[David Goldberg]

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[greta_j]

Hey folks!
Quick Motel 6 spot for my commercial homework! Do I sound like I’m reading? What does it need to jazz it up or make me sound like I am a trusted Motel 6 employee?
((( No notes needed on audio quality please, this was done on my iphone 😉 )))

Thanks a million!
G

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[Don Sack]

Greta;
Nice voice! Very clear. Yup, sounds like your reading; be happy! Also, unnecessary pauses, make ‘er flowwwww.

[Oktober10]

LAST ONE I PROMISE!

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[greta_j]

Hello Audra! Good clear tone!
Listen back for some melodies and up swings on “Wall Street Journal” – try to slow down and emphasize the “… I read the Wall Street Journal” evenly bc these are the “money words” and they are the most important to hear and get into listeners’ brains 🙂 One other tidbit, try to pronounce the full word “of” in “5% alcohol of course” on take two of Twsited Tea, instead of “a-course.” Keep it up!! /Greta

[Oktober10]

and, s’more….

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[Oktober10]

More for coaching session……

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[Oktober10]

Hi all, these are for my coaching session but I always apreciate your feedback too! Thanks.

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[Sherry Newell]

Hi all! Looking for some feedback on some commercial homework 🙂
Two very different commercials here. Thanks in advance!

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[greta_j]

Hi Sherry! Nice reads.
– I think you could experiment being even more smooth and silky on the Bare Minerals read.
– On Ben and Jerry’s, I think you could go more casual, with less annunciation, and vary your pitch even more 🙂 Have fun!
/Greta

[adamhurd]

Hello! I’d appreciate any feedback you all can provide.

JC Penny
Your brain has 2 sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more. Save more. Only at JC Penney.

Fairies
Do you believe in fairies? They are not as friendly as once thought. First they bite. It feels like a little pick; a sting on the skin. When it begins to glow, that is what you have to be careful of. Then you’re in for quite a rush, my dear boy. You see, their glittery skin, their sprinkling wings, and glowing smiles – it’s all just a trick; and they love to play tricks, especially on the ones that are fond of them. You think we are evil, we are devilish, these little girls (if you choose to call them that) are much much darker than we.

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[Sherry Newell]

Hey there 🙂
Overall I liked your tone and tempo. At the end of JC Penny, you really kind of loose the energy and let the name of the company fall off. Just make sure you don’t let those “money words” be forgotten since the business name is crucial to the commercial.
Fairies was great :), I really enjoyed the sort of sarcasm in the character. I’m not exactly sure what it was, but at the beginning, its almost like the words are muddled or pronounced a little different than the rest of the read… something was pulling attention. Hope that helps! Sorry, I wasn’t more specific. Good job!

[mkell755]

Hello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback for my upcoming narration demo. Let me know what you think. Thanks!

Mary

With one of the most instantly recognizable photographic styles, Ansel Adams is known for capturing majestic images of the American West. As a master of the darkroom, Adams created outstanding contrasts using extensive dodging and burning methods. His famous landscapes were primarily shot using large-format cameras.

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[Sherry Newell]

Hi Mary 🙂
Oh my gosh, you are doing so good! I remember listening to some of your homework awhile back, and its fun to hear the progress! Well done 🙂
OK, the first time you say, Ansel Adams, it almost sounds like the name was “cut and pasted” into that spot. I’m not sure if maybe the name was a little flat, or that there seemed to be the tiniest pause before saying “is”. You’re doing great!

[mkell755]

Thank you for the feedback Sherry! That is so nice to hear that progress is being made 🙂 I will listen for he flatness / unnaturalness of saying Ansel Adams in my mind I was trying to emphasize “Ansel Adams” as the subject of the piece, like in a commercial, but it probably does not need that much emphasis and separation, good point! Thank you again!

Mary

[Evette75]

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It all starts with how you’re feeling, right now. You’ll enjoy a customized experience from over 400 relaxation activities, each one about 10 minutes or less. MyLife delivers exactly what you need – because it always starts with you.

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