smoother. Feel the Love, Love the Feel. Keratin Smoothing Oil Shampoo.Attachments:
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August 17, 2021 at 9:03 pm #70145
suecat
ParticipantHey,
You have that sweet dainty voice. I will agree with Sherry, about the ta in ‘Dove’ – I’m working on that too. Your pauses are noticeable, which makes the performance choppy. Remember to target who and why you’re sharing the information to make your performances sound more conversational. Nice job, can’t wait to hear more! -
August 16, 2021 at 11:04 am #70097
Sherry Newell
ParticipantHi 🙂
Dove, at the beginning, check your first few words. Make sure to say to instead of ta. I have to work on that all the time as well, haha.
Keratin is a bit choppy (again, something I have to work on also), but I like the way you said “feel the love, love the feel”.
My life: there are a lot of pops of air going into your mic. To combat this, you can get a pop filter or you can also just turn your head a slight angle away from the mic so your air isn’t blowing straight into it.
Hope this helps! Good job 🙂
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August 14, 2021 at 6:34 pm #70067
danielh04
ParticipantHello!
Decided to re-upload these for some practice, feedback is always greatly appreciated so thank you!
Purina Dog Chow Light & Healthy TV Spot
You like to keep your family healthy and fit, and now there’s a new way to do the same for your dog. Introducing new Purina Dog Chow Light and Healthy. It’s a no sacrifices, calorie light way to keep him trim, with the deliciously tender and crunchy kibble blend he’ll love…and 22% fewer calories than Dog Chow. Discover the lighter side of strong. New Purina Dog Chow Light and Healthy.Disney Cruise Line
Escape on a fantasy unlike anything you’ve ever imagined. A Disney Cruise Line Vacation. Start planning today and set sail on a dream.Attachments:
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August 15, 2021 at 3:21 pm #70080
Leann
ParticipantYour tone is quite nice. Your recording quality sounds good too. I think you may want to take a little time to enunciate your words and watch for words stringing/slurring together. Also one big point I would suggest (for the dog chow commercial) is to be sure you are pronouncing the product name as accurately as possible. Maybe look up a YouTube video or a current commercial to hear the product name. Otherwise, I really enjoyed listening to you! 🙂
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August 14, 2021 at 5:09 pm #70065
SteveVO
Participantwould welcome feedback on this e-learning script: Would you like to buy a house? Maybe it’s your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one. Listen, I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run. But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house. Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video.
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August 15, 2021 at 1:38 pm #70077
nettipo1
ParticipantHi Steve, I liked this! It had personality and it felt like you were speaking to me rather than reading. There were some pauses that you could probably do without, and the only thing that I noticed is you sometimes emphasized words the same way (“maybe” “love” “most” “bad” “dumb”), so maybe try other ways to accentuate those words. I liked that you delivered “without realizing it” with a sort of humorous wink–just make sure you don’t pause on either side of fit too much. Excellent job!
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August 14, 2021 at 1:08 pm #70058
smith_voice
ParticipantJust uploading my latest narration homework…any feedback would be welcome!
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August 15, 2021 at 1:16 pm #70071
nettipo1
ParticipantHello! I like the tone of your voice, the clarity of your delivery, and these scripts are suited for you. However, it seemed to me that they were all read with the same emotion. It also sounded like you were reading, at times. What might help is to visualize yourself talking to a person next to you, and saying each line with the intention of painting a picture to the other person. For the Cancun copy, be sure not to rush it, and know that there is one feeling you are conveying in the first half (grandeur, lore, legend), and then it changes at “Today…” to a more contemporary feeling. For the Bayer recording, the delivery could be less explainer-style and perhaps more historical account/storytelling style. It seemed almost pleasant, even though the first sentence was suggesting that something else was coming. I would start that sentence with an emphasis on “We” rather than “live”. It could take on a whole different meaning once you do that. I look forward to hearing more from you.
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August 16, 2021 at 8:15 am #70090
smith_voice
ParticipantThanks! I appreciate the feedback.
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August 14, 2021 at 11:35 am #70056
RYoung
ParticipantA recent script recorded for an audition I did. Comments, critiques welcome!
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August 16, 2021 at 11:08 am #70098
Sherry Newell
ParticipantHey, good job!
It was a little hard to hear your voice clearly at times, but if you just adjust the volume of the background music to be lower during the time you are speaking, I think that will help. 🙂
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