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Hello Everyone, I would love to hear all feedback for my 3 Narration scripts attached below. Your feedback will be very helpful in any improvement I need going forward. Thank you very much for your time.
Hudson Yard:
They say you can tell you’ve become a real New Yorker the minute you stop looking up.
Looking up’s for the tourists, for the recent transplants – the people who don’t have work to get to, a train to catch.
Looking up’s for the dreamers, for children who haven’t yet outgrown their surroundings…For anyone wide eyed enough to believe New York still lives up to its namesake as someplace new.
But we’ve heard a different story…Pre-Boarding Announcement:
Good afternoon passengers. This is the pre-boarding announcement for flight 89B to Rome. We are now inviting those passengers with small children, and any passengers requiring special assistance, to begin boarding at this time. Please have your boarding pass and identification ready. Regular boarding will begin in approximately ten minutes time. Thank you.
John F. Kennedy Library and Museum:
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Hey Sylvanie!
Nice work! Hmmmm…I think you could reduce the pauses and make the spots flow. It’s a lot for one breath but you can also edit to make several of the sentences/thoughts flow as one. -
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These are good reads Sylvanie. I like the different takes of tone, all coming across welcoming and informative. I really like the pre-boarding, directions were clear and to the point; as you would hear in any airport.
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Hello Everyone,
Any constructive criticism on the delivery of these three audio files much appreciated. Thank you!
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Hello! I’d love to get some feedback on these two reads. For Vanguard, I’m working on a strong and confident tone with a subtext of warmth and trustworthiness. And for Westin, my focus keeping the flow moving throughout without rushing. Thank you, Forum friends!
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Hi Mary,
I really like the sound of your voice! Very relatable and credible. I think that for the Vanguard read, you might want to try speaking more from the point of view of the representative of that company, and also as that representative speaking to someone across the table from you or sitting next to you – it might change how you say things if you’re in that kind of setting. I also noticed glottal stops on the “o” words, like “our” and “on.”
I think perhaps the Westin read ended up being rushed because you were trying to make it flow! I do this too. You’ll be able to make it flow without affecting your pace, which should be a little slower (given the context of this piece), but not too slow, of course! It would be great to hear this one again but with the descriptive words accentuated.
Overall, great job. Looking forward to hearing more from you.
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HI RYoung,
Although I liked the music choice, I think it could have been lower volume so that your voice doesn’t need to compete with it. I would suggest to be mindful of your delivery being too announcer-y. I think the overall read needs to settle down just a little, so that it sounds more natural while still sounding assured and credible–your voice is already clear and has gravitas, so that already helps you sound nice and authoritative. The company’s name was slightly rushed in my opinion, and it was strong on the “F” of “FTI” so it made me jump (I had headphones on!). I do enjoy your energy overall. Great job!
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Greetings all!
This is my first post on the Feedback Forum! Doing my homework and would appreciate any feedback you might have on these 3 recordings. I’m working on my pacing, not leaving too many gaps between sentences, and an even flow. My home studio is a work in progress, so not too focused on the quality of the recording right now. That will be further down the road…
Many thanks for your input. I really appreciate your taking the time to listen.-
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Hi Anne-Marie! Great work on these! Your voice is very soothing and easy to listen to. You sounded most at ease in the Dublin script which flowed the best from my perspective, so maybe you could play with a more relaxed, conversation read on the other two. And I know you’re still working on the home studio, but the audio quality sounds excellent to me!
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Hello Fellow VO talent,
Thank you in advance for any feedback and observations you can provide!Atlanta Bread Company
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Hello mrtripo9! You have a very unique voice; I like the deepness and the gravitas quality. I think for this script, the delivery could have been more natural, and one of the ways you could make it more natural is to avoid any inflection patterns such as a sing-songy, up-and down pattern throughout. The emotion is nice and friendly, and you don’t have any major pauses, but you might want to consider bringing in a little bit of pause if it helps to group certain phrases together. Well done!
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Hello! Looking for feedback on some narration scripts I’m playing around with for lessons. I was trying to focus on pacing (was I slow enough? Did I give the script time to breathe?) and articulating my “and”s and “to”s to make it sound crisper. Also played around with Audacity so as far as volume went so hopefully you guys can hear it well enough while simultaneously not having your ears blasted haha. Thanks in advance!
Ohio State Tour Video
“This is the historic Orton Hall.
Built in 1893, it’s like our very own Hogwarts.
It’s home to one of the quietest and oldest libraries on campus, and our own personal dinosaur.
As a Buckeye, you’ll grow to love the sound of Orton’s bells chiming across campus- a chronic 7 minutes off the mark of any clock. ….Relatable.”Clovis Bray AI Lore (from Destiny 2)
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I really enjoyed all three of your reads! You have a warm voice and have a lot of variety and specificity in your delivery. For the Orton copy, the only feedback i’d say is it felt like there was just a bit too much air in between sentences. I’m sure if this was actually part of a guided tour that pause would be necessary but when just listening to it, it breaks the momentum and makes each sentence have to build energy from zero.
For the destiny script, I liked your read a lot! Make sure to really ask that question at the beginning, and maybe try exploring the danger of letting AI determine it’s own morality a little more? Or just get a bit more specific on your point of view.
For the capsule read, it felt as though each word was a bit clipped and detached from the rest of the sentences – i think focusing on the idea an meaning of the sentences as a whole will help to make the read sound a bit more natural while still keeping that professional explainer sound.
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