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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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April 6, 2022 at 2:23 am #75824
Swkeys
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April 5, 2022 at 4:40 pm #75816
chennianen
ParticipantBack at it again with some more readings~ Enjoy!
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April 7, 2022 at 12:15 am #75842
Lawszvoice
ParticipantGood energy on Mr. Coffee read. Seemed a little over-enunciated especially on the “t’s” in the script. Hot P*t threw my ear a little bit.
Staples I really felt the emotion of good to bad in the first line of the script. It is so hard when the same word repeats in the script. The rest of the “Goods” didn’t feel as connected and had the same value. Hope that helps.
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April 6, 2022 at 6:01 pm #75831
Gill
ParticipantHi Chennianen,
Can you please verify what you would like feedback on in your script reads. Thanks
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April 4, 2022 at 12:39 pm #75796
Roman Saienni
ParticipantHi all.. Here a couple of my latest spots that I’ve been working on.
As always your feedback is appreciated.Roman
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April 6, 2022 at 11:15 pm #75839
Lawszvoice
ParticipantNice voice and tone overall.
The National Ad has so many “Backs” within the script that they all seemed to take center stage if that makes sense. I was not sure if it was intentional but made my ear stop. The first “back” being a body part may not need to be as strong as others. It might be fun to “rev” up your “backs”. Have fun with the word and the varied meanings within the script. Hope that helps.
The Subway read I really felt connected like you were talking to me. I imagined my choices and was excited about lunch. YUM
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April 6, 2022 at 6:08 pm #75832
Gill
ParticipantHi Roman,
Nice reads overall. I think for the national car rental I hear “Back” and the Subway with “You” since you’re repeating them both could use some variation so it doesn’t all sound the same. -
April 5, 2022 at 4:39 pm #75815
chloeblackstone
ParticipantI would try adding a little smile to the “National” read to bring it to life. And picture someone you’re speaking directly to.
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April 5, 2022 at 4:37 pm #75814
chloeblackstone
ParticipantHi Roman! You have a really nice, clear voice. Well done!
I have the same notes for both samples. It sounds a bit like you’re reading, and I think that’s because each sentence ends on the same “note.” If you vary the ends of each sentence, so it goes “up and down,” it should sound more natural and spontaneous. Also don’t forget to emphasize the brand name in “Subway restaurants.”
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April 5, 2022 at 1:20 pm #75810
iSynge
ParticipantHm…I know that this isn’t going to be very helpful feedback, but the first recording’s missing…something. It’s something that the second recording ISN’T missing, but I can’t quite put my finger on it. Apologies.
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April 3, 2022 at 3:09 pm #75784
Mike Reddy
ParticipantGreetings everyone!
Hope you’re all having a great weekend.
Recordings and scripts attached.
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April 6, 2022 at 6:15 pm #75833
Gill
ParticipantHello,
Phytophotodermatitis is a handful good job with the script. I would focus on your diction with it there’s some areas where it’s hard to hear you clearly. -
April 5, 2022 at 4:54 pm #75820
chloeblackstone
ParticipantHi pmuller, I agree with the other commenter that your enunciation and articulation is great. I don’t know much about the genre for Phyto, so I have no notes on that one.
For the “Back to Life Journal” recording, I’m hearing a repeating rhythmic pattern in this read. As a listener, that was distracting me from the meaning of the words you are saying, and I started to just hear words. I would recommend visualizing an individual and speaking directly to them. Remember you are trying to convince someone to read this journal. You wanna embody this copy and give this text a little more enthusiasm to engage the listener. Hope that helps! Keep going, well done!
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April 3, 2022 at 10:29 pm #75790
RYoung
ParticipantGood articulation on this technical narration! My only comment would be that your throat sounds a little dry, make sure to hydrate prior to recording, an easy fix.
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April 3, 2022 at 12:39 pm #75782
RYoung
ParticipantI had submitted this for the current contest without music. It compliments the spoken word so importantly in my opinion, as you never see movies, commercials etc. without music or rarely.
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April 7, 2022 at 12:38 am #75843
Lawszvoice
ParticipantReally liked your read. However, for me, the music choice made it feel more like a vacation commercial.
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April 6, 2022 at 6:17 pm #75834
Gill
ParticipantHi
I really liked it, you have nice deep voice that complements this script well.
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March 31, 2022 at 7:49 pm #75714
TimberTykes
ParticipantGood Evening!
More recordings as homework via instructor. I’m being a bit more dexterous, and trying to ease my anxiety, so I’m posting two this time.
In both recordings, my main focus were making sure I’m leaving little space in between lines, as I tend to pause a lot, subconsciously. Hopefully I’m conveying my conversation with less restriction in my performance. Also, since I’m loosening up, I want to make sure I’m keeping track of my beginning/middle/end of the script.
Criticism and critiques of any kind are very much welcome. Thank you for your time!
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April 6, 2022 at 6:23 pm #75835
Gill
ParticipantHey There,
I didn’t hear too many pauses but do keep working on it. For the greyhound script it sounds read. The Kentucky script was good but be careful with over enunciation.-
May 11, 2022 at 11:46 am #76593
TimberTykes
ParticipantWow, I don’t think I’ve ever heard of over-enunciating before. Maybe it’s because I’m being too cautious of under-enunciating? Regardless, I’m definintely going to make sure I keep these things in mind as I work on my recording. Thank you!
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April 1, 2022 at 10:12 am #75732
iSynge
ParticipantHm…I do feel like I’m still hearing some of the pauses you mentioned – however, my main observation is that it feels you keep on giving the lines the same cadence, like you start out the line with a medium tone and then take it higher by the end. It’s one thing to do that for a line in general, but when you keep doing it it becomes noticeable.
I will say the second recording sounded much better than the first, however.
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May 11, 2022 at 11:51 am #76594
TimberTykes
ParticipantThanks for your input! I hadn’t realized that I would end up being repetitive in that way. I’ll make sure to keep this in mind in the future as I record.
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March 31, 2022 at 6:41 pm #75704
NatalieK
ParticipantHi everyone!
Looking for suggestions on app/website you use for background music on your demos?
Thanks a million!
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March 31, 2022 at 1:11 pm #75694
Robertb
ParticipantLawszvoice,
If you have time could you listen to my recordings? I was able to convert them to mp3 recently. Any feedback is welcomed.
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April 6, 2022 at 11:36 pm #75840
Lawszvoice
ParticipantRobert, That was so worth the wait. You have a wonderful narrative voice, descriptive, knowledgeable, well done! Your script choices match your voice.
I live in Connecticut and know the exact buildings you were describing on the Yale tour.
I can hear your voice on a History Channel Documentary. Glad you had fun with the volcano read. Could hear your smile and personality. Your voice is deep and calming so have fun with the pace and the phases you choose to emphasize because it brings the listener along on the adventure.
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March 31, 2022 at 7:56 pm #75718
Ryan D.
ParticipantHi Robert,
I don’t see any recordings here. Sorry
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March 31, 2022 at 1:09 pm #75693
Robertb
ParticipantI was able to finally upload after I got a file converter link from the education department. Would love any feedback you could give me.
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March 30, 2022 at 5:54 pm #75681
maxspitz
ParticipantHey Yall!
Been working on some corporate explainers and would love and appreciate some feedback/comments! Let me know what ya think.
Thanks!
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April 7, 2022 at 8:56 pm #75871
Lawszvoice
ParticipantGreat read, conversational, confident, and trustworthy.
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March 31, 2022 at 7:43 pm #75710
Ryan D.
ParticipantHay Max, your demo is nice and clear. Good enunciation too. IMHO, you might try a little more emotion, but over all, pretty d**n good!
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