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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
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Hi all! Looking for some feedback on some commercial homework 🙂
Two very different commercials here. Thanks in advance! -
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Hello! I’d appreciate any feedback you all can provide.
JC Penny
Your brain has 2 sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more. Save more. Only at JC Penney.Fairies
Do you believe in fairies? They are not as friendly as once thought. First they bite. It feels like a little pick; a sting on the skin. When it begins to glow, that is what you have to be careful of. Then you’re in for quite a rush, my dear boy. You see, their glittery skin, their sprinkling wings, and glowing smiles – it’s all just a trick; and they love to play tricks, especially on the ones that are fond of them. You think we are evil, we are devilish, these little girls (if you choose to call them that) are much much darker than we.-
Hey there 🙂
Overall I liked your tone and tempo. At the end of JC Penny, you really kind of loose the energy and let the name of the company fall off. Just make sure you don’t let those “money words” be forgotten since the business name is crucial to the commercial.
Fairies was great :), I really enjoyed the sort of sarcasm in the character. I’m not exactly sure what it was, but at the beginning, its almost like the words are muddled or pronounced a little different than the rest of the read… something was pulling attention. Hope that helps! Sorry, I wasn’t more specific. Good job!
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Hello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback for my upcoming narration demo. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
With one of the most instantly recognizable photographic styles, Ansel Adams is known for capturing majestic images of the American West. As a master of the darkroom, Adams created outstanding contrasts using extensive dodging and burning methods. His famous landscapes were primarily shot using large-format cameras.
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Hi Mary 🙂
Oh my gosh, you are doing so good! I remember listening to some of your homework awhile back, and its fun to hear the progress! Well done 🙂
OK, the first time you say, Ansel Adams, it almost sounds like the name was “cut and pasted” into that spot. I’m not sure if maybe the name was a little flat, or that there seemed to be the tiniest pause before saying “is”. You’re doing great!-
Thank you for the feedback Sherry! That is so nice to hear that progress is being made 🙂 I will listen for he flatness / unnaturalness of saying Ansel Adams in my mind I was trying to emphasize “Ansel Adams” as the subject of the piece, like in a commercial, but it probably does not need that much emphasis and separation, good point! Thank you again!
Mary
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Hello Everyone, I would love to hear all feedback for my 3 Narration scripts attached below. Your feedback will be very helpful in any improvement I need going forward. Thank you very much for your time.
Hudson Yard:
They say you can tell you’ve become a real New Yorker the minute you stop looking up.
Looking up’s for the tourists, for the recent transplants – the people who don’t have work to get to, a train to catch.
Looking up’s for the dreamers, for children who haven’t yet outgrown their surroundings…For anyone wide eyed enough to believe New York still lives up to its namesake as someplace new.
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John F. Kennedy Library and Museum:
Welcome. The John F Kennedy Library and Museum is dedicated to the memory of our nations thirty-fifth President, and to all those, who through the art of politics, seek a new and better world. Our purpose is to advance the study and understanding of President Kennedy’s life and career, and the times in which he lived.
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Hey Sylvanie!
Nice work! Hmmmm…I think you could reduce the pauses and make the spots flow. It’s a lot for one breath but you can also edit to make several of the sentences/thoughts flow as one. -
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These are good reads Sylvanie. I like the different takes of tone, all coming across welcoming and informative. I really like the pre-boarding, directions were clear and to the point; as you would hear in any airport.
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Hello Everyone,
Any constructive criticism on the delivery of these three audio files much appreciated. Thank you!
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Hello! I’d love to get some feedback on these two reads. For Vanguard, I’m working on a strong and confident tone with a subtext of warmth and trustworthiness. And for Westin, my focus keeping the flow moving throughout without rushing. Thank you, Forum friends!
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Hi Mary,
I really like the sound of your voice! Very relatable and credible. I think that for the Vanguard read, you might want to try speaking more from the point of view of the representative of that company, and also as that representative speaking to someone across the table from you or sitting next to you – it might change how you say things if you’re in that kind of setting. I also noticed glottal stops on the “o” words, like “our” and “on.”
I think perhaps the Westin read ended up being rushed because you were trying to make it flow! I do this too. You’ll be able to make it flow without affecting your pace, which should be a little slower (given the context of this piece), but not too slow, of course! It would be great to hear this one again but with the descriptive words accentuated.
Overall, great job. Looking forward to hearing more from you.
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HI RYoung,
Although I liked the music choice, I think it could have been lower volume so that your voice doesn’t need to compete with it. I would suggest to be mindful of your delivery being too announcer-y. I think the overall read needs to settle down just a little, so that it sounds more natural while still sounding assured and credible–your voice is already clear and has gravitas, so that already helps you sound nice and authoritative. The company’s name was slightly rushed in my opinion, and it was strong on the “F” of “FTI” so it made me jump (I had headphones on!). I do enjoy your energy overall. Great job!
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