[David Goldberg]

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[Provocaleric]

Dear my favorite Edge friends,

We are gathered here today to listen to this promo! It is from the brilliant archive library of Edge Studio. I would appreciate everyone’s honest brutal feedback, go for it!

NO
Kids hate the word no. As in no you can’t stay up late, no you can’t have more ice cream and no, you may not paint the cat. No, no, NO! Well isn’t it time for a yes? We think so. Six Flags Great Adventure. Yes!

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[Earthbul]

Very animated. I really enjoyed it. I’d love to hear your interpretation of the Dog Breath spot I posted. Keep it up 🙂

[ilene.echavarria]

Hi Eric! I love your choices here. Great energy, clear diction, good pauses that allows for the punchline to land. Great job!

[Provocaleric]

Hi Roxy,
You have a nice and sweet voice, I would maybe hire you for an e-learning or kids book for sure! If I had to critique you, I would say to emphasize plastic at the end a little more and give your read a little more musicality, otherwise I liked it! Keep going for it!

[Provocaleric]

Sorry I had a hard time listening to your read because your audio sounded hollow and tinny. But if I had to say anything I would say your a very down to earth guy and your choices you took during the read were good, after hearing the read I personally would consider going to this store to try on some shoes, good luck

[manchilda]

thanks! proper equipment is on the way, but I had homework from my coach in advance of my next session with her, thus the assault on your eardrums.

[manchilda]

I promise to group these next time…yikes!

Again, feedback is appreciated!

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[manchilda]

This read was pretty fun as well. Again, sorry for the bad airpod audio. 😬 All feedback is appreciated!

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[manchilda]

I liked this script…BASF Better – At BASF, we don’t make the cooler, we make it cooler. We don’t make the jeans, we make them bluer. We don’t make the toys, we make them tougher. At BASF, we don’t make a lot of the products you buy. We make a lot of the products you buy better. BASF.

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[manchilda]

And, second attempt…nothing like procrastinating.

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[manchilda]

Hi all…first attempt, and I’m still getting the proper equipment together, so this was done with airpods and not a proper mic. But any feedback is appreciated!

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[RoxyMel]

Feedback appreciated!
Thank you!

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[ilene.echavarria]

Hello Edge Friends!

Could you pls. take a listen and provide honest feedback on my 3 commercial reads attached? Appreciate it and thank YOU!

Maybelline Moisture Lipstick:
New Moisture Lipstick from Maybelline actually boosts the moisture level of lips. All day. So color stays luscious. And if that doesn’t s****e you, the formula is vitamin enriched. So the more you use it, the smoother your lips become. In 36 shades of reds, browns, and pales to l**t after. Maybelline Moisture Lipstick does for your lips what the French did for the kiss.

Popeye’s Chicken:
Got a cravin’ for Cajun? Come along for some New Orleans style fried chicken, cajun battered fries, and buttermilk biscuits. Love that chicken at Popeye’s.

Sesame Street Playhouse — Mattel:
It’s Sesame Street in the backyard. All the fun and imagination of Sesame Street is here. A playhouse with things to slide on, and wriggle through, and pretend to talk on, and play with. The outdoors is even more fun when Sesame Street is part of it. Now, there’s a lot of SESAME STREET for everyone’s backyard. It’s fun. Each sold separately…from MATTEL.

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[ilene.echavarria]

@Sylvanie / @Provocaleric / @RoxyMel — Thank you so much for your feedback! Noted on all and agree with your comments. Will take this in consideration for my future reads. Thank you, thank you!

[Sylvanie]

Hi Ilene, Nice job on the reads. My feedback on Maybelline, is to emphasize more on the brand. The pace was a little quick in the beginning and end “New Moisture Lipstick… I I also Agree with Provocaleric on the Popeye in really asking the question in the beginning. Sesame Street was fun. Just right for you! Overall very nice.

[Provocaleric]

Dear Ilene,

You have aa sweet voice and energetic style! In regards to your Maybeline lipstick read, I liked how you said It’s what the French did for the kiss, you could even give it a little more. I would maybe emphasize luscious and lips great words to emphasize for s*x appeal. On your Popeyes chicken read, I loved the energy especially you singing at the end! However, I would really ask the question, “Do you have a craven for Cajun?” you know picture someone your talking too! and your Sesame Street read was right up your alley as far as tone goes. If I had to criticize the read. I would Shorten the word “Here” but keep the tone and volume the same. Try to stay connected with your copy, like your talking to a friend or kids watching tv. You are great and wish you great success! Thank you for letting me give you my two cents worth, feel free to criticize me as well, I’m a few pages back.

[RoxyMel]

Great job Ilene! With the sesame st read, I Love the excitement in you voice! Just the one line that starts with now is not completely clear on the emphasis. I think the meaning of this sentence could be clearer depending on where you put the emphasis. But I love your work! & kids will want this if you hear your voice, I think.

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