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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Dear Forum, any feedback on my video game internet script would be much appreciated!
“As I’m sitting here on this Main Menu looking at this beautiful artwork, I’m just thinking about how far the video game industry has come. And a lot of you guys know this, but the Legend of Zelda is hands down – by far – my most favorite and treasured video game franchise of all time. And it’s probably because it’s the very first video game I ever played… It kind of set me on my path to being a gamer.”
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Great read! Really enjoyed it (especially since I have an affinity for The Legend of Zelda myself). The only feedback I could recommend is you might want to play with variation in the pitch, including the end of your sentences. It’ll make it sound more varied, like you’re talking to someone. Keep up the great work!
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These sound wonderful! I think if you speak more clearly and with more passion, it would really shine. Right now, I feel like the AMEX and Invesco ones were just being read to yourself. Speaking up out and loud with more energy would really promote this to the next level!
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What a resonant and beautiful instrument! Two things, given that you have a read both for a late night jazz radio station and for Goodnight Moon, I immediately thought of my own experience teaching jazz to very young children. We used to sing the text of Goodnight Moon to the tune of Naima by John Coltrane. Maybe try speaking the text while listening to that recording and see what, if anything, it does to change the pacing and/or melodic delivery? I also think there may be opportunities to create more interest in the list of things that the author is saying goodnight to. The word “goodnight” is repeated over and over which makes the things being said “goodnight” TO inherently more interesting. Perhaps try stretching out some of the text and adding a bit more space between the “goodnights?” Great work!
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I like that a lot. I imported it into Adobe Audition so I could get a better look at the waveform. I’m curious, did you normalize it? The whole thing reads really well, and at my level can’t offer much in feedback except that the voice, pacing, etc., were all spot on for this.
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Wow! There is so much great stuff happening here! I also love the pacing and the space between phrases. …”the true story of [space] Algona”… so good:). I have one observation and it may not even be a bad thing, but I notice that your ends of phrases tend to finish at approximately the same pitch. There’s great variety in the beginnings and middle sections of your phrases, particularly “and put to work in farms and factories and even in private homes..”
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Here’s an audition I submitted for a show currently
running on Netflix. Here’s the character bio for Rand Ridley:
He is Reagan Ridley’s toxic, dependent and neglectful father, Tamiko Ridley’s ex-husband and the co-founder of Cognito, Inc., a shadow government company keeping the world conspiracies, most of which are true, out of the public eye. While initially appearing as likely a deeply hurt and broken man, in truth he is a manipulative, self-centered, power-hungry, abusive, obnoxious, narcissistic sociopath who cares little about Reagan other than for his own benefits and selfish advantages. At the end of the first season, he becomes the new and current CEO of Cognito Inc. after the previous one, J.R. Scheimpough, was send to a black site prison by the Shadow Board. He is the archenemy of his daughter, Reagan. -
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