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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello Friends! Could you pls. give feedback on my commercial reads attached? Thank YOU!
Johnson’s Bedtime Bath:
Turn your baby’s bath into a lullaby. Nothing helps settle down a fussy baby, like a warm bath and Johnson’s Bedtime Bath. Let the soothing scent of lavender and chamomile help calm your baby down JUST before bedtime. Johnson’s Bedtime Bath. Not just gentle. Johnson’s gentle.
Yoo-hoo Chocolate Drink:
Everyone loves Yoo-Hoo. Incluso a las mamas LES ENCANTA. ‘cause it has LOTS of vitamins and minerals
and it’s 99% fat-free, SIN colesterol. And you’ll REALLY LOVE our NEW SET of COOL baseball cards with a lineup of Hall-of-Famers and All-Stars. To get YOUR FREE set of 10-limited edition Baseball Legends cards, check Yoo-Hoo packages in your favorite store for details. YOO-HOO. The COOL WAY to do chocolate.Diana Krall:
Diana Krall live in concert. Friday night July 2nd at PNC Bank Arts Center. The greatest performing artist in the world of jazz today. Diana Krall. Get tickets NOW at the box office or visit online at Ticketmaster.com. Diana Krall live in concert.
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Very cool having command of two languages. Just going to comment on the first Johnson’s spot. The product name sounds a little like bet-time vs bedtime. It also sounds like you might be talking to a child vs the Mom.
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Hey Y’all!
First time poster here, and excited to get some feedback/guidance/tips on my first attempts at these Narration scripts! Thanks in advance, friends.-
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Welcome,
For me,the Seuss read was perfectly suited to your voice. I really enjoy the tone. The Ulta spot felt like listening to you read and not emote. Once again, welcome 🙂 -
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Very nice! Somewhat of a unique signature voice. Natural, smooth and conversational delivery. I had to work really hard to find something to pick at.
If I were a producer here, I would want a few more takes of the last line. “Insurance for-the-modern world”. For me, for-the-modern, is a bit of a soft, fast grouping and runs together.Echoing Ashley: “You’d have, like, a ton of dollars” sounds very natural and conversational.
The gap between “like…” and “a ton of dollars” really legit sounds like someone trying to figure out what to say.(which I believe it’s supposed to). -
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For a second I thought I had to listen to an ad before hearing your recording, but it turned out it was just your recording!
“You’d have, like, a ton of dollars” sounds very natural and conversational.
I liked the way you chose to deliver the word, “um.” You didn’t over-act on it. Again, very natural sounding.
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Good Evening Everyone! I have more homework and would greatly appreciate your critiques please. I greatly appreciate all of your feedback as I work to improve. Thank you in advance for your time.
Evolution at Bayer
We live in an unprecedented time. Beijing’s remarkable transformation is the perfect example of dramatic worldwide progress.
We are also living in the year of the dragon. This powerful symbol represents optimism, entrepreneurship, and the drive for something new.
In 2005, Bayer Consumer Care boldly acquired Roche, which transformed our company into a global contender at a time when pharma growth rates were higher than OTC. China, Russia and Brazil were not even in the top 10.Nuclear
“Your attention please. This is an emergency message. This is not a drill. This is a warning that multiple reactors within the facility have been compromised. We repeat, multiple reactors have been compromised. The facility must be evacuated immediately as a lockdown is now in place. Will all workers make their way to the nearest emergency exit. Please leave all your belongings where they are and make your way to the exits immediately. This is not a drill.” -
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Glen, welcome to the forum and getting into this. I like the voice, it fits and you have good inflections. Recommend you check the gain as you may be clipping. Normalize to -3db with your DAW as it’s coming out pretty high. There are some breaths where you could dial down the amplitude in editing or possibly remove some of the more apparent pre-breathes like at 29.5 seconds.
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Tonight’s homework:
Cactus Pepper Sauce
I serve Cactus Pepper Sauce to the trail hands ever day, cause they like their chow spicy! Believe me, that sauce keeps those cowboys boisterous and motivated. Oh, I just stir up Cactus Pepper Sauce from ingredients I find in the dessert, then I let it cure out in the chuck wagon. It’s a secret recipe, locked away in my mind.AEC Foundation narration
Every child deserves to grow up with opportunities to learn and thrive. With his skills, her talents, each is a potential leader, a contributor, a productive citizen. How kids grow up will determine their success as adults. But sadly, more than one in five children in America are growing up in poor families and poor neighborhoods, where the chance to thrive is anything but a given. The Annie E. Casey Foundation is dedicated to changing that.-
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Wow, listening to these two recordings back-to-back shows just how varied your vocal range is. Nice!
Great choices on how you say “spicy” and “Oh, I just stir up..”
The space you take with the first line of the AEC recording sounds excellent. You really let it breathe and it fits perfectly with the content.
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Hi everyone! These files are for my week 4 homework. I had some issues with normalizing these, so they may sound a tad quiet. Apologies in advance! Any feedback is welcome and appreciated more than you know.
Ziplock: Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.
Cleaner Elections: Smear campaigns… mud slinging… twisting the truth. Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics? Do they think it really helps their campaign? It’s u**y, uncalled for, and deceitful. So why do we allow them to continue?
Amtrak: So much beauty in one place! America is a great country, and we’ve got the best way to see it. Amtrak “Explore America” fares. Round trips from one hundred and seventy nine dollars all across America. It’s a great country, at a great price. Call 1-800-USA-RAIL now about Amtrak “Explore America” fares.
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Hello, sir.
Your voice is definitely friendly! I feel like you’re almost there in nailing the ziplock and amtrack. I’m thinking a little more variation in inflections through each piece would nail it.
For instance: “when it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a ziplock bag”…I see the words ‘this,’ ‘know,’ and ‘ziplock’ like hurdles on the track, and I would raise my entire body each time I said them.
The way you read Cleaner Elections, I felt like I was at the funeral for political ads. Like there was actually no way to change them. Rile up your audience with the first three phrases. Get them on your side with the next two questions. See them in your mind agreeing with you on the adjectives, while you hit each one fairly hard. And make them anticipate the answer to the last question, emphasizing almost every word. See how that might change the read.
On Amtrak, imagine those places in your mind that you agree make America a great and beautiful country to travel. Take it all in in you mind and savor it, maybe even imagine those inspirational cello string instrumentals that run over time lapsed clouds to give the inspirational feel, and that’ll help inform the pace, I think. And slow it down on the phone number, I didn’t get a pen in time! 🙂
Each file was cut off at the end, and I see what you mean about quiet, but it didn’t seem horrible. Like I says, you’re almost there, and you have the talent. Keep up the hard work!
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I actually have two more!
Motel 6
Whether you live for a good ride or ride to live a little more. Everyone can agree on Motel 6 where you always save more for whatever you travel for. Like the open road.
Book online at motel6.com.Purina
When you have a pet…life is better, because pets enrich our lives in immeasurable ways, Purina shares your passion for pets, it’s why we continue to do all we can to help pet owners make the world a better place for pets. Purina, your pet, our passion. -
Hi everyone — here are some reads that I completed! Feedback is welcome 🙂
Go Daddy
This report is brought to you by Go Daddy! Running your own business running you ragged? Go Daddy can help. With memorable domains, website design, online marketing and 24-7 expert advice. You can do it…correction…you can k**l it. Go you. Go Daddy.Invisalign
Your smile says a lot about you. If you let it. When you’re uncomfortable about your teeth, it’s easy to hold back your smile. Invisalign’s advanced technology now lets you straighten your teeth invisibly – so you can express yourself fully. And because they’re invisible, no one has to know about it. Hundreds of thousands of people already have discovered Invisalign. Maybe it’s time you were one of them.Ziploc
Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag.
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I love how you chose to say “if you let it” and “maybe it’s time you’re one of them” in the Invisalign recording. It sounded how a friend would say it. It really felt like you were implying I try Invisalign and that if I didn’t, I’d be sorry. But still in a friendly, almost sly, way. I could feel a little wink behind the words, if that makes sense.
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Hope to get some feedback on my natural delivery. How does it sound? Thanks!
Earthbound Farm
Here at Earthbound Farm, we don’t use any harmful chemical pesticides.
All of our organic salads, fruits and vegetables are grown in harmony with nature.
And while farming organically may cost more, we think you’ll find Earthbound Farm organic produce is an infinitely better value.
Because with each crisp, delicious bite, you can take comfort in knowing you’re protecting your family’s health.
Now and for years to come.
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Hi Logan,
I think it sounds really nice! Your voice is well suited for this kind of commercial, I think! In addition to the other feedback you received, there were some points where you were trying to emphasize a certain word, but I think you ended up forcing the word out with too much air. For example, “HARMony” and “COst” come to mind. But still, great read!
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