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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #70271
    tamara37
    Participant

    Hello everyone! I am newbie and would appreciate any feedback on the attached unedited script recordings 🙂

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    • #70296
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey Tamara, You don’t sound like a newbie! You have a very lovely voice. All 3 performances were conversational. You actually make my hold time on the phone a delightful! Your smile shown through on the JC Penny read! Great job!

  • #70247
    AndrewHunter
    Participant

    Hello everyone! I’m glad I came across this support group online. I didn’t know where to turn to for feedback. I’m inexperienced with the voice-acting, and I’m told all the time I have some type of announcer voice. Anyways I figured I’d give it a shot and see where this goes.

    What does everyone think of these scripts found on here? Thanks a bunch for your feedback!

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    • #70260
      JM Saunders
      Participant

      The four recordings you posted really show your range, but I will admit I liked the American Airlines and Alamo ones best, I think because they sound like your natural voice. For the American Airlines one, I would suggest you work a little more to convey confidence and reassurance in your voice (since that’s what airline customers are ultimately looking for, I think). I liked the “fun” tone in your voice for the Alamo one, really went with the words of the script.

      • #70304
        SuperLuke
        Participant

        I agree with JM Saunders about the American Airline recording sounding more like your regular voice. It sounds more realistic and believable than your “Theif” recording. In the voiceover world, we aim to sound realistic and believable.

        • #70327
          AndrewHunter
          Participant

          Thank you JM Saunders and SuperLuke for your feedback! I will be more mindful to sound more authentic and not try too hard. I’ll also keep in mind the confidence factor in my voice.

  • #70242
    Lilbelle1487
    Participant

    Working on my commercial conversational read going into my demo. I need to hear feedback on my breathing and flow of conversation. Is my tone changing and can you hear the intent? Would love to hear as much feedback as possible, Thanks 😀 Scripts from Edges Library. Also, If you have heard me before. I have new equipment and I need to know if its hard to hear or any sound quality issues.

    Crayola Markers
    Crayola Color Wonder Markers color only on special paper. So your kids can express their creativity more often…in more places…with less mess. Crayola Color Wonder. It starts with Crayola.

    Popeye’s Chicken
    Got a cravin’ for Cajun? Come along for some New Orleans style fried chicken, cajun battered fries, and buttermilk biscuits. Love that chicken at Popeye’s.

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    • #70257
      Notetaker32
      Participant

      Hey! Thanks for sharing your talent. I haven’t heard your previous recordings, but it was definitely softer than other recordings I’ve listened to here. I just had to adjust my speakers higher and it was fine.

      Your voice has a nice quality. I noticed a few breaks where a conversation with a friend wouldn’t have them. For example, between “markers” and “color” or “chicken” and “at Popeye’s”. As you smooth it out more, it will feel like I’m talking to my next-door neighbor!

    • #70253
      Bill Mahoney
      Participant

      Hello… You have a very relatable voice – one that will serve you well soon. It appears you are being very careful in your read. It is a good read, but you can take it to another level. I listened to your recording a few times, and all I thought, was you were saying the words, but only partially owning the script. That is not a negative, as we all do that from time to time. If you were saying these exact script words to a friend, the words would just fall off your lips, because you wouldn’t be thinking about it. You would just be talking. Picture someone you trust when reading this again, and you will see a big difference. Also, don’t push the “Less mess” part – your voice actually got louder. It seems like a short statement like that should be emphasized, but it should be a flowing emphasis – nat an increased modulation. Overall, your talent level is infinite. Keep working on your craft, and you will be unstoppable.

  • #70235
    mrtripo9
    Participant

    Hi guys pls help critic my work. Thanks 🙂
    1.Coors beer
    Up here in the mountains … we love Coors Beer.
    2.Aetna Insurance.
    Compassion and trust … qualities you can expect from Aetna Insurance.
    3.Toyota
    The 200 horsepower, very stylish Camry, with an interior like you’ve never seen before. Only from Toyota.

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    • #70261
      JM Saunders
      Participant

      You have a wonderfully deep voice. As another reviewer mentioned, you may want to work on a more conversational tone. Also, work with your home studio a little to see if you can cut out some of the echoing of your voice, sounds like you’re talking in a big cavernous space/room.

    • #70245
      Lilbelle1487
      Participant

      Hey there, First off great job for jumping in and putting yourself out there to be critiqued.
      I heard an accent that is great, but it seems to be disrupting the pronunciation of certain words like Toyota.
      The Mp3s themselves sound very boomie. You might want to come away from the mic a bit. I also thought it sounded read and not conversational. Hope this is helpful and all the best to you.

  • #70219
    Bil-Bo
    Participant

    Campbell’s Home Cookin’ :30

    What do Campbell’s kids eat when they’re not kids anymore? Introducing new Chicken and Pasta with Roasted Garlic from Campbell’s. Imagine perfectly diced chicken simmered in rich chicken broth and seasoned with robust notes of roasted garlic ….all brimming with crisp garden celery, fresh carrots, and deliciously plump penne and rotini. Home Cookin’ Soup that’s a lot more seasoned. But then….so are you. Home Cookin’ Campbell’s. Good for the body. Good for the Soul.

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    • #70256
      Notetaker32
      Participant

      Beautiful read! I love it. Some of your ending sounds get dropped a little; I especially noticed the “c” in garlic and “l” in soul. Keep up the great work!

    • #70246
      Lilbelle1487
      Participant

      I absolutely love this read! Great job!

    • #70239
      mrtripo9
      Participant

      hey bil,that sounds neat, i cant find any flaws..its ready for radio..great job.,the instrument was spot on!

  • #70214
    ryanp.bogie
    Participant

    Hello everyone,

    Here is my homework for my next session. Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you all!

    -Ryan

    Bose Home Theatre Systems
    Bose home theater systems customize their sound to fit your room.
    Choosing anything less just doesn’t make sense.
    BOSE … better sound through research.

    Iphone 4 ad
    It’s the end of the day. And you missed it. Where did those hours go? Get in the driver’s seat and capture your life with the iPhone 4s – the fastest, most powerful smartphone on the market. Voice activation, video, and much more. In stores now.

    No!
    Kids hate the word no. As in no you can’t stay up late, no you can’t have more ice cream and no, you may not paint the cat. No, no, NO! Well isn’t it time for a yes? We think so. Six Flags Great Adventure. Yes!

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    • #70255
      Notetaker32
      Participant

      Hi, Ryan!

      Nice reads. For the iPhone ad, I’d recommend being careful that some of your sentences/statements ending with an up inflection. I’d also eliminate the break between “fastest” and “most powerful”. Overall it has such a nice fluid feel.

      Loved the energy in the No! ad. You did a great job increasing the feeling of the no in the first list. Careful to read as scripted: “no you may not paint the cat” instead of “no you can’t paint the cat”.

      Great work!

    • #70240
      mrtripo9
      Participant

      Hey Ryan love yr character role on the six flag, love it!
      For the Bose take, I believe Bose is pronounced Boz!or one salable word without the e
      Overall great work!

  • #70209
    Notetaker32
    Participant

    Hey, Everyone! Just at the beginning of an exciting VO adventure. I’ve been working on some of the basics, and would love your feedback. Please pardon any poor audio quality.

    Thanks for your time and ear!

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  • #70205
    Mary Werntz
    Participant

    Hi there! I’ve created this recording as if it were an audition with a slate and two reads. I imagined that the instructions were “friendly neighbor, slightly sarcastic”. I’d love feedback on the tone and variety of the two takes. Thank you!

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    • #70254
      Notetaker32
      Participant

      Hey, Mary! I prefer the first read—much smoother and has less of an edge to the sarcasm. The second read had a couple of pauses between words that were probably just breaths but seemed a little too long. Great work!

    • #70218
      AyalC93
      Participant

      Hi Mary,

      I definitely enjoyed the first read a lot better. I could picture it in an ad easier and the sarcasm felt more playful than the second. I’d probably suggest slowing it down a smidge but honestly that’s about it. Great job!

  • #70202
    AyalC93
    Participant

    Hi everyone! I’m back for my commercial training and learning the differences between it and Narration. This is my first homework for it so please do lend me your ears and feedback. Thanks!

    Script
    Nintendo Switch TV Spot – “Our Way to Play: Teamwork”
    After soccer practice, the fun and games continue. Lauren’s the goalie. She grabs every green star. Teagans on defense, there to protect the team. Paige is the star striker. You can count on her to take the shot. Then there’s me. Well, I just like playing games with my friends! Teamwork. That’s our way to play.

    I personally think my tempo might be too quick and I probably could’ve treated the character names more like “Lists” in terms of emphasis/tone shifts for variety. But I didn’t want to overthink it and see if anyone else agrees. Again thanks!

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    • #70262
      JM Saunders
      Participant

      I think your tempo was right on the money. I do like your idea of working with the player names to vary them a little. I would also be more clear when you say the word “teamwork” since that’s such a natural change to introduce the end of the script.

      • #70269
        AyalC93
        Participant

        Noted! Listening back to it I see what you mean. Thank you!

  • #70193
    greta_j
    Participant

    Hey folks! Looking for feedback on my read (not audio). Do I exude my inner athlete? Do I make you want to buy some new Nike gear and get fit? Thanks! /Greta

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    • #70200
      suecat
      Participant

      Hey Greta, You have a lovely voice. The beginning of the performance suggests that you’re building excitement, but your tone stays the same. I think if you increase your pitch by a half step per phase, I’d probably search the Nike website for some of their great gear! Still a nice job!

      • #70204
        greta_j
        Participant

        Super advice! Thanks suecat!

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