[David Goldberg]

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[Logan DFD]

I’d like some feedback on my natural delivery. Thanks!

Earthbound Farm

Here at Earthbound Farm, we don’t use any harmful chemical pesticides.
All of our organic salads, fruits and vegetables are grown in harmony with nature.
And while farming organically may cost more, we think you’ll find Earthbound Farm organic produce is an infinitely better value.
Because with each crisp, delicious bite, you can take comfort in knowing you’re protecting your family’s health.
Now and for years to come.
Earthbound Farm.
Food to live by.

(Click on the second file, the .m4a file. I accidentally put in the Logic Pro X file at first. Sorry.)

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[Nimbbl]

Nimbbl 1 Click checkout solution for a better customer experience. Get the best payment gateway in India, UPI payments, Buy Now Pay Later and more. Visit: https://nimbbl.biz

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[Provocaleric]

Earthbul,

I do not have a website yet, but if you want to connect with me. Maybe look me up on Facebook and we could start there. Eric Heaps. Unless there is another way?

[manchilda]

I liked this script AND my microphone and headset have arrived, no more airpod audio!

I am Anxiety – I’ve been expecting you. Why? Don’t tell me you don’t recognize me? Oh! You still don’t know who I am. Let me try and help you with that. I am the ill ease that you feel when you walk into a crowded room. You know. The hot and cold flushes that confuse you when you are already confused enough. I am the one that raises the whip to your already raising heart. I am the tightening of your chest. The s*********g worries that feel like they might become an avalanche and they can just bury you in an instant. My friend I am the obsessive and the compulsive. I’m the voice. You know the one. Always questioning, questioning, questioning, everything you do, everything you think. And I am every, single staring eye that watches you. So, now that we have become acquainted, what are you going to do about it?
Tag: 1 in 4 people experience anxiety. And most don’t know about it. You need to know anxiety to be free from it.
Visit beyondblue.org.au or call 1300 22 4636.

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[Earthbul]

I liked your delivery on this one. The pace was very natural. Good job.

[manchilda]

thanks so much!

[HeatherDT]

Your voice was made for VO. I wish I had your ability to pace at that rate, but for the seriousness of this, I would love to hear it a little slower. Well done.

[manchilda]

Thank you Heather! I usually go too slow, and I thought that if I sped it up and kept accelerating (which I’m not normally comfortable with), it would actually induce the feeling of anxiety that they were trying to convey.

[Provocaleric]

Thank you for your advice, I am struggling with connecting to an image, I have to focus better. I hope your audition went well.

[Earthbul]

You’re not alone in that. That’s still one of the most difficult aspects for me. Audition went horrible for that very reason lol I feel I came at it way too seriously. You have a website ? I’d love to share it with you and get your thouggts. Legally, I can’t post it on a public forum.

[Bil-Bo]

Justin Boots (Pecos Red)
Hi, I’m Pecos Red for Justin Boots. Ever heard the term: “All Hat and no cattle”? That’s the problem with a lot of boots I know. Sounds weird, but the thing of it is that most boots don’t do the same things your feet do, like expand and contract when you take a step.
Most boots are rigid, which is why your “dawgs commence to barkin’” and get all swole up, from yer boot-heels a wanderin’.
At Justin Boots, our technology is a simple idee that comes
right out of the way your foot works. It’s how we build ever’ boot we make. So’s it expands and flexes the way your foot does when it’s out ridin’ the range, or just boot-scootin’ out at Billy Bob’s. Justin Boots Quality. It’s a DANG good thing! I’m Pecos Red, remindin’ ya: never kick a cow chip on a hot day! Justin Boots. Don’t wear ‘em. Use ‘em!

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[Sylvanie]

This was a fun read! Very cool voice. Awesome job

[Bil-Bo]

Hi Just a character voice. Thanks for listening.

[manchilda]

This was fantastic! I’m with Heather, it’s great if that’s your natural voice, even more impressive if it isn’t.

[HeatherDT]

That was just Wow! I smiled the entire time. No idea if that is your natural accent, but you nailed this. Very well done.

[Ems412]

Hello,

I would like to get some feedback on my three narration reads below for my coaching class homework. THank you in advance.

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[HeatherDT]

I would love to hear a bit more passion in each read. For Wales and the one about New Orleans, maybe a little slower and more punch to some of the words so I can see it all in my mind. The Venus and Serena one, is the same. Slower with pride. Let your tone show how amazing what they achieved was.

[Ems412]

Thank you! My instructor and I agreed you have a great ear!

[ilene.echavarria]

Hello Edge Friends!

Could you pls. take a listen and provide honest feedback on my 4 commercial reads attached? Appreciate it and thank YOU!

TARGET:

There will ALWAYS be a part of you that simply DOESN’T TRANSLATE. TARGET. Cuenta con mas. Paga menos.

Coast to Coast:

YOUR business is OUR business. That’s why we make MORE eCommerce deliveries to homes THAN ANYONE in the country. A todas partes de los Estados Unidos.De costa a costa. Learn more at CoasttoCoast.com.
 Coast to Coast delivery. 
Nuestra prioridad: Tu.

Microsoft – Potential:

WE see a company with YOUR name on it.
We’re inspired by people WHO THINK BIG.
We’re inspired by people WHO WORK TIRELESSLY in pursuit of goals that may seem impossible to everyone BUT them.
It’s why WE’RE PASSIONATE about CREATING SOFTWARE that helps them REALIZE those grand ambitions.
Visit Microsoft.com/about.
Your potential. Our passion.

AT&T Rethink Possible:

With the BEST global coverage and NEW, MORE affordable international data packages,…
Checking scores in Dublin, Ireland is like checking scores in Dublin, California.
AT&T makes it easier to use your phone abroad.
Packages start as low as $30.
Log on to att.com/global for more details.
AT&T.
Rethink Possible.

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[ilene.echavarria]

Thank you guys for your feedback!

@HeatherDT– You are right on the Microsoft read. I think I cut too much of the breathing in-between each line when I edited. Tried to follow my coach’s note on that one, so I think I might over did it. Thank you!

@Ems412– Yeah, I think I read that line too quickly unconsciously… Thank you for the note and will take that in consideration.

[HeatherDT]

You totally owned these! Loved listening to them. The Microsoft one could have been paced a bit more slowly like the ATT one. Beautiful work.

[Ems412]

Hello,

First I love your voice, commercial work fits you perfectly. I only have one critique; the Coast to Coast read you sped up the pace on “A todas partes de los Estados Unidos” then went back to the normal pacing after. I don’t know if that was intentional or not.

[Earthbul]

Julia
You’re listening to the actual recording
of “the Julia”. A subsonic moan that doesn’t match the sound of any marine
creature ever recorded. Many biologists will tell you it’s a deep sea
distress call.
And when you listen, it’s easy to see why. The mysterious howling was
captured by deep-sea hydrophones off the coast of Cape Adare.
The same place NASA captured photographs of a huge, unexplained shadow moving
through the water.
It may well be a coincidence, but if the Julia really is a distress call from
the deep, perhaps it’s time we answered.
Ninety-five percent of our oceans remain unexplored.
Are we killing what we’ve yet to discover ?

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[manchilda]

Interesting. I’ve heard it called the “bloop,” never “the julia.” The pacing was terrific and your voice is made for the subject matter. I feel like you must have listened to Paul Harvey to pick up the old, “pregnant pause.”

[Provocaleric]

Earthbul,

You have a very trustworthy voice and your pacing was beautiful! I admire your patience with the read. Great work! I also took your challenge and recorded Dogs Breath for fun, it should be below. See you on the next one!

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[Earthbul]

It felt like you were reading the character and not being him. I really like your voice and I’m very interested in seeing what you bring to the table next.
Ps wish me luck I’m about to audition for a narration gig in about ten minutes 🙂

[HeatherDT]

Hello Everyone. Hope you’re having a great day. First homework assignment. Would greatly appreciate feedback please.

Grenada

The Spice of the Caribbean, a hidden gem with unspoiled beauty offering a lifestyle so pure and authentic, you will feel instantly renewed.
Breathe sweet nutmeg as it dances in the breeze. Explore lush hillsides and the world’s first underwater sculpture park. Witness yet another flawless sunset to the sound of gentle waves. This is Grenada in all her wild, transcendent glory—yours to discover.

AIG

The Greatest Risk Is Not Taking One. They gave up everything. Their families. Their friends. Their homes. The villages they were born in. They arrived with only the clothes on their backs. Vulnerable. Scared. But brimming with hope and determined that a better life was within their grasp. Today, risk takers don’t have to go after their dreams alone. They can rely on a business partner to help them through uncharted waters. An organization with unsurpassed insight and financial resources. One with the ability and flexibility to design specific solutions to help minimize risk for almost any business undertaking.

[HeatherDT]

Woops! Sorry about that! Rookie mistake and first time on the forum. Please find my files attached. I look forward to receiving feedback. Thank you in advance!

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[manchilda]

Hey Heather! Great to see you on here, and outside of class. I love your voice, my only thought, along the lines of Courtney’s was that this could have had a different pace. Faster, yet still relaxed.

[HeatherDT]

Thank you! I realize I get in my head a lot when I record because I was always told I speak too fast. Now I speak like I’m going back in time. Lol.
Thanks for the feedback.

[Ems412]

Hello,

I love the Grenada one, your accent sounds an extra touch!

[HeatherDT]

Thank you!

[Courtney Feiman]

Gorgeous voice! Lovely work identifying the key words. As you continue forward, focus on adding in a natural flow and pace to your read. Let the key words do most of the heavy lifting.

[HeatherDT]

Thank you! Super appreciate the feedback!

[cknipe]

Hi Everybody,

I’m getting back to VO after a long absence. I have some homework scripts on which I need feedback. Thank you in advance!

Cosmos, Advil, & Financial Engines

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[cknipe]

I took a little more time to get in the proper headspace and gave it another shot.

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[ilene.echavarria]

@cknipe– Yaaassss!!!! MUCH BETTER!!! See the difference? all 3 are much better reads than the previous ones. Good job!

[ilene.echavarria]

Hi cknipe! Great diction and enunciation. Love your voice too. I would suggest trying to connect with the copy a bit more. In the Cosmos for instance, I wanna be able to picture what you are describing. Take your time in the pacing with narrations. You’ve got this!

[cknipe]

Thank you for the feedback. It was most helpful and I appreciate it!

[Earthbul]

No offense but there’s zero differentiation between all 3 spots. I like your voice but there’s no animation or excitement or mystery in your delivery. That might be alright when your talking about a financialinstitution or aspirin but the planet earth is a whole other ballgame. I’d love to hear you redo the Cosmos spot with a little oomph to it. Good luck.

[cknipe]

You’re right. I had that feeling when I recorded them. Thank you for the input.

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