[David Goldberg]

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[kevinwiland]

Hello all!
I just got my first job narrating a book! Here is an upload of a small clip. Any/all suggestions about technique, studio editing is welcome!

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[TimDKietzman]

Well you have a great tempo and pitch for this type of book. I think everyone will be expecting a serious tone when hearing a script like this and you really nailed it. Although, I think the tone you adopted needs work. You don’t sound quite as interested in the subject matter as you should and I don’t think it works to keep us engaged. On another note, you’re recording setup is fantastic! I hope your recording of this book goes well.

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[kevinwiland]

Thank you, Tim. This is very helpful!

[twiegers]

Hey ya’ll!

Please let me know how you feel about these. Feedback is much appreciated!

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[TimDKietzman]

BlueBell: I think you have the tempo down great and hit the correct words. The tone you were going for is what I would envision for an ice cream commercial, but I don’t think pulled it off. Imagine relaxing with a bowl of this so you can sound interested. Also, act more “urging” since you’re selling something to listeners.
SmokeTreeRose: I would say the same about this one, your tempo and pitch were well applied. However the tone doesn’t match for this type of script. I think it should be more “in awe” rather than relaxed.
AppleWatch: Now the tone of script should be very excited or active, but you still sound relaxed and not very keen to share this product with the listeners. The tempo worked though and you hit the right words. …except for the list which should have varying tones.

Finally, in regards to all of them I think the recording quality needs work and the microphone seems to be making a “buzz.” I hope this helps.

[Nailah]

Good Day All,

Please give me your honest feedback on these practice commercial scripts for my homework. Any feedback would be appreciated!

Thank you in advance!

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[Erik B]

Hi Nailah, I listened to your reads, thought I’d share with you my notes as I listened.

Pizza Hut – good tempo, good differentiation, and good tone. Very good job.

Special K – Very good read, great tone, good differentiation. Perhaps enunciate a bit more clearly with the line, “putthing them in a box”

Spotify – good differentiation, good tone, good read.

Overall very good job.

[Nailah]

Thank you for the feedback Erik!! I will definitely heed your advice!

[Don Sack]

Greetings All;
Two spots, let me know how you feel?

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[Erik B]

Hi Don, Here are my thoughts with your two reads:

Kawasaki – Great tone, hit words nicely. I would suggest slowing down the tempo just a bit. The read sounds a bit rushed.

Berringer – Great tone, hit the ending very well. Maybe differentiate a bit more in the first ten seconds of the read. Also similar to Kawasaki, the tempo sounds a bit rushed.

Overall solid job.

[Don Sack]

Thanks Erik! You are correct, I need to slow it down; I get that from my coach all the time! The Russian’s are in the Holland Tunnel, get this done! LOL!

[greta_j]

Hey folks!
Quick Motel 6 spot for my commercial homework! Do I sound like I’m reading? What does it need to jazz it up or make me sound like I am a trusted Motel 6 employee?
((( No notes needed on audio quality please, this was done on my iphone 😉 )))

Thanks a million!
G

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[Don Sack]

Greta;
Nice voice! Very clear. Yup, sounds like your reading; be happy! Also, unnecessary pauses, make ‘er flowwwww.

[Oktober10]

LAST ONE I PROMISE!

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[greta_j]

Hello Audra! Good clear tone!
Listen back for some melodies and up swings on “Wall Street Journal” – try to slow down and emphasize the “… I read the Wall Street Journal” evenly bc these are the “money words” and they are the most important to hear and get into listeners’ brains 🙂 One other tidbit, try to pronounce the full word “of” in “5% alcohol of course” on take two of Twsited Tea, instead of “a-course.” Keep it up!! /Greta

[Oktober10]

and, s’more….

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[Oktober10]

More for coaching session……

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[Oktober10]

Hi all, these are for my coaching session but I always apreciate your feedback too! Thanks.

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[Sherry Newell]

Hi all! Looking for some feedback on some commercial homework 🙂
Two very different commercials here. Thanks in advance!

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[greta_j]

Hi Sherry! Nice reads.
– I think you could experiment being even more smooth and silky on the Bare Minerals read.
– On Ben and Jerry’s, I think you could go more casual, with less annunciation, and vary your pitch even more 🙂 Have fun!
/Greta

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