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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi everyone,
Would love any and all feedback, especially if it seems conversational and real. Don’t think I captured the humor at the beginning of the hallmark piece, but hopefully, I captured the real by the end.
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You have a delightful tone to your voice. For the Tic-Tac recording, you might want to just give a slight more pause after you said, “…so funny” into “but the truth…” We need just a bit more time to absorb how great things were going on the date, give a slight pause and then go into the “but the truth…” maybe even in a slightly lower tone too.
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You have a really warm, relatable, friendly voice. You varied your pitch nicely, keeping things moving and interesting. I think the things that jumped out as something to look at are: 1: sibilance… heard a number of sibilant SSSS sounds. 2. The last line kind of trailed off in a wistful, soft way… maybe intentional, but I’d like to hear you end it more intentionally and try it a few different ways.
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Good energy on Mr. Coffee read. Seemed a little over-enunciated especially on the “t’s” in the script. Hot P*t threw my ear a little bit.
Staples I really felt the emotion of good to bad in the first line of the script. It is so hard when the same word repeats in the script. The rest of the “Goods” didn’t feel as connected and had the same value. Hope that helps.
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Hi all.. Here a couple of my latest spots that I’ve been working on.
As always your feedback is appreciated.Roman
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Nice voice and tone overall.
The National Ad has so many “Backs” within the script that they all seemed to take center stage if that makes sense. I was not sure if it was intentional but made my ear stop. The first “back” being a body part may not need to be as strong as others. It might be fun to “rev” up your “backs”. Have fun with the word and the varied meanings within the script. Hope that helps.
The Subway read I really felt connected like you were talking to me. I imagined my choices and was excited about lunch. YUM
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Hi Roman! You have a really nice, clear voice. Well done!
I have the same notes for both samples. It sounds a bit like you’re reading, and I think that’s because each sentence ends on the same “note.” If you vary the ends of each sentence, so it goes “up and down,” it should sound more natural and spontaneous. Also don’t forget to emphasize the brand name in “Subway restaurants.”
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Hi pmuller, I agree with the other commenter that your enunciation and articulation is great. I don’t know much about the genre for Phyto, so I have no notes on that one.
For the “Back to Life Journal” recording, I’m hearing a repeating rhythmic pattern in this read. As a listener, that was distracting me from the meaning of the words you are saying, and I started to just hear words. I would recommend visualizing an individual and speaking directly to them. Remember you are trying to convince someone to read this journal. You wanna embody this copy and give this text a little more enthusiasm to engage the listener. Hope that helps! Keep going, well done!
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I had submitted this for the current contest without music. It compliments the spoken word so importantly in my opinion, as you never see movies, commercials etc. without music or rarely.
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Good Evening!
More recordings as homework via instructor. I’m being a bit more dexterous, and trying to ease my anxiety, so I’m posting two this time.
In both recordings, my main focus were making sure I’m leaving little space in between lines, as I tend to pause a lot, subconsciously. Hopefully I’m conveying my conversation with less restriction in my performance. Also, since I’m loosening up, I want to make sure I’m keeping track of my beginning/middle/end of the script.
Criticism and critiques of any kind are very much welcome. Thank you for your time!
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Hey There,
I didn’t hear too many pauses but do keep working on it. For the greyhound script it sounds read. The Kentucky script was good but be careful with over enunciation. -
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Hm…I do feel like I’m still hearing some of the pauses you mentioned – however, my main observation is that it feels you keep on giving the lines the same cadence, like you start out the line with a medium tone and then take it higher by the end. It’s one thing to do that for a line in general, but when you keep doing it it becomes noticeable.
I will say the second recording sounded much better than the first, however.
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Lawszvoice,
If you have time could you listen to my recordings? I was able to convert them to mp3 recently. Any feedback is welcomed.
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Robert, That was so worth the wait. You have a wonderful narrative voice, descriptive, knowledgeable, well done! Your script choices match your voice.
I live in Connecticut and know the exact buildings you were describing on the Yale tour.
I can hear your voice on a History Channel Documentary. Glad you had fun with the volcano read. Could hear your smile and personality. Your voice is deep and calming so have fun with the pace and the phases you choose to emphasize because it brings the listener along on the adventure.
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