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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hope to get some feedback on my natural delivery. Thanks!
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Hello Everyone, Looking for some feedback on homework scripts below. As always much appreciated!
Blue From American Express
We are helping put instruments back in the hands of kids. Why? Studies indicate kids who learn music excel at reading, science and math. But Budget cuts are eliminating music programs. So, join blue from American Express to help put music back in the hands of kids!
Kid’s Explorer Academy
In his work at the Explorer Academy, a 12-year-old embarks on a global hunt for a secret formula that could reveal his hidden past.
Plunged into a world of critical missions and code breaking, it might be difficult—especially when he doesn’t know who he can trust.-
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Hi Sylvanie! Beautiful, soothing voice! On the AMEX script, you read thru the product name at the end. Make sure you emphasize “Blue” so it stands out. On the Kids Explorer one, loved your read throughout on this one. My only comment is also on the closing. You left the sentence open ended– like Logan mentioned above, swooping upward… wouldn’t suggest using it on your ending. Great job!
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Nice voice. I thought the diction was a little mushy on the opening line “We are helping..” Same thing on “…cuts are eliminating..”. Also, the flow was broken a bit by some pauses at: “eliminating…music” and “Express…to help”. However, that second one might be somewhat ok. Less important at the moment but, you missed the “from” in “…join Blue *from* American Express”. One caveat, it’s easy to over do the diction clean up – it has to be clear but sound smooth and natural and not appear that you’re working too hard at the diction…
You can take all that with a grain of salt…just my two cents. The sincere intent is to be helpful.
Keep in mind that it does take time and effort to do the analysis and write it up. – touzet –
P.S. Back on the old Edge site, you actually had to do like two feedbacks for every one of your own files you could post.
Also,your posted file would be held in a spot at the front of the forum waiting for someone to give feedback and free it from un-reviewed purgatory.
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Sounds pretty good! I’d say that on the Blue from American Express read, try to end some of your sentences swooping upward (almost like asking a question). I think the same should go for the last sentence of the Kid’s Explorer Academy read. Otherwise, your delivery was great! Sounded like a commercial! Keep up the good work!
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This is the story of a small planet in space called Earth.
Today it has mighty oceans; scorched deserts; and frozen wildernesses.
It supports a multitude of diverse creatures, and is home to more than 6 billion people and their technological civilization.But how did all this come about? Where do we come from?
Until recently, Earth and its lifeforms were a mystery. Like a huge unpainted canvas, little was known about the origin of Earth and its inhabitants.
But today, we have a rough idea of what happened.
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Aetna/US Healtcare
No matter where we live- when it comes to something
as important as healthcare- we all want the best.
That’s why Aetna and US Healthcare have joined forces
to create a partnership that will set a new standard
for quality and caring. Aetna and US Healthcare.
Raising a standard for your town, for your family,
and for you.
The wife alerted me to the fact that the music in the
version below might be a tad too loud. This one might be better.
Thoughts ?
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Aetna/US Healtcare
No matter where we live- when it comes to something
as important as healthcare- we all want the best.
That’s why Aetna and US Healthcare have joined forces
to create a partnership that will set a new standard
for quality and caring. Aetna and US Healthcare.
Raising a standard for your town, for your family,
and for you.
Still tinkering with my sound levels.
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Dear my favorite Edge friends,
We are gathered here today to listen to this promo! It is from the brilliant archive library of Edge Studio. I would appreciate everyone’s honest brutal feedback, go for it!
NO
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