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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #75169
    LindsayCampbell
    Participant

    Hey Y’all!
    First time poster here, and excited to get some feedback/guidance/tips on my first attempts at these Narration scripts! Thanks in advance, friends.

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    • #75180
      ashleymitchel
      Participant

      “Family walk” sounded like you were chatting with a friend in the best way.

    • #75177
      Earthbul
      Participant

      Welcome,
      For me,the Seuss read was perfectly suited to your voice. I really enjoy the tone. The Ulta spot felt like listening to you read and not emote. Once again, welcome 🙂

      • #75178
        LindsayCampbell
        Participant

        Thank you! Much appreciated. I can hear that on Ulta too. I’ll keep it in mind 🙂

    • #75174
      LindsayCampbell
      Participant

      one more…

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  • #75157
    Earthbul
    Participant

    All comments and critiques welcomed and appreciated.

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    • #75231
      touzet
      Participant

      Very nice! Somewhat of a unique signature voice. Natural, smooth and conversational delivery. I had to work really hard to find something to pick at.
      If I were a producer here, I would want a few more takes of the last line. “Insurance for-the-modern world”. For me, for-the-modern, is a bit of a soft, fast grouping and runs together.

      Echoing Ashley: “You’d have, like, a ton of dollars” sounds very natural and conversational.
      The gap between “like…” and “a ton of dollars” really legit sounds like someone trying to figure out what to say.(which I believe it’s supposed to).

    • #75220
      edixon310
      Participant

      Oh boy! Very natural and calm. Your inflections are great, and you emote in a way that makes it very clear the feelings you are trying to convey.

    • #75181
      ashleymitchel
      Participant

      For a second I thought I had to listen to an ad before hearing your recording, but it turned out it was just your recording!

      “You’d have, like, a ton of dollars” sounds very natural and conversational.

      I liked the way you chose to deliver the word, “um.” You didn’t over-act on it. Again, very natural sounding.

  • #75152
    HeatherDT
    Participant

    Good Evening Everyone! I have more homework and would greatly appreciate your critiques please. I greatly appreciate all of your feedback as I work to improve. Thank you in advance for your time.

    Evolution at Bayer
    We live in an unprecedented time. Beijing’s remarkable transformation is the perfect example of dramatic worldwide progress.
    We are also living in the year of the dragon. This powerful symbol represents optimism, entrepreneurship, and the drive for something new.
    In 2005, Bayer Consumer Care boldly acquired Roche, which transformed our company into a global contender at a time when pharma growth rates were higher than OTC. China, Russia and Brazil were not even in the top 10.

    Nuclear
    “Your attention please. This is an emergency message. This is not a drill. This is a warning that multiple reactors within the facility have been compromised. We repeat, multiple reactors have been compromised. The facility must be evacuated immediately as a lockdown is now in place. Will all workers make their way to the nearest emergency exit. Please leave all your belongings where they are and make your way to the exits immediately. This is not a drill.”

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    • #75263
      manchilda
      Participant

      I would probably buy ice from you during a snowstorm, but I LOVED the nuclear read. It was a perfect balance of urgent and professional.

    • #75182
      ashleymitchel
      Participant

      You have such a credible sound in both recordings. I felt engaged while listening to both, especially the nuclear recording.

    • #75176
      Earthbul
      Participant

      I enjoyed your interpretation of the Nuclear script. Nice sense of urgency. As for the Bayer spot it felt you found your voice late in the read. You’ve got a wonderful sound. Love your accent.

  • #75140
    IlikeGlen
    Participant

    Hi Everyone! My name is Glen Ross I am new to the school as well as the forum
    Please do me the honor of listening to my attachment and don’t hold back on the feedback
    thanks community

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    • #75202
      IlikeGlen
      Participant

      Thank you so much Ashley😁

    • #75183
      ashleymitchel
      Participant

      Oh my gosh, the last line is so ominous. Well-delivered!

    • #75146
      RBenesVO
      Participant

      Glen, welcome to the forum and getting into this. I like the voice, it fits and you have good inflections. Recommend you check the gain as you may be clipping. Normalize to -3db with your DAW as it’s coming out pretty high. There are some breaths where you could dial down the amplitude in editing or possibly remove some of the more apparent pre-breathes like at 29.5 seconds.

      • #75148
        IlikeGlen
        Participant

        Hi Rbenes,
        Thank you for the quick feedback especially when you said it fit,that means so much. thanks as well for the -3dp tip because I was stuck on doing it at -1dp
        When I get back to home studio I will adjust it.
        Thanks again I wish you much success with your voice acting career

  • #75137
    RBenesVO
    Participant

    Tonight’s homework:
    Cactus Pepper Sauce
    I serve Cactus Pepper Sauce to the trail hands ever day, cause they like their chow spicy! Believe me, that sauce keeps those cowboys boisterous and motivated. Oh, I just stir up Cactus Pepper Sauce from ingredients I find in the dessert, then I let it cure out in the chuck wagon. It’s a secret recipe, locked away in my mind.

    AEC Foundation narration
    Every child deserves to grow up with opportunities to learn and thrive. With his skills, her talents, each is a potential leader, a contributor, a productive citizen. How kids grow up will determine their success as adults. But sadly, more than one in five children in America are growing up in poor families and poor neighborhoods, where the chance to thrive is anything but a given. The Annie E. Casey Foundation is dedicated to changing that.

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    • #75219
      edixon310
      Participant

      Great read. You have a nice quality to your voice. I also liked that you were able to add a character to you Pepper Sauce read, that’s something that I am working on.

    • #75203
      IlikeGlen
      Participant

      Hey Rbenes
      I like the tone of your voice
      I feel maybe a little more inflection as well as hitting the product line harder overall nice job

    • #75184
      ashleymitchel
      Participant

      Wow, listening to these two recordings back-to-back shows just how varied your vocal range is. Nice!

      Great choices on how you say “spicy” and “Oh, I just stir up..”

      The space you take with the first line of the AEC recording sounds excellent. You really let it breathe and it fits perfectly with the content.

  • #75123
    bnielsen15
    Participant

    Hi everyone! These files are for my week 4 homework. I had some issues with normalizing these, so they may sound a tad quiet. Apologies in advance! Any feedback is welcome and appreciated more than you know.

    Ziplock: Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.

    Cleaner Elections: Smear campaigns… mud slinging… twisting the truth. Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics? Do they think it really helps their campaign? It’s u**y, uncalled for, and deceitful. So why do we allow them to continue?

    Amtrak: So much beauty in one place! America is a great country, and we’ve got the best way to see it. Amtrak “Explore America” fares. Round trips from one hundred and seventy nine dollars all across America. It’s a great country, at a great price. Call 1-800-USA-RAIL now about Amtrak “Explore America” fares.

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    • #75132
      michaelflemingvoice
      Participant

      Hello, sir.

      Your voice is definitely friendly! I feel like you’re almost there in nailing the ziplock and amtrack. I’m thinking a little more variation in inflections through each piece would nail it.

      For instance: “when it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a ziplock bag”…I see the words ‘this,’ ‘know,’ and ‘ziplock’ like hurdles on the track, and I would raise my entire body each time I said them.

      The way you read Cleaner Elections, I felt like I was at the funeral for political ads. Like there was actually no way to change them. Rile up your audience with the first three phrases. Get them on your side with the next two questions. See them in your mind agreeing with you on the adjectives, while you hit each one fairly hard. And make them anticipate the answer to the last question, emphasizing almost every word. See how that might change the read.

      On Amtrak, imagine those places in your mind that you agree make America a great and beautiful country to travel. Take it all in in you mind and savor it, maybe even imagine those inspirational cello string instrumentals that run over time lapsed clouds to give the inspirational feel, and that’ll help inform the pace, I think. And slow it down on the phone number, I didn’t get a pen in time! 🙂

      Each file was cut off at the end, and I see what you mean about quiet, but it didn’t seem horrible. Like I says, you’re almost there, and you have the talent. Keep up the hard work!

  • #75101
    chennianen
    Participant

    I actually have two more!

    Motel 6
    Whether you live for a good ride or ride to live a little more. Everyone can agree on Motel 6 where you always save more for whatever you travel for. Like the open road.
    Book online at motel6.com.

    Purina
    When you have a pet…life is better, because pets enrich our lives in immeasurable ways, Purina shares your passion for pets, it’s why we continue to do all we can to help pet owners make the world a better place for pets. Purina, your pet, our passion.

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  • #75097
    chennianen
    Participant

    Hi everyone — here are some reads that I completed! Feedback is welcome 🙂

    Go Daddy
    This report is brought to you by Go Daddy! Running your own business running you ragged? Go Daddy can help. With memorable domains, website design, online marketing and 24-7 expert advice. You can do it…correction…you can k**l it. Go you. Go Daddy.

    Invisalign
    Your smile says a lot about you. If you let it. When you’re uncomfortable about your teeth, it’s easy to hold back your smile. Invisalign’s advanced technology now lets you straighten your teeth invisibly – so you can express yourself fully. And because they’re invisible, no one has to know about it. Hundreds of thousands of people already have discovered Invisalign. Maybe it’s time you were one of them.

    Ziploc
    Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag.
    Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.

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    • #75185
      ashleymitchel
      Participant

      I love how you chose to say “if you let it” and “maybe it’s time you’re one of them” in the Invisalign recording. It sounded how a friend would say it. It really felt like you were implying I try Invisalign and that if I didn’t, I’d be sorry. But still in a friendly, almost sly, way. I could feel a little wink behind the words, if that makes sense.

  • #75089
    Logan DFD
    Participant

    Hope to get some feedback on my natural delivery. How does it sound? Thanks!

    Earthbound Farm
    
Here at Earthbound Farm, we don’t use any harmful chemical pesticides.
    All of our organic salads, fruits and vegetables are grown in harmony with nature.
    And while farming organically may cost more, we think you’ll find Earthbound Farm organic produce is an infinitely better value.
    Because with each crisp, delicious bite, you can take comfort in knowing you’re protecting your family’s health.
    Now and for years to come.
    Earthbound Farm.
    Food to live by.

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    • #75104
      chennianen
      Participant

      Hi Logan,

      I think it sounds really nice! Your voice is well suited for this kind of commercial, I think! In addition to the other feedback you received, there were some points where you were trying to emphasize a certain word, but I think you ended up forcing the word out with too much air. For example, “HARMony” and “COst” come to mind. But still, great read!

    • #75096
      Kim_Lomax
      Participant

      Hi Logan! Thanks for the feedback on my read:). Great to hear you! I love the tone/timbre of your voice. I think if the goal is a natural delivery, you may want to speak with a bit more fluidity/connective tissue between words. There are several places where the delivery seemed a bit choppy.

  • #75085
    Kim_Lomax
    Participant

    Dear Forum, any feedback on my video game internet script would be much appreciated!

    “As I’m sitting here on this Main Menu looking at this beautiful artwork, I’m just thinking about how far the video game industry has come. And a lot of you guys know this, but the Legend of Zelda is hands down – by far – my most favorite and treasured video game franchise of all time. And it’s probably because it’s the very first video game I ever played… It kind of set me on my path to being a gamer.”

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    • #75120
      Sylvanie
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      Hi Kim, My only feedback, I believe in the sentence. “And alot of you… “you” sounded like “ya” and your pace picked up a bit at the end. Just a little slower, all in all..nice read!

    • #75088
      Logan DFD
      Participant

      Great read! Really enjoyed it (especially since I have an affinity for The Legend of Zelda myself). The only feedback I could recommend is you might want to play with variation in the pitch, including the end of your sentences. It’ll make it sound more varied, like you’re talking to someone. Keep up the great work!

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