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  • #74972
    manchilda
    Participant

    I liked this script AND my microphone and headset have arrived, no more airpod audio!

    I am Anxiety – I’ve been expecting you. Why? Don’t tell me you don’t recognize me? Oh! You still don’t know who I am. Let me try and help you with that. I am the ill ease that you feel when you walk into a crowded room. You know. The hot and cold flushes that confuse you when you are already confused enough. I am the one that raises the whip to your already raising heart. I am the tightening of your chest. The s*********g worries that feel like they might become an avalanche and they can just bury you in an instant. My friend I am the obsessive and the compulsive. I’m the voice. You know the one. Always questioning, questioning, questioning, everything you do, everything you think. And I am every, single staring eye that watches you. So, now that we have become acquainted, what are you going to do about it?
    Tag: 1 in 4 people experience anxiety. And most don’t know about it. You need to know anxiety to be free from it.
    Visit beyondblue.org.au or call 1300 22 4636.

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    • #75043
      Earthbul
      Participant

      I liked your delivery on this one. The pace was very natural. Good job.

    • #74979
      HeatherDT
      Participant

      Your voice was made for VO. I wish I had your ability to pace at that rate, but for the seriousness of this, I would love to hear it a little slower. Well done.

      • #74982
        manchilda
        Participant

        Thank you Heather! I usually go too slow, and I thought that if I sped it up and kept accelerating (which I’m not normally comfortable with), it would actually induce the feeling of anxiety that they were trying to convey.

  • #74960
    Provocaleric
    Participant

    Thank you for your advice, I am struggling with connecting to an image, I have to focus better. I hope your audition went well.

    • #74965
      Earthbul
      Participant

      You’re not alone in that. That’s still one of the most difficult aspects for me. Audition went horrible for that very reason lol I feel I came at it way too seriously. You have a website ? I’d love to share it with you and get your thouggts. Legally, I can’t post it on a public forum.

  • #74956
    Bil-Bo
    Participant

    Justin Boots (Pecos Red)
    Hi, I’m Pecos Red for Justin Boots. Ever heard the term: “All Hat and no cattle”? That’s the problem with a lot of boots I know. Sounds weird, but the thing of it is that most boots don’t do the same things your feet do, like expand and contract when you take a step.
    Most boots are rigid, which is why your “dawgs commence to barkin’” and get all swole up, from yer boot-heels a wanderin’.
    At Justin Boots, our technology is a simple idee that comes
    right out of the way your foot works. It’s how we build ever’ boot we make. So’s it expands and flexes the way your foot does when it’s out ridin’ the range, or just boot-scootin’ out at Billy Bob’s. Justin Boots Quality. It’s a DANG good thing! I’m Pecos Red, remindin’ ya: never kick a cow chip on a hot day! Justin Boots. Don’t wear ‘em. Use ‘em!

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    • #75121
      Sylvanie
      Participant

      This was a fun read! Very cool voice. Awesome job

    • #75042
      Bil-Bo
      Participant

      Hi Just a character voice. Thanks for listening.

    • #75014
      manchilda
      Participant

      This was fantastic! I’m with Heather, it’s great if that’s your natural voice, even more impressive if it isn’t.

    • #74980
      HeatherDT
      Participant

      That was just Wow! I smiled the entire time. No idea if that is your natural accent, but you nailed this. Very well done.

  • #74950
    Ems412
    Participant

    Hello,

    I would like to get some feedback on my three narration reads below for my coaching class homework. THank you in advance.

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    • #74981
      HeatherDT
      Participant

      I would love to hear a bit more passion in each read. For Wales and the one about New Orleans, maybe a little slower and more punch to some of the words so I can see it all in my mind. The Venus and Serena one, is the same. Slower with pride. Let your tone show how amazing what they achieved was.

      • #75115
        Ems412
        Participant

        Thank you! My instructor and I agreed you have a great ear!

  • #74943
    ilene.echavarria
    Participant

    Hello Edge Friends!

    Could you pls. take a listen and provide honest feedback on my 4 commercial reads attached? Appreciate it and thank YOU!

    TARGET:

    There will ALWAYS be a part of you that simply DOESN’T TRANSLATE. TARGET. Cuenta con mas. Paga menos.

    Coast to Coast:

    YOUR business is OUR business. That’s why we make MORE eCommerce deliveries to homes THAN ANYONE in the country. A todas partes de los Estados Unidos.De costa a costa. Learn more at CoasttoCoast.com.
 Coast to Coast delivery. 
Nuestra prioridad: Tu.

    Microsoft – Potential:

    WE see a company with YOUR name on it.
    We’re inspired by people WHO THINK BIG.
    We’re inspired by people WHO WORK TIRELESSLY in pursuit of goals that may seem impossible to everyone BUT them.
    It’s why WE’RE PASSIONATE about CREATING SOFTWARE that helps them REALIZE those grand ambitions.
    Visit Microsoft.com/about.
    Your potential. Our passion.

    AT&T Rethink Possible:

    With the BEST global coverage and NEW, MORE affordable international data packages,…
    Checking scores in Dublin, Ireland is like checking scores in Dublin, California.
    AT&T makes it easier to use your phone abroad.
    Packages start as low as $30.
    Log on to att.com/global for more details.
    AT&T.
    Rethink Possible.

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    • #74991
      ilene.echavarria
      Participant

      Thank you guys for your feedback!


      @HeatherDT
      – You are right on the Microsoft read. I think I cut too much of the breathing in-between each line when I edited. Tried to follow my coach’s note on that one, so I think I might over did it. Thank you!

      @Ems412
      – Yeah, I think I read that line too quickly unconsciously… Thank you for the note and will take that in consideration.

    • #74983
      HeatherDT
      Participant

      You totally owned these! Loved listening to them. The Microsoft one could have been paced a bit more slowly like the ATT one. Beautiful work.

    • #74955
      Ems412
      Participant

      Hello,

      First I love your voice, commercial work fits you perfectly. I only have one critique; the Coast to Coast read you sped up the pace on “A todas partes de los Estados Unidos” then went back to the normal pacing after. I don’t know if that was intentional or not.

  • #74907
    Earthbul
    Participant

    Julia
    You’re listening to the actual recording
    of “the Julia”. A subsonic moan that doesn’t match the sound of any marine
    creature ever recorded. Many biologists will tell you it’s a deep sea
    distress call.
    And when you listen, it’s easy to see why. The mysterious howling was
    captured by deep-sea hydrophones off the coast of Cape Adare.
    The same place NASA captured photographs of a huge, unexplained shadow moving
    through the water.
    It may well be a coincidence, but if the Julia really is a distress call from
    the deep, perhaps it’s time we answered.
    Ninety-five percent of our oceans remain unexplored.
    Are we killing what we’ve yet to discover ?

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    • #74970
      manchilda
      Participant

      Interesting. I’ve heard it called the “bloop,” never “the julia.” The pacing was terrific and your voice is made for the subject matter. I feel like you must have listened to Paul Harvey to pick up the old, “pregnant pause.”

    • #74920
      Provocaleric
      Participant

      Earthbul,

      You have a very trustworthy voice and your pacing was beautiful! I admire your patience with the read. Great work! I also took your challenge and recorded Dogs Breath for fun, it should be below. See you on the next one!

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      • #74929
        Earthbul
        Participant

        It felt like you were reading the character and not being him. I really like your voice and I’m very interested in seeing what you bring to the table next.
        Ps wish me luck I’m about to audition for a narration gig in about ten minutes 🙂

  • #74902
    HeatherDT
    Participant

    Hello Everyone. Hope you’re having a great day. First homework assignment. Would greatly appreciate feedback please.

    Grenada

    The Spice of the Caribbean, a hidden gem with unspoiled beauty offering a lifestyle so pure and authentic, you will feel instantly renewed.
    Breathe sweet nutmeg as it dances in the breeze. Explore lush hillsides and the world’s first underwater sculpture park. Witness yet another flawless sunset to the sound of gentle waves. This is Grenada in all her wild, transcendent glory—yours to discover.

    AIG

    The Greatest Risk Is Not Taking One. They gave up everything. Their families. Their friends. Their homes. The villages they were born in. They arrived with only the clothes on their backs. Vulnerable. Scared. But brimming with hope and determined that a better life was within their grasp. Today, risk takers don’t have to go after their dreams alone. They can rely on a business partner to help them through uncharted waters. An organization with unsurpassed insight and financial resources. One with the ability and flexibility to design specific solutions to help minimize risk for almost any business undertaking.

    • #74903
      HeatherDT
      Participant

      Woops! Sorry about that! Rookie mistake and first time on the forum. Please find my files attached. I look forward to receiving feedback. Thank you in advance!

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      • #74967
        manchilda
        Participant

        Hey Heather! Great to see you on here, and outside of class. I love your voice, my only thought, along the lines of Courtney’s was that this could have had a different pace. Faster, yet still relaxed.

        • #74977
          HeatherDT
          Participant

          Thank you! I realize I get in my head a lot when I record because I was always told I speak too fast. Now I speak like I’m going back in time. Lol.
          Thanks for the feedback.

      • #74954
        Ems412
        Participant

        Hello,

        I love the Grenada one, your accent sounds an extra touch!

      • #74925
        Courtney Feiman
        Participant

        Gorgeous voice! Lovely work identifying the key words. As you continue forward, focus on adding in a natural flow and pace to your read. Let the key words do most of the heavy lifting.

        • #74928
          HeatherDT
          Participant

          Thank you! Super appreciate the feedback!

  • #74892
    cknipe
    Participant

    Hi Everybody,

    I’m getting back to VO after a long absence. I have some homework scripts on which I need feedback. Thank you in advance!

    Cosmos, Advil, & Financial Engines

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    • #74937
      cknipe
      Participant

      I took a little more time to get in the proper headspace and gave it another shot.

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      • #74996
        ilene.echavarria
        Participant

        @cknipe– Yaaassss!!!! MUCH BETTER!!! See the difference? all 3 are much better reads than the previous ones. Good job!

    • #74915
      ilene.echavarria
      Participant

      Hi cknipe! Great diction and enunciation. Love your voice too. I would suggest trying to connect with the copy a bit more. In the Cosmos for instance, I wanna be able to picture what you are describing. Take your time in the pacing with narrations. You’ve got this!

      • #74989
        cknipe
        Participant

        Thank you for the feedback. It was most helpful and I appreciate it!

    • #74899
      Earthbul
      Participant

      No offense but there’s zero differentiation between all 3 spots. I like your voice but there’s no animation or excitement or mystery in your delivery. That might be alright when your talking about a financialinstitution or aspirin but the planet earth is a whole other ballgame. I’d love to hear you redo the Cosmos spot with a little oomph to it. Good luck.

      • #74906
        cknipe
        Participant

        You’re right. I had that feeling when I recorded them. Thank you for the input.

  • #74889
    touzet
    Participant

    Thought I would try one more… A Home Depot Spot – “Today’s Pros, Today’s Tools”

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    • #74966
      michaelflemingvoice
      Participant

      I’m going to comment on all three that you posted in this reply. I like your voice, but for some reason…there’s just something missing. Maybe it feels like you’re trying too hard? The tractor supply spot was the best of the three. I don’t know you, but it doesn’t feel like you, if that makes sense. Home Depot and Tractor Supply are perfect companies for your voice, though.

  • #74885
    touzet
    Participant

    A Florida Keys spot: “Wonders of the World

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